|| Kabhi Alvida Naa Kehna || Premeer One Shot

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Some of you will want to kill me for saying this, but this really is a pointless one shot...nothing happens, and personally might be one of the worst ones yet...I had some more angst built up and mind you this is before going to watch the movie "New York" which made me cry...but that's a whole other story! 😳 Enjoy this one shot, and I adapted their separating scene with the title track of KANK so have a watch! 😊

[YOUTUBE]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m-bRskFlfQg[/YOUTUBE]
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=m-bRskFlfQg


She was leaving and there was nothing he could do or say to stop her. Why was their love so powerful that she'd say something and immediately his heart would abide.


Tum Ko Bhi Hai Khabar
Mujhko Bhi Hai Pata


He stopped himself from thinking that. Their love WASN'T powerful enough. If it was he wouldn't have ever doubted her and nothing this extreme would have over occurred between them. She was his Heer yet now—she was going off by herself. Away from him.


Ho Raha Hai Judaa
Dono Ka Raasta
Dur Jaake Bhi Mujhse Tum Meri Yaadon Main Rehna


He'd never forget her. She was the love of his life; he was destined to be with her and time would heal all wounds as they say. He was confident in himself that he was not the type to give in for a moment of weakness; there was something wrong in this whole scenario and he'd be the one to figure it out.


Kabhi Alvida Na Kehna
Kabhi Alvida Na Kehna


He watched silently, holding the payal in his hand as the train faded out of sight—taking the one person he loved the most away from him.


Jitni Thi Khushiyaa
Sab Kho Chuki Hai


He trudged home in the darkness not knowing what awaited him there now. Did he still have a home or was that all taken away from him as well. He walked into the main hall to see Gayatri weeping in the corner while Ash was sitting with her and the rest of the family on the opposite side.


"Prem," A small whisper escaped Lalit's mouth as he saw Prem walk into the house.


"Bauji—main rehne nahi aaya hoon. Main aapna...samaan lene aaya hoon." Prem said softly the words hurting him inside.


"Nahin Prem. Tum iss ghar ke Ram ho, tumhe hum nahin jaane denge," Lalit said back.


Prem looked up immediately. What was going on? Bauji was the one who had taken that title away from him—now what changed?


Prem heard everything silently that Kulraaj di had overheard Gayatri and Ashlesha talking about how they had schemed to separate Prem and Heer but now he didn't even care anymore. Even if matters changed the only thing he cared about was her. But she was gone.


Bas Ek Gham Hai Ki Jaata Nahi
Samjha Ke Dekha Behla Ke Dekha
Dil Hai Ki Chain Isko Aata Nahi


He made his way up to their room and just stood there watching the moon through the window knowing that at the exact moment she was sitting somewhere on that train by a window remembering him by looking at that moon.


Rut Aa Rahi Hai Rut Jaa Rahi Hai
Dard Ka Mausam Badla Nahi


Three months had passed since Heer had left but nothing changed. He still got up in the morning and went about his daily routine, always hoping that one day he'd open the door and see her standing there waiting to be taken into his arms. That day never came.


Kabhi Alvida Na Kehna
Kabhi Alvida Na Kehna


Another 6 months had passed and he was engulfed in the silence that he'd now find welcoming in their room, it gave him the feeling that she was somewhere thinking about him as well. He could only hope that one day this thinking became real and that she was near him.


Every night he'd go to bed pretending that his pillow was actually her comforting lap and she was soothing his tears with her soft hand running on his cheeks.
There never came a day where it dawned on him to go out and look for her and that was when he realized what the true fact in this whole 'charade' was. He never deserved her. He, Prem Juneja, never deserved the love and respect he got from his wife, Heer Maan. He never truly earned the love she had for him and despite all his tries he could never give her that same love that she deserved back and that's what caused his Heer to leave him.


Dur Jaake Bhi Mujhse Tum Meri Yaadon Main Rehna
Kabhi Alvida Na Kehna
Kabhi Alvida Na Kehna


The ending was the part I hated the most only because literally nothing happened, and so really if nothing else, watch the video! 😳


Love you loads,

Meera😳


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Posted: 16 years ago
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I loved the last paragraph, because really, it describes Prem in this shot to the T. He should have followed her, especially after knowing the truth. He should have searched for her, instead, he wallows in self-pity. Hmph. If he does this on the show, never mind the leap, I shall strangle some people - or things.

Love,
Radz

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey Meera
wow that was super
soo touching
the video was very nice
loved the title of ur one-shot

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey Meera! I think this one-shot was good! 😳 I really liked the part where you wrote Prem pretended he was on Heers lap ⭐️ very nicely written ! 😃
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Thanks guys! 😊

@Radz: I know right? I just wanted to show...in a way how weak the creatives have made him now! 😔 But....now that I was all depressed your one shot made it ALL go away! *hugs*

Will comment in detail tom1 😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Wow, Beautiful..

And darn, I m crying again!!! urghh, this was very touching...😭..
I could feel prem's pain...I mean hugging the pillow thinking it was heer wiping his tears, was beautiful....I can imagine what it feels like when you feel that you dont deserve the other person because you've wronged them...BUT prem, dont forget, ke Prem aur Heer to aik hi hain...

Beautifully written...And the song was beautiful..and yes i m still crying!

Mahrukh

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Posted: 16 years ago
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That last shot of Heer leaving and Prem not being able to stop her all because she had given him the word of her respect and Prem was bound to just abide of not following her because in no circumstances could he afford to do anything at the cost of her respect...
I loved the wya you portrayed it here with the song of KANK..
you know meera, i have always avoided reading your one-shots cause i was so sure of getting myself hooked to them and here i am reading it for the first time and I know from now on I would not be able to part from it, something I always dreaded..

Great job.(I know i don't need to say that)

This gets my heart all the more heavier and the reasons bets known to you too for putting up with this song in here right now, wonder i made a Vm long time back and am apprehensive of putting in here cause it was a tragic Vm...

Luv atop
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey meera tht was really touching! yeah i know what u mean by that last para! that was just mag! hmm...loved it!
no words to describe it!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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I'm touched that you all liked it, personally I thought the end was completely rushed! 😆
Posted: 16 years ago
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I for one am lost because I thought the beginning was a lil "below" your standards but I LOVED the ending. It kinda gave a reason to her leaving, like a story something solid Prem can play of off and correct.

VM was outstanding, it was sad, the way..I don't know, this scene is such a heart ripping one, with the payal and all and you added the song and that was really good Meera!

--shabz

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