Devakhsi SS-MAINE PYAR KIYA.. :)

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Monalisa(Hundi..my mom gave this name :)..

@Monaleojan

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Posted: 9 years ago

Hey...Myself Monalisa..and this is my first ever story in IF.. plzz ignore any gramatical error... HAPPY reading... [/COLOR] This story progress after Dev's Realization.. TEASER OF THE STORY- Nikki-So bhaya,which colour u see in Natasha? Dev-ORANGE...LOOKS BEST IN SONAKHSI.(DREAMILY).. NIKKI-WHAT?SONA DI!? BHAYA YOU R GETTING ENGEG TO NG NOT SONA DI!.. DEV-HUH?! ...NIKI-bhaya ap v na! Ok am going,ap ready hoke ajana.. ..(IN DEV'S ROOM) Dev once agin closed his eyes and saw smiling Sonakhsi..and putting engegment ring on her fingr..DEV SMILES AT HER..& SUDDENLY OPENS HIS EYES..MS. Bose?! [COLOR=lime green]SO HERE IS THE TSR OF THE STORY..SHALL I CONT.?

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krystle123

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Posted: 9 years ago

nice and lovely start. continue dear. 😛

if u dont mind, can i give one suggestion- can u please delivery dialogue line by line i mean seperately of each one. it will be easy and nice to read. its bit confusing.

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Monalisa(Hundi..my mom gave this name :)..

@Monaleojan

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: krystle123
nice and lovely start. continue dear.😛
if u dont mind, can i give one suggestion- can u please delivery dialogue line by line i mean seperately of each one. it will be easy and nice to read. its bit confusing.

..ya sure..thank u fr ur sugsn.. :)