FF Completed: Sacrifices (Index Pg 1) - Page 10

Originally posted by: aarch

Loved this one also... Very nice.

Do I need to say waiting for next update?

Originally posted by: Mimoha

One of your best chapters. Ditto to Shari. Dont think I can better what she has said.

Originally posted by: vasanthi16

Saw ur update late last night...did not want to read it in a hurry and made myself log out...but it was so so worth the wait...

Very happy u wrote a long update...everything was covered so beautifully...

U gonna separate them 😔...pls don't !!

Fabulously written and the dialogues r Masha Allah...too good ! 👏👍🏼

Waiting eagerly to see what happen next !!

Thanks a ton ! 🤗

Originally posted by: Binat

Just re-read chapters 4 &5. Nidhi is a delight and Ashu is so intense and mature. Felt sad that baba was against the relationship and they were talking of parting ways. Hope you don't bring too many tears to our eyes and give us some really good happy moments and ending. We have ktlk if we want sadness 🥱

Originally posted by: Binat

Just read chapter 6. Such a beautifully written story. Once again keep it light and happy

Originally posted by: vasanthi16

What a surprise Mish...never expected a update so soon and what an update...👏

Ur take on relationships is lovely...u used DK scenes here which were delightful ...conveyed the close relation Nidhi has with her Baba and why she and Ashu had to make such a difficult decision.

The surprise element in this update has been Mallika and her transformation...she is Ashu's good friend but her love for him made it difficult for her to accept that his happiness is Nidhi...glad she was made aware of it by Nidhi ...well scripted here ...words r not enough !!

Now getting greedy for another quick update !!😍

Comments Part 2

She was caught unguarded. She hadn't expected this.

The truth has got to come out, facades have to fall... one has to love the tension building up.

Pareshaani aap nahin hain. Pareshaani main hoon. Lekin aap please aur kuchh mat poochhiye. Main aur sab kuchh bardasht kar sakti hoon. Lekin ye nahin ki meri wajah se aapko koi pareshaani ho. Ya kissi bhi wajah se aap mujhse nafrat karein."

"Tumse nafrat? Main? Nidhi tum mujhe thoda bhi samajhti

I just love the way we see the protective instincts start building up. She does not want to hurt him... but the words and the situation is bound to cause hurt, despite of that the need to at least soften the blow is there..

Ab bahut tedhi-medhi baatein ho gayin. Aur bahut pareshaan rah li tum. Batao mujhe kya baat hai? Aur main bina jaane tumhein yahan se jaane nahin doonga. Batao mujhe."

This is a combo of MB and Ahmeer... the upfront approach is undoubtedly Ahmeer but the urging is MB

The way the tension builds up is good... he reaches a point where he wants her to voice out Nidhi suddenly felt very weak. She leaned on him. And then one of the moments... run they may but undoubtedly they will come towards each other... this is shown here and my guess the later chapters will show more and more of this.

Ashutosh felt a chill run down his spine at a medical situation

This is ironical yet so true... its when you see the one you care most in the world in danger that you realise how hopeless you are in life... He might be a hot shot doc but seeing Nids down shows how helpless he can become.

The part when he looks after her is awww, the facades had started to crumble and here we see them destroyed completely.They can be themselves let their real doubts surface. Like the underlined feeling of remorse in ashu, like Nids in Dk now it his turn to see Nidhi facing sth he did not want to ( in Dk Nids did not want ashu to know the kind of things Mallu said)

"Aap kyon kar rahe hain aisa?" Nidhi suddenly burst out, "Maine to aapke liye koi pareshaani nahin khadi ki hai. Meri wajah se koi aapko kuchh kah to nahin raha hai. Koi badnaami to nahin ho rahi hai aapki? Phir? Main bas thoda samay hi to yahan bitaana chahti hoon na? Jo do mahine yahan bache hain mere thodee der aapko door se dekhna chahti hoon. Kya ismein bhi logon ko koi problem hai?"

Climax of that part undoubtedly very poignant the damn has broken and her real feelings seeping through again, the beauty of their love as well each wanting to be there for the other even if it is from afar just to see the other one.

"Nidhi. Jo tum chahti ho, aur… jo main bhi chahta hoon, uski impossibility ka ehsaas nahin hua kabhi tumhein?"

Finally its out... the emotional truth and the truth that hurts. Emotional in terms of him sharing the feelings and the one that hurts is the impossibility of it all/

How easily and simply she managed to talk about love. Ashutosh was surprised as well as enamoured, but the expression of fondness on his face changed as he looked at the room door

Age and its logic versus the impulsivity of youth. Cynical yet so true.

The confrontation with Baba is a needed one in a way more that what Mallu said here baba's logic is more valid and seriously in this part the log resurface this time in the form of baba. Ashu handles it in a wonderful way and the fan in me would have loved to see MB in this. You have to love ashu here even if the whole thing has been painful nids is the one whom he looks out for, the need to make sure that is ok is stronger than ever.

Father daughter convo is interesting Nids tries to change baba's view but without stepping her limits.

And then THE moment... the meeting, and gosh that reminded me of that time MB and KK in the garden and MB telling her about his life.The transition from the spoil like child to the mature woman who can read him so well. and haaaila the vulnerability of ashu... finally he lays his cards down.

The promises sheer bliss to read... bittersweet yet promising. and finally the way you break the tension with his wish of her bringing him tea.

Sharmishtha Thanks for making me fall for MB all over again

Review for part 6 to follow tonight 😛

Originally posted by: oaz30

Comments Part 2

She was caught unguarded. She hadn't expected this.

The truth has got to come out, facades have to fall... one has to love the tension building up.

Pareshaani aap nahin hain. Pareshaani main hoon. Lekin aap please aur kuchh mat poochhiye. Main aur sab kuchh bardasht kar sakti hoon. Lekin ye nahin ki meri wajah se aapko koi pareshaani ho. Ya kissi bhi wajah se aap mujhse nafrat karein."

"Tumse nafrat? Main? Nidhi tum mujhe thoda bhi samajhti

I just love the way we see the protective instincts start building up. She does not want to hurt him... but the words and the situation is bound to cause hurt, despite of that the need to at least soften the blow is there..

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Sharmishtha Thanks for making me fall for MB all over again

Review for part 6 to follow tonight 😛

+1 to everything Shari has said.

Originally posted by: niniborn2rule

Awesome dear...very very well written...but is mallika really changing??? i still have my doubts..but hope nidhi has been able to bring about that almost impossible change too...😊