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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey guys! em back wid my 1st chapter!😃 i really hope tht u'll like it! i jus want to say tht i have used a hospital's name in ma fanfiction tht is " nanavati hospital" in mumbai. guys i have never been to india so i really dunno how tht hospital is buh i wanted a name so i used it so if i make any mistakes regarding its lay out or discription thn kindly excuse me 😊 the story will be told in past first n thn we'll get to da future!😊 heres da update!

PROLOGUE
Dr. Balabhai Nanavati Hospital

Mumbai

India.

1ST March 1999

3:00 am.

The hospital corridor lit by a lone lamp was deserted except for the solitary figure that walked through it. The guard guarding her door had dozed off. Thunder shook the skies as heavy rain poured steadily. Her steps faltered as she walked down the stairs. Her hand limply slid against the railing as she made her way down. Reaching the back door, she walked out. The rain was coming down in heavy torrents, soaking her light gown. She had always liked the rain'once a long time ago'she winced and brushed the memory aside. The cold was numbing as she walked through the lawn, the grass tickling her feet but nothing registered to her. Numbly she caressed her flat stomach. She couldn't feel the reassuring bump that was always there to comfort her that the mark of his love was inside her. Her baby always used to kick her at this time of hour, making its presence known' forcing her to make her way down to the kitchens and have a bite of an apple or anything sweet in the refrigerator' she had always hated gulab jamuns but her baby used to love them'but it wasn't now. She feverishly clutched her stomach trying to feel but nothing. Blood rushed in her ears as the full force of the words hit her, making her fall on the wet grass. " I am sorry Mrs. Juneja but we couldn't save your child. You were losing too much blood. We didn't have any choice. I am terribly sorry". " Doctor 'my'my baby"' the doctor was looking at her with pity' her eyes had lost the twinkle they had whenever she visited her for her regular check ups. " What? My baby is all right' she's right here. I know" Heer said confused that why was everyone looking at her with sympathy. " Mrs. Juneja". " No! You are lying! Nothings happened to her! She was just fine! I am telling you!" she cried hysterically. " My husband will talk to you! I know he's here and he'll talk to our lawyer! Daddy where's Prem?" she asked looking at her father. " PREM!" she screamed as the nurses tried to hold her. " He's not here sweetheart. I tried to contact him in every way possible but I couldn't reach him' I " but she didn't hear the rest of it as her mind went blank and felt a stabbing pain on her left arm.

" PREM!!!" Heer screamed in the dark night. " We lost our baby' Prem I lost our baby". Heavy sobs shook her body as she cried out his name. " Why didn't you come?"

" Prem!!! Prem please come back", she choked as bile constricted her throat' tears running down her face mixing with rain. " Please come back! I need you! I love you!" She cried, her face bent in defeat as her hands clutched her stomach. She had never felt so alone in her entire life. Prem's love made her complete, made her Heer Juneja but he was not here. When she needed him the most he was not there for her. Didn't he love her? Did he ever love her? Questions ran through her mind as she yet again looked up the skies crying out his name in agony. " Prem! Ajao prem! Aajao'! She managed as her voice broke but not like her heart, which had broken into a million pieces on loosing her child. " She looked at her hands which prem had once held.

" you promised me that you will come back! You promised!" She cried as her hands curled into fists.
" I'll come back for you and our baby", he had said looking in her eyes as he bid farewell " Good bye".

Guards rushed out to her, taking hold of her making her stand up. " Ma'am you are not supposed to be here. You should be in your room!". " no let go off me!" She screamed trying to fight them off. " Prem" she screamed yet again as they pulled her towards the hospital. She was loosing consciousness now. Paramedics hurried outside with a stretcher as they lifted her limp body onto it, rushing inside. " Mr. Mann wouldn't like this at all", the doctor on duty thought anxiously as he followed.

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Well thts it! it culd have been better i guess but anyway i giv ma bes shot! plsssss do let me noe wat u think!!!😳 will be waiting eagerly to hear from u all! take care😊
lots of love
hiba
Edited by ...Hiba... - 14 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: --Sarah--

Great teaser..sounds interesting and it is about reuniting..
so waiting for it

Sarah

hey thnx alot dear!😊 em glad u liked it! hope u like watt i have in store for u!😉
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey
Awesum part 1
loved it
thankz for pm
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Posted: 16 years ago
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excellent part...👏👏👏 .vry intersting...plzzzz continue asap...

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Posted: 16 years ago
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omg!! that was so tense! i feel so sad,cant belive heer lost the baby and where is prem when she needs him!! i he plently of ?s but they'll be answered thru out i'm guessing...updt soon dude!! can't wait to see wat happened nxt!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: -Pooji-

Hey
Awesum part 1
loved it
thankz for pm

hey thnx alot dear! em so glad u liked it! 😃wil continue soon!😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: hil4eva

omg!! that was so tense! i feel so sad,cant belive heer lost the baby and where is prem when she needs him!! i he plently of ?s but they'll be answered thru out i'm guessing...updt soon dude!! can't wait to see wat happened nxt!

hey dear! 😊 awwww em glad u liked da update! So i guess u werent expecting dis beginning were u??😛😉 i really wanted to make it tragic coz i have to develop a reason for heer 2 hate prem so i hope i succeeded in it😊 i assure u tht all ur questions will be answered in da cuming updates so sit back n enjoy!😃 will continue soon😊 take care
love
hiba😊
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: sugi77

excellent part...👏👏👏 .vry intersting...plzzzz continue asap...

hey sugi!😊 thnx alot dear! em glad u find it interesting! it will get more interesting as da story progresses! 😛😃will surely continue soon! take care😊
love
hiba
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Wooooooow Hiba! Finally got the chance to comment and I thought it was amazing! The way you described the emotions as Heer wept for her baby was fantastic! It was so well written- and I am curious as to where Prem is- the last line makes me wonder that he is around, keeping an eye on how his Heer is doing. But yes, he should have been there for her in her time of need! I really enjoyed reading it, you write amazingly Hiba- continue soon! Love Zahra xx
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Wooooooow Hiba!
heyyyyyyyyyyyyyy!!!! * waves* glad to see you here! finally!!! 😃😃 Finally got the chance to comment and I thought it was amazing! awwwww thnx alot dear!! em soooooo happy tht u liked it! was eagerly waiting for ur repli!!😳 The way you described the emotions as Heer wept for her baby was fantastic! awwww thnx! i was afraid tht i cld have done better buh ur compliment erased all my doubts!😃😃It was so well written- and I am curious as to where Prem istht is sumfin which u'l find out soon enuf!😛😉- the last line makes me wonder that he is around, keeping an eye on how his Heer is doing. But yes, he should have been there for her in her time of need! i know buh i wanted a reason for heer to hate him u noe thts y wrote it n i assure u prem has a very gud reason for all dis😉 sori cant say anythin more * lips are sealed*😛😉 I really enjoyed reading it, you write amazingly Hiba awwwww thx alott dear!!! u made my day!! thnx alot for reading it n commenting... it really means alot to me😊😊😊 - continue soon! will surely cntinue soon! thnx once again!
Love Zahra xx
love
hiba😊

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