Jab Koi Baat Bigad Jaaye ch10 p94, epi-p99

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Chitra RaviKiran

@chitloner

Dazzler

+ 2

Posted: 12 years ago

#711

Sue ne toh sabhi ki jaan bachadi. Mallika ko maar diya aur khud apni boring male psychologist ki philosophy se hum loon ko bacha liya. Dhany ho maiyya. Bachara Adi. Deserves someone better. Give an epilogue that Nidhi is treated and pregnant now. Nice update.

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VIDYA

@vidyasabde

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Posted: 12 years ago

#712

wow that was super romantic story with suspence ka tadka...enjoyed it very much.

Nidhi's PCO is out in open...needs to be solved and nice preggy track

good going.keep it up.

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lee_Ashni

@lee_Ashni

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Posted: 12 years ago

#713

Great Shirley. Interesting chapter yaar. You are a great writer. Keep writing. You can be a romantic as well as suspense story writer.👏👏👏

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Suvika.

@Suvika.

Stunner

+ 7

Posted: 12 years ago

#714

First of all Hearty Congratulations on the successful completion of your FIRST FF (yeah i know..Epilogue is still pending...we will be waiting for that but since this is technically the last chapter...)

I think compared to the rest of the chapters, this one was longer...may be because you wanted to tie up all loose ends and cover all the points in the case...

Personally, i felt Nidhi saying"i killed her" and Ashu saying "no. i killed her" could have been avoided. i understand the circumstances but felt the whole court case should have stuck with Ashu and Solanki defending Ashu...it would have made things more..practical...(hope you don't mind my saying this...just my POV)

oh..Solanki's change of mind is brought into the story at the correct time...but i wanted to see more scenes where he tries to patch things up with Nidhi and DB also does the same...some emotional convo etc etc...would have loved that...but i understand your need to rush so no complaints...

you know shirley, when IK was questioning Ashu about Ashu and Mallika friendship, the way he asked the questions, brought out a lot of questions in my mind too...Mallika proposed Ashu multiple times and he said no multiple times...YET..he remained her friend...somehow that whole concept (in the serial) was something i could not understand...i mean ok she was with him when no one else was there, but...i don't know..that part of Ashu's behaviour is something i probably can never justify...he is too good for his own good and expects the same innate goodness from the opposite person too...

i liked the way you brought out Suhasini and how she planned the whole thing...it was not a separate scene or even shown as a flashback..but the way Solanki questioned and Suhasini's replies gave the readers the complete picture of what happened that night...you didn't leave any loopholes in that...

and one more thing i noticed that you did very well...you showed the difference in Shyama's way of questioning and Solanki's. Shyama..out of pratice and Solanki more confident and very much in control of the situation...loved the subtle way you showed that...

all in all great chapter and a wonderful FF!!

chaloji...we will wait for your next FF in your next vacation...when is the epilogue going to be posted?

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menaka

@ariyadasa

Dazzler

Posted: 12 years ago

#715

😊sshirely you are a brilliant writer too good yarr too good 😊

never mine i loose the game 😆

let me ask one question from you sshirely ,are you a lawyer ? as i feel you have handle the court case in a proper manner as there is no space for faults

It's really fantastic the court conversation superb dear superb ,
How you brought forward the strong bond between Ashni in the courts totally remarkable, when nidi says "i kill Malika" and how Ashu reply for it really emotional
How you shows Ashu as a really hubby in front of ks and the family members using the word "gem " really applicable for the situation
The way you join the wedding anniversary for the situation shows you as a brilliant writer yarr
Ending was superb

Total chap impress me a lot i am speechless Fabulous work

👏congrats 👏

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sshirley

@sshirley

Rocker

Posted: 12 years ago

#716

Originally posted by: Vidishaa
wow...just perfect...

Thank you !
Your are on the way towards becoming another Agatha Christie👏

Thanks a lot! I am a big fan of hers. And, at the cost of sounding immodest, a few people have told me the same thing. Not on this forum though. So, thank you very much

Edited by sshirley - 12 years ago

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deepali.rock

@deepali.rock

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 12 years ago

#717

Originally posted by: sshirley

waiting

i hope u got my pm. Review will be up by 2mrw nite. Caught a severe cold and its causing this unbearable headache.

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sshirley

@sshirley

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Posted: 12 years ago

#718

Originally posted by: nandinibose
it was a wonderful read.
Thank you

will cm back n comment asap.
a little busy on work front😳

Please Jaldi

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sshirley

@sshirley

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Posted: 12 years ago

#719

Originally posted by: niniborn2rule
good chap shirley..courtroom trial was excellent...enjoyed it thruout...chalo ashni innocent hai baki ka baad mein socha jayega and KS and DB"s u-turn was noteworthy...waise was this the last chap ya fir epilogue hai??waise epilogue to banta ha boss...

Thanks Nini,

@bold - i m glad it was noteworthy - had a time crunch and had to tie up a lot of loose ends. so, i have to show this in a line or two.

Epilogue - sochungi, but a very very small epilogue

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sshirley

@sshirley

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Posted: 12 years ago

#720

Originally posted by: ChitaRK
Sue ne toh sabhi ki jaan bachadi. Mallika ko maar diya aur khud apni boring male psychologist ki philosophy se hum loon ko bacha liya. Dhany ho maiyya. Bachara Adi. Deserves someone better. Give an epilogue that Nidhi is treated and pregnant now. Nice update.

Thank you so much.

@bold - oh come on, isn't that understood? Mild PCOS toh hai. 😉😉😉 why do you need an epilogue for that