Halloween....OS Final concluding part pg 69 - Page 61

Originally posted by: bawaswift

See what you have done Anjani.. I did what you said and now baby is much more in gussa.. and says why are you saying sorry for no mistake.. 😛

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Originally posted by: s_danger

Yeh aapki editor kaun hai? someone from the publishing house?

Originally posted by: Suvika.

Oh ok...no problem...but what are you writing ??

Chapter 5

Oh man! So much planning by the Man in the Car'... So now its time for a fake accident so The Man' can end up a resident of the hospital! What a scheme, with Amnesia added in! And so far it has worked. Does this mean now him and Peter are both admitted in the hospital and both with head injury...i am not clear about where Peter is? ... finally The man' is going for the Heist'! great!

The plot thickens, well thought of! Sagi, when it comes to mysteries it is very difficult to keep things straight, especially when there are multiple characters and man situations surrounding them, but so far things have been clear...

Sagi, once more the description of Dr. Sudhir, that entire para reminds me of your mother...the language and sentence construction is very similar here.

Chapter 6

Wah Sagi, so much description of the building and layout. Looks like your KGH is much bigger and more like a college than just a hospital. But nice attempt there and by all accounts this detailed description is sufficient to give an idea that it was very easy to get disoriented in this place!

And once more you shifted gears... another clandestine meeting! Is Dr. Ramani important? I liked the humor with the bug' sequence! And this time it is the doctors! Now what is this?? A masked party? How convenient or is it? So now everyone has been collected in one room, including The Man'... And where are Peter and Nidhi? Both are feeling restless, so now they also arrive in the hospital or what?

Chapter 7

OMG!!

"Then something serendipitous happened. The man's nose twitched, a bit involuntarily as an irritant particle triggered an avalanche of nasal secretions. This avalanche in turn triggered signals to be conveyed to the brain, which in turn directed the lungs to inhale a huge draught of air through the nose and mouth. The man's eyes closed, and the air taken in was expelled by tremendous speed mainly through his nose and partly through his mouth. His heart stopped for a millisecond to adjust to the reflex procedure undertaken by the lungs and chest muscles. Then started again with a jerk."

OMG!! Sagi, this Is very similar to what your Mom once wrote in one of her posts... a big huge para with all the medical lingo to describe something really small... though I forgot if she was also describing a sneeze, but I know she did something similar! I have mentioned this before and do so again, you have inherited your mother's sense of humor. Keep going Sagi, you have an awesome talent!

Anyways, what an avalanche of events after that and to his horror Dr. Ashutosh finds Nidhi in the center of it all! Oh God! What a turn-around... Nice one! But the detective has the photo and does not know that The Man' was admitted and Ashu has seen him but probably did not pay too much attention to his features...

And finally, Peter is not here, he goes to the house that is now being watched... and all are caught! The Man' because of roses causing allergy... Very hilarious ending! Nicely written, except that in the middle I got confused about Peter's whereabouts and also I did not realize that the chip was not in the wallet. I had somehow missed that part when Peter retrieves it but leaves it in the room itself...

Congratulations Sagi... very good imagination! And I have noticed that humor seems to be your forte. This is not something that everyone can express, but you do. Keep it up!

Originally posted by: Suvika.

Suku Aunty.

😲 Why???

Originally posted by: s_danger

She is your best friend...Nikki singing teri meri, meri teri, prem kahani hai mushkil...

Originally posted by: suku_07

I know Sagi...Sujatha ji told me a lot about your mom...I never had chance to speak to your mom though I saw her few posts... I also know that 10 am was their regular time to catch up 😆