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thanks guys..i am really fast this time!!😊
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Hey..i am updating so soon..actually was not feeling that well..so was on bed most of he day..and had no other job..so wrote the next part.. I am adapting a new style of writing here..hope yuh all like it…
With love…sandy..


PART – 4

Heer checked the main door once again and made sure it was locked properly. And then after a bath she joined chahat to watch tv. Chahat fell asleep soon. Heer smiled at her baby sleeping like an angel on her bed. Chaht slept with heer in her room when Prem was away. She tucked her in and gave her a goodnight kiss.

At five chahat was already a big girl, and quite mature too. But still she was her baby and heer new it will always be the same. She checked the phone and saw Prem had left some goodnight messages. Heer thought about Prem and that reminded her about his old book.

Heer walked upto her desk and took the book from it. 'may be by reading this I would feel him close..' she felt. She went and sat on the bed.

'should I read this?? Isn't it bad?' heer felt a li'l bad in reading the book. 'but… whats the problem.. its Prems..' she smiled at the thought. Prem and she were not two different people. So what was wrong in reading his book!

She switched off the main light and now there was only the table lamp light in the room. Heer adjusted the pillow and started going through the book.

The first few pages were about Prems high school years. Nothing much was written in those scripts. But certain pages brought tears to heers eyes. There were many instances written when he missed his family. During annual days, sports meets, parent teacher meetings etc where he was the only kid who had no mother or father accompanying him.

Heer continued reading. She didn't feel like stopping. Now she was reading about his college life. There was so much written about his college life. How he had missed his uncle when he first joined college and went to live in hostel, how he got accustomed to the hostel, met his two roomies cum best friends , shiv and kunal.

Heer enjoyed reading the naughty side of Prem in his college days. She was surprised to see that he was not the same calm, sweet Prem, instead he was a naughty guy, who was a back bencher, who loved irritating the teachers and was always in their hit list in the first year itself!

Heer wondered why he never told her anything about his college years. Infact she knew very little about his life before marriage. just that he was brought up by his uncle who had died even before their marriage.

Heer read about the many proposals that prem had got in his first year from his fellow batch mates. 'why cant they leave me alone!!' this was what he had written in that.

And it was after a few pages she came across that particular page. It was written in golden ink and unlike other pages it was written a whole page, and neatly.


15 September 2000


Today was the party for juniors. The hall was full of first year boys and girls in colourful dresses enjoying their party.. and seniors making sure that party was going well... All the boys were dressed in suits, different brands, different colours.. but all looked the same for me!.. and girls were in gowns..

There was a smile on each face. Some where seen chatting away in crowds.. a few were dancing to the slow music in the background.. the teaching staff had already left the party .. thank god for that..

I missed shiv and kunal very much. Shiv had gone home to Calcutta and kunal was accompanying him, and would be back only tomorrow!

I sat in a corner with a drink in my hands away from the mess around. Everyone was looking at me.. may be because I dressed a little formal that day, in a black shirt and an off white trousers. Had that Prof. Sharma not warned me about dress code I would have come in my usual pair of jeans and tees.

My eyes were searching for some one from our class who was not with his better half or not wooing any junior.. and that was when I saw her, standing near the orchestra, watching the musicians. She was a striking beauty, fair and slim. One who matched the beauty described by the authors in certain romantic books that I had read long back in his school years. She had fine black luxuriant hair that was let loose and was wearing an ivory coloured dress, may be made of silk.

The music changed and there was an announcement for more people to start dancing. There was an urge in me to go ask her for a dance. But I didn't want to spoil my image dancing badly in front of her. I saw that she was also not asked by anyone for a dance. In a way it made me happy. I didn't want her in some other mans arms!!

But my smile didn't last long. I saw a tall guy approaching her, and from the expressions I understood he was asking her for dance, may be her batch mate.

A moment later the girl was in that guys hands, and it was magic. She was smiling up at him with her blue eyes sparkling. They were exchanging some talks in between. Dunno why, but my blood boiled as I saw this. She was enjoying and I didn't like it to one bit.

And it was then I saw that. The guy was trying to play smart. I saw him trying to hold her close and she was not very happy at this. I didn't know what got into me. I couldn't stop myself. In matter of seconds I was near them and my hands were on that guy. I hit the guy left and right with whatever things I saw.

Everyone were now gathered in a circle around us. The guy was trying to stop me. but I was so lost in anger that there was no stopping me. And then I saw a crystal vase and took them. I was about to hit the guy with that when a cry stopped me.

"please…" I heard her pleading for him. I didn't know what to do. I was surprised. She was trying to stop me from hitting him.

"Please..stop it please.." her voice had the power to stop me. I was confused. The grip on the crystal vase loosened and it broke into a million pieces.By then she had dragged him away from me. I saw her touching the fresh wounds on his face which I had just caused him. I saw all the eyes looking accusingly at me, for having hit a guy for no cause. And I felt bad, not because all thought me wrong, but because I saw a fear in her eyes for me!!!

Heer turned the pages. She saw that all the pages from that page onwards were different from the rest. They were long ones. She stopped reading for a moment. After a moment she resumed reading.

16 september 2000

Shiv and kunal were firing me from the canteen today. They were filled in all the details about the mess I made at the party by gauri. I know.. all these girls are like that.. why do they have to go tell about everything to their boy friends.. girls minds..thats one thing I guess I will never understand..

I had to finally open up my mind before the two of them. And the look on their face when I said that was priceless. They couldn't believe that me, Prem Juneja also can fall for some girl..!!

21 september 2000

And I got the answer for the question that was in my mind today. "her name".
I saw her in canteen with that guy again. shiv and kunal also were blown away by her beauty. And it was funny to see gauri glaring at him for looking at her.

I wanted to apologise to that guy, for her. But for the first time I was not able to follow my mind. Dunno why, but I couldn't move an inch towards her.
She was in a simple cotton salwar, had applied no make-up except the kohl applied on her eyes, the eyes which clearly showed off the fear she was having inside.

She came upto our table on seeing us. she was smiling but I could clearly notice the fear that she was having. I was not knowing why she was coming. But was feeling so good when she was coming towards me and giving me that smile.

She had come to apologise to me. She made the other guy say sorry too. May be they knew from others about me.. how bad it was to have a fight with Prem Juneja!! And another miracle also happened. I said sorry to that guy..!

And when she was about to go I finally had that guts to ask her the name.
"shreya" .. that is her name.. and that was the only word that lasted in my thoughts after that till now..!!!

28 november 2000

By now I had come to know that the guy seen with her always, who I had beaten up that day was just her friend. I had to treat shiv and kunal today from ccd for that piece of information.. those two never misses a chance to get a treat from me..!!

The guys name was said to be Preet… and was said to be her best friend.. and supposedly having a crush on her… oh god.. why does he have to have a crush on the same girl..!!

And they had given another shocking news too..that she was the only sister of Nihaal Mehta Industries.. Owner of Mehta group of companies.. had seen him in the newspapers just two days back..one of the richest Indians abroad..

Shiv and kunal were asking me not to proceed with this.. they think she might not be as simple and sweet as we see.. but I know.. she has got a more beautiful heart..i have read her eyes.. and I am in love with her..
that.


A few pages after that was all about the incidents where he had met her on corridors, in canteens, at play grounds.. everywhere.. how he made situations so that he could meet up with her.. how he saw her everywhere. And how he hated seeing Preet with her..!

A few more pages..went that way..

18 october 2000


There was a painting competition organised in the college today. That shiv and kunal had put my name on the list. And my painting got selected for the exhibition for next week.


That was news for heer. She never saw Prem painting. In all these six years he had never shown a liking for art and it turned out to be he was too good at that!!.

23 october 2000

I never thought todays exhibition would turn out to be the happiest day in my life.
She had come to the exhibition that was held in the college auditorium today where the paintings selected were exhibited.

And I am happy now that kunal was forcing me to stay there at exhibition. If I had gone with shiv to watch that movie what a miss it wold have been.

She had come to the exhibition..and that too alone.. that Preet was not with her.. thank you God.. I hope every day was like today..and he stayed away from her for ever!!

"I don't believe it.. your painting..its just wonderful.. why did you ever join engineering when you have such great talent in this.." She had said seeing my painting.

The expression on her face once those words came from her mouth was priceless.. she was probably shocked.. I knew that today was the day and if I didn't open up today I would never be able to again.. it was time we became friends atleast..

I talked to her after that.. made sure she had said nothing wrong.. and later we introduced each other again.. and made sure that next time she wont have those fear in her kohl layered eyes when she sees me or talks to me!


The next few pages were about how their friendship grew.. how he felt that she also in some way had some feeling for him.. how shiv and kunal were forcing him to open up his mind to her..

26 February 2001

Tomorrow is her birthday.. and I think its high time I say about my feelings for her.. i dunno..i hope everything goes alright tomorrow!


Heer closed the book.. she didn't have that strength in her to read anymore.. there were tears in her eyes.. She had never imagined Prem had so much of stuff hidden away from her.. she just got the biggest shock of her life.. but what she didn't know was compared to what was yet to come all this was nothing..!!!

Kyoon aisi umeed ki maine
Jo aise naakaam hui
Door banaayi thi manzil
To raste mein hi shaam hui
Ab kahan jaaoon main, kisko samjhaaoon main
Kya maine chaaha tha aur kyoon kismat mein aayi
Dil ke raaste mein kaisi thokar maine khaayi
Toote khwaab saare, ek maayusi hai chhaayi
Har khushi so gayi, zindagi kho gayi
Tumko jo pyaar kiya maine to sazaa main paayi
Tanhaai, tanhaai, jaise andhero ki ho gehraayi!!!!!!!!!!!!

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I hope you all liked it..please press the like button..and leave yr comments n suggestions..n criticisms..


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Posted: 15 years ago
#83
awesomeeeeeee too good very nice part waitingggggggg for next asap.
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Posted: 15 years ago
#84
oh my god
thanks for the pm if you hadn't sent it I would not have come across this
thanks sandy nice updatre
can't wait for the rest
do pm me next time please
what will prem do now?
update sooner than soon
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Posted: 15 years ago
#85
another awesome update............ really wana know what this secret it.......
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Posted: 15 years ago
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hayee look who is here.
thanks for the quick update anyz. and sorry for being late for editing my comment.
Coming back to the story i love this update too. thank god u didnt drag the story inside the diary for so long coz some times it could be boring, But its not over here, coz for me dialogues is the most important part of the story . I meant was i dont like to imagine things when the writer describe it coz her/his and our point of views could be different regarding the scenario. But dialogues always give the idea perfectly..so for me dialogue made the story interesting and readable😳
I hope i have justified my point of view regarding the diary part. It was well written😃

Heer is a well mannered lady isnt she?😉😆 She thought whether to read some one's diary or not but it was prem's she read it coz we all know that PH are one atleast in our ffs not talking about the serial these days😆
Kinda glad to know that prem was a playboy/ naughty during college days 😉😳

I wondered before even reading the update that what will be the name for the previous lover of prem ??coz u had a time to find a proper name and till last moment u couldnt find it 😆 I realy didnt think of the name shreya, but it realy suits lol😉😆

ohhhhhhh is he gonna propose?? Cool scene😆😆
I wonder what she will say ya?
But i can think of heer's feelings now. She must be devestated to think that prem has this kinda past and hope she will be able to handle and doesnt think that prem has purposely didnt tell her😕😳
Waiting for the next update.
Hope prem returns soon and proceed with PH romance and chahat scenes😃
Nice update over all.
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Edited by nuptalie - 15 years ago
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Posted: 15 years ago
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great



thanx 4 the pm



update soon



Kamal
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Posted: 15 years ago
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hey awesome ss just read all the 4 parts ion one go thanks for pm
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Posted: 15 years ago
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awesome loved it if you wouldn't have pm me by mistake i would have never known such a good ss loved it continue asap thanks for the pm me
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Posted: 15 years ago
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awesomeeeeeee too good very nice part waitingggggggg for next asap.

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