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Posted: 17 years ago

#681

Hey Jc….well I'm on my second break….first it was to read Rima's update and now urs…lol…though it was all worth it…

Coming back to the update…I'm just loving the whole Neesha track…the way they are coming together….its really beautiful…it's a shame that the creatives never understood the Neesha chemistry…

Really loving neev…he is soo adorable and love the way he is showing his love and his concern…diner scene was beautiful…and nice song selection…u always come up with beautiful songs…

As for the Michi part…the best line was "He wasn't sure which half he liked better" …Oh Milind you better start making up your mind…it's in some way obvious that he is drawn to Prachi….her presence in definitely affecting him and his feelings…

It was nice to see that he was concern when Prachi was worried…

Thanks JC for the update…always enjoy reading them…

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Posted: 17 years ago

#682

Originally posted by: Heeba
Hey Jc….well I'm on my second break….first it was to read Rima's update and now urs…lol…though it was all worth it…

Heebs...now an update from you would just make my day...😊😳 lol...I'm literally counting down the 2 weeks!!!😆

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Heeba

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Posted: 17 years ago

#683

Originally posted by: zcbcc34

Heebs...now an update from you would just make my day...😊😳 lol...I'm literally counting down the 2 weeks!!!😆

After two weeks...I'll make it a supper dupper long update....hopefully that will make it up for the long wait

@JC...the update is on page 88 and not 86...😳

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Saima

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Posted: 17 years ago

#684

JC....thanx for the dedication....altho, i'm pretty sure i really didn't do anything to inspire you...so thanx for that!:D k, u know how i feel about Ayesha, right?!! well, surprisingly my dislike for her might be wavering and on its way to crumbling. i know there is a reason to her being distant and i'm actually waiting when she just lets herself be and tries to do small things to make Neev's day. the guy's a sweetheart!!

Writing comments: your writing shows that you think things thru and the whole song bit and actually linking them with ur FF is not only pure genius but reflects your painstaking efforts. Amazingg!!:DD All the best with your school projects...u told me u'd be swamped with them for a while!!

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@-JC-

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Posted: 17 years ago

#685

Ahh! you scared me!! 😆
hahaha...late April fools. Ok sorry but honestly i knew i was rushing a bit and i know how everyone likes to know every little detail.

Okay was seriously going to kill you when I saw that small NEESHA part...thought you had side lined the poor babies...😡 But the you redeemed yourself but giving us a FABULOUS ending...
thanx for not jumping the gun.😆😆😆
Rightio...*Takes a deep breath*
me too. When i didn't see your comments for a long time i thought you didn't like it much.
*Ab yeh Anjali ko kya hua???? This girl!!! lol...I dont know why I cant seem to understand her Its not your fault. I have not really told you what happened to her.(Maybe because Milind still thinks about her and I dont want him to? Okay I realise that doesn't make sense either...😆) Yes his anger towards her came out in this part and thats probably why you are frustrated too. But you'll understand her when she finally comes back to India. And some day Milind may also find out what actually happened and he may not be so angry anymore....but I'm going to wait patiently for your reasons before I pass more judgement...and trust me I have learnt the virtue of patience..😆😆😆 Thankx.

*But she often tells me that we are like halfs of each other. I just laugh at her because we are both so different."
Milind could see the difference between them but he wasn't sure which half he liked better. -I really liked this bit...but Milind really is in a pickle...I thought we were making some headway with the getting over Anjali thing? He is not too confused now dear. But getting over Anjali the girl he loved even though he didn't see or hear from her for years...and falling in love with Prachi his wife from a marriage of convenience and of a family that he hates...takes time. That part was to show that he once fell in love with Anjali and now is drawn to Prachi and is natural that he would compare. Its not necessarily because he is still stuck in his past. I only have one tiny thing is bothering me...his sudden anger over Anjali... although I do recall what he said at his wedding to her...so maybe he just hadn't had the oppertunity to express it again till now....his anger is not sudden. He was always angry. But he chose to forget it and get over it and move one. But now her actions had obviously caused Prachi some major worrying and Milind saw that and the fact that Anjali didn't feel the responsibility to call and assure her that everything was fine was frustrating him. It was that he was more that he didn't like to see Prachi worried like that...tho he doesn't realize that himself. He feels that Anjali is conceited and that adds to his anger.

I liked the fact that Prachi confided in Milind and he sought to help her...though I suspect that may have been to ease his worries as well...
umm maybe to some extent. But it was more her worries that were haavi on his head at the moment.
See i knew i should have explained it a bit more. Now everyone will think his actions were because of his own worry for Anjali.

and I really appreciated this bit And Milind had no doubt that Prachi considered herself Ritwik's mother and nothing less because frankly she is...and maybe I need to go back and read again but where was he when Ritwik was a baby and needed someone? also unless I'm mistaken...did Prachi not agree that once Sukriti is better she'll give them the child? No, Prachi didn't tell Milind that she would give up Ritiwk to them. She thought that to herself...or i think Prachi may have said to Anjali once...i forget...but not to Milind. Milind doesn't know of this yet.

First of all okay hun I'm KEEPING Neev for myself...it's decided....
this part just got me...so romantic!!! 😳haha too bad. Neevu is my Jaanu. Ayesha: "A promise??", she hadn't expected him to say that either.
Neev: "Yes, I want you to promise me something in the same way that I have told you what being with you means to me…"
Haiiiiii!
i know i am a romantic fool.
I Loved Loved that he waited for her outside EARLY on sunday..but seems like he's become her perennial driver...😆 but he like to drive her around.😳 ok joking lol...jokes apart...My only wish would have been if she invited him with her into the Church...and he got to see what she was like there abit more than he already has...and he could have helped too and that would have been soemthing they do together etc...
I thought of that. But then the chapter would get long and i wanted the next chapter to really be the climax for Neesha part in my FF. Also because Neev himself said that he only wanted to drop her off and he also had to prepare for her birthday celebration. He had to go shopping for her too.

Whoa! was not expecting it to be her birthday but that was very sweet...I thought Ayesha was perfect when, she did this... "Promise…", he asked again. She kept her eyes closed and nodded slightly, still trying to get her breathing in control as the words of promise filled the air. 👏

She didn't speak...like usual but atleast now he knows how she feels...was very well done...loved it!!
Thankyou. *taking a bow*.😆😆 I thought that was perfect for Ayesha at this moment too...because she really can't express herself sometimes.

and I know you've set the Neesha part a few weeks later but are you going to revisit the past and show us how they became closer? I would LOVE to read that!!!😳 I wish i could because I think that's why it may seem a little rushed, though it is beautiful...we just need a little more...I dont know what the word is...but background? There is some background that will come in the next chapter. But its not what you expect. Because as far as i see it, Neev has already proved that he loves Ayesha and wants to be with her and he has expressed it several times. It was the change in Ayesha's part that you might be curious about. But that happens because Ayesha is not someone who expresses herself that often. We know how she feels mostly from her thoughts and the little part in the beginning did mention that she too loved Neev and wanted to be with him but just couldn't for a particular reason for which see wa s determined to get help. And what that particular reason is will be in the next part. I hope that will be sufficient because if i give every little detail, my FF is going to be like a 100 chapter one.😆😆 I am doing this also because the FF is going to take a leap soon. The leap will be of a few months or maybe a year. And you will be left wondering how things got to this point, tho i'll try to provide as much background as possible...but you'll just have to take it.😃 Sovvy.

My Thank Yous still stand...😊

Danx😆😆😆

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Thanx for the comments. luv ya.🤗🤗🤗

Edited by jinc118 - 17 years ago

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Panache

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Posted: 17 years ago

#686

JC....a very good part!!
Esp....Where i could see his change....Anjali...uff! what's wrong with that gal!!! I hate people when they call up and cry and then don't say anything making you worry even more!!!

Prachi and Anjali are different - I can see that in your characterization!!

Neesha at the end was too good!! 😳

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Posted: 17 years ago

#687

Originally posted by: Heeba
Hey Jc….well I'm on my second break….first it was to read Rima's update and now urs…lol…though it was all worth it…
thankyou. I also updated cause i am on break.😆😆
Coming back to the update…I'm just loving the whole Neesha track…the way they are coming together….its really beautiful…it's a shame that the creatives never understood the Neesha chemistry…
I know. How i wish to see them together in the show and Ayesha to be the girl she was in the beginning of the show. You know the part on thursday when Neev said "i am not your husband anymore that you are ordering me around."😆😆 I was instantly reminded when Neev in my FF told her that she can find someone else to wake her because he is not her husband anymore.😆😆 Oh my Neesha. It would be so good to have them together. *sigh*
Really loving neev…he is soo adorable and love the way he is showing his love and his concern…diner scene was beautiful…and nice song selection…u always come up with beautiful songs…
thanx. If it was me, i'd tell the whole story with songs.😆😆 But i am sure you guys won't be much interested in that. lolz.
As for the Michi part…the best line was "He wasn't sure which half he liked better" …Oh Milind you better start making up your mind…it's in some way obvious that he is drawn to Prachi….her presence in definitely affecting him and his feelings…
I think this really was the last for him. He won't be thinking of Anjali much more.
It was nice to see that he was concern when Prachi was worried… yup that was his concern tho he didn't really see it that way.

Thanks JC for the update…always enjoy reading them…

Thankx Heeba for the comments.

Edited by jinc118 - 17 years ago

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jdots

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Posted: 17 years ago

#688

wow brilliant part as usual!! 👏

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@-JC-

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Posted: 17 years ago

#689

Originally posted by: Heeba

Thankx Heeba. I changed it.

After two weeks...I'll make it a supper dupper long update....hopefully that will make it up for the long wait

@JC...the update is on page 88 and not 86...😳

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@-JC-

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Posted: 17 years ago

#690

Originally posted by: sailat
JC....thanx for the dedication....altho, i'm pretty sure i really didn't do anything to inspire you You don't know what you do hun. lolz. you are a motivator.😆😆...so thanx for that!:D Welcome k, u know how i feel about Ayesha, right?!! well, surprisingly my dislike for her might be wavering and on its way to crumbling. i know there is a reason to her being distant and i'm actually waiting when she just lets herself be and tries to do small things to make Neev's day. the guy's a sweetheart!! Finally. I am glad you are taking an interest in Neesha and Ayesha for that. She will soon break away from her current state. Hopefully the reason for her distance is justified in your eyes. But she will change a lot after the leap this FF will take.

Writing comments: your writing shows that you think things thru and the whole song bit and actually linking them with ur FF is not only pure genius but reflects your painstaking efforts.lolz. I guess music in my FF is the strangest part. I don't go anywhere without my ipod. and before they and ipods it was my portable CD player and before that it was a walkman. So you see it has more to do with my own personality than the characters.😆 Which is not that way to write a good story but this is my first one so chalta hai.😆😆 Amazingg!!:DD All the best with your school projects...u told me u'd be swamped with them for a while!! Yes yes. which reminds me that i must return to studying now as i have wasted a lot of precious time.

Edited by jinc118 - 17 years ago

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