||In Dino|| Meet One Shot - Page 3

Originally posted by: Anhdara13

I love this song, like seriously! I love, love, LOVE the song! Eee me too! 😛

will be back.

*edited*

This is like one of my favourite songs! I love hearing it. I can hear it again and again. Awww I'm glad you like the song so much! 😳

And it so suits the story. It was so sweet the story, both of them moving on from their first love, or rather infatuation, with one another. The comfort level and ease they have with one another was expressed beautifully! It was utterly amazing, the way you showed both their fears and their reassurance. Really, yup, I call it infatuation, as much as I loved Preet and Ash! 😳 I'm glad you liked it! 😛

Absolutely loved it! Thank you! 😃

Love, Love you too! 😛
Radz

Originally posted by: blackdaughter

tango mango!!! =D Hello shello? 😛

Mango here!!!! 😆 I love the name Ducky gave me!!!! 😆 I actually have a spare right now and instead of studying Bio like i should, i'm surfing IF!!!!!! *Try looking all stern and dissapointed at me* 😳😆 I'm glad you like that name, and shame shame Madz! 😆 You shud be studying, specially when it's Peterson! 😆

At first i was like i couldn't tell if this was going to be a happy ending or a neutral one, but i'm so glad it was happy!!!!! 😃 I wasn't sure if Preet was unhappy in the biginning but than the transition from hesitation to happiness, to satisfaction and love was very well done Meeru!!!!! 👏 aww see, I knew it got kinda confusing there....I'm glad you think it was well done, I don't! 😆

You captured Meher's feelings very appropriately, there was that little jijhak but that quickly faded into shyness and anticipation!!!!! *thumbs up* 👏 Great job!!!! Thanks! 😳

Awwwwwww!!!! Hai! Main mar ja wa!!!!! 😳😆 Preet is sho shweet!!!! Asking Meher if she was happy or not and the way he teased and flirted with her was so awesome!!!!! 😉😳😆 Awww I'm glad you liked it...

Loved the ending and great song choice!!!!! Love your one-shots!!!! Ahhh I'm glad! 😳 The song's really good! 😛

Keep writing, waiting for your next one already!!!!! 😆 *hug* Thanks, not anytime soon! 😳

P.S. - I like everything you write so you have probably realized i'm not teh best person to give you any critism becuase i never find anything to say!!!!! 😳😆 You're right! 😆

dat was shooo shweet n cute ...... i jst loved it

Originally posted by: *Shifali*

Hard core critcism again huh? Lemme see! Thank you! 😃

First of all, I LOVED the whole One-Shot👏 MUCH better then your Premeer one!😆...The Aaye Ho..one...😆 I'm glad you loved it....obviously way better than that one!😆😆😆

Secondly, as everyone mentioned, the feelings and emotions of both Preet and Meher were soo amazingly and wonderfully captured, that you could easily see how they were feeling and their nervousness towards the whole marriage, which I think was quite important.😉 Hmmm really? 😳 You liked that? I wasn't sure how it worked...

The way Preet and Meher shared their feelings with each other and Meher questionning Preet if he was happy regarding thier marriage was amazing and the convo well portrayed. Thanks, I kinda wished they did it like that in the show a bit! 😳

Now coming to the criticism, it was good. The shot was VERY good, but at the starting, I found Preet's part a bit rushed...I tried to read it slowly and with emotion but for some reason, I found it quite...jumpy. From his worriedness towards their marriage, to his feelings about Meher and Ash to the room with Prem and Vikas. I quite found it very rushed...and emotionless. But it was rather good... Hmmm thank you! 😳 I'm glad you told me everything honestly though!😳 I hope it changed in the rest of the one shots!😳

And then, I was wondering if the One-shot should have had perspectives. Like Preet's POV. That would have added a bit more feeling to the whole shot...you know, it would have actually left the readers, wanting to see more of his confusement about the whole marriage issue.😉 I've added that in the rest of my one shots now, where it's a bit of him and a bit of her!😳 Not completley POV like "I couldn't believe," Only because than I feel I add too much!😆

Same with Meher's. You should have added her POV aswell..and her feelings about the marriage, told by her..you get what I mean...? Yup I get it! 😛

Other then that, I LOVED this Meet One-shot...😳 Thanks Shifu! 😃

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~Shifs