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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: aash2302

very nice...starting really liked..the best part abt the story this story is that sarla maa has got some brains and is taking pragya away from abhi...as much as i like both sriti and shabbir but the character he is playing makes me hate him 😔


Thank you so much!😊

Ha ha! Everyone seem to like this version of Sarala ma! Seriously, though knowing she is the reason why Pragya is holding onto all the torture makes me kind of angry. Especially with her constant need to know all is well when nothing is well at all!😕That is why this version of Sarala ma!

As for Shabir, he makes it hard for me to hate Abhi at times! 😆He is one of the best actors there and watching him and Sriti together is just magic!😳😆
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Posted: 10 years ago
#12
Loved it very much.
Loved your version of Sarla maa.
Can't wait to read how did she found out the truth and what is going to her stand on Abhigya relationship.
Please do update soon.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Lovely! Pls pls continue soon. I know I am being selfish and sorry for that but I come by this forum to now only read good FFs and would love it if updated regularly please please
Thanks so much wonderful wonderful start
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: smala

Loved it very much.
Loved your version of Sarla maa.
Can't wait to read how did she found out the truth and what is going to her stand on Abhigya relationship.
Please do update soon.



Aww thank you so much!

People seem to like this version of Sarala maa than the onscreen one..😆

How she got to know will be revealed soon... And an update is coming up!

Keep reading and please let me know your view...😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: columbia

Lovely! Pls pls continue soon. I know I am being selfish and sorry for that but I come by this forum to now only read good FFs and would love it if updated regularly please please

Thanks so much wonderful wonderful start



Thank you for commenting!😊

And it is totally fine! I do get you!😆 For me also the FFs have been the main reason to come to this forum everyday!

I am trying my best to update regularly and finish this off by the end of the month!And the next update is done and I am going to upload it just now!

So till then keep reading and let me know your views...👍🏼
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Hi guys! Thank you all for your comments and likes! It really motivates me and means so much! So, Thank you very much! I will try to update everyday!😊

And this is the first chapter! Please let me know what you think of it once you read it!

Happy Reading!

❤️

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The Turning Point

Chapter 01

"Das minute! Go and pack your stuff we leave in 10 minutes" declared Sarala ma wiping her tears.

Abhi felt his heart tightening, hearing the words coming out from Sarala ma's mouth. He stole a quick glance at Chashmish and saw a protest forming in her mouth..."Par ma...Aap suniye toh sahi..."

"Nahi! Par-var kuch nahi! Ab bus! Bohoth hogaya! You are coming home with me!" Sarala ma's firm words cut off Chashmish before she could even begin to explain.

Pragya could not believe what she was seeing. Here is her mother who means the world to her standing beside her saying that all will be well now. She says she knows the truth and despite knowing the harsh truth she stands surprisingly strong. And above all, she is saying that this... This would be the end of the torture she suffered for the last few months. She says... She says she is going to take her home again. Her home where she grew up, her home where her loved ones reside, her home where she was never judged or taunted or tortured or punished for something she never did!

Abhi stared at Pragya and saw uncertainty written all over her face. Her closed eyes and scrunched nose and forehead indicated that she was in deep thought. But suddenly he saw her face loosening up and a look of pure blissfulness adorned her face. And when she finally opened her eyes despite the tears running down the face there was a twinkle of hope in her eyes which he had never seen before. However, as her eyes locked with his eyes he saw how the smile that began to form in her mouth freeze and the uncertain look she wore before returned with an amplified force.

Sarala ma too seemed to have noticed as she shook Pragya sternly and told "You need not fear him anymore! All these months he made you live through this hell. And pretended to be a savior in front of me. How foolish of me to fall for his act! I should have known Pragya! I should have known in the first place that this was not a good match! I should have trusted you to make the right decision! You kept on rejecting and I kept on forcing you. And you finally agreed because of me! It is all because of me Pragya! I am so sorry beta I am going to rectify my mistake today Pragya! And for that first I am going to take you away from this hell and then I will make sure that everyone who made you cry will pay for every tear you shed!"

Had he not been too shocked to grasp what was happening Abhi was sure he would at least try to maintain his distance from Sarala ma after the threat hinted at him. But not now! Nah! Now the problem is Sarala ma making Chashmish go back to her house. She can't go! I mean how can she leave just like that! No way!

"Abhi" Daadi softly touched his arm to gain his attention. "Beta, kuch karo! You can't just stand like that. I don't know what has happened to Sarala... She is very angry and somehow it is related to you. You have done something to anger her... I know this for sure! I don't know what but at the moment it is not important! What is important is to stop Bahu from leaving her house! I am going up you please come and stop her. Okay?"

Abhi looked around to realize that a listless Chashmish was already being taken to their room by her ma while his Daadi began to follow them into their room. Abhi too began to climb the stairs when Aaliya came to him and softly touched his cheek.

"Bhai! I swear unki ithni himmat! She dared to raise her hand against you! On my brother! On rockstar Abhi! How could she? Bhai, I swear I am going to teach her a lesson... But not today! Today, I just don't want to spoil anything. Finally, that behenji is going to leave this house and you have no idea how happy I am! Oops I am sorry Bhai! What am I saying? Of course you know how happy I am... Because only you can be happier than me to finally get rid of that behenji! Err...well maybe Tannu too...Tannu! God I have to update her ASAP! Otherwise you just know her na Bhai! Okay then I will go and call her now itself. You however better stay here because you never know this Pragya Bhai she might convince Aunty at the last moment to stay here and Daadi is also there... And you just have to be in her good books now so you better carry on with this acting...seriously Bhai! Too good ah! If I didn't know better I would say you are totally "heartbroken" after knowing she is going to leave forever...if not for a rockstar you could have definitely become an actor..."

Aaliya places a kiss on Abhi's still aching cheek and goes upstairs laughing at the sudden turn of events...He slowly sits on the stairs. Aaliya was right! I should be happy! Finally, Chashmish is leaving... And leaving for good! All our attempts at throwing her out had been fruitless and ulta rather disastrous to us! But now without any plan, without any struggle Chashmish is out! Huh... Who would have thought! Chashmish out from my house...out from my room...out from my head and out from my life! Phew! No more torturing! No more getting tortured while torturing! No more acting lovey-dovey! No more planning and plotting! No more lies! No more fights! No more irritation! Simply no more Chashmish!

Hmm...No more Chashmish! God! What is wrong with me? What is this why am I not air punching out of pure happiness! My freedom day! Finally it is here! Gosh! I better feel more excited than this! Seriously man! What the hell is wrong with you Abhi! No, wait! I know what this is! Haan... Yaaa that must be the reason! I mean that is the only reason! I am just scared that Daadi might stop her at the last moment! Or that Chashmish might do some drama or Jaadu or whatever and stay back! Haan...that is what is stopping me! Okay so this is okay! It is still not Freedom day Abhi! So you don't really want to see your hopes get shattered! You can't trust that Chashmish! See she even made her ma believe that she is correct and I am wrong! I mean Auntyji was going to throw Bulbul out of her own house for me and today she slapped me! Slapped me for Chashmish! Must be Chashmish's jaadu! So, really no need to fret or to bite your nails like this Abhi! She is not going to leave! Not leaving...NOT LEAVING...no way...no...Nahi...Nah...

The sound of descending footsteps made Abhi stop his monologue and he stood aside to watch what excuse Chashmish would make this time to stay back. Or looking at his Daadi, Abhi was sure she could beat Chashmish to it! You never know with Chashmish jaadu!

At the moment she looks lost in her own world...but few months with her has taught him well! If Aaliya says he is a good actor he sure knows his Chashmish was an even better one at that! Of course even under gun point, he would never admit to her being better than him in any way...but fact is a fact! And nobody has to know, of course!

"Beta!"

Ha! Here goes Daadi! Okay then bye bye freedom day! Continue mission torture!

"Beta," said Daadi holding Pragya's hand, "if your happiness lies with this decision I am not going to stop you! I don't know what is wrong yet but I will find it out! But beta please forgive us! Whatever wrong that happened I will look into it! I promise you! And always know that this is also your own home and our doors will always be open to you, Pragya"

What the hell! Did! Did Daadi just let Pragya go? No! Not possible. Then why is she letting go of her hand and holding on to that damned chair! Am I going crazy or what! Okay focus! Yaa Daadi is definitely crying but still she is not going to stop her laadli Bahu!

And Chashmish! It is like she is not even aware what is happening around her. What so she is just going to let Auntyji drag her out like this! Okay so she is definitely overacting this time! She needs to stop like right now! Otherwise even I would start to believe she is going for real...Nah... 10 steps more and for a drama queen like her it is more than enough!

9...

8...

7...

6...okay, Chashmish you really need to slow down now!

5...Stop! Badi ayi Sherni...

4...Kya! Kya hai yeh Ladki! Bandar! Ha Bandaro jaisi toh kaam hai iski! Seriously, man you are overdoing it!

3...Bloody hell! Fattu Kahi ka...STOP!

2...God! Please Pragya! Stop! STOP!

Phew...finally, she stopped! Abhi nearly punched the air as relief flooded over him. Slowly, Pragya turned and looked him directly in the eye!

As his eyes locked with hers, Abhi felt the air running out of his lungs while an unfamiliar feeling of loss took over him. And with a final glance at her rockstar husband Pragya stepped out of the Mehera Mansion forever.

As Pragya turned away from him for the last time, going away from his life forever Abhi's body finally began to respond to all that happened within the last hour and he felt his knees giving away as he crumbled to the floor holding onto the banister while Chashmish's voice rang in his ears repeatedly...

"Chashmish toh chali jayengi"

"Chashmish toh chali jayengi"

Edited by Diahh - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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res :) unres! :D

ohhh my goshhh i have chills!!!! this is perfection! picking up so many open threads from the show, gathering them into one powerful new narrative with a really exciting possible road ahead. aiieee!!! awesome!!

loved sarla insisting she was going to take pragya home; the ultimate rescue isn't it? and pragya's relief when she realized that it was going to be over and she'd be back with her loved ones...wow, i found that so resonant. it was supposed to be freedom for abhi but it really was liberation day for pragya, and one that she couldn't possibly have imagined. wow ❤️❤️❤️

abhi's paralysis and then his false security that nothing would change were both so fascinating to read. and i lovvved the way you wrote his wacky thoughts, very true to abhi and so funny!! 😆

and who knows what happened upstairs, but daadi has somehow accepted this. looks like abhi is really in trouble from all sides now. exciting! haha that's not even a strong enough word. mind-blowing and amazing, how about that? 😉

and the last echo - that's drunk pragya's cutesy voice isn't it? omg, 1000000 points to you (idk what kind of points...whatever you like, house points if you're into harry potter, or maybe just life/writer points 😛) for calling back to that. so much was buried in those episodes that the show may never pick up on. but thank goodness for your awesome imagination for bringing them into this story!! (disclaimer: if the show has brought it up in the last two weeks, i don't know about it yet. but i assume the show hasn't because shows are obtuse like that. 😳)

this chapter was a great read and i will surely re-read it once my heart stops racing with adrenaline hehehe. if you really are able to update it every day that would be a treat beyond anything! but yeah write and post at whatever pace you like, i'll certainly keep following this story, not least because you have the evil genius of ending on the most tantalizing moments!!

thanks for posting!
Edited by -mina- - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wow! BeUtiful! The count down thing !!! <3
Abhi's monologue!

And best was the way you described Pragya's change of expression!

Love this sarla aunty!

Thanks ! Cant wait for more :p
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Loved it very much.
Sarla maa insisting Pragya to leave Mehra's mansion and her threat to Abhi , it was mind blowing and a very intense scene , never ever under estimate a mother bear protecting its cub. Wonder what she is going to do to make Abhi pay for all the heart ache he gave her daughter .
Loved the way you describe Pragya's change of expression.
Loved Abhi's self talk and how he thought that Pragya's presents will be permanent in his life.
Wonder what happened in upstairs and why is Abhi's Daadi is willing to let Pragya go.
Please do update as soon as possible , I know I am being greedy, but I just can't help it.
A tight bear hug and sugar coated kisses for you.
"A women is like a tea bag you never know how strong she is until you put her in hot water."
Eleanor Roosevelt
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wow!! Is all I can say! My hands were shaking as I read because I didn't know whether abhi would stop her or not!! Thanks for updating! Loved it!

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