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Posted: 17 years ago
#11

Originally posted by: aayushikaran

This was very well writen, I really liked it. 10 out of 10 for FF, Rani. 👏 Well done!👏 👏

Thank u so much..😛
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Posted: 17 years ago
#12
its really nice di...cont soon..i know its hard for u but manie to apna kaam chala liya....
luv iqra
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Posted: 17 years ago
#13
awesome...veryy fun!
cheered up my mood!
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Posted: 17 years ago
#14

Originally posted by: blushpink13

its really nice di...cont soon..i know its hard for u but manie to apna kaam chala liya....

luv iqra


Hi Iqra-thanks..yeah it's little bit diffcult..par aapne apna kaam kaise chala liya?
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Posted: 17 years ago
#15

Originally posted by: Additi

awesome...veryy fun!

cheered up my mood!
👍🏼


Hey Additi..thank u..I'm glad it cheered u up..and btw..r u by any chance ADDITI GUPTA of KDMHMD??!!??😆
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Posted: 17 years ago
#16

thank u all for liking the first update..here goes the next part-scene-portion..

H:help?hmm..nahi meri saari le li hai..

P:acha toh..tum vaapas aa rahi ho ab?

H:haan..talking she goes towards him..but only she can see him..and not Prem..but little did she know..there was a glass infront of him
and he saw her reflection there..and he knew..she is there behind him..but not telling him

P:acha suno Heer..tum kahan ho?

H:mein..mein gaadi mein hoon..ghar aa rahi hoon..she is standing behind a pillar..he walks away..

P:acha acha..mujhe tumse bahut zaroori baat karni thi..

H:she became tensed as to what he wants to say now..when there is an engagement to take place in couple of hrs..haan
batao?

P:woh sagaai se pehle hi karni hai..now he started sounding very serious which made her nervous..she stopped staring at him and
continued talking to him over the phone..sun rahi ho na?

H:haan haan batao?kya zaroori baat hai?

By this time he has walked upto her from behind and she is totally unaware..and she is seeming very tensed..he stands behind her
comes close to her and whispers in her ear..

P:I LOVE YOU!!..

she turns behind all of a sudden..meanwhile she trips from her place..but Prem holds her hand so that she doesn't fall off..and there is an eye locking session..she then realises he has been watching her all this while..she feels stupid..she tries to go away..but he holds her hand again..

P:tum mujhse chupkar kyun baat kar rahi thi?

H:woh..woh..mein..

P:khair chodo..meri baat ka koi reaction?

H:kya?

P:abhi jo meine kaha?usse suni bhi ya nahi?

H:huh?haan suni na..

P:toh?

H:toh?

P:TOH?

H:mujhe tayyar bhi hona hai..mein chalti hoon..she starts to go from there..

P:holds her hand again and grabs her towards him..tum bhi kaho?

H:kya?

P:abhi jo meine kaha..woh..

H:baad mein..abhi mujhe jaana hai..

P:nahi abhi..jab tak tum nahi kahogi..mein tumhe jaane nahi doonga..kaho..

H:Prem..please koi dekhlega..

P:dekhne do..

H:koi aa jaayega..

P:aanedo..

H:PREM..

P:HEER..

L:Prem??kahaan ho..Gaya3 kahan gaya Prem?

Gaya3:arre meine hi beja hai usse..woh Heer abhi tak aayi nahi na..isliye..

L:acha..call karleta hoon..

Gaya3:ji..

Lalit is about to call Prem..just then Kulraj passes by and informs him that Prem is having her cell phone..so he dials that number..

Here behind the curtains in the hallway..Prem and Heer r still arguing and staring session is in full swing..just then the phone rings..
Lalit wonders..because the phone is ringing very nearby..and when he was calling Prem he didn't get any reply..

L:arre..phone toh yahin kahin hai..par yeh Prem kahan reh gaya..chalo dekhta hoon..

Prem is lost in Heer's shyness..but Heer is aware that someone is coming near by..she somehow with great diffculty lets go
of her hand..and runs to her room..Prem is still staring at her..there is a pat on his shoulder..he brushes it off..there is a pat again
and again..now is comes out of his dreamworld..and turns around to see who it is..and it's his father..

L:Prem!yahan kya kar raha hai..iss parde ke peeche..mein kabse tumhe bula rahaan hoon beta..

P:woh baoji..sorry..mein..

L:rehne do..aur yeh kya tum abhi tak tayyar nahi hue..chalo Prem..jaake tayyar ho jao..

P:ji baoji..woh aap mujhe doond rahe the?

L:haan woh koi baat nahi..tum jaake tayyar ho jao..mein woh dekhloonga..

P:ji baoji..saying that Lalit leaves from there..and Prem wonders where Heer ran off to..he is walking to his room..and comes across Heer's room..and there she is giggling..because she saw the whole scene between father and son..Prem tries to go to her..but at the
time Heer closes the door..Prem just smiles to himself and goes to get ready..

this was a small part..I know..but if it's possible then I'll write another scene today itself..pls leave ur comments..
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Posted: 17 years ago
#17
really nice, the weekend will not seem so long now, a quick suggestion, can u update the new part in ur original post, bcos i wasnt sure where the next part was, and another suggestion for the story line, remember the challa of heers that ash gave to prem on their engagement, i think heer should use the same for their engagement, so prem needs to find out that the challa was heers and return it to her and so on, hope u can add it to ur story, thanks
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Posted: 17 years ago
#18
hmmm rele nice di. specially the father son scene. it was awsome cont soon.
luv iqra
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Posted: 17 years ago
#19

Originally posted by: fj08

really nice, the weekend will not seem so long now, a quick suggestion, can u update the new part in ur original post, bcos i wasnt sure where the next part was, and another suggestion for the story line, remember the challa of heers that ash gave to prem on their engagement, i think heer should use the same for their engagement, so prem needs to find out that the challa was heers and return it to her and so on, hope u can add it to ur story, thanks

Hi there..sorry I don't know ur name so..regarding updating on the original post..I actually change the name of the topic..everytime I upload the next part..so that u can go to that particular page..but still yeah I'll try to put that in the first post..regarding the ring which is Heer's..actually I've been wanting to put it alltogether with the update..but u see I'm not that creative to combine all that..😳..but will definitely try to put in too..and thank u so much for the suggestions..they were really good..and keep em coming..😃
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Posted: 17 years ago
#20

Originally posted by: blushpink13

hmmm rele nice di. specially the father son scene. it was awsome cont soon.

luv iqra

Hello Iqra..how r ya?thanks..will continue soon..

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