|| OS - The End || Updated - Pt3, Pg4 *PMs Later*

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Hello!!!!! *waves*

Well, I was planning to write another SS but then thought not to give you all a big heart-break and hence wrote an OS. Well, it is still incomplete as I have to fill in Heer's feelings and her part of the story, moreover I have to give you a idea about what Prem actually was.

So, hope that you would like the introduction. Loads of love. Take care.

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OS || The End

Part 1

Someone was fighting hard. Fighting hard for his life, for the future he had thought of, the future with the love of his life and their new born daughter. He was fighting against death'..the ultimate truth of one's life.

One has to die one day or the other but he didn't want to die, not so soon at least. God can't be so cruel'. can he?!! God d*mn it'..he wanted to live, live for his love, his daughter, for the many moments that he could create and live with them, only if he could live.*sigh*

Why? Why??!!!...this three letter word is the most asked and the least answered. How ironical, isn't it?! Why?

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R & R Army Hospital, Delhi, 3rd Feb 2010

His body was burning, it had been burning since that bomb blast, doctors say that his body is 70% burnt, most of his organs are damaged and off-course the scope of his recovery is nil'.just his heart is beating, making him feel the presence of someone so far but yet so close. And for that someone he is hoping against hope, hoping for a better tomorrow, hoping to spend his life with her'..together and forever.

He is too young to die, he had so many years to...never mind. The reality is - he "had" - and that is never going to change. Now it seems as if he has just a few days or maybe just a few hours left before silence would fill his room, his body, his heart, his soul and her. Everything will be sans.

He closed his eyes and immediately knew what he wanted. He wanted her and that was one dream that he could never be able to live...

"Tumhe pana mere liye ek khwaab hai, aisa khwaab jo kabhi haqiqat nahi ban sakta'"

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Beep beep beep beep bip bip bip bip. . . . . . . . .beee eee eee eee eee

Doctors were trying their best to save the life of one of the three Indian Army officers who were rushed from Afghanistan's base after they got injured or almost killed in a bomb blast. One of them had already died in the helicopter and now after living for a whole week in such a miserable yet stable state this young chap was dying. Shocks were being given to revive the heart but the response that they got was silence. . . . . . .just. . . . . . .silence.

Just silence.

The doctor came out of the ICU'..and without any hesitation and with utmost ease said - "He is no more". Well, I don't blame him'..he, in his career has seen thousands of case where the end is this painful and heart-wrenching; he has become quite immune over the years.

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She closed her eyes, a silent tear rushed down the cheeks and then again silence followed'..

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So, how was it?! And guys, it going to be a sad OS and this is based on a true incident...so if you can then do feel the pain and always make Peace not war...never.

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OS || The End

Part 2

He had been appointed by the Indian Army as the senior English Instructor, to teach the Afghanistan officers English for better communication b/w the two countries and to spread the message of peace. He was part of the Aman-Shanti Plan.


He was an amazing officer, one of the best officers this country had ever seen. He was ' Major Prem Juneja ' an AEC (Army Education Corps) officer.


He was someone whom everybody could trust, rely upon. No matter what, he was always there for everyone'..everyone. But who was there for him?


Heer.

His Heer.

He was her Prem.

"Heer Prem ka prateek tha aur Prem sabse zaada Heer mein samaya tha"

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This is the story of a death, a crushed heart, a shattered life, a life of a dead soul ' Heer. Not all love stories start with "once upon a time" nor do they end with "happily ever after". A true love story is also the one filled with "pain", "silent sobs"'..and "tears".


Not all stories have the hero surviving in the tragedy, in the battle field or in the war. Some stories are crushed dreadfully by the evil. And this story is the story of every other soldier'..salutes to them for reasons known to us all.


This is the story of his death. . . . . and her dead life.

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I am really sorry guys for such a short update but I just couldn't think...ahhh head is blocked. Sorry.


Well, I am not expecting any good remark but yeah do criticise. I think I really need some. Love you all guys.

Take care.

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Here's a request guys. Please comment on AG's profile, her rank is really going down. Just a comment a day won't do any harm, right? So just go on the link given below and a simple 'Get well soon' message would do. Thank you guys...love you all.

AG's profile link : http://www.india-forums.com/celebrity/2554/additi-gupta/

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P.S. - Athi di, I hope I don't get shot!!! 🤢

😆

Edited by -Shwetasri- - 13 years ago
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Posted: 13 years ago
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pls update more its a nice ff
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Posted: 13 years ago
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finally madam wrote something?? that too sad one😭
great start shwetu!! continue soon!
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Awesome part dear..i love the way you used the confession wala dialogue..bt mera prem.. 😭.
Continue soon.
Thanks for pm
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Posted: 13 years ago
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I don;t know what to write... just brilliant brilliant OS... really emotional... splendid...



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Posted: 13 years ago
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awww that was really sad😭
want to read more
pls do cont it soon
nd do pm me
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Originally posted by: seema.sharma86

pls update more its a nice ff

Thank you Seema, but I wont's make it into an FF. It would be just an OS. 😊

Originally posted by: vrushika

finally madam wrote something?? that too sad one😭
great start shwetu!! continue soon!

😳 😆...yeah finally wrote something. 😛 Thank you didi. 😃
Well, I will continue but be prepared for a heart-break as the OS is going to be a really sad one. 😭

Hey...yeah, its going to be a sad one. 😭

Originally posted by: priyahmt

Awesome part dear..i love the way you used the confession wala dialogue..bt mera prem.. 😭.
Continue soon.
Thanks for pm

Aww...thank you so much Priya di.
Hmm, Prem has to die this time. Sorry...😭

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Thank you so much for liking my work...😊



Edited by -Shwetasri- - 13 years ago
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Originally posted by: zigzagway_sadi

I don;t know what to write... just brilliant brilliant OS... really emotional... splendid...



Love you so much Sadi di and it has been so many days since I last talked to you...I have always loved the way you put these pics in your comments. I really love them.
Thank you di. 😃 🤗

Originally posted by: kiran_28

awww that was really sad😭
want to read more
pls do cont it soon
nd do pm me

Thank you...yeah sure I will PM you. 😊
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Shweta you're writing sad story 😒
I'm never excited to read sad ones. But since I started this, I want to know what happened next 🤔
All your fault getting this to my attention.
Your message is good. Peace without war can avoid so much pain.
People never learn though, seeing all the troubles around the world that is going on 😆
Good try. Your writing is v. good and it was to the point, without so much of drag.
It was kind of fun to see your vertical dots to find out what was at the end , but so sad 😭

I want a happy OS from you next, to make up for all this sadness ok?😡

Please update it. I appreciate your thoughtfulness of giving an OS instead of FF.
People really should start FF if there is time to commit for it. I understand that.

Thank you for sharing your creative piece.

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