Abhigya OS: Chashmish Without Chashma

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hello! This is my first attempt at writing a story on Abhigya. I hope you enjoy, and I'd love to hear your feedback!


Chashmish Without Chashma

Abhi perched on his bed, slowly twirling the pair of glasses around his fingers for the eighth time that morning. Ever since Pragya's accident, he'd wake up every morning with a feeling that she was about to return into his life. Eventually he'd began to doubt that notion. It had been twenty days since he'd last seen Chashmish and the only signs that she was alive had been a delicately handwritten letter and the object Abhi was absentmindedly fondling for the past twenty minutes: her chashma. He'd found them amongst her books three days after Pragya left. He hadn't let them out of his sight since.

But today was different. Never mind that today was the first day of his wedding ceremonies, Abhi had more important things to think about. He simply could not shake the feeling that today was the day he was going to reunite with his love. And for once, Abhi's instinct turned out to be correct. At exactly 9:30 that morning, a figure in emerald green had emerged from a silver sedan and stalked into Mehra Mansion. Abhi couldn't see her face, yet he could only describe her as Pragya-esque. He'd watched from the balcony as she powerfully toyed with Tanu's and Aaliyah's attitude, maneuvering them into compromising verbal situations. Yes, she seemed like his Pragya. But his chashmish? Not really. Puzzled, Abhi had spent the past couple hours in his room mulling over this new character. Out of sheer frustration, he'd grabbed Pragya's spare set of glasses and peered into them searching for some sort of insight. They offered none.

Abhi was suddenly reminded of an incident that occurred a few days prior. That afternoon, Tanu was dozing on Pragya's sofa when Abhi suddenly had the urge to try Pragya's chashma on her. Perhaps it was a last-ditch effort to come to terms with his impending marriage, but Abhi truly wasn't thinking straight when he had approached Tanu, glasses in hand. Cautiously, he'd placed the black frames around Tanu's visage but stopped before they were properly on. It was all too wrong. Tanu's bold eye makeup clashed with the simple chashma and her rounded face prevented the frames from sliding on easily. The glasses offered no intelligent spark whatsoever and Abhi was forced to remove them.

And this was when Abhi, still pondering the new Pragya's entry on his wedding day, leapt from his bed with an idea. Yes, it was the only way. He'd go downstairs and ask her to try on these glasses. Abhi rushed to the landing and leaned over the railing hoping to catch a glimpse of the emerald sari-clad figure. She didn't appear to be downstairs. All of a sudden, a flash of green accompanied with a flip of ebony hair caught Abhi's eye. Pragya? Entering, Abhi realized with a shock, Tanu's room?

He tiptoed across the landing and stopped just outside the door. Pragya appeared to be staring at a very official looking document, brows furrowed in concentration. "It has to be this one...", she was muttering. Intrigued, Abhi leaned further into the room to squint at the document in Pragya's hands. Unable to decipher the text, Abhi resorted to putting on the chashma, but that too was futile. His interest was piqued, though, but his yearning for his love was greater. He stood for a moment, gazing at his wife's beauty. If only he were sure that she was his wife...wait, what was that? It seemed like Pragya was having trouble reading the paper! Seizing the opportunity, Abhi purposefully strode into the room and placed a hand on Pragya's shoulder. He softly inquired, "Need these?". Startled, Pragya turned around only to be captured by Abhi's intense eyes. She shifted her gaze towards the floor, caught off guard. "I...I'm...those aren't...", she stumbled over her words. "Let me help you", Abhi offered. He gently placed the frames on Pragya's slender face. And in that moment, Abhi knew that everything was right. He tenderly engulfed his wife in an embrace and whispered into her ear, "Welcome home Chashmish."


-Karishma

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Posted: 10 years ago
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This was absolutely lovely! I love how Pragya was caught off-guard in her mission. So cute! It's kind of like cinderella. How the prince makes the women try on a glass slipper. Alas, it fits in the end! Just like Pragya. Would asking for a sequel (Pragya's reaction) be too much? I'm hooked! 😳
Edited by IamMeethu - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Karishma, firstly welcome to the forum!
A warm hug to you!

I think you write exceptionally well. This story is such a simple one. It doesn't clarify anything but the AbhiGya moment is too deep and very personal.

There are so many small things I loved about it. For instance Abhi wearing the chashma to have a better perception of the matter, Abhi's desperate attempt to compromise with Tanu by trying to see a lil but of Pragya in her by making her wear the specs. His feeling of blasphemy after seeing Pragyas specs on Tanu and the sweetest was his test for identifying Chashmish - I don't know it have me the Cinderella feel. If the chashma fits her she is his Chashmish - pragyas glam avatar yet squinting at the papers ..lol not used to lens yet. And Abhi taking the opportunity and offering her the specs and hugging her back in his life..awww it's just tooo perfect for words..it's intense, cute and so very possible in the current storyline..wish the cvs give us such a scene

Oh and did I forget the first part? Abhi clinging on to her chashma as it made him feel closer to her... Awww so much romantic feels..

Karishma please do wrote more and soon..really amazing piece!!
Welcome once again and awaiting to read truck loads of stories from you.

Love
Aafrah
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Lovely OS, Karishma😊
Abhi's love was sweet😳 And him missing Pragya was even more sweet😳

And the last part was awesome👏

I Loved this specially

He softly inquired, "Need these?". Startled, Pragya turned around only to be captured by Abhi's intense eyes. She shifted her gaze towards the floor, caught off guard. "I...I'm...those aren't...", she stumbled over her words. "Let me help you", Abhi offered. He gently placed the frames on Pragya's slender face. And in that moment, Abhi knew that everything was right. He tenderly engulfed his wife in an embrace and whispered into her ear, "Welcome home Chashmish."

This was lovely😳

I loved this OS😊

You are an awesome writer👏 Please write more soon😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Cute OS karishma :)
Nice name BTW :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Aww first of all welcome to this forum and what a brilliant start to it too!

A very simple story but with a very strong moment for Abhigya! Him looking at her Chashma trying to comfort himself into believing Pragya was still with him, romantic feels!

And the last part, a cherry on top of the cake! 'Welcome Home Chashmish' Awww that was ADORABLE! What a lovely story you have written here! ❤️
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Posted: 10 years ago
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hey dear karisma, it's so good it not like as your first story dear
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Welcome to the forum karishma...what a start dear adorable really...so nice...
So cute AbhiGya moment...u write so welll looking forward for more of ur stories and SS's...so keep going ...
AMAYA
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: IamMeethu

This was absolutely lovely! I love how Pragya was caught off-guard in her mission. So cute! It's kind of like cinderella. How the prince makes the women try on a glass slipper. Alas, it fits in the end! Just like Pragya. Would asking for a sequel (Pragya's reaction) be too much? I'm hooked! 😳


Hey Aashna! Thanks for your comment! And you're absolutely right, I felt like this story was very Cinderella-ish :) Hmm...maybe a sequel is good idea 😉
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Posted: 10 years ago
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lovely os... would lovee to have sequeal...
and welcome to the forum...

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