AbhiGya TS: Forever Second (Now Complete, Part 3 on Pg 7)

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kdsubs

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Part 3

"I broke up with Tanu."

Her hushed silence tore the truth from him. "She said she was pregnant." He glared at her. How was this her fault?

"Unless it's the most miraculous pregnancy since the birth of Christ, I don't see how it can be mine."

A twinge of pity at the bewildered desperation of the other woman surprised Pragya. She understood. Oh only too well.

"So you left her when she needed you the most."

He whipped around to her. "I have no problems in helping her. I will not let her manipulate me!"

And this from the man who had manipulated her through their entire marriage. "Why are you telling me?"

"Because you are my wife. And you have the right to know."

Ah. Marital rights. She had none of those.

And yet, she had fallen in love with this man. With the sheer goodness that sparkled through him.

"It doesn't matter."

His eyes blazed with fury. "Or are you trying to make it not matter?" He gripped her arm, their first touch in weeks. "It will always matter. To me." His grip tightened. "And to you."

She twisted her arm out and looked away.

"You didn't ask me why I broke up with her."

She turned to stare at him.

"Not because she may be pregnant."

Oh?

"She said that when I told her we were done." He looked at her pleadingly. "I owed her that much - a clean break."

His look turned into a caress. "We were done because I am married to you. The woman who has become the center of my existence."

"The woman who isn't even your choice."

"The woman who is my only choice."

Perhaps she was not wrong to hope then. Maybe she had the right to hope, to love. And to be loved.

Author's note:

A few days after i wrote the 1st part, i read about Flash Fictions. Really short stories, less than 1000 words, often even shorter than that. So i took that on as a challenge. And if you have read anything else by me, you will know it really is a challenge 😊! Word count wise, I met the goal - this story is less than 900 words. Hopefully though i still managed to tell a tale? Please let me know.

Thanks for reading,

Kat

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nitarata

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Posted: 10 years ago

#42

Powerful writing, Kat! Loved how Abhi was so clear about Tannu and about Pragya. Thank you so much.

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kdsubs

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Posted: 10 years ago

#43

Originally posted by: -Tia-
Powerful writing, Kat! Loved how Abhi was so clear about Tannu and about Pragya. Thank you so much.

Thank you Tia. This last part was very hard to keep within my self-imposed limit of 300 words. And i have yearned for Abhi to show some clear thinking in the show. So, he gets it here.

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@putturani

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Posted: 10 years ago

#44

Kat you definitely did manage to tell a tell! Great economy of words - you managed to say a lot with very little. I loved the line "his look turned into a caress", very evocative. And THANK YOU for giving them both clear heads. Tbh I would have loved to have seen this fleshed out a little more, especially her change of heart at the end but I respect the constraints of the flash fiction challenge and you for trying it out. :)

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rutu83

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Posted: 10 years ago

#45

lol- yes i can imagine your struggle 😃

flash fics or full length fics but so long you write all's well in my world

i really liked characterization, though bit rough due to words limit, of your pragya. i really liked how in two lines you were able to convey her understanding of tanu's desperation for abhi. a woman in love, hurt, but still in love. actually now that i think about it, fleshing it out in as few a words as you did is brilliant 👏

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Simmi

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Posted: 10 years ago

#46

Thanks Kat! Abhi was very clear in stating the difference between them both

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sudanindia2014

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Posted: 10 years ago

#47

So this is why the updates are so short ..hmmm..I confess adjusting is some what difficult as I'm used to long updates but believe me the quantity is so satisfying so I can not complain I loved it so much and I salute you for taking up such a challenge and be able to meet it
The coming update will be fabulous looking at the cliffhanger you stopped at so can't wait to read
Thank you so much for a beautiful story

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kdsubs

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Posted: 10 years ago

#48

Originally posted by: nilmi
Awesome...😊

Thank you Nilmi.

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kdsubs

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Posted: 10 years ago

#49

Originally posted by: putturani
Kat you definitely did manage to tell a tell! Great economy of words - you managed to say a lot with very little. I loved the line "his look turned into a caress", very evocative. And THANK YOU for giving them both clear heads. Tbh I would have loved to have seen this fleshed out a little more, especially her change of heart at the end but I respect the constraints of the flash fiction challenge and you for trying it out. :)

I did? Thank you Rani! Writing this lil piece turned out to be way harder than i had expected. Glad it worked for the most part though.

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kdsubs

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Posted: 10 years ago

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Originally posted by: rutu83
lol- yes i can imagine your struggle 😃
flash fics or full length fics but so long you write all's well in my world

i really liked characterization, though bit rough due to words limit, of your pragya. i really liked how in two lines you were able to convey her understanding of tanu's desperation for abhi. a woman in love, hurt, but still in love. actually now that i think about it, fleshing it out in as few a words as you did is brilliant 👏

🤣 I am sure you can Rutu! This entire piece, less than 900 words, took as much time and thought, if not more, than a regular update of mine. Sigh. Not sure i am going to get as adventurous again 😉.