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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: -mina-

Aaha so it was not Rudra but Suresh! I thought maybe you might surprise us and you did, though now I'm still more curious about Rudra!

Loved this chapter so much! Feels like it belongs in the show. Hurrah for bringing back oily Ramesh and LOL at him thinking Pragya and Suresh got married. Bahaha I can just imagine the tension in the room, all the thoughts in all the characters heads...you suggest it all so wonderfully. Thanks for the update and more soon please!! 😃



It would be too predictable if it wasn't Suresh. I had a fun time writing his lines lol. Thank you. I always thought Ramesh was kind of cute when they first showed him saving the hall lol. About to update now.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Chapter Three

Ramesh laughed out loud. ''Aap dono ki shaqal dekhne layak ho gayi thi. I was only kidding,'' (You should have seen your faces. I was only kidding) Ramesh said, in between laughs. Pragya and Suresh let out the breath they were holding. ''The checks are all done. You are both free to go.'' He finally said.

Pragya and Suresh made their way out of the store. Incidentally, Abhi, Aliya and Tanu were going in the same direction too but this went unnoticed by Pragya. Pragya finally relaxed and that's when she realised Bulbul wasn't around. ''Suresh, Bulbul kahan hai?'' (Suresh, where is Bulbul?) Pragya asked. Suresh looked around quizzically as if he had only just became aware of this. ''Tumse aisi halat mein usse akela kaise choda.'' (How could you leave her alone in such a state?) Pragya was worried now and sent Suresh to look for Bulbul while she tried ringing her.

''Excuse me. Pregnant lady coming through. Excuse me. Thank you. Pardon me. Thanks.'' The heavily pregnant woman meandered through the masses of people who had gathered to catch a glimpse of the Rockstar. She finally made her way to the front where she could get a clear view of the stage. People looked at her in surprise but the sound of guitar chords being struck had them cheering instead.

''Andekhi Anjaani kya yeh mohabbat hai. Chupke se milte dilon ki yeh chahat hai..'' (Unseen, Unknown, what is love? It's when two hearts meet quietly.) The crowd cheered louder. A man dressed in a black tee and black jeans descended from an aerial line. His tattooeed torso made the girls go gaga and his smile would make a thousand hearts melt. A lethal combination he was. Rudra jumped from the line and on the stage. The arm that was wielding a mike a few seconds ago now held his beloved guitar. ''Kyun pyaar ke sab deewane. Jo kho gaya woh hi jaane.'' (Why is everyone crazy about love. Only one who's lost in love will know.) ''Baatien kitabo ki... Raatien hai khwaabon ki..,'' (Its the stuff of fairytales... and nights spent dreaming..,) Bulbul sang along waving her arms in the air.

Suresh, who was now frantically looking for Bulbul saw a large crowd in front of him. ''Accident hua hai kya,'' (Has there been an accident?) he asked the bystanders. They looked at him like he was crazy.

Rudra, who had now seen Bulbul looked annoyed. He signalled for her to move. Bulbul shook her head as if to say no. He gave her a stern look and signalled her. Same thing. Finally he smirked and carried on with his performance. Bulbul was confused. She turned around only to find Suresh behind her, his face red with anger. He held her by the elbow and moved her to the back of the crowd. Angry as Suresh was, he couldn't deny Bulbul's happiness so he let her watch the show from the back and that's why Bulbul loved him. To say thank you, she pecked him on the cheek and held his hand.
Edited by StarryStarryNyt - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Short update, but well written down.
Please add an index, so we know which page you updated on.
Edited by TeriGalliyan. - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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omg ok you are my new best friend! that's a subul baby on the way right?! even if it isn't, thank you for writing it in such a teasing way that it might be. gosh you are really masterful at keeping us guessing!! loved the events of this chapter too. i'm so amused that abhi & co have been sidelined for the last few updates. drama is building up and it's very exciting!! thanks for another great update 😃

also those are abhi's lines from the beginning of the serial, aren't they? 😲 he should sue rudra for plagiarism 😆😉
Edited by -mina- - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Thank u for ur pm... I can't understand hindi... if u don't mind will u pls give me a english translation...
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: TeriGalliyan.

Short update, but well written down.

Please add an index, so we know which page you updated on.

Thank you for your comment. I realise the updates are too short. This is because I want to focus on the individual characters and their little quirks. IFor example, in the last update, I wanted to focus on SuBul's love which would otherwise get lost in the shadows. Hope you understand. I didn't change their characters too much. I wanted to give Suresh a makeover but didn't think it was fair. Bulbul should love him for who he is
and will add an index soon. 😊
Edited by StarryStarryNyt - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: -mina-

omg ok you are my new best friend! that's a subul baby on the way right?! even if it isn't, thank you for writing it in such a teasing way that it might be. gosh you are really masterful at keeping us guessing!! loved the events of this chapter too. i'm so amused that abhi & co have been sidelined for the last few updates. drama is building up and it's very exciting!! thanks for another great update 😃

also those are abhi's lines from the beginning of the serial, aren't they? 😲 he should sue rudra for plagiarism 😆😉

Hehe. It is a SuBul baby, yes. 😃 and I try lol. I wanted to focus on Pragya and how she's changed. Gone is doormat Pragya. Yay!
and I don't think they are but I might be wrong. Abhi said something similar but these are lyrics from a song from an old serial.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: 5roseparvin

Thank u for ur pm... I can't understand hindi... if u don't mind will u pls give me a english translation...

Sure can do. I'll let you know when its's done. 😊
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Thank you for the encouragement Kesha_H. , Ravinanaik and rbb1.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: StarryStarryNyt

Thank you for the encouragement <font color="#990066">Kesha_H.</font> , <font color="#990066">Ravinanaik and <font color="#ff6699">rbb1.</font></font>

your welcome can't wait to read more

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