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Posted: 15 years ago
aww ayshaa!!!!!!!
that was super cutee!!!! i'm sorry i cant leave a loong comment! i'll pm u why....but anyway.......AWESOME UPDATE!
i love the preet-meher-prem trio and even more the preet-meher-heer trio! i loveedd the prem-meher thing too....but its kinda creepy...do u really hug ur bhabhi while she's in her bath robe...and just came out of the shower !! :P LMAO!!! but still..anything fr prem to kiss heer eh! and that gurl is right "picture perfect!" i hope prem finds out why heer had those marks on her skin..and he beats those guys up black nd blue! :D
as fr the "secret" does prem have some disease or some illness.....cuz i think wen meher and preet were talking..meher meant tht they're always worried over him and he seems to be all careless bout his health! w/e it is...the suspense is killing mee!!!!!!!!!!
and also..what song was this???
i gtg now..loveed the updatee!
loveee uuu
tc
Samra :) <3
P.S. sorry for replying soo late...been busy...lol...dunn wrry...i have all the tabs open with ur pms..im checking out each update right now :D
Edited by masin - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
great part
loved it
preet and meher getting married- - =) (how old are they ????)
pls cont soon
an update ur other fanfics
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Posted: 15 years ago
Thankyouuuuuuuuuu All for the commetns =)
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: premeer928

Edited!

hey ayysha
yay...me first....so happy....this is the first time I got to comment on your ff....first....😳 it was amazing....I simply loved it....👏 The way prem kept looking at heer was really cute....⭐️ And I love meher's and preet's relationship with heer. 👍🏼 continue soon....and thanks for the PM...😊



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Afreen

Awweww Thankyouuuuuuuuu😳
Glad you liked in and making a new entry soon 😳
Love Ayysha
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: Heerbeauty

WOW.....so long part,Ayysha didi

it was the best part

I was wishing that Ayysha didi please write such a long part and you did!!!

thank you Ayysha didi.

It was so nice.

Prem such a cute guy.

Loved the way Prem talked.

Loved the scene when Prem thought Heer that she is Meher.

Awesome part

Update soon

Paddo

Awww Thankyouuuuuuu😳
Glad you liked it jaan 😛
Will update soon😳
Thankyouu for a sweet comment ⭐️
Love Ayysha
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: sanyoprithviraj

prem is sooooooooo falling in love with heer but it seems heer will take time to realize it(i hope she does!)

i wish u show a very jealous prem for quite some episodes before he realizes that he loves her. since it is slightly inspired by twilight u have to have a character to play the role of jacob who is childhood friend of heer and loves her. that wud be sooooooo fun

but plz update asap. cant wait 2 much

Awww Thankyou 😳
Will make a entry soon 😳
Looking forward to your other comments😳
Thankyou 😳
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Posted: 15 years ago

Originally posted by: masin

aww ayshaa!!!!!!!

that was super cutee!!!! i'm sorry i cant leave a loong comment! i'll pm u why....but anyway.......AWESOME UPDATE!
i love the preet-meher-prem trio and even more the preet-meher-heer trio! i loveedd the prem-meher thing too....but its kinda creepy...do u really hug ur bhabhi while she's in her bath robe...and just came out of the shower !! :P LMAO!!! but still..anything fr prem to kiss heer eh! and that gurl is right "picture perfect!" i hope prem finds out why heer had those marks on her skin..and he beats those guys up black nd blue! :D
as fr the "secret" does prem have some disease or some illness.....cuz i think wen meher and preet were talking..meher meant tht they're always worried over him and he seems to be all careless bout his health! w/e it is...the suspense is killing mee!!!!!!!!!!
and also..what song was this???
i gtg now..loveed the updatee!
loveee uuu
tc
Samra :) <3
P.S. sorry for replying soo late...been busy...lol...dunn wrry...i have all the tabs open with ur pms..im checking out each update right now :D

Aww Thanks my Didi 😳
Glad you liked itt 😳
Will update soon and keep you posted and replay any time you can 😉
Love Ayysha
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Posted: 15 years ago

Hii guys,😳

Thankyou so much for liking this FF. I am glad it isnt a flop So glad you all like the last part and promise will me make it that long in the future too.😊
Well for now here is the next part
Part 4
Prem looked away from Heer and walked downstairs, Heer smiled a bit while her cheeks turned red. Meher - "Heer tum tu .... OMG Beauty queen hoo yaar." she said hugging her, Prem stopped as Meher said that. He had a drink in his glass but didnt feel like drinking, his insides felt heavy enough alreadty. Preet came and stood beside Prem.


Both of the talked sitting on the stools. Meher - "Preet." she said pulling Heer by her hand and walking to them. Meher - "Preet look." she siad moving away from Heer. Preet's mouth fell open. Prem looked away ... for some reason he got this weird feeling which he always avoided.

PReet - "Heer yaar ... chalo Meher ko chodo tum mujh sey shaddi karo." he siad putting his arms arond her shoulder. Heer blushed looking down. Prem couldnt help but smile at the way she smile. Meher - "Prem whats wrong with you?" she said noticing the way he seemed lost looking no where. Prem - "Kuch nahi ..." Heer sat beside PReet as both of them talked. Preet - "PRem Heer ko company deeay mein abhi aya." He said moving away and leaving.

Prem and Heer sat beside eachother on the sofa. Heer noticed they matched and smiled. Prem - "So now you come all the way to my house to irrate me." Heer - "Cant you go without a moment without annoying me." Prem - "its become a habit." Heer - "A bad one." she said looking at him. Gaytari came and looked at Heer smiling. Gaytari - "Heer bohat payari lag rahi hoo." Heer got up but Gaytari sat her down. Gaytari dont worry sit ... mein abhi ayi."


Heer sat back down and as soon as she left a guy turned around smiling at Heer. Heer's mouth fell open in shock. Heer - "No way .... Erin." she said getting up and hugging him. Prem looked at Heer in a weird way as she hugged him. When Prem noticed the way the guy put his hand on her her bare wasit and walked away. PRem felt as if his heart was aching, so he got up leaving. Prem turned around from the stairs to look at Heer who was smiling and laughing with him. Gaytari noticed this from the corner and frowned.

Prem went upstairs to his room locking the door shut throwing his drink in the trash. Prem - "What the hell is happing to me?" he siad looking in the mirror in anger. Prem - "Shit." he said slamming his hand on the dresser. Prem - "Why did she even have to ... jahaan deko meray samnay aa jati hai ... Heer heer HEer." he siad in anger.


There was a slight knock on the door. Prem opened it and let down the anger when he saw Gaytari. Gaytari - "Prem tum yahaan kyun?" Prem - "Ma meray party mein janay ka dil nahi kar raha." Gaytari - "Prem PReet ki Mehndi hai ... tumhein hoo kya hai?" Prem - "Pata hota tu yahaan nahi hota?" Gaytari walked in as PRem sat on the bed.

Gaytari - "Prem kya hua?" she said running her hands threw his hair. Prem - "Pata nahi ma, jab pata chaly ghaa bata doon ghaa." he said getting up and leaving. Gaytari stood in his room while tears rolled down her cheeks.

Gaytari - "Meray betay koo kyun saray duk miltay hain." she said wiping her tears. Prem went down stairs to Preet, again he got angry when he saw Erin and Heer talking. His hand on her bare arm while she laughed.

Preet - "Whats up bro." Preet said looking at Prem all sad. Preet - "You okay na." he said worried. Preem smiled adn nodded.

The party started as everyone started to dance and Meher sat on the table getting her mehndi done. Heer sat beside watching Meher's mehndi. Preet and the guys planned to do the dance and singing, since Prem had the nicest voice he was forced to sing. Prem - "Preet mein kyun?" PReet - "Yaar tu acha sing karta hai .. ab chal." he said leaving with other people. Prem looked at Heer putting her hair behind her ear smiling at looking at the mehndi.

Erin was also Preet's close friend so he was forced to sing to, Heer was exicted to see her enemy and friend sing today.

Prem and Erin went in the middle there eyes on the same person but with different look and confusion.

A girl wearing a sari, showing her bare belly since the chunri was see threw and instead of a blouse she wore something much smaller exposing her body. She kept her eyes at Prem. She was also Meher's friend and was forced to sing.

Girl

Ya Ali Ali Ali Ali Ali..... - 3

Ya Ali Ali Ali Ali Ali..... - 3

Ya Ali Ali Ali Ali Ali..... - 3

She said singing in a deep voice moving around like she was a club dancer, Heer looked disgusted so looked away from her.

Teri Yaadon Ne Tanha Na Chhoda Kahin - 2
Main Tanhaayiyon Mein Bhi Tanha Nahin
Ya Ali Ali Ali Ali Ali..... - 3



Erin began first. Heer smiled at him singing looking at her.


Mere Ehsaas Mein Teri Chaahat Ka Aalam Mila Hai
Tutne Se Bhi Jo Toote Na Yeh Toh Woh Silsila Hai
Sang Tere Guzaare Lamhon Ka Nazaara

Prem sang looking away from Heer, but as soon as he started to sing Heer looked at him.


Nigaahon Mein Meri Rawaan Hai
Badi Shiddat Se Ki Hai Mohabbat Ye Maine
Meri Tanhaayiyon Mein Bayaan Hai



Erin sang pulling Heer into the dance floor. Heer tried to get away,but Erin didnt let her. As Erin pulled her in Prem moved back giving her space.

Ae Dil-e-jaan, Dil-e-jaan
Teri Yaadon Ne Tanha Na Chhoda Kahin
Main Tanhaayiyon Mein Bhi Tanha Nahin
Ya Ali Ali Ali Ali Ali..... - 3



Prem stopped and Erin kept singing dancing with Heer, Everyone cheered as Prem back away, but Preet pushed in back in.


Jaan-e-jaan Ye Mere Ishk Ke Dard Ki Intehaan Hai
Doori Mein Teri Nazdikiyon Ki Sisakti Sada Hai
Abb Mushkil Hai Jeena Tere Bin Kya Karoon
Abb Har Haal Mein Hai Tujhe Paana

Prem sang as Heer looked at him. Erin was dancing with Heer but she kept looking at Prem trying to see his emotions on his face.


Meri Betaabiyon Mein Teri Pyaas Hai Aisi
Namumkin Hai Tujhko Bhulaana
Ae Dil-e-jaan, Dil-e-jaan

Erin sang putting his hand on Heer's waist as she seemed lost in her and Prem's eye locking.


Teri Yaadon Ne Tanha Na Chhoda Kahin
Main Tanhaayiyon Mein Bhi Tanha Nahin

Prem looked away from her, as Heer did too smiling at Erin. Heer clapped as everyone follwed the beat.

Ya Ali Ali Ali Ali Ali..... - 3

Prem sang from behind her his face right behind her head. When Heer turned around.

Ya Ali Ali Ali Ali Ali..... - 3

The girl sang as her arms went up his arms and shoulder. Heer's smile dropped and hands stop clapping.

Prem looked at Heer as she seemed lost in his eyes. Erin inturpeted pulling her away. Prem gave her a smile as she tried to read his face with a sad smile on her face.

Gaytari noticed every thing during this dance ... Prem's reaction and Heer's.

Heer went back to Meher. Meher - "Heer tum bii mehndi lagyo." Heer nodded as the girl took her hand applying mehndi. Preet and Prem came by and sat beside Meher. Prem watched Heer as she looked down at her mehndi. Girl - "Kiska naam likna hai?" she siad to Meher. Preet - "Arey yaar jis sey shaadi uska." Meher smiled. Meher - "Preet." Preet and Meher were busy in there conversation.

Heer looked at Meher's hand and then her's, most of her mehndi was already dried since the girl did it thin and fast. Heer - "Yeh kya?" she said looking a weird pattern. Preet, Meher and Prem looked at Heer's hand. Girl - "Unka naam." she siad pointing towards Prem.

Prem looked at her shocked as Heer looked at the girl. Meher and Preet brust out laughing. Meher - "Iski shaadi nahi hoo rahi." she said laughing. Heer looked down getting a tissue to wipe it, but Meher caught her hand.

Meher - "Heer sari mehndi karab ho jayay ghee ... rahnay doo kuch nahi hota." she said taking the tissue. Prem - "Mera naam kisi kay haath pay bii likdo yaar ... mein sale pay nahi laga." he said as Preet laughed. Heer looked at sad. Prem looked back.

The rest few mintues that Heer got her mehndi done her eyes didnt leave Prem's. BOth of them totally unaware of their surrodings. Preet was laughing teasing Meher but stopped when he saw Prem and Heer lost some where, he nuddged Meher but as soon as he look Prem and Heer looked away from eachother.

Gaytari also noticed this and got worried of what was happing ... not because they didnt know Heer much but because of what Prem would feel when he found out what was happing to him. Heer was lost the whole mehndi time,
After the Mehndi she looked at her hand and saw Prem written on it she wanted to remove it but there no use because the color would already be there.

Preet asked everyone to come into the dance floor since they were going to sing all together. Prem's family came in the middle as Heer stood on the side. Preet - "Arrey chalo ... tum bii tu meri behnon kii taran hoo ... aj meri choti behan nahi hai tu tum aa jayo." Heer smiled as he pulled her in. Heer stood by Prem Meher and GAytari. Prem avoided her gaze as she did the same.

Erin had left and told Heer he would catch up later so Prem was feeling less angry.

Meher started standing by Heer.

Bole Chudiyan Bole Kangana
Haay Main Ho Gayi Teri Saajna

She said singing looking at Preet who was smiling. Prem smiled looking at Preet.


Tere Bin Jiyo Naiyyo Lagda Main Te Margaiyaan

Meher pulled Heer into the dance as PReet pulled Prem.


Lehja Lehja Dil Lehja Lehja Soniye Lehja Lehja
Lehja Lehja Dil Lehja Lehja Soniye Lehja Lehja

All of the girls dance to the boys on one side, Preet watching Meher, Prem watching Heer and the other guys watching who was looking hot *Oh come on not everyone has a perfect match LMFAO*

Prem sang pulling Meher towards in self.

Bole Chudiyan Bole Kangana
Haay Main Ho Gayi Teri Saajna

Preet sang pulling Heer towards him.


Bole Chudiyan Bole Kangana
Haay Main Ho Gayi Teri Saajna

Prem and Preet sang for Meher and Heer.


Tere Bin Jiyo Naiyyo Lagda Main Te Margaiyaan
Lehja Lehja Dil Lehja Lehja Soniye Lehja Lehja
Bole Chudiyan Bole Kangana
Haay Main Ho Gaya Tera Saajna
Tere Bin Jiyo Naiyyo Lagda Main Te Mar Jaava
Lehja Lehja Soniye Lehja Lehja Dil Lehja Lehja

Everyone sang in a group in the open space. Preet with Heer, Prem with Meher and other guys also paired up. Gaytari and Lalit also joined in.

Heer sang looking at no one, when she was forced by Meher and Preet.

Haay Haay Main Mar Jaava Mar Jaava Tere Bin
Ab To Meri Raatein Kati Taare Gin Gin

Prem turned around as the wind blew in his hair.


Bas Tujhko Pukara Kare Meri Bindiya Ishaara Kare
Lashkara Lashkara Teri Bindiya Ka Lashkara

She siad as Meher pulled her to dance. Prem looked at Heer who was staring back at him.


Aise Chamke Jaise Chamke Chand Ke Pass Sitaara
Meri Payal Bole Tujhe Jo Roothe Manaye Tuhje

Preet and Meher danced as Prem and Heer looked at each other awkward.

Gaytari joined in.


Oh Sajan Ji Haan Sajan Ji
Kuch Socho Kuch Samjho Meri Baat Ko

Meher sang for PReet, as Preet hugged her from the back.


Bole Chudiyan Bole Kangana
Haay Main Ho Gaya Tera Saajna
Tere Bin Jiyo Naiyyo Lagda Main Te Mar Jaava
Lehja Lehja Soniye Lehja Lehja Dil Lehja Lehja

GAytari and Meher sang for their husbands, Heer stood by Prem watching them with a smile on her face.


Apni Maang Suhaagan Ho Sang Hameshaa Sajan Ho
Aake Meri Duniya Mein Wapas Na Jaana

Meher sang for Preet.


Sehra Baand Ke Maahi Tu Mere Ghar Aana
Soni Kithi Soni Aaj Tu Lagdi Weh

Preet pulled in Heer and Meher Prem.

As they were singing the girls got switched around and Heer ended up Prem. His hands on her waist.


Bas Mera Saath Yeh Jodi Teri Sajdi Weh
Roop Aisa Suhana Tera Chand Bhi Deewaana Tera

Prem let go of Heer as soon as he finished his line, Heer looked away trying not to smile. Prem smiled a cute smile and walked away bumping his shoulder into her's on purpose. Preet smiled seeing this.


Ja Re Oh Ja Joothe Teri Gala Hum Na Mane
Kyon Taare Se Karta Hai Tu Humko Sab Kuch Jaane
Meri Dil Ki Dua Yeh Kahe Teri Jodi Salamat Rahe
Oh Sajan Ji Oh Sajanji Yunhi Bite Saara Jeevan Saath Mein

Gaytari, Heer and MEher sang for the boys and this time Heer looking at Prem, who was trying to not smile.


Bole Chudiyan Bole Kangana
Haay Main Ho Gaya Tera Saajna
Tere Bin Jiyo Naiyyo Lagda Main Te Mar Jaava
Lehja Lehja Soniye Lehja Lehja Dil Lehja Lehja
Lehja Lehja Soniye Lehja Lehja Dil Lehja Lehja

Preet pulled Meher as Lalit pulled Gaytari and Prem ended up pulling Heer.

Prem - "Taking pity on you." he siad pulling her. Heer smiled as Prem wispered that to her.


Aaja Hiriye Ja Ja Ranjhda
Aaja Hiriye Ja Ja Ranjhda
Lehja Lehja Soniye Lehja Lehja Dil Lehja Lehja
Lehja Lehja Soniye Lehja Lehja Dil Lehja Lehja

Suddenly Preet stopped along with Meher and Lalit, Everyone looked at Prem who was smiling, Heer moved away as Preet hugged Prem. A tear rolled down Preet eye, Meher also hugged him trying no to cry but still tears rolled down. Prem just smiled but Heer could tell that there was somthing wrong.

Lalit and Gaytari hugged Prem. Gaytari crying.

The whole family hugged Prem, in a family hug as the photo person took a picture.


Na Judaa Honge Hum
Kabhi Khushi Kabhie Ghum

Prem eyes met Heer's who looked confused.

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The party went and the food was now being serverd. Prem and Heer avoided each other after the dance. The party was a bit down after the end of dance, Heer wanted to ask why they were crying ... but she didnt since it was a family thing. Heer ate with Meher and Preet while Prem wasnt any where in sight.

Prem's Room

Gaytari - "Prem." she siad crying as he sat on the ground with his head in her lap and the door locked. Prem - "Ma pata nahi kya hoo raha hai .... jis ko meiney hamisha apnay sey door raka woh hii meray pass aa rahi hai." he said crying. Gaytari cressed his hair. Gaytari - "Prem ... tu itna darta kyun hai?" Prem got up and went to the window wiping his tears.
Prem - "Ma mein nahi chata mujhe pyaar hoo or mein kud sey darnay lag jayoon ... or ." Gaytari - "Or tu darta hai kay Heer bii tujh sey pyaar karnay lag parday." Prem turned around shocked. Prem - "Ma ..." Gaytari walked to him crying.

Gaytari - "Prem pata nahi tumhein kya karna chiye liken...." Prem - "Ma mein nahi chata kay Heer mujh sey pyaar karay ... pata nahi mujhe pyaar hoo raha hai ya kya liken mein ussey duk nahi dena chata ... uski smile deki hai ... itni pyari hai or mein nahi chata kay mein ussey woh cheeno." he said looking outside.

Prem - "Or wasay bii mujh sey hamisha argue karti hain mujhe nahi lagta woh mujh sey kabhi pyaar karay ghee." Gaytari - "Tu jab woh dance mein Meher ki friend tujhe haath laga rahi thee tu Heer ki muskaan or hasi kahaan gayi ... woh udass kyun hoo gayi." PRem turned around shocked.

Prem went downstairs, but as he was going to Preet he decided to grab a drink, as he grabbed it Heer grabbed it. Heer looked at Prem who was staring back at her.

Hulchal hui zara shor hua

Dil chor hua teri ore hua

Prem let go as it spilled on Heer. Prem walked away without knowing what he just did. Heer was about to say something but stopped when she saw coke all over her cloths. Guy - "Prem you just dropped you drink on her." he said as Prem was passing by. Prem turned around to look at Heer cleaning it with tissue. A girl came upto to her and took her upstairs.

Prem also went upstairs. He went to the guest room and saw Heer's chunri on her bed, her shoes on the ground. He was about to leave when Heer came out of the bathroom.

Prem stopped on his steps.

Kadmoon ko samblein nazroon ka kya karein

Nazroon ko samblein tu dil ka kya karein

Heer was only wearnig her blouse and the lehnga part, Her stomach and wasit were bare, as she turned around, she put her hair up wich exposed her back, that was only covered with knots of the blouse.

Guys on the other side stopped and watched Heer as she cleaned her chunri. Prem walked in and turned Heer around by placing his hand on heer bare wasit. Heer looked at him shocked. Prem grabbed her churni and put it around her like she had it before. Heer looked down as Prem's hand slid off her waist.

Prem - "Sab ek jasay nahi soochtay ... koi bura or koi acha ... yeh baath apany dimaag mein fix karlo." he said letting go of her and leaving the room closing the door. The guys from the back door also left after the way Prem looked at them.

Heer went downstairs after cleaning up. She didnt see Prem or Preet anywhere so went to Meher. Meher was just getting her mehndi jelled which looked nice. Meher also asked Heer to do it, but when she looked at her with Prem written on it she changed her mind, she didnt want Prem's name to be more clear.

NIGHT

Everyone had left from there house. Heer wanted to leave too but she was forced by Meher to have a sleep over. Prem was already in his room by the window.

Prem stood in the window sad, while tears rolled down his cheek.

Aafreen tera chehra

Aafreen teri ankein

Aafreen tera manzar

Aafreen teri baatien.

Prem remebered Heer every second.

Heer stood in her window looking at moon, what happened today wasnt something she would forget.

Meri yadoon mein meri kawboon mein rooz atay hoo tum

Premeer stand looking at the moon ... what was wrong ... what was missing?

Kasa yeh pyaar hai

Jo mujhe na samaj aya

Kasa yeh rishta hai

jo meiney na paya

Prem wiped his tears closing his curtain and going into his room.

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Okay Guys thats all

I want LOONG comments ... least you can do yaar ... my hands hurt LMFAO.

Okay so please do press like button and comment ... looking towards your thoughts. Hope you liked it.

Love Harsha

Edited by xoHarshaxo - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
loved it thanks for the pm
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Posted: 15 years ago
great

wonder wat is wrong with prem



thanx 4 the pm



update soon



Kamal

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