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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: kimmu

Lala. I shall update this later. After my fast breaks and I have loads of energy... hopefully. :D You don't have to even comment! 😛 You already did in the pms! 😊

*edited*

I'm not writing my comment yet. But all I have to say it.. there could be a sequelll!! I mean, Meera didn't exactly diee... she could've just fainted!! I demand a sequel. lmao....your demand is my command (get it? 😛 If you didn't it's okay...I'm kinda high at the moment 😊)



Originally posted by: cute_bear

that was so tragic loved it

i like happy oneshots
but when i read the starting of this i just had to read all of it
but i just scannd the last sad bit
and imagined u and prem happy



Thanks Sonia! 😊 I'm glad you imagine 'us' happy! 😊 The sequel is coming up 😊

Originally posted by: nikitaic

OMG!! I cant stop the tears!! I was crying like an idiot!! That was just beautiful Meera!! I usually hate tragic endings..But I loved this one!!!! Awww you didn't have to cry! *hugs* I'm glad you loved it though! 😳

Uff!! Main mar jawaan...Just beautiful!!! Thanks! 😃

Loved it!!!!!!
Ahh!!! I have to read it again!!! You'll like the sequel! 😉

*Brushes tears away*

UPDATE Kuch is tarah!!!
UHHH!!! Working on it for tonight! 😃

Nikita...<3



Originally posted by: sweetness4eva

You know what? I so have to agree with you now when you say tragedy comes out superb when you make it a "Prem and Meera oneshot"! Honestly, this was once again awesome! and I know, you know all this, and I have said it before! So all I m gonna say is,Fabulous!!!! I loved it!!


Mahrukh



Thank you SOOO much Mahrukh! 😃 Told you! 😉 They're more fun to make it tragic! 😳 But thanks for liking it! 😃

Originally posted by: Dark Love

PreMe are love. They are aren't they? 😍 (Yeah I've decided to screw modesty! 😉)

I'm gonna reread and come back :) yay!😃

*back*

I would give a extra long comment, if I had the words? It's okay! 😃

This one got to me when I read it the first time. Awww *hugs* the first line wasn't so great! *shakes head*

It was just so, so sad. 😒 Really? 😳

Why, oh why did she have to die? 😒 She apparently only fainted *rolls eyes*

It was all written so beautifully...the impatience...texting...talking...their love. *sigh* Awwww thanks! *hugs*

This was another one of those tragedies that just create this tightening in the chest.... Sorry! 😳 Do I cause high BP? 😲



@Shabzie: I already kinda replied to your crazy notion about how they deserve a nobel peace prize! *rolls eyes*

@Shaz: Thanks so much! *hugs* I'm glad you liked it! 😃

Originally posted by: noneeM

My Spot Meeriye! N! *hugs*

Oh! Dear! The bad guy sounds like me.....just with an "O" Eee no! 😔

But it's my fav couple, so I'll focus on that instead*winks* Okay! 😳 God knows why, but I won't argue! 😃

Edits:

Goodness Meeriye!!!!! That was so tragic.....the very suddenness of the incident made it even more difficult to absorb. Tragedy crept upon them when they least expected it. Utterly heartbreaking. The part where he is selecting a DVD for them to watch and she is getting drawn into a concatenation of circumstances she won't be able to emerge unscathed from....*blinks back tears* Awww *hugs* Sorry, but I kept adding hints in everywhere that Kimz really liked! 😃 As for the dvd part and everything...yeah it was kinda sad na? 😔

Beautifully portrayed Meeriye! I loved it. *BBB Hugs* Thanks N! *hugs*

Love:-Nonee

P.S. PreMe rockkkk!!!! *sighs* yes yes...they do..




Love:-Nonee



Originally posted by: Anhdara13

I thought you weren't going to post this? But I'm glad you did. It's so - haunting, that last bit especially. It makes it all the more tragic that her death was sudden, and unexpected. I mean, everything is hunky-dory, then bam! They're the victim of a random shooting.

So realistic, and chilling.

Love,
Radz



I wasn't! 😔 I got bullied! 😆 But I'm glad you liked it...but apparently the realism is shot out the window with the addition of the sequel! 😛

Originally posted by: NehAditya8791

like all BT heroines, the meera in this story cannot die... she has to be alive... or, she can stll die, but come back to life... hehehe

i demand a sequel, meerrrraaaaaaaa...
oh... and once again... fantastic os as usuall...



Thanks Neha! 😳 She will NOT come back to life....that is too...BT for me!😳 A sequel is on it's way..😳 Thanks Neha!

Originally posted by: vrinda16

Hai Meera!!

Remember??
Just read this OS & I'm just lost for words......beautifully written.....but why do u do this to urself?I mean....u write tragic oneshots with urself as the lead & making urself suffer in the tragedy.......No.......PreMe should be happy...........Don't torture urself like this in tragic one-shots......Reading it makes me feel all sad........how do u manage to write this putting urself up in the scene?
Love
Vrinda



Thanks Vrinda! 😃 Course I remember you! *hugs* Hmmm....it makes me have a weird sense of peace...and PreMe can't be happy since they're not real! 😉 But I'm sorry! *hugs* Oh it's really not that hard, I don't advise you to do it though! 😃 Shaadi ke liye you need to be all happy! 😃

Originally posted by: muqualp

OMG!
LOVED it! okay now whenever i hear that song this story is gonna come in my mind...gosh meera i dont like seeing u die [:p]

i am eagerly waiting for the next part!!! 😃



Sorry Muqs! *hugs* It'll be up soon! 😃
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Posted: 16 years ago
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"Mr. Juneja!" He heard Sophie calling him but he couldn't careless right now. He had just lost the most important person in his life and couldn't think about anything else.


He let his head down slowly on her stomach and suddenly felt her stomach moving but her eyes were still closed. Prem jumped up. "Sophie, get her in the ambulance now. She's still breathing! I'll be there in a few seconds, I have something I need to take care of," His eyes flashed with anger and hatred.


"No Prem, don't waste your time." Sophie said quickly. "The police are on their way."


Prem didn't pay any attention to her as he advanced towards the area where security was holding Antonio.


"Sir, we understand that you're under stress but we advise you against this." The head of security stepped forward.


"Right now Mark, it doesn't matter to me." Prem pushed Mark slowly out of the way before locking eyes on Antonio.


Mark gestured quietly to the security, and they let go of Antonio even though his hands were still tied. "Five minutes sir, the police are on their way."


Prem cracked his knuckles and nodded. "Thanks Mark."


Without say anything another word Prem's right fist collided with Antonio's cheek and Prem flexed again before punching him in the stomach.


The glint in Antonio's eyes and the smirk on his face was enough to send Prem into a rage and he kneed Antonio in the stomach and watched as Antonio lurched over in pain.


Wind came through the open doors and ruffled Prem's hair and his hand stopped in mid air. Meera. She had made him promise not to get upset with anyone and here he was breaking his promise just minutes later.


"Don't be upset with anyone okay?" She sighed. "It was just a coincidence that it happened to me. Don't be mad please?"


He flexed and un-flexed his fist and smiled at Mark who nodded. "Thanks Mark."


"We haven't seen a thing sir," Mark smiled.


Prem hurried to the ambulance, and quickly stepped in before they shut the doors.


"What is your relation to the injured?" A paramedic asked, making notes on a clipboard while another quickly fastened an oxygen mask on Meera.


"She's—she's my fiancee."


The paramedic nodded sympathetically before turning to her co-worker, leaving Prem to his sorrows.


He tried hard not to glance at her bandaged stomach where the redness was continuously growing. She was bleeding furiously fast and it scared him.


"Can you do something about the blood she's losing?" He asked.


The paramedic shook her head. "We've alerted them at Holy Cross Hospital, but right now there's nothing we can do."


Prem took Meera's hand in his and kept rubbing it, hoping she'd gain consciousness, or at least feel his presence but her eyes stayed closed even when they arrived at the hospital.


~*~*~*~*~*~


It had been four hours since she had been taken into surgery and he was told to wait outside with the rest of the patients' families but he couldn't handle sitting down. He'd pace from one side of the long rectangle room to the other and even gazes from little children were making him edgy.


"Sharma's family?" A nurse stepped into the enclosed room and called out making Prem jump up.


"That's me."


"Follow me," She gestured to him as she led him down a long hallway.


Prem was passing patients in the hallway who were laid out on stretchers and his heart ached. Would she be like his now? Not able to recognize the people with her? Surely a bullet to the stomach wouldn't harm her seriously would it?


"Nurse, can you tell me how she's doing?" Prem rushed up to her and asked.


"She's still unconscious because of the anesthetic, but we got the bullet now. She's in intensive care right now, but we can't guarantee anything." She told him. Prem nodded when the nurse gestured to a door. "She's in here."


Prem slowly opened the door and saw her hooked up to about 4 different machines and the beeping noise filled the air. He stepped inside and his heart lurched seeing her look so unusually pale.


He sat down softly on her bed and took her hand in his unable to believe the circumstances they had both just been through.


A doctor stepped into the room and seeing Meera sleeping he gestured for Prem to join him outside. Prem jumped up instantly and followed the doctor outside.


"What's going on doctor? She'll be okay right?" Prem asked frantically.


The doctor smiled. "You're her—" he flipped through his papers and smiled. "fiance right?" Prem nodded. "Don't worry young man. She'll be okay. We'll keep her here for two days just to make sure the wound is cleaned up properly but after that she'll have to be in constant care. Is that possible?"


Prem nodded. "I'll move in with her or have her with me."


"Good. The constant care is required." The doctor smiled. "It'll be hard Mr. Juneja for her to emotionally get past this accident. Not many people are able to."


"I'll do my best to help."


The doctor smiled. "I'll let you be with her. I'll be in tomorrow morning to check again."


Prem nodded before going back into the room.


He saw her eyes flutter open and his heart raced. "Meera?"


"P—Prem?" Her voice cracked and she struggled to sit up until he pushed her shoulders down.


"Don't get up." He told her. "You just got out of surgery a little while ago."


Meera let out tiny smile. "I lived."


"Stop it." Prem frowned. "But yes. You did."


"I'm okay. Stop getting so worried." Meera yawned. "What happened exactly?"


"Sophie called me while you were in surgery," Prem sighed. "The a**hole who grabbed you fired a shot and the gun was aimed at your stomach," Meera cringed. "We'll talk about it later."


"Prem," Meera sighed. "I'm fine. I'm not in any pain. It just sounds kinda gruesome."


"You've always wanted to enact filmy scenes right?" Prem teased.


Even in her pain Meera narrowed her eyes at Prem. "Yes Prem, but that doesn't include things like this."


"Then what does it include?" He sat down on her bed.


"Choro," Meera sighed and turned to face the window. "You can go, I'll be fine."


"Meera," He sighed before inching closer to her. Slowly he smoothed down her hair and she looked up at him.


"What?" she whispered.


"Don't be so upset. Main to sirf mazaak kar raha tha,"


"Pata hain. But—sometimes I feel like if you have to ask me something, it's not right. You should know me that well to know what I'd like."


"You think I don't know you well enough?" Prem smiled. "You think I don't know that you always have wanted to walk around in a white salwar suit through a mustard field waiting for a 'Raj'? Or whenever you're looking out the window at the skyline, you're thinking about your dreams? Or how whenever it rains you walk out just waiting for that special person to come and dance with you?"


"The special person's you, you idiot," Meera smiled softly. "And if you knew all this, why haven't you joined me when I'm standing out in the rain or if I'm looking out like that, why haven't you come and hugged me to make me realize my dream was right there with me?"


Prem shrugged. "I figured you might want to have all those dreams special just for yourself."


"There's nothing JUST for me now," She sighed. "It's us. Us together."


"Well if we want to be together forever, we need to get connected again right?" Prem said, reaching into his pocket.


"What do you mean?" Meera asked in a confused tone.


Prem smiled before showing her the ring she gave him before. "Your ring? It's never going to be anyone else's; you are the only person it'll ever belong to." Meera smiled as Prem took her left hand in his and slipped on her ring "There. Where it belongs."


Meera sighed and pulled Prem's hand closer to her and placed it against her cheek. "I love you. And thank you for being here with me."


"There's no other place I'd rather be," Prem told her.


After a little while Preet walked in with Shabo, startling the couple who were content in looking at each other; but when they parted they both knew that this whole ordeal was just a test of what things they'd have to face in their upcoming life.


"Kya baat hain PB? Haathon mein haath huh?" Preet winked as he set down two vases of blooming flowers beside Meera.


"Thanks Preet." Meera grinned before turning her attention to the other girls who crowded her.


"Preet tu chup re," Prem glared at him before turning his attention back to Meera who was smiling widely.


"Kya hua PB? Sense of humour gone?" Preet raises his eyebrows.


"Preet," Prem takes Preet away to the side of Meera's room which catches her attention. "It's been hard okay? I just—it's hard to believe she's still here after everything."


"Don't worry PB. Meera's strong enough to handle anything." Preet reassured him.


"Meera?" Prem frowned. "Why don't you call her what you should call her?"


Preet frowned back. "What should I call her?"


"Don't listen to him!" Meera interrupted. "It doesn't matter what he says,"


"Meera," Prem walked up to the bed and smiled. "It's the right word."


"It doesn't matter," Meera shook her head. "Makes me feel old."


"What are you guys talking about?" Shabo groaned. "It's like a puzzle where we can't find out anything."


Preet grinned before swinging his arm around Shabz. "PB wants me to call Meera, bhabhi. Meera, doesn't want to be called bhabhi. Happy?"


"Much." Shabo grinned. "Aww Meera, it's cute."


"It's old!" Meera whined.


"Oh okay. Want me to modernize it?" Preet winked at Meera who gave him a curious look. "What do you think about 'bhabs!" Preet burst out laughing. "It's brilliant! Don't you think PB? Meera bhabs?"


Meera narrowed her eyes at Preet. "I'm going to kill you. Maybe not now...but when I can stand again you watch out!"


Prem went to Meera and put his arm around her. "Calm down."


Meera glared at him as well. "You—are his brother; you should go kill him for me!"


Prem frowned and then smiled grinning at Preet. "You could have told me before Meera. I'll be glad to do it,"


"PB?" Preet's mouth dropped open. "You'll take her side over mine?"


"No...I?" Prem frowned knowing he was stuck. No matter what he'd say, he'd make one of them mad. He caught Shabo's eyes and she nodded before winking at Prem.


"PREET!!!"


"What?" Preet frowned as he turned to face her, alarmed by the sudden outburst.


"I think....no I know! Gulab Jamuns! I smell them!" Shabo grinned as she sniffed the air.


"Shabz this is an American hospital, why would there be gulab jamuns?" Preet groaned.


"I don't know!" she frowned. "Let's find them before someone else does!"


"Oh jesus," He muttered before she dragged him out of the room letting Prem and Meera laugh over what just happened.


"He is so whipped," Prem commented.


"I know," Meera sighed. "Why couldn't you be more like him?"


"Because you," He leaned in to her forehead. "Love me just the way I am,"


"So true," Meera smiled back as he gave her a cheeky grin.


The entire end was all Maddz, she just didn't physically write it! 😛 But from the whole Prem being in the middle with Meera and Preet, it was all her! 😃 Thanks Maddz! *hugs* Love you! 😃 Hope you guys enjoyed the fact that you turned my oh so tragic one shot into fluff! *narrows eyes*


Meera😳

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Posted: 16 years ago
#23
Loved it Meeriye*BBB hugs*

Can't type much. Check my PM!!!!

Oh! I LOVED it!!!!

Love:-Nonee
Edited by noneeM - 16 years ago
Posted: 16 years ago
#24
Was going to comment after Iftar but if I went downstairs, my sister would have attacked me. :)

This was awesome - and I'm SO so glad you wrote a sequel - it was begging for one. Prem's concern through out it was so sweet, like gulab jamun, 😉

And than Meera - the total dream girl. :) I loved how Prem was kinda teasing her, and Madz wrote me in didn't she? *narrows eyes* *shrugs* I love my cameos. 😆 and do you think I'm ever going to let you forget "babs" 🤣

Gulab Jamun to the rescue. Prem owes me. :)

WHIPPED! *wipes tears of laughter* I totally love Chandler. :)

Didn't mean to write this much *bites lip* I talk to much. :) Awesoem shot Meera! Er - Babs. :)

--shabz
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Voila.....was just having a random check through IF's recent pages & there lies.......Chup Chup...Tragic OS Sequel...............
I was like finally ....Meera's turning it into a happy one.......but then why didn't she change Tragic from the title???
Meera......LuYu...& Thank u & I'm sure u know why........Hope u got my PM.........
I prefer this mushy ending than the previous one..........I just love this mushiness....Is there a word like that??mushiness??Well, U got what I meant right???
Love,
Vrinda
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Posted: 16 years ago
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I love this shot!..of all the shots..this is definitely my favorite one!
your writing is amazing!..especially in tragic one shots!..the emotions, the reactions, everything..the way you write them is aweesome!!👏
I loved the tragic ending!!..it kinda reminded me of "Love Story" by Erich Segal(have you heard of that book?). I mean the events weren't the same but the way Meera stayed strong till the end was the same. I don't know why...it just reminded me of the book.
I really like the fluffy ending too!! but I like the tragic one better(don't mind me.. I'm a fan of tragic endings) it's really sweet to see how the male protagonist cares for his dying lover and promises to never love anyone except her! it makes me cry everytime though😭! wow..i sound like some analyzer of some sort.😆
write more shots!! tragic or fluffy...they're all amazingly aweesome!
P.S. I love the gulab jamun part! 😆
love,
nitya
Edited by nityatarlapally - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#27
Thanks guys! 😊 I'll comment back tom 😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Ahh, you should have left it tragic.

Though PreetShabo are hilarious!

And yes, PreMe are love, but I was in the mood for tragedy. Heh. *hug* I still loved it though, it was cute.

Love,
Radz

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Posted: 16 years ago
#29
I know what you mean Radz, I liked the tragic one more too 😛
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Okay...Reserved..

I need to get a box of tissues...These One SHots should come with a CAUTION sign... "YOU NEES TISSUES!!"

Anyway... I cant believe it was soo cute!!

U call this FLUFF?Well I love Fluff!!

The first part was just amazing..and the sequel was to die for!!

When the part came with "Running in the fields screaming raj, dancing in the rain..etc.."

Thats when I water works came!!

Im soo sappy!! Its not even funnY!!

and filmy!!
Lmao..

Bhabs!! Yup...Preet winds modernization award..

and when Gulab Jamun!! LOL

I loved it when Meera said.. I lived!!

And Marc...I didnt see anything...Oh good.. I was cracking up..

I know..Im a loser..lol

I loved it!!

You could sooo go for a third part.. make it a trilogy!!!

DO IT DO IT DO IT!!! Hehehe

~Okay...Enough said..

That was brilliant!! My Favorite One Shot EVER!!!

and WHERE IS THE KUCH ISS TARAH UPDATE???

Love..

nikita.. <3

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