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Posted: 9 years ago
#31

Originally posted by: Autumn_Hue

It was a lovely update.. So finally the family knows how careless and a drunkard Vicky is.. Hope they deal with him.. I always love the moments you write between Dev and Kasak it's beautiful.. So warm and so believable..

Him trying to speak gujarati for her, their cute never ending banter, their jealousy for their respective acquaintances you write everything in a very wow manner.. Keep it up..

Thank you for the update.. Update the next part soon..

P.S. - I totally agree with the song selection it was very very apt for them..

Love,
Kashmi




Thanks for the analysis dear! I'm glad you're liking it. I was going to write about Vicky being punished, but it's so boring as compared to writing about Dev/Kasak chemistry that I gave up. Haha. It's coming soon enough though!
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Posted: 9 years ago
#32

Originally posted by: Zaya.hp

Fantastic! As usual! Love their anter, yaar. And I'm sure Kasak looked awesome in the saree. Waiting for the next one!



Thank you! I thought it was overdone if I make her wear a saree on a date. But, since they're going to a formal event, it's appropriate. Guess it reveals my secret desire to see my heroine in a saree haha😉
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Posted: 9 years ago
#33

Originally posted by: gowripriya

Read all the updates in one go u r an excellent writer👏

Dev's jealousy 😳and Sona's attitude is good to read and their nok jhokes 😆 really gud😃 pls continue soon and haan Please make Kasak as soon my request only when u wish😃



Glad you're liking it!
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Posted: 9 years ago
#34
The update was beautifully written like always.. Be it the romantic date that you penned down or the crooning of the song by Kasak and Dev..
I loved how you made the confession by Dev simple and basic and nothing extravagant.. How he showed reasons they were perfect together and how Kasak voiced her apprehensions wad great..

Can't wait to read the next update.. Can you do it today?? Try to manage it please??

Can't wait to read their love story progress..

Love,
Kashmi
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Posted: 9 years ago
#35

Originally posted by: Autumn_Hue

The update was beautifully written like always.. Be it the romantic date that you penned down or the crooning of the song by Kasak and Dev..

I loved how you made the confession by Dev simple and basic and nothing extravagant.. How he showed reasons they were perfect together and how Kasak voiced her apprehensions wad great..

Can't wait to read the next update.. Can you do it today?? Try to manage it please??

Can't wait to read their love story progress..

Love,
Kashmi


Thanks for the love! I'll try to do it tonight it time permits. But, it'll definitely be soon.
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Posted: 9 years ago
#36

Originally posted by: blahblahs


Thanks for the love! I'll try to do it tonight it time permits. But, it'll definitely be soon.


You deserve it all!!

Yep please make it soon.. 😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Sorry for the late update! But here it is nonetheless :)


The next morning, Kasak could not focus on her work at the hospital. Instead, glimpses of Mr. Dixit's ishaar-e-ishq' flashed in front of her. The experience had been so real, unlike what she had imagined it would be like. Yes, she had worn a saree, and yes, he looked dashing as usual, but still there was something about last night that made Kasak feel alive after a long time.

Until now, she had been living her life as a normal person. She was not depressed or sad about her status quo, but she wasn't entirely happy either. The status quo was simply adequate. But, Dev's entry into her life had come as a refreshing change: one that she desperately needed. And now, with his confession, her life may change. But, she did not want to take any decisions hastily and then regret it later on.

"It's time for lunch," thought Kasak as the big clock in the General Ward of the hospital struck 12.00 pm. Walking towards the intern doctors on the other side of the ward, Kasak said: "Drs. Suri and Sharma, you're interns in charge until I get back," an authoritative tone.

"Chalo, I'm so hungry today!" Kasak said taking off her lab coat and stethoscope. Instead of sitting in the somber hospital cafeteria, Kasak decided to eat outside on a bench in park adjacent to the hospital. The weather was nice and Kasak figured some Vitamin D could never hurt. On her way out, Kasak saw a male and a female medical students engrossed in a tight hug near the emergency department. "Guys, yeh kya hai? This is a hospital, okay?" she said furiously.

"Sorry," both of them said, clearly not displaying an ounce of remorse and walked away.

"Tumne apne time pe romance nahi kiya eiska matlab yeh nahi ke duniya mein koi aur students na kare," Kasak turned around to see Dev standing near the main entrance of the hospital. He walked up to her with a broad grin on his face.

"Dev, aap yahan?" Kasak asked.

"I called the hospital earlier pretending to be a patient, who would only get treatment from you. Then, the nurse told me your schedule and I found out that you have lunch break at noon. So, here I am. Tada!" Dev said.

"Dev, don't you have any work to do at the office?" she questioned him as they walked out of the hospital together and he held the door for her.

"I do. But, I finished it all early to come see you," he said.

"Dev, that's sweet," said Kasak genuinely as they walked to the park together.

"I know," said Dev. "I'd make an ideal boyfriend, huh?"

"Mein zyada sweet nahi khaati, Diabetes ka risk hai," replied Kasak.

As they sat on the bench in the park, Dev asked: "So, how was your day, doctor?"

Opening her lunch box, Kasak replied: "Not bad. There weren't too many patients today. But, I wasn't thinking much about work today, Dev,"

"Then what were you thinking about?" he asked.

"You," she replied earnestly. Dev smiled knowingly. They were both silent for a few moments afterwards. Yet, it wasn't awkward. There was a strange comfort that they both experienced simply by being in each other's company. Perhaps, it was because they knew that the individual sitting next to them truly cared and would never hurt them. Then Kasak suddenly said: "Aapka lunch?"

" I forgot," said Dev.

"I can understand that, but what about Aunty jee? She forgot your lunch also?" Kasak questioned.

"No, I told her I'd be eating out today," said Dev.

"Here," she said offering him a bite of her salad. The spinach leaf hung off the fork precariously, like it was hanging onto the fork for its dear life.

"No...thanks," said Dev. "I'm not into salads...I mean healthy food,"

"Okay, samne paav bhaji milti hai, woh khaoge?" she asked.

"Is it good?" Dev asked, to which Kasak shrug her shoulders.

"Sure," he said as they both got up from the bench and moved towards the Paav Bhaji place.

Kasak finished her salad just as Dev's paav bhaji arrived. "Would you like some?" he asked her.

"Nahi, I'm good," she said.

"Okay," he said. And then, he took a giant piece of the bread, dipped it generously with the bhaaji and extended his hand towards Kasak's mouth, forcing her to eat it.

"Yeh kya? I said no, didn't I?" she yelled at him.

"But, I knew that you still wanted to try it," he said.

"How did you..." she said surprised.

Before he could respond, her phone went off and she had to report some details about a patient to Dr. Singh. She also extended her lunch break for a few minutes. Meanwhile, Dev had finished his paav bhaaji and waited for Kasak's call to end.

They walked back to the hospital together, but this time taking the longer route. Kasak wished she had known he was coming; she would have worn better clothes and dressed up a bit more.

"What are you thinking about?" he asked.

"Nothing," she said. " I always wondered what guys looked for in a girl,"

Dev smirked again. "While fielding for you, I used to Google what girls look for in guys,"

"Oh, just the normal stuff," said Kasak. "Decent looks, education, personality,"

"That's exactly what guys look for too," said Dev casually. "I think you're making this out to be more complex than it needs to be. We're just two human beings who want each other's support and company. That's it,"

Kasak smiled as the warm sunrays directly hit her face. "You know, it's funny. I never imagined that in our relationship, you'd be the first one to open up instead of me,"

"Ahh...so, you concede that we're in a relationship," asked Dev with a 1000 Watt smile on his face.

"Yes," said Kasak blushing. "I do, because I simply cannot resist you,"

Edited by blahblahs - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#38
This was amazing..!!
So finally they're in a relationship.. I liked how you made Kasak's answer something very simple and easy but romantic not too grand.. It was very realistic and that's what I loved about it..

Lovely writing!!

Keep writing more..

Love,
Kashmi

P.S. - The length was too short, could you increase the length of the next chapter?? And if possible please update soon..
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Here's another update. I hope you guys like it. Please suggest ideas for where this story should go next.


"Dev?" said Kasak, softly whispering into the phone as she was in the hospital.

"Haan?" he asked.

"Do you have any meetings lined up for today? I was hoping we could go out tonight," she said. As it turned out though, Dev did have a few important meetings lined up. Nonetheless, Kasak and Dev planned to spend the weekend together at Dev's place.

"But how?" asked Kasak. "Aunty jee and your sisters will be home,"

"No, they won't. They're all going to stay at Mama jee's new house for the weekend," Dev said confidently. "And I make an excuse and say that I have to work on a presentation,"

"Okay," Kasak agreed. "See you then!"

"No, I'll see before that," Dev said. "I'll come pick you up from the hospital today. We can drive to your house together and then share a coffee. It's only Tuesday, yaar. Mein weekend tak wait nahi karna chahata," Dev laughed.

Kasak smiled warmly and agreed. Dev would pick her up at 7.30PM. Though Kasak's duty ended at 6.00PM, she decided to finish up working on some patients' diagnosis during the waiting time. And if there was still any time left, she would catch some of the IPL game for today.

The big clock struck six and Kasak headed towards the cafeteria to finish up her work. She was working on the treatment plan of a patient with a very severe case of Thyroid deficiency. That case itself took much longer to prepare than she had anticipated and she didn't even realize how the time passed. Patah patha jaanta hai, ek tu hi na jaane pyaar mera...Kasak's phone went off, pulling her out of the intellectual zone she was so keenly involved in. Dev's name flashed across the screen.

"Oh, damn!" she thought. "I totally forgot the time," She quickly picked up the call. "Haan, Dev. Kahiye? Kahan pohche?"

"Hi, Kasak. I'm waiting for you outside," said Dev from the other end.

"Okay. Mein bus 2 minutes mein bahar aati huh," Kasak said, gathering her papers which were spread across the entire table. She grabbed her makeup out of her purse while simultaneously putting her phone in the purse and quickly rushed to the bathroom. She decided to touch up her makeup to make sure she looked extra preety since Dev was picking her up.

Kasak didn't quite know what it was, but ever since she and Dev had begun their relationship, she paid much more attention to her looks. Before that, Kasak always made sure that she looked relatively presentable in general, but ever since Dev had confessed his feelings, she felt it was her duty to look her best all the time. It was not necessarily for him, or that he would devalue her for not having make up on. Rather, it was a corollary of the "love waali feeling". Kasak wanted to make sure that she enjoyed this relationship and these new emotions to their full extent and in order to do that, she wanted to live every moment to the fullest and looking good was simply a part of it. This relationship with Dev had splashed new colours into her otherwise dull life; and those colours were brightening up the other colours already present in her life such as those of her friends and her family. Truly for the first time, Kasak felt how it was to live life with rose colored spectacles on.

She observed Dev's car parked in the VIP spot of the hospital and walked towards it. He briskly took off his square framed, black sunglasses as he saw her coming, and gave her a warm smile as she settled in the car. "Hi," he said.

"Kaise hai aap, Dev?" Kasak said, smiling back affectionately.

Dev said he was very tired because it had been a long day at work. Tina had lined up five consecutive meetings and presentations for him. "Areee, toh phir aap kyun aaye mujhe pick up karne? I could've managed na," Kasak said concerned as Dev drove.

"Tumse milke hi toh meri thakaan door ho jaati hai," Dev said turning his head to look at Kasak instead of the road.

"Yeh sab filmy baatein bandh karo, okay?" said Kasak.

"Nahi, nahi. Seriously keah raha huh. Mein tumse milke bohat relax ho jata huh. Waise toh tumhari aur meri life mein hamare respective professions aur kaam ke bager kuch khaas karne ko hai nahi. Toh, aise mein, when I interact with you, I get to experience a different side of Life," explained Dev.

"Haan, who toh hai," said Kasak. "Usually, I'd simply go home, eat and sleep. But, today since I have you, I can spend some good time with you,"

"See?" said Dev, pulling into Kasak's apartment complex. They climbed the stairs in silence as Kasak fumbled through her purse to find the keys. Dev was typing something on his phone during the whole climb.

After they reached Kasak's apartment, she inserted the key into the rusty lock. "Ugh!" she said. "It's jammed, again,"

"I know," said Dev still not looking up from his phone. "There's a traffic jam in Rajpath road again. Tina is stuck there,"

"Kya?" said Kasak. Dev finally looked up from his phone and gave her a "DUH" look.

"Dev, yeh Rajpath road beech mein kahan se aaya?" Kasak questioned, leaving the key hanging in the lock.

"Tumne hi toh bola na, phir se traffic jam ho gaya hai," Dev said in a matter of fact tone.

"Mein Rajpath road ki baat nahi kar rahi thi! Have aa manas ne kaun samjahave? (Who would explain this to this man?)" Kasak said. "My lock, Dev! MY FREAKING LOCK IS JAMMED!"

Dev disapprovingly looked at the hanging key, and then looked back at Kasak. Then, he shook his head in utter disdain. "Kya yaar," he muttered under his breath and gestured Kasak to move aside. With one swift turn of the key, Dev unlocked the door and opened it. Kasak heaved a sigh of relief.

"I hope Virat's batting hasn't started yet," Kasak said grabbing the TV remote.

"I thought ke hum coffee peene waale the?" Dev questioned.

"Haan toh TV dekhte dekhte peeyenge," Kasak said, hurriedly flipping the channels.

"Mein yahan tujhse baat karne aaya huh, time spend karne aaya huh. IPL toh mein ghar pe bhi dekh sakata tha," Dev said annoyed.

"I know!" said Kasak apologetically. "Bus, mein Virat ki batting dekh kar bandh kar doongi," she said.

"NO!" said Dev grabbing the remote from her and turning off the TV.

Kasak didn't want to argue with him. So, she headed to the kitchen to make coffee. "So, how is Aunty jee?" asked Kasak.

"She is fine. Tumhe bohat miss karti hai In fact, who dono tumhe bohat miss karte hai," replied Dev taking off his jacked and settling on a chair in Kasak's dining room.

"Dono?" asked Kasak.

"Haan, Dono," said Dev smiling.

"Matlab Aunty jee aur Nikki?" said Kasak.

"Nahi, matlab Maa aur Mami," said Dev bursting into laughter. "Lekin ab toh mama aur mami bhi apne naye ghar me chale gaye hai, toh Ma bohat akeli ho gayi hai,"

"Oh," said Kasak, bringing the single cup of coffee to the dining table. Then, she went in the kitchen and filled up another cup simply with warm water. She also brought that to the dining table.

"Tum coffee nahi pee rahi ho?" asked Dev.

"Uh-huh...aa tamara mate (This is for you)," said Kasak, dipping a Green Tea bag into the cup with the boiling water.

"What?!" said Dev in an angry tone. Seeing Kasak's stern face, Dev didn't argue any further. He simply picked up the cup of green tea and sipped it. Dev and Kasak then talked about how their respective days had been and some things that were going on around the world. After a few minutes, Kasak saw Dev observing her face closely.

"What?" she said. "What are you staring at, Dev?" asked Kasak.

"Nahi woh...Are you wearing a lot of makeup?" asked Dev. Kasak was surprised that he had noticed.

"Um...woh...mein..." said Kasak.

"It's okay. It looks nice, but I'm just surprised. That's all," said Dev, awkwardly. They continued talking for a little while longer before Dev got up to leave. Kasak observed him gracefully put his blazer back on and escorted him to the door.

"Aavajo, Dev (Bye, Dev)" she said.

"Toh, weekend ma malishu? (So, I'll see you this weekend?)" said Dev in his accented Gujarati.

Kasak laughed and said: "Chokkas! (Sure thing). By the way, your Gujarati is improving," They were both standing at the door, and Dev replied:

"Yeah, Nats... I mean Natasha has been teaching me," At that comment, Kasak turned around and walked back into the house. Dev grabbed her arm from behind, pulled her towards him and immediately wrapped his strong arms around her and embraced her in a tight hug. "Jealous huh?" he whispered into her ear. She tried to break free from the prison of his arms, but he was too strong. She simply couldn't. And the more she tried, the tighter Dev's embrace became. Finally, a minute or so Kasak gave in and hugged him back. Then, Dev released her and said: "Good bye hug toh ho gaya, now I can leave,"

"See you this weekend," said Kasak as Dev departed down the stairs.

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Posted: 9 years ago
#40

Originally posted by: Autumn_Hue

This was amazing..!!

So finally they're in a relationship.. I liked how you made Kasak's answer something very simple and easy but romantic not too grand.. It was very realistic and that's what I loved about it..

Lovely writing!!

Keep writing more..

Love,
Kashmi

P.S. - The length was too short, could you increase the length of the next chapter?? And if possible please update soon..



I tried to write a longer, more detailed interaction this time. Let me know what you think and where this story should go next.

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