(FF)Kaise Mujhe Tum...| Ch 2, Pg 5|Apr 4

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Hello everyone,


Ho' O0'H0..O0
H0'O0'H0'O0
H0'O0'

Kaise mujhe turn mil gayeen
Qismat pe aaye na yaqeen
Ho' O0'H0..O0
H0'O0'H0'O0
H0'O0'
Utar aayee jheel mein
Jaise chaand utarta hai
kabhi Houley houley Dheerey se

My 11th FF. Don't worry, I AM counting you know.😆 I am not that bad in Mathematics.

Kaise Mujhe Tum...

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Gungunati dhoop ki tarah se
Tarannum mein turn

Chhookey mujhe
Guzri ho yun
Dekhoon tumhe
Ya main sunoo
Tum ho sukoon
Turn ho junoo
Kyun pahle na
Aayeen turn

Kaise mujhe turn mil gayeen
Ho' O0'H0..O0
Qismat pea aye na yaqeen
Ho' O0'H0..O0

This FF basically talks about how Prem is supposed to get married to Zahra (Pyari_Zahra) but ends up falling for Heer.

Characters -

Prem Juneja - A 25 year business man on the lookout for a bride. He is rich, handsome, nice, and let's say, every girl's dream.

Heer Mann - She is a 24 year old girl, who is nice, sweet, adorable, has her own dreams but at the same time, is caring towards her family and others. She is someone who is finds happiness in the world's smallest things, someone who is ready to give up her own dreams for others.

Zahra Mann - She is Heer's elder cousin sister, 25 years old. Zahra is totally into business, and is quite aw'ed by Prem.

Shabo Juneja - She is Prem's younger sister who is always wiling to listen to her brothers troubles and give him her pro, well, let's say good advice

The story is set in Mumbai, India in the year 2009, like obviously!😆
Chapters -
Chapter 1 - Pg 1
Chapter 2 - Pg 5

H0'O0'H0'O0
H0'O0'

Main to ye sochta tha Ki aaj kal
Oopar wale ko fursat nahi
Phir bhi tumhe
banake woh
Meri nazar mein chadh gaya
Rutbe mein woh
Aur badh gaya

Aa'aa'aa' aa' aa' aa'

Ho' O0'H0..O0
Ho' O0'H0..O0''''

Badley raaste jharne aur nadi
Badley ret ki tim tim
Chhedhe zindage dhool koi nahi
Badley barkha ki rim jhim
Badlengi rituen ada
Par main rahoongi sada
Usi tarah
Teri bahon mein bahen daalke
Har lamha Har pal

Now the key word is, what is it that attracts Prem to Heer and not Zahra?


Aa'aa'aa' aa' aa' aa'

Zindagi sitar ho gayee
Rim jhim malhar ho gayee
Mujhe aata nahi
Qismat pe apne yaqeen'..yaqeen
Kaise mujhko mil gayee turn

I hope you like this FF and hopefully, Zahra doesn't kill me for adding her into this FF but hey, I did promise you a FF, didn't I?

~Shifu
Edited by *Shifali* - 16 years ago

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Chapter 1

"Heer! Get up!" shouts my aunt, Daljeet, loudly in my ears. I turn my head towards the other side of my bed, ruffling my pillow on my face. DJ chachi, slams her fist to her head. "Uff, ye ladki bhi na!" she says. Chachi shakes me again. "Heer, get up! Some ladke wale are coming to see Zahra today, and I want you to be ready in time." she says, all in one breath.
"What Chachi, can't I sleep?" I ask, get sitting on my bed, ruffling my eyes. I roll my hands on my eyes as I yawn. I strech my arms.
"No you can't Heer. I told you already. Some ladke wale are coming to see Zahra for wedding preparations and I want you to clean the house up and cook some good food." she says in a voice that looked like she was ordering me to obey her and if I didn't then it would be the worst day of my life. "Now hurry up and get ready. It's 11am already and they are coming at 2pm. Aur haan, they will be having lunch here aswell." That's all she says and then she leaves.
After she leaves, I stay on my bed, thinking about the guy that would be coming to see Zahra. I hope he is a good human being. I then smile thinking about my marriage and when my dream will come true but that was no where close to come. I didn't have any parents, or even anyone living close enough to be called 'my own.' I only had my Chacha, Chachi and my elder cousin Zahra but it was not the same feeling as having someone really close to you. I then smile, trying to hide my pain and get up to get ready.
I come back out of the washroom in 15 minutes. I come out wearing a light pink Anarkali Indian attire, that had no beads, no nothing. Just a simple pink dress. I then comb my hair and put on some lipgloss and a pair of pink earings. After I am done, I go straight to the kitchen to grab myself a glass of orange juice with a muffins. I then sit on the kitchen table and start to nibble on my muffin and drink my orange juice. As I am doing so, my thoughts keep racing back to the guy that would be coming to see Zahra. I had been to weddings before but that was a whole different experience. Here, it was all happening in my own house and to my own cousin. And I knew, it was something totally different to see such weddings happening from far away then having it all happen in our own house. As for the guy, the only thing I had heard was he was the chairman of Juneja Industries. I know I know, things may not work out between that guy and Zahra, but nothing is wrong in assuming, plus all I knew was they were made for each other. Zahra loved business and he was a business man himself, so they are meant to be together.
"Made for each other..." I mutter. I knew that him and Zahra were made for each other but this is just a assumption. If he had come to see me, I don't know about him, I would have said 'No'. It's not that anything is wrong with him but the word Business just makes me run away. It is like, him and I would never be a perfect pair. Him being all of a businessman type and me, being a girl to live in my own fantasy world. How would me and him ever be 'Made-for-each-other'. Just thinking about it made me feel wierd.
"Heer, tu bhi na." I say, giving myself a light pat on the head.
I take my dishes from the table and put them in the sink. I then get hard to work with cooking up some appetizers, lunch and dessert. After I am done with my cooking, I smile at the food, cooked my the great chef aka Ms. Heer Mann and go and knock on Zahra's door.
"Hello? Zahra?" I say, knocking on the door and then opening it and peeking inside.
"Zahra?" I say again as I enter her room, looking around for her. And there, I finally see her, standing at her closet. I roll my eyes as I walk towards her.
"Zahra!" I say, a little louder this time.
Zahra turns around to look at me. "Heer! Thank God you are here! Now help me. What should I wear today?" she asks showing me her wardrobe that was full of everything else but Indian attire. I roll my eyes, and she looks at me in a "What-is-wrong-manner".
"Zahra, the groom and his family is coming to meet you. So today, all this jeans will not work. You need something Indian." I say, trying to make her finally realize that she had picked the wrong clothes.
"Now what shall I do?" she asks, looking sad.
I bite my lip, trying to think of something. "Hmm, acha, wait a second." I walk over to Zahra's closet with all her bedsheets and everything and take out 2 Pillow cases that had a ancient Indian design on them, a bedsheet that had a pink flower on it. I then get hard to work cutting the pillow cases and bedsheets out to make the final product of a Fashionable saari. Zahra is in a complete 'awe' of the saari and looks at me with wide eyes while I simply smile at her.
"Heer, this is...A.M.A.Z.I.N.G" she finally manages to say.
"Thank you." I reply.
"How did you manage to learn all this?" she says.
"Just a little passion." I simply reply. "Now go get ready."
I smile and leave.
~End of Ch 1~
Edited by *Shifali* - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Uhem, so I can reserve this spot? 😳 If I can't...you can delete my post! 😊

*unreserved*

11....😆 Oohhh so you did the sister story here? I love it!😃😳😳

Ahhh Zahra's getting married to Prem!😃 how sweet is that? Oooh and Shabo as his sister?? totally cute!!!😃😃😃 She's going to be fun to read about!😉😆😆

Okay so that was a perfect introductory chapter! 😃 We got to see both the girls characters totally clear! 😃 I'm sooooo glad Zahra's not some evil step cousin type person, although I do feel bad for her being DJ's daughter, but shes better than ash!😉😃😳

I love what Heer's wearing you described it beautifully, and awww I loved where she was thinking about all the "made for each other" type stuff!😳 Very realistic!

Awww Poor Zahra, didn't know what to wear? And seriously...bedsheets?😆 I love that!😃😳 Heer's just totally awesome in all that!😃

Can't wait to see what happens when Mr. Prem Juneja comes to see Zahroo! 😃😳

Love you loads shifu,

Meera😳
Edited by indiandoll89 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey 11 ffs wow but i have to say all of dem r mindblowing as long as u rember to update dis one sound great and do continue plzzzzzzzzzzzz
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Thanks for reserving Meera and thanks for commeting Zaibun and I hope I could continue to update this one *Laughs*
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Posted: 16 years ago
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awesomeeeeeee too good very nice part waitingggggggggg for next asap.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Shoot Meera beat me to it. Well at least I get to post my comment before her😆

Zahra's Heer's cousin? Cool! Wait...if Prem is supposed to fall in love with Heer while Zahra loves Prem, this is gonna be an awkward love triangle isn't it? I love it😃

Aww Heer doesn't have an parents? Hopefully her her chacha and them are there for her =) And she's totally wrong about the made for each other part😆 I'm guessing she hasn't heard of the saying opposites attract?😆

Zahra doesn't have any Indian clothes?😆 Lucky for Heer's there to save the day. I find it cool that she could make a sari out of bedsheets. I think I'll go try that =)
Loved the update Shifali and congratz with your 11th one😆 And good luck trying to continuing all of them😆
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Posted: 16 years ago
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good part
it's different
update soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hi shifali 11 ffs....oh god how iam going to give comments to all😆😉..🤗thnk u sooo much for anothr ff.all ffs r amazing and unique . plzzzzzzzzzzz tell me what r u eating?😉.waiting for nxt pt😊.

Posted: 16 years ago
#10
omg. I log in, all the way from NJ, just to comment on all your updates and this is what I find. ANOTHER one. 😆

I love the concept of the story...how even though Prem and Zahra were supposed to get married, Premeer's love is so strong that it defied even that. Hopefully Zahra won't kill you. I still can't get over the fact that you killed Radz di. 😆

I'm a Juneja. ☺️Sorry I glazed over for a second, but I loved "Shabo Juneja" (☺️) description about that advice. 😆

The first part was well written, almost like a Cinderella setting but Zarha isn't evil. 😆 I love the thoughts you kept putting in! Specially Zahra's opinions on the clothes...and Heer...what a passion. 😉

Can't wait to keep reading! Good luck with all 11!

--shabz

*skips off to comment on the rest*

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