One-Shot: Khuda Jaane/Shall We Dance?

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Khuda Jaane/ Shall We Dance
"It's 9pm Meera! Where are you?" yelled Meera's room mate Ravjot over Meera's cellphone.
Meera quickly ran through the deserted local streets of Mumbai, India, when it suddenly started to drizzle. "Chill Ravu babboo! I am perfectly fit and fine!" Meera says, trying to calm Ravjot down. Meera could hear Ravjot mumble something and tended to ignore it.
"Whatever! Just hurry up and get back home!" Ravjot ordered, and before Meera could say anything back in return, Ravjot angryly slapped the 'End' button on her LG Shine.
Yeh Ravjot bhi na! Meera says, giggling. Suddenly, it starts to pour heavy rain, and Meera quickly, finding herself getting soaked, she reacts quickly, placing her duppatta over her head, runs to the nearest shelter she could find. A little road-side coffee shop. Running, Meera enters the coffee shop, just to see, she had not entered alone, and along with her, came a tall, broad figure. A guy, obviously. After noticing that he had entered with a girl, he looks up at Meera. His deep chestnut coloured eyes, staring directly at hers. Their gazes meeting. To Meera, he seemed nothing less then a God like figure. His body structure and jaw line shaped perfectly. Meera swooned with his body heat interacting with hers. It felt as if her dream was finally coming true. Meeting her Mr. Right, in the monsoon season. R for Rain and R for Romantic. Meera kept staring at her 'Mr. Right' and he did the same. A ting of blush flowed through both his and Meera's body. They both quickly take thier eyes off each other, and their cheeks turn a deep cherry colour, well, Meera's did.
"Babuji, aap aur bhabhiji, kuch lena chahenge? Chai, malai mar ke?" the chai wala bhaiya asks.
Meera and Prem blush and try to hide their discomfort when Prem suddenly breaks the quietness and asks chai wala bhaiya to make 2 chai's.
"Bhaiya, do chai please." Prem says, with this velvety voice leaving an everlasting expression on Meera's heart.
The bhaiyaa nods his head and moves back to making chai, while Prem puts his hands in his jean pockets, while Meera quietly stands there, rubbing her arms. Uncomfortable, but for some reason Meera found herself liking it.
Prem looks at Meera and sees her shivering and without saying anything, takes his black leather jacket off his perfectly strong body and places it around Meera's shoulders. As he did so, his hands rubbed against Meera's making shivers run through her spine -not because of the cold, but because of the perfect God like figure's touch. It was magical. Something sensational. Something that someone only used to get to feel once in thier whole life time. Meera blushed and then smiled to herself. She quietly looks up at Prem, and gives him a 'You didn't have to do this for me' expression.
"Don't bother about it. You were cold and wet." he replies back.
Meera smiles, in awe of this total hot hunk that was beside her. Atleast she knew that he had a heart now. Meera smiles and turns her head to face the other way, in a hope of hiding her embarrassment. When she turns around, she finds Prem still staring at her, which makes her uncomfortable.
"What are you looking at?" she asks, polietly.
"Something beautiful" he answers back, trying to hide his smile. Meera blushed more, and stared at the ground and then back up.
"Thanks but no thanks. I don't appreciate such jokes." Meera answers back, sure that Prem calling her beautiful was a joke but a part of her wished it wasn't. Ofcourse! It had to be a joke. There were thousands of other faces in the world that were more beautiful then hers, weren't there?
Prem's expression changed from a happy one to a confused one. "Why?" he asks, frowning.
"Well, firstly, I am not the prettiest girl in the world. So obiviously, there HAS to be someone better then me and more gorgeous, more beautiful, more nicer, more beautiful. Hasn't there?" Meera questions.
Prem laughs out loud. "I don't know what you are blabbling on about Miss. You are the only girl that I saw with the most beautiful, gorgeous eyes! You are amazing! You are like an angel, and I swear. This is not a joke." Prem says, acting serious.
Meera had no words, but only red cheeks to answer Prem. She wanted to tell him how much she appreciated him, but before she could say anything, chai arrived. Prem and Meera took a seat on a lil bench type straw bed, and quietly sipped on their chai. After they were done and Meera had a little bit of strength in her, she turned around in her bench, to stare at the rain.
"It's beautiful, isn't it?" Meera asks, looking at the rain.
"Gorgeous" Prem replies, staring at Meera.
"I feel like dancing in it." states Meera.
"I feel like getting lost in them." Prem replies, still staring at Meera and her perfectly shaped face.
Meera, feeling something wrong with the whole conversation, looks at Prem to see him staring at her. Meera blushes and breaks down giggling and snaps her fingures infront of his face.
"Yoohoo!?" Meera replies
"Aisgiughinhi...huh?" Prem says, finally getting out of his dream mode.
"I was talking about the rain here!" Meera says, giggling.
"Ya whatever! Hey listen, we never introduced ourselves. I am Prem Juneja." Prem says, shaking Meera's hand.
"Meera Sharma." Meera replies, shaking Prem's hand.
"Nice to meet you Meera!" Prem compliments. Meera nods.
"You know, Prem and hey, be right back!"
Without saying anything else, Meera gets up from the bench and walks straight out in the rain and does a mini titantic, her hands flying open, and her face open to the drops of the rain. And this time, all those drops, touching her at the heart, not her body. Meera felt as if those drops were aimed right at her heart, and had a message hidden in them. Meera closed her eyes, to read the message, but only found one name and picture in her head. Prem! Suddenly, two hands slide down her arms, in the opposite directions, finally getting a strong grip of her hands. Strong hands. Shocked, Meera opens her eyes, to see Prem right behind her, doing his version of titanic. His chin up, feeling the rain. Meera smiled, and slowly, takes Prem's hands and moves them closer to her body. His hands slowly slid down her waist, and then made thier way to her stomatch, where they finally found a rest. Meera smiled, and so did Prem. Prem looked at Meera, and they both stared at each other. Both Prem and Meera swooned with the rain. Moving right and left, slowly, and feeling everything that touched them. Prem loosened his grip around Meera's stomatch giving her space to turn around and face him. Meera placed her head on Prem's chest, and could feel Prem's chin on her head and his hands around her back. Meera smiled and so did Prem. As they did, Meera and Prem found heaven right on earth...heaven in each other's arms.
Prem let go of Meera and swirled her around. He then went up on his knees and placed his hand out, which shocked Meera.
"Ms. Meera Sharma, would you like this poor thing to be beside you all your life?" Prem asks, in a loud voice, that ran shivers down Meera's spine but beautiful enough for her to give him a bear hug right there.
Meera smiles and slides her hand into his. "Yes, I do."
Prem smiles and quickly gets up from the road and breaks into a hug with Meera.

In conclusion, who says you need to know a person for a long time to know they are the one? Sometimes you have just gotta trust your inner instintcs.

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I hope Meera likes it! So please press the THANK YOU button or leave a comment! I am a hopeless romantic, so please bare with my bizarre attempt to write something romantic!😆
~Shifu
Edited by *Shifali* - 16 years ago

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Pyari_Zahra thumbnail
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Posted: 16 years ago
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My Spot!! xx
*EDIT ADD*
Okay so I wrote a comment and then accidently pressed the back button Wahhhhhhhh!! 😭
Anyway, I LOVED it!! Totally FLUFF-filled, but totally amazing!! Falling in love in the rain, how romantic!! 😳 I'm sure Meera is losing all her senses at the moment!! 😆That dance at the end was so intimate, I was blushing reading it, so imagine how Meera must have felt! 😆 Great job Shifali- my favourite part was when Meera was referring to the rain whereas Prem was talking about her beautiful eyes!! Wow, it was a cute and sweet one-shot!! I enjoyed reading it! 😃
Love Zahra xx
Edited by Pyari_Zahra - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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mine! 😳

Guess who FINALLY stopped hyperventilating?


That's right! ME! 😃 Be very proud, and while I was editing this...I was listening to some of the MOST depressing songs, (I really wanna make a sad vm for some reason! 😆) But we'll see how that plan of mine goes. Anyways! Onto this MINDBLOWING ONE SHOT! And you said you don't right good one shots! *laughs* Don't lie! 😛 It's not good! 😳


It was 9pm and she was worried about me? *hugs Ravs* how sweet? 😃 But seriously Mumbai? I'd be fine! 😛😉 Teehee, I love the nickname I gave Ravs! 😃 totally cute and fits her too! 😃😳 Ohh Ravs got a pretty phone! (I was about to write a Preety phone! 😛 We know what I'm constantly thinking about, and no that doesn't mean Preet, it means stuff KDMHMD related! 😛)


You dressed me in Indian? 😲 I love you! *hugs* you know me so well! 😃 *grins happily* And ahh the coffeeshop! 😳 Best place in rain! *sighs* Chestnut eyes? *swoons* I LOVE how you added my "dream-ness" into it, with the whole perfect guy in the perfect rain season! *sighs* I'm so filmi na? *shakes head* no wonder I'm half crazy! 😛 Yes yes... of course MY cheeks have to turn a rosy cherry pink color, otherwise it's really not me is it? 😛😆😳


[:O]Bhabhiji??? 😆 That had me giggling, crazy chai wala!😆 Although we DID enter together...it's okay, he's just mistaken! 😛


He....he....took off his jacket and put it on MY shoulders? 😲 Do you want me to die even imagining it? Because I really will...first Maddy had that in the one shot she wrote for me...and now you? *sigh* you guys are totally spoiling me with all these one shots, that I'm saving for the rest of my life btw! 😛😉 Just thought you should know! 😃😳 and oh yes I've got to add, the little thing with me shaking my head saying, "he didn't have to do that," was really well thought out Shifs, I'd definitely do that!😆 You know what scares me? How perfectly you've described my thoughts, specially the whole bit about him calling me pretty and me not believing it AT ALL, because there is no way in hell any guy would EVER say that...so that totally hit the mark! 😃 An angel? *giggles like a fool* That's so sweet! 😳


But as you and Z have pointed out, the best part is definitely the adorable bit with me staring out at the gorgeous rain and him looking at me *blushes and hides face* totally cute! 😳 And this little bit had me giggling like an idiot! 😛 "Aisgiughinhi...huh?" It was such a cute reaction from him! 😛 And I have told you that one of my OTHER fav parts was where we were talking and I just ran out into the rain, I kinda do that in real life too, (makes my friends kinda irritated, but I just can't help it! 😳)


*enters fully comatose zone* (Everything said from here on, will probably not make ANY sense, but bare with me! 😳)


OMG!!!!! I really have no idea what else to say about that entire bit Shifali, each gesture was perfectly described and I could imagine the whole thing including the light rain falling on my face. The way he came and slid his hands down? *hyperventilates* I really have no words to describe how truly beautiful that bit was! 😳 And then I pulled his hands closer, (that was the one bit that I probably wouldn't have the nerve to do! 😆) but it sounded sooooo beautiful! 😃 I'm dying...literally! 😳 And honestly the whole bit with just swaying in the rain was amazing, but I really loved this line, "Meera placed her head on Prem's chest, and could feel Prem's chin on her head and his hands around her back " Really perfect, and just so simple! 😳


*sniff sniff* I loved the way you made him "kinda" propose, it was just so innocent and perfect! 😃😳 And oh yes, it was pure, just perfect! 😳 I have nothing else to say Shifali, I think I've run out of adjectives to describe how amazing you wrote it, and how it really made me feel! 😳


I don't know why you called it bizarre, actually wait, that's a lie I do know why you said that...it's cus I was in it na? 😉😳


Anyways, it was perfect, and made me feel even more spoiled and greedy but I don't care, because it was IDEAL! 😃


Love you loads and loads,


Meera😳


Edited by indiandoll89 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hello beta. How's you? Guess who's here to comment! That's right it's mummy ji =) But before we start, what was your reaction to when I said I would adopt you? Of all the random things I've said, bet you didn't think I'd say that. Oh and your Asma masi wants you to behave🤔 I think we've already discussed that.

Anyway, enough of that. Ooh it's called Khuda Jaane? I LOVE that song! *sings*

Sajde mein yoon hi jhukta hoon

Tum pe aake hi rukhta hoon

Kya yeh sabko hota hain

Humko kya lena hain sab se

Tum se hi sab baate ab se

Ban gaye ho tum meri dua

Khuda jaane ke main fida hoon

Khuda jaane ke main mit gaya

Khuda jaane yeh kyun hua hain

Ke ban gaye ho tum mere khuda

Ok I'm done =) I thought of writing the lyrics cuz well you already know I was in the mood for singing today so yeah =) The fact that I was listening to Dildarian instead while typing the lyrics was not important. K I'll stop going off topic now😆

Ooh I yell at Meera? Cool😆 So where was she at 9 p.m. anyway? I demand an answer!😆 Ravu babboo? Where did you come up with that? And I bet the thing I was muttering about was probably the new nickname. Ooh and I hung up on Meera? Cool😆 And I see my LG Shine got an appearance too. Do I get a new one here or is it still my old one?

Meera enters a coffee shop? With a guy? Who's name is Prem? I bet Meera blushed while reading thing. I bet she still is actually. Which reminds me, you described Meera's blushing at the situation perfectly =) I think she would agree. And they both had a little staring session going on before the chai wala interrupted. Omg a chai wala! That can be my new career😲😲😆 I've just told Meera about it and she supports me =) Anyway, back to the chai wala, too bad he interrupted. But I liked his line, the malai mar ke thing cracked me up😆

I love how when Prem speaks up, he doesn't correct the chai wala and lets the chai wala think him and Meera are married. Instead he just orders 2 chai and leaves it at that. I bet Meera almost fainted when she heard his voice.

Aww Prem's such a gentleman, giving his jacket to Meera cuz she's cold. So sweet =) And the way he was just staring at her, the guy's fida over her alright. Kina sona munda hun =) The way he complimented her and whatnot, so sweet. And I love how you described it. I love how he got her to believe that he's telling her the truth and not joking.

Prem went to Lala land?😆 Too bad Meera snapped him out of it. I love how she was confused by her answer and then snapped him out of it. The starting of the conversation, the answer he gave about the rain worked but then after she figured it out. I bet Meera blushed even more reading that.

Ooh I love playing in the rain! Actually I wanna play in the rain right now but it's 3:37 a.m. and plus it's not raining...Oh well. And I see they re-created the Titanic pose? So cute😳 Bet she didn't expect Prem to come behind her and lose himself to the rain as well. Oh and btw, love how you described the rain and her heart thing =) Me loved that part.

Aww he got down on his knees? Omg! Wow! No wonder Meera died while reading this. And of course she said yes. Why wouldn't she?

Me loved the one shot! I loved the way you wrote it and described everything and what they were feeling and the way everything flowed together =)

-Mummy ji

P.S. It said to either click the thank you button OR comment. I did both😎

Edited by -Ravjot- - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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This was SO cute! :) I love reading romantic one-shots; this was perfect. Lucky Meera 😃
Amazing work, Shifali :D your writing style is so nice! Keep up the awsome work.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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holy effing my god! LOVED IT! haila too good!
uffffffff...i could almost picture it...like a movie playing...u're an amazing writer u know 😃
and i absolutely love premee 😃 so *sigh* love the whole msg of the story too...i agree with it 😉
if only guys like that existed though...complete strangers..offering jackets...with good intentions- how perfect would that be *sigh again* hahah
i wish this wasnt a one shot ... so i could've said continueee! 😃 haha
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Salsa!!!! 😆 Miss me!?!?!? 😳

Edited by blackdaughter - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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my spot.

*edited*

I had shivers Shifu. Seriously, the way you wrote their first meeting (in the rain!) And then him being all chivalrous, and the way he kept looking at her. *shiver* Ohmygod, Meera is so lucky. She got such an awesome proposal, from her Prem. 😆

Loved it!

Love,
Radz

Edited by Anhdara13 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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So umm its nearly 2 pages on word! 😛 Enjoy! 😃😳
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Here's me helping you get three pages of comments, Shifs! 😃😃
Ooooh Premee! Nice...😆
Oooh Meera I am so jealous of you! I mean, she meets a guy in the rain, first of all, a secret fantasy that I'm sure every girl harbours, and they dance in the rain (Fantasy Numero Dos) and then he proposes to her like, as soon as they meet. Sigh...Meera, tumhe aisa ladka kaise mila? Aur meri kismat aise kyun nahin hai? *pouts* 😆
Oooh but Shifs I love the way you wrote this! The setting, the place, everything, was so fantastic. It was really simple and straightforward, but part of the power (and by power I mean 'awwwwww' factor!) lay in that. So looking forward to your next one!
Love,
Bhav (:

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