FF: Ajnabee Ehsaas ||Part *13*-Pg 19 ;March 25th|| - Page 3

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Hey guys 😊, so I know I was supposed to update yesterday but when I woke up yesterday I forgot that I had work lol. So here I am with another update, it's not very exciting , but the future updates will be so don't worry.
Again please let me know what you think!

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A wide grin spread across his face as he pulled his head back against the seat and closed his eyes.

Heer was fuming but didn't want any more drama so she restrained herself from lashing out at him. Instead she pulled her phone out, Ayesha had texted back,

Arre yaar, Heer... k don't worry she's

not goin to let u go like that

U gave an awesome interview, I think she

likes u..just show up again tomorrow k ciao.

Phew, that's a load off my shoulders... With that Heer directed attention towards the window taking in the grey and green blurred images of the trees and clouds reflecting it's shades on the city.

The vehicle came to halt, it was Heer's stop, gathering her jacket and purse she was getting ready to shoo the man off the seat so she could get through. His head was tilted off the top off the seat... lightly snoring with his mouth slightly open, maybe even dreaming. It seemed like that because his eyes where lightly scrunched but still peaceful at the same time, Heer you got to admit he looks awfully cute while sleeping but only when he's a sleeping, maybe it's because his big mouth isn't open, well it is open at least there's no sound. Heer's lips stretched across her face involuntarily smiling. K you want to go home don't you, you've got to wake him up.

Poking her index finger into his shoulder, "Hey... heyyyy..." this clearly wasn't working. Grabbing his shoulder this time, she gave him a big shake, "Oyeee... helooo."

Snorting and sniffling he was awake, "hmm ... ah... k," He got up and started to walk down the aisle, Heer following behind him.

The bus stop was right in front of Heer's old highschool which was down the street from her house. Realizing that she forgot to grab her jacket on the seat, she went to grab it... getting off the bus she saw no sign of him... it's like he disappeared ... Hmph.

- - -

By the time Heer got home it was 12:44, Heer sucked in a gust of air followed with a loud sigh as she let herself fall on her comfy bed face flat, she was relieved that at least no one was home to see that she was home so early, her mom Teji probably out shopping, and papa at the office. Heer's father, Balraj Mann was a successful accountant; he was a self made man. He landed in Canada with his newly married wife 25 years back, and since then he's been working his whole life. Balraj got his wife to quit her job six years back when he realized that his kids where growing up, he wanted Teji to spend as much time with the children as she could because he wasn't around to do that. He also wanted to make sure his children were in line, unlike many children of immigrant families that are left alone most of the time since their parents where always at work, and those kids where the ones that got out of hand.

The Mann family had five members, Teji, Balraj, Nihaal, Heer, and Ash. Ash was Heer's cousin. Ash's parents didn't hesitate when they let their daughter go abroad to live with Heer's mom and dad. It seemed like they didn't care to have her around much, but that didn't make much of a difference to Ash since she was always closer to her badey papa and badi mom.

Ash was quite successful for her age, she had all ready started teaching dance at a dance school downtown, she was great at any genre of dance. Heer also loved to dance except her forte was contemporary dance. Contemporary dance because it was free flowing, spontaneous, and there was no wrong or right to it, dancing made her feel beautiful internally.

Balraj was loved Ash like he loved his own children he saw no difference between them, he was even sweet enough to renovate the basement and make it Ash's own personal dance studio with the walls lined with mirrors and everything.

BUZZZ BUZZZ...

"Ughhhh..." Heer let out a groan as she felt her phone vibrate beside her head, it was Ash.

"Hey how's your first day on the job going...?" an enthused bubbly voice questioned.

"Horrible! My car broke down... and I was late, and she sent me home and ...uff.." she huffed burying her face into the sheets of her bed.

"Oh great... you know it's time you bought a new car that old thing is nothing but trouble..."

"Maybe if I had a job, I could get a new car..." She began to whine, "I'll give you the 411 when you get home..." Heer felt a pang of pain as she remembered the scene in the morning.

"Oh dear, I'm leaving in an hour I'll see ya then, till then chill Okay? Later hun" Ash comforted.

"Mmmhmm, K later." Snapping her phone shut.

- - -

Heer hunched over her Froot loops lazily, with the TV on in the background, until some jingling cut the stagnant environment, Ash dropped her keys on the table and began to walk towards Heer and immediately began to ask for details,

"So Ayesha said to just show up tomorrow, eh, well what's the harm in that, just watch tomorrow will be so different, you got to have a few bumps along the road to get you in line."

"Yaa you're right," Heer smiled

"K so, I've got to put together some new choreography, and you're helping me so let's get to work, it'll cheer you up," It was easy for Heer to talk to Ash, she wasn't the type to ponder over the negatives, she always had a way to distract Heer and cheer her up.

I'm actually typing the 5th update as we speak and plan on posting it very soon 😳, thank's so much for appreciating my work!🤗


**edited**

Part 5 = page 5👍🏼

Edited by riyapk - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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thanks for another update!!! i hope things go well for heer next day on her job. and it looks like ash and heer share a very strong relationship. update soon....

~nikki
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey
awesum update
hope everything will be fine for heer

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Posted: 16 years ago
#24
awesome story cont soon plz!👏
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Awesome update👏
love ash and heer's realtionship!!!
PLz continue soon
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wow wow I loved the part.Waiting to see more.
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: .xganga.x

Hey!

Awesome 3rd part!
already up!!
Heer really is having a bad day...i feel so sorry for her!
and then having to put up that guy....(Prem???)
Can't wait till the next update!
xXx
Sunayna
= ]



lol aw thanks, I guess it was pretty obvious eh, yup that's prem all right eheh. Next update is already up and I'll be posting the 5th one most likely tommorow 😊

Originally posted by: srklover93

Hey Riya!!!

I read all three parts of your FF!!!! its totally awesome!!!!!! i love it, and the story is different too, cant wait to read the next part!!! update soon!!

Garima =]



Thank's so much for liking my FF 😳, I thought I'd make the sotry a little different and I didn't know if people would like it.


Originally posted by: ~nikki1992~

hey, i like the way ur FF is going. poor heer is having a terrible day. is that guy Prem??? hope so.....

waiting for the next update!!!
~nikki



Thanks for reading 😛, ofcourse it's Prem lol



Originally posted by: pooji123456789

hey
awesum update
interesting
very nice
do cont soon...



Thanks for reading hun 🤗

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: iqbals4ever

awesome story cont soon plz!👏



Will do 👍🏼

Originally posted by: Iqra238

Awesome update👏

love ash and heer's realtionship!!!
PLz continue soon



Thank's for reading Iqra 😳

Originally posted by: Intellienough

wow wow I loved the part.Waiting to see more.



Aahah I'll update very soon 👍🏼

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Posted: 16 years ago
#29

Originally posted by: amanaranjan

hi just caight up with ur ff

its brilliant
so not one of the best days in heers life huh?lol
i guess it doesnt help with the rain, broken car and a supposed stalker............haha
loved the way prem pissed of heer
gr8 job
updt asap
Amana



lol thanks for the compliments and the encouragment 😳, let's see what happens for her tommorow hehe
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Originally posted by: happybrar

awesome

i read all parts today
update soon



Awesome please keep reading 😊

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