||Piya (Special Night)|| Premeer One Shot

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Posted: 16 years ago
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This is my second try at a purely fluff Premeer one shot, personally I think this song really suits the whole situation and so I wanted to put it out for you all to read the way it's in my head! 😃 Hopefully it's all clear enough, and personally I'm not so sure, not that it's not good or anything, but just that it flows as well as it should, so now—like all my one shots, I want EVERYONE to be honest! 😃


Piya Jab Se More Naina Tose Lad Gaye


Prem got apprehensive when Preet directed him to his room. He knew he had made Heer upset by not listening to her and apologizing to Maa, but he'd be able to win her back. He always did.


Piya Jab Se More Naina Tose Lad Gaye


She was waiting for him in THEIR room. She wanted to be angry with him, not for taking ma's side, just for not listening to her. Yet, tonight was not the night for them to spend brooding over past moment. This was about them. Now. In the Present. But where was he?


Baawari Si Phiru
Tera Intzaar Karu
Kyun Tadpa Diya


She was standing in her favourite spot. Right by the window, with all the lights dimmed, just the glow from the moon, and the light coming from the illuminated candles set around the room. Preet and Meher really outdid themselves this time, Prem thought to himself as he inched closer to the world's most beautiful woman who was his wife.


Jiya Jab Se More Naina Tose Lad Gaye
Baawara Sa Phiru
Tera Intzaar Karu
Kyun Tadpa Diya
Jiya Jab Se More Naina Tose Lad Gaye


He was there, she could feel his presence behind her, the slow way he always crept up behind her startling her yet calming her with the same soft touch.


Tera Roop Chandni Si Dhoop Hai
Chandan Sa Mehka Tan Yeh Khoob Hai
Tera Dhang Aisa Hai Lajawaab
Teri Sharam Haye Suroor Hai
Tera Roop Chandani Si Dhoop Hai


He was in awe of her today, nothing on earth could compare to Heer tonight. He loved her in her suits alright, but saree's, a completely different story. He wanted to take her in his arms and just tell her he was hers and she was his; yet there was something burdening his chest.


"Heer—" He used his soft hand on her shoulder to turn her around, not noticing the way she shivered as his finger contacted with the skin on her shoulder. "Main—"


Heer raised her left hand and placed it over his mouth and shook her head. Prem leaned his forehead down to touch hers. "Tum kuch mat kaho, mujhe pata hain ke tumne jo kiya, kyun kiya."


Prem's eyes opened slowly and he was still stunned seeing her and feeling blessed that he was lucky enough to end up with someone who knew him and his intentions down to the core.


Maalik Ne Tujhe Banaake, Phir Tujh Sang Preet Laga Ke
Yeh Karam Hai Kiya, Re Piya
Piya Jab Se More Naina Tose Lad Gaye


Heer was unsure whether or not Prem was still feeling bad over everything and so she took the initiative and took his hand and led him back into their room. She sat him down on the bed. "Tum aaram karo," she turned to walk away but he suddenly grabbed her hand and held her back.


"Heer," His voice was giving her goose-bumps for some strange reason. She had been around him before, yet deep down somewhere she knew; she'd never been with him like THIS before.


Tujko Paake Mere Saajan Yoon Laga
Tapti Zameen Ko Saawan Ho Mila
Tann Mann Ke Madhuban Ki Har Kali Ko
Subah Ki Shabnam Ka Sang Mila
Tujko Paake Mere Saajan Yoon Laga


He tugged at her hand, gesturing for her to sit down next to him on the bed and so she did. "Main—" He shook his head not knowing what to say making Heer smile.


Tujke Paake Lage Hai Aise
Kayi Janmon Ka Haal Jaise,

Maalik Ne Hai Sun Liya, Re Jiya
Jiya Jab Se More Naina Tose Lad Gaye


Slowly the wind breezed into their room and one by one the candles started blowing out until final the room was only lit by the glow from the moon. Prem took her hand and slowly helped lay her back on the bed, and then slowly lay down next to her. She started blushing then, not knowing why but her heart was doing multiple cartwheels, and finally she felt his touch again, this time at her chin, tilting it so she'd look into his eyes. He should know by know that once he looked into her eyes, she was a goner, she wouldn't be able to think straight nor would she be able to utter a word.


Piya Jab Se More Naina Tose Lad Gaye
Baawari Si Phiru
Tera Intzaar Karu
Kyun Tadpa Diya


Ever so lightly he let his finger linger over her cheeks, brushing away a strand of hair that had escaped from behind her ear. He wanted her to know that this was it, yet somehow the look in her eyes told him that she was with him in this moment.


Jab Se More Naina Tose Lad Gaye


The moon shined down on them, showering them with the moonlight, as they embraced each other, never letting go....

*cringes* that was my first ever try....I'm not sure at all if it's good, because I really wrote it kinda of rushed, but as long as it doesn't completely seem that way I'm happy! 😊 Yes it's short, but I wanted the main thing to be about them, not about him apologizing or anything! 😃 Hope you all liked it though! 😳😳😳


Love you all loads,


Meera😳

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Posted: 16 years ago
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me first!! yay1!!😃
Heyla Meeru!!!!😛 surprise surprise????😳 lol..u must be jumping with joy to read this lol..NOT..
erhmm but me being me..impossible for me to stop commenting on ur stuff..
This was so romantic!!! fluff to the extreme here lol! Great job!!!
Me wanted an explanation from Prem😆 but i understand this is premeer we're talking about a couple who have crazy telepathy communication skills..suckers* gosh i'm jealous anyways..
Must say the second last paragraph was it? erhmm too lazy to check was mi fav! loved how u described all the candles going out, leaving them with the moonlight only..a very premeer phingoli😆...
But i'm having a hard time imagining the candles going out one by one..i actually had to stop and try to decipher that..erhmm and it didn't work...lol..but that's ok..we're talking about a land where the moon is always up, and the cure for everything is water... this phenomina is nothing😆 ohh i wonder how this family would survive in the future..u noe with all the climate change and all that..hmm...anyways good job!! and keep it up..i liked this fluff lol..it was cotton candy style..sweet fluff...😳
Edited by urworstnitemare - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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ki baat h meera dee!!!! luv it!!!!!🤗
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Posted: 16 years ago
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okayy
i absolutly loved it..i hope this is how it turns out 😳
meera...i love the way you described when Prem says 'Heer'
it was amazing, and did i tell you how much i loved it
and the song is perfect for Premeer
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Posted: 16 years ago
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aww Meera i loved it i loved and just loved it only if our mahan creatives could use a little brains too!!

but Meera im sure by now you know that your a gifted writer Ive always always loved your One- Shots and aswell as you FF's

Good Job!! Hope to see more coming :D
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Posted: 16 years ago
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aww thats was soooo cute and romantic i loved it!!!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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OMG....i loved it...it was awesome...seriously u sud take this ipshitas place......u r too good...omg i was imagining the whole thing...too good....👍🏼.....👏
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Thanks everyone will comment back tomorrow morning! 😃
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Posted: 16 years ago
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👏👏👏brilliant one shot Meera..Loved it very much..great narration..beautiful language..keep up the gr8 work dear!!
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Posted: 16 years ago
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OMG, Meera *fans self* Lemme come back to this when I'm not so distracted though.

*edited*

I was watching Merlin. I never should have told Bhav about it, then I would have had Arthur all to myself. *grins goofily*

The shot was fabulous Meera! It was simple and to the point, explaining the apology on Prem's part to his mom and Veera, and the connection and understanding between PremHeer. And the apparant attraction as well. 😉😆 The love is obvious, the desire sizzling. And leaving the rest to our imagination. *shivers* That was so good.

Love,
Radz

Edited by Anhdara13 - 16 years ago

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