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Posted: 16 years ago
#21
awesome update.i love prem he is soo sweet.loved the update.wait 4 the next update asap.thanks 4 the pm.
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Posted: 16 years ago
#22

Originally posted by: Orville_sam

Great update..Nikita...
please don't postpone the wedding..i can't see prem like this!!
waiting for the next


Sarah

Hey..Sorry...had to postpond it...More reasons on that coming up...I cant see Prem like this but...Sorry...Thanks for comment...😃

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Originally posted by: -Pooji-

hey
awesum update
hope prem feels better soon
the wedding postponed aye
thankz for pm

Thanks...Prem will feel something alright...NP for Pm...

Originally posted by: miss_hyper

great....u have a new reader...and a quick questions..y does heer want the weding postponed...?

YEA!! New Reader...Heer wants the wedding postpond becasue like she said...Its only been recently since she lost her dad,...Plus exactly one month ago Manmeet had died...She feels shes rushing...

Originally posted by: nityatarlapally

awww..poor prem!!

how does he know that heer wanted to postpone??..did i miss a part or something??..i'll go back and re-read
but still...pooor prem..he hurt himself to stop the wedding!!..tsk tsk heer..it's all because of you.
ohh no DJ is at it again!..and why is ash confused..she knows her mom is bad!..why is she thinking about what her mom was trying to say?!
aweeesome update though!!!
~luv nitya

Prem knows that Heer wanted to postpond becasue he over heard her talk to herself earlier...Yes Prem does a lot for his Heer...Ash was trying to discover the meaning of what Dj was trying to say...Thanks for comment..

Originally posted by: angel82

Nikita nice update..but I'm a bit confused here..blame the current trck of the show.....

So what, if Manmeet died on the day of marraige...is it like an abshagun or smtg...
secondly, heer only dreamt of telling prem rite , then how did he come to know what she wanted...did he make out from her depressed face ?
Do update soon.....
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Angie

manmeet died on the day of his wedding with heer...So heer feels weird that she's getting married only one month after..You know there were supposably tied since childhood...and so...She doesnt know if what she is doing is right..Plus its only been a month since her dad died...Is it right to move on soo quickly..
and the thing with prem will clear up in next part...He overheard her before while climbing into the room, she was talking to herself...So...Yeah..
I hope that answered ur question..Sorry if story is confusing..I will try to make it clearer...

Originally posted by: annea

great update........

way to go dear............
i loved it...plss update soon

Thanks...I will update ASAP...

Originally posted by: luv4bb

awesome update.i love prem he is soo sweet.loved the update.wait 4 the next update asap.thanks 4 the pm.
luv
Fatima

Yes the REAL Prem is sweet...I will update ASAP...NP about the PM..
nikita...
THANKS EVERYONE for the amazing comments...I loved them all...I reply to all of them, so please read the replies so that u arent confused!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
#23
it was nice plz update soon and plz donot postpone their marriage but if u want to postpone it than plz want sooo many premeer scenes....
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Posted: 16 years ago
#24
continue soon and please PM me when u update next!!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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HEY!!! Thanks soo much for ur amazing comments...I will reply to all of them...
A few clarifications!!
1-Prem over heard Heer
I know that the last part was a bit confusing...Sorry!!
Dedicated-TO ALL WHO READ!! Thanks...Luv u guys..
BP Feel better!!

Heer-Night…Feel better

Prem-(in his head)-Assa kya hai jo tum mujhse keh nahi paye?? Kher, I hope you're happy, maine shaddi postpond karadi…Yeh shaddi thab thak nahi hogi, jab thak tum nahi chaho…

XXXX

While Heer was in her room

Heer-(to herself)- Prem ne shaddi post pond kyun ki?? I mean..Prem kabhie shaddi postpond nahi kartha…Aur koi khass chot nahi thi…Tho phir? Asse kya baath hui hogi…?

Prem in his room

Prem-Mujhe aaj gir the same ithni chot nahi aye hogi, jithna dard mere dil main hai abhi…Jab mein Heer ke room tak pooncha, maine uske sare bathein sunli the…Voh aapne aap se kehrahi thi ki usse shaddi post pond karni hai…Par ussne mujhse kyun nahi kaha?? Zaroor koi baath hai…

The next morning both Prem and Heer were up before the crack of dawn, and Bumped into each other outside the large estate.

Heer-Watch it!! Prem!! Tum ithni jaldi kaise ut gaye..Aur tum abhi kaise ho?? Koi dard tho nahi??

Prem-Nahi, pain killers ne sab teek kardiya…

Heer-Chalo, at least tum teek ho

Prem and Heer stood silently watching the workers strip off the decorations, and lighting off the outside of the house…

Loads of workers carried bags of food supplies and flowers out of the house, vacating it…

Heer-Toh, hum aaj Mumbai ja rahe hain??

Prem-Haan…

Heer-Teek hai, main Rajveer ko phone karke bathade thi hoon…

Prem-Kyun?? Jathe hi tum hospital start kar logi??

Heer-Haan, ghar mein main kya karoongi??

Prem-Teek hai, jase tumhare marzi…Wase main soch raha tha, ki Mummyji aur meher ko bhi saath le chal the…I mean unke liye ek ghar lekar

Heer-That's actually a really good idea…Par I think abhi ke liye sirf humhe janna chahiye…Aur phir Mumbai jakar ghar bhi toh doondna hai…

Prem-That's ture..Teek hai…

Just then Preet came out of the house

Preet-Bhai, bhabhi, humhari flight 6 gante main hai…

Heer-Main…Mummyji aur Meher ko bye kehkar athi hoon..

Prem-main bhi chaltha hoon

Heer and Prem got into a car and went toward the Mann's house

Teji-Beta, shaddi kyun..achanak

Prem-Voh aunty aap chinta maath karo, actually mere tabiyath kuch teek nahi hai…Toh humne socha postpond karne ke liye

When DJ heard this she almost passed out

DJ-(shrieked)-KYA!!...mera mathlab hai bouth afsoos hua sunkar…

Meher and Heer hugged, and then Prem and Heer were out of there…Ash had decided to stay with the Mann's for another week…

In the car

Prem-Driver rooko

Heer-Kya hua Prem?

Prem-Get out

Heer-What?

Prem-I said get out of the car

Heer got out of the car, and then Prem did to

Heer-Kya baath hai Prem?

Prem-(looking into her eyes)-Vohi toh main janna chatha hoon, kya baath hai Heer….You can share with me…You know I love you…

Heer-(cupping Prem's face)-I know Prem, I love you too…

Prem pulled Heer into his arms and kept her there until they were disturbed by a phone call from Harman

Harman-Bhai!! Stop romancing and get over here!! We'll miss the flight!! Meet us up at the airport…

Heer heard Harman through the phone, and began to blush…

Prem-(hanging up)-Uh..Heer I think we should go…

45 minutes later…

Heer-Shit..Aaj toh plane gaye!!

Prem-Mujhe kya patha tha ithna traffic hoga…

Just then the phone rang

Heer-Hello

Preet-BHABHI!! Where r u guys?? Yahan aapka naam announce kar rahe hain!!

Heer-Ab mein kya karron?? Yahan accident hogaya hai…Stupid traffic…

Preet-Appka accident??

Heer-uff..NO PREET!! Yahan par ek accident hogaya , which is why we're stuck!!

Preet-oh..Got it…Well, I guess we'll catch you in Mumbai…Okay

Heer-Yea..I guess..Okay bye

Prem-Kya hua?

Heer-Kuch nahi, unke flight janne wale hai…

Prem-Shit!!

Heer-Ab hum kar bhi kya sak the hain…We'll catch the next flight..

Traffic continued to move like a snail, and heer rested her head against Prem's shoulder, who wrapped his arm around her..Heer looked at her ring…and moved her finger around…It was beautiful she admitted to herself…and so was this relationship…

Driver-Sab…Hum isse agge nahi ja sak the!! Police ne block kardiya hai road ko

Prem-Shit…Toh ab hum Mumbai kaise??

Prem looked out the window and saw train station ahead, it had begun to rain, and Prem saw Heer had feel asleep

Prem-I guess hum train le lein ge

Driver-Ji sab, yahi best idea hoga…

Prem-(gently)-Heer…Heer utto…

Heer-hmm..Prem…Abhi nahi

Prem laughed and then moved around

Prem-Heer…Wake up!

Heer-(opening her eyes)-Hm..Kya hua?

Prem-Hum agaye

Heer-what?? Why are we not at the airport

Prem-Chaloo…

Prem pulled heer out of the car, and they ran in the rain toward the trian platform…

Heer-(covering her head with her dupatta)-Prem, hum train le rahe hain??

Prem-Haan, kafe bure tarha se traffic jam hogaye hai…We should just take the next train to Mumbai…

Heer-Par humhare pass koi saman bhi toh nahi hai!!

Prem-I have my wallet, we can buy train tickets…Don't worry about it

Heer-Okay, what ever you say

Prem bought tickets, while Heer took some money and bought two bottles of water…

Some guys standing near the stand, stood and watched Heer

Guy-Hey, beautiful…

Heer-(in her head)-English keh yehe do line athe hoongi…

Just then Prem shouted from the counter

Prem-heer, hurry up!! We'll end up missing this too!!

Heer-Aye…

Heer walked toward the counter, when the guy put his hand out in front of her

Guy-come on babe… I have a place near by…You don't have to go now…

Heer moved to the side and continued to walk, but the guy continued to follow her, and Heer felt like slapping him..but she continued to walk, until she finally got to Prem..He extended his hand and Heer grasped it…They walked to the train together…

Prem-Where you talking to someone at the water stand??

Heer-No! Some creep was trying to talk to me

Prem's hand tightened around Heer's…

Heer-Prem..relax…There are way too many losers in this world..

Meanwhile

Guy-(to himself, as he boarded the train)-Tum baach nahi paogi mujhse…

Prem and Heer sat down in there respective seats…Prem had booked the entire cabin for the both of them…Prem began to talk after a moment of silence

Prem-Did that guy say anything else??

Heer-Prem…Please..Relax…

Prem-Why should I stop! That B******

Heer-(put her hand on his shoulder)-Look at me Prem…

Prem-(looked at heer)

Heer-Just calm down, the guy is gone..and that's about it…

Prem soon laid down his head resting in Heer's lap…Heer ruffled Prem's hair, and soon dozed off as well…When Heer opened her eyes it was 4 hours later, and she saw Prem's phone was vibrating…she quietly picked it up

Heer-(softly)-Hello

Preet-Hey, where in the world are you guys, this is my 15th call!!

Heer-(whispering even softer)-Voh…Hum Train main hain

Preet-Rain main?? Arre aap log romance karne ka koi mauka nahi chodthe

Heer-Arre Preet, TRAIN MEIN…

Preet-What?? Par kyun??

Heer-Voh kuch problem hogaye thi, aur garde aur agge nahi jarahi thi..Tho we had to take a train…

Preet-Acha…So what train #

Heer-I think 78D?

Preet-Okay, got it…I think you guys will be here in how long??

Heer-I think around another 4 hours

Preet-Okay…Main Mumbai rail aapko lene ajjaoonga…

Heer-Okay…

Heer put the phone down, and looked at Prem…He looked adorable as he snuggled into her, and was holding her left hand…

Heer ran her hand through Prem's hair, and saw Prem slowly wake up…

Heer-Morning sleepy head…

Prem-Hm..Morning…

Heer-Slept well?

Prem got up, stretching and straightening his shirt

Prem-Sorry, voh main soogaya

Heer-Prem..Its fine, actually main bhi abhi uti thi…Preet ka phone ayya tha

Prem-Really?? What did he say?

Heer-Humhe train station pick up karega voh…

Prem-Okay…Bye the way hum kitne doori par hain?

Heer-Like 3 more hours

Prem-Shit…

Heer-Well, tumhara idea tha, Train lene ka…

Prem-True…

Prem cuddled up Next to Heer, and kissed her cheek…

Prem-I love you…

Heer-Me too…

XXX

Prem and Heer began to talk about the shaddi, and Prem's mood got off again…

Heer-Toh, Tumhe kya Lagtha hai, Shaddi ki date ab kab ki hogi??

Prem-(giving Heer a cold response)-Patha nahi…

Heer-(finding his response strange)-Tumhara back ka pain kaisa hai??

Prem- Its fine…

Heer put her hand on Prem's shoulder

Heer-Are you sure…? You seem upset

Prem-nope..No problem what so ever

Heer-Okay…

Heer looked out the window, and wondered why Prem was being so grumpy…Was he mad at her she thought?Na…Maybe since he just woke up…

Around 5 minutes later…

Prem-(suddenly)-Just come out with it!!

Heer-hun?

Prem got up, and moved to the other side, now looking at Heer directly

Prem-Its killing me on the inside Heer, just tell me…Asa kya hai joh toh mujhse share nahi karsak thi!!

Heer-Prem tum kya kehrahe ho?

Prem-Tum shaddi aaj kyun nahi karna chathi thi??

Heer-(was shocked)-(in her head)-How does he know??

Heer-Prem…

Prem-Nahi Heer, maine humesha tumhari kushi chahiye…Tum aaj shaddi nahi karna chathi thi..Aur dehko aaj hum shaddi nahi kar rahe!! But you have to tell me why!!

Heer-Prem…Shayad tumhe yaad nahi hai, liken aaj ke din…ek mahene (one month) pehle mere shaddi hone wali thi…Aaj ke din Manmeet, aur Mere bauji ki death thi..

Heer began to cry, and Prem felt horrible…He came over to Heer, and wiped her tears…

Heer could only think of one thing..

"What if he thinks its because of Manmeet…"

Heer-(controlling her tears)- Prem…Its…Its not Manmeet…Its just…Sab kuch ithne…Jaldi…Aur phir..bauj-----

Prem cut her off pulling her into his arms..

Prem-I'm sorry Heer…Mujhe…I'm so stupid…Main Uncle ke bare mein..I can understand tum par kya beeth rahi hai…I'm really sorry…

Heer-(wiping her tears looking up at him)-Toh tum naraz nahi ho?

Prem-Of course not…I'm such an idiot…I just couldn't understand why you didn't want to get married now…

Heer-How did you…(sniffing)…Find out??

Prem-I heard you talking to yourself, when I had come into your room…

Heer-I'm sorry Prem…

Heer held on to Prem..and Prem tried shushing her…

Prem-Don't worry, ab jab tum chahoge…thabi shaddi hogi..Wase bhi engagement toh hogaye hai…Tum adhe(1/2) toh meri ho hi…

Heer-(blushing, and peeking up from his chest)-Adhe nahi…Puri

Heer buried her face into Heer's chest..

XXX

Back at Juneja House in Mumbai…

The Junejas were sitting around watching TV

Preet-Uff…Hum News kyun dehkthe hain?? Its soo boring??

Lalit-Wase, Prem aur Heer kab arahe hain??

Preet-uh…In about an hour…

Harman-Sh…Listen…Koi major bomb blast hua hai

Harman increased the volume on the TV, and everyone directed there attention to it…

"This is Juhi Sachdev with Camera man Rahul Vaidya, and we are here at Andheri rail station, where train number 78 D, which had come from Chandigarh has exploded, due to terrorist attacks…"

Gayatri felt the world around her spin, as Preet changed the channel to a different news station

"Namaste, aap dhek rahein hain Star News, Aur main Gurpreet Kaur hoon, yahan Andheri mein, Chandigarh se anne wali train bure tare se explode hogaye hai…Kaha ja sak tha hai ki 8 bomb the, aur voh attankwade kahan se the, iska abhi tak koi kabhar nahi hai…Medical support aye hain, Aur iss baath ki bhi report hai ki Industrialist Rahul Mehra, aur Industrialist Prem Jun-----------

Gayatri-NAHI!!!Assa assa nahi hai…

Lalit-(also in great shock)-Beta, Prem aur Heer kis train mein the..

Preet-(now stammering)-uh…Bauji 78D nahi thi…Main jantha hoon…Reception bouth weak tha…Aur jab bhabi train ke rahi thi, thab bhi mujhe rain sunaye diya…So…Im sure yeh wala nahi tha…

Harman-Haan, Preet wase bhi konsa kam kartha hai teek se…Main Aur Preet jakar Heer bhabi aur bhaiya ko lekar athe hain…Don't worry…

Now I will run!!

-NK...
Edited by nikitaic - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
#26
Hey
awesum update
hope premeer are alrite
thankz for pm
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Posted: 16 years ago
#27
oh no dont kill premeer anyways keep on updating
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Posted: 16 years ago
#28
great part!!!! please tell me heer and prem are alright!!!!! PM me when u update next!!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
#29
ohh you better run!..coz i'm coming after you!!..lol..just kidding!
but still..why'd you leave us at that!..i know nothing will happen to them...because the whole story is about them!...maybe they'll loose their memory or something!
ohh..so that's why heer didn't want to get married on this day!..i was also wondering how prem knew..but you cleared my confusion!
update soon!!
~luv nitya
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Posted: 16 years ago
#30
oh my go0shhh i cant believe this....lol
but ii hope there finee or if not, then i hope sumthng go0d comes out of this ....awww poor premeer
hheeheee at the end ur likee "now i will run" well tat was a go0d choice 😆 haha
pm me for the next updatee....wondering wht will happen next
thnx
luv rumsha

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