FF: Rishtey(MP-NA)- new prt updtd 12/25 new thread - Page 100

Originally posted by: optimist

Coming to Part II of Chapter 38, finally we get the much awaited Neesha c-night. You handled it well. Kept it clean and at the same time enticing and sensual. really...😃 i kept it clean😆 personal preference...but its hard to make it sensual and clean at the same time...so i just hoped that it wasn't too toned down.

So Ayesha was the initiator? That has to be considering that it is she who had to get over her past. Neev had already made his move and had to restrain himself because of her reaction. yup...that y she had to initiate this time. She got tired of waiting for him to realize that they were ready.😆😆😆

By the way are you a dancer? lolz...i am not great but i do dance. Not spanish dance tho...i am learning cause i have to dance at a friend's wedding...he is marrying a Hispanic.(kind of the reason y i chose that track) 😆 but i am not as bad as Anjali. You describe each dance so beautifully one can visualise the entire scene before one's eyes. Thankyou. I loved the fact that Neev gave her the time to heal and let her make the move. His making sure that she was alright with it and her reassuring him only emphasised how much each care for the other's feelings. While I loved everything about their lovemaking, I especially loved the last sentence for personal reasons: Finally they fell to sound sleep, Ayesha with her back to Neev fitting perfectly into his body, her head on his right arm and her fingers intertwined in his as his left hand fell over her waist. Thanks..i love that line too...to me it was a picture of how perfect they are for each other and with each other.

So Ayesha is not much of a cook. Well, that's one thing we have in common. I too never taste what I cook. Maybe that is why I am so bad at it! lolz..hahahahaha..my mom will come beat you...Shes the world's best cook and she wonders how she has a daughter like me who doesn't enter the kitchen even to get something for herself.😆😆😆 Tho secretly i do cook when i am in a mood...but if my mom knew...she would make me cook everyday. So i haven't told her.😆😆😆 how evil of me...but who would choose to eat my own food when mommy dearest cooks like she does.😉

I enjoyed this part too, JC. Whatever track you write whether it is Neesha, Michi or Kavyanjali, your attention to details really enlivens the whole reading experience. Thanks darling. ur the best.😃 love your comments.

Originally posted by: panache

JC...will comment after i get back from work! 😳

Originally posted by: jinc118

really...😃 i kept it clean😆 personal preference...but its hard to make it sensual and clean at the same time

Yes, I know. That's why I complimented you. There is a difference between sensual and sexual and you seem to understand it.

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so i just hoped that it wasn't too toned down.

It was not, atleast for me

So Ayesha was the initiator? That has to be considering that it is she who had to get over her past. Neev had already made his move and had to restrain himself because of her reaction. yup...that y she had to initiate this time. She got tired of waiting for him to realize that they were ready.😆😆😆

You cant blame the poor guy, can you? Would have feared another indirect rejection.

lolz..hahahahaha..my mom will come beat you...Shes the world's best cook and she wonders how she has a daughter like me who doesn't enter the kitchen even to get something for herself.😆😆😆 Tho secretly i do cook when i am in a mood...but if my mom knew...she would make me cook everyday. So i haven't told her.😆😆😆 how evil of me...but who would choose to eat my own food when mommy dearest cooks like she does.😉

So that is one other thing we two seem to have in common. My mom as well as my mom-in-law are great cooks. Explains why I am still a bad one. And yes, if I am in the mood to cook I do make reasonably good dishes.

Originally posted by: optimist

Sensual and sexual can be interpersed and something beautiful can still come out of it! For FF writers, it is always difficult to know when to draw the line.....it really is difficult. But a little risk needs to be taken to build the required sizzle, which is even more important considering that these are just words that the reader is looking at, and not actual people!

I do think the Neesha scene was a bit toned down, it could have been definitely perked up but still kept neat and clean........atleast that is what I thought! 😊

Originally posted by: pragalbha

Hey JC....finally!!!! yes finally😡😆😆
OK, I read chapter 38 only. I have not read the new one yet...will do it by this weekend! ok.😃
I had to put in 3, 12 hour days at work this week and that's the reason why I feel my new part of Bhagya Rekha is also not upto the mark 😕 i shall decide after i read-u keep ur judgements....anyway, I apologize for the delay!
Part 1 : I really really liked that Prachi had atleast a small soft corner for Alaap still. Because I find it difficult to imagine siblings cutting off each other completely......it happens sometimes but it is always hard to digest! Good to know that if Alaap feels the remorse strong enough then Prachi might help him out! 👏 👏 A very positive note. yes...i hope u feel positive after next ch too. But she will try to help him out as she can.
Also liked the clearing up of the confusion as to why Anjali was staying with Kavya. thank god i didn't confuse you further.😆😆

Now coming to the 'THE' part 😉 😆 ..........Honestly, I was a trifle disappointed! I am sorry if I am being harsh here! I anticipated that...so no worries.You built the tempo up beautifully.....and the best part was Ayesha initiating it. But I wish it was done in a more subtle manner! I wish that instead of making all that arrangements, she could have just walked back to their room, Neev following her and things happened naturally between them without the help of any external paraphernalia. I hope you understand what I am trying to say! What I was looking for was something natural, spontaneous combustion 😉 😆 😆. But hey I will take a Neesha scene anyday, lap it up with no questions asked!!!! 😆 😆 lolz...no need to be kind hun. but i had thought about the natural way of it but then...the natural way would be difficult to come about as Neev was very reluctant after the last time. So Ayesha had to do something to really send the message across loud...and thats why she chose to decorate the room. But i still felt that there was enough of the natural flow there and the setting just gave him a confirmation that this is what Ayesha wants. Another reason it was toned down (yes i know it was and deliberately so) because i was preparing for exams when i wrote it and i needed to get that out of the way...I had written something worse before but thankfully Rima told me it was bad.😆😆 But this is my first attempt at a consummation scn and hopefully i'll do a better job next time.

But the songs were awesome....specially the Sach Hui number was too good! Perfect for them! Thankyou...i love that song too. It was a song that someone requested long ago for me to make a Michi mix with but i wasn't so sure it was perfect for them...but here it seemed perfect.

Originally posted by: pragalbha

Sensual and sexual can be interpersed and something beautiful can still come out of it! yes i know Prags...i've read it...no reason to tell you where😃 For FF writers, it is always difficult to know when to draw the line.....it really is difficult. not for u...but for me...yes...so i opted to take the easy way. But a little risk needs to be taken to build the required sizzle, which is even more important considering that these are just words that the reader is looking at, and not actual people! ok point taken and will remember that next time i write something like that.

I do think the Neesha scene was a bit toned down, it could have been definitely perked up but still kept neat and clean........atleast that is what I thought! 😊 Thanks Prags. Like i said...will try to do a better job as long. And i am glad for your comments Prags...cause you are the inspiration behind my venture into FF writing. I'll take your comments seriously.😊

JC....do you know what I love the most about you??? 😊 You are so open to suggestions and do not take offence. You know, after writing my comments....I did not post it for 10 minutes! 😊 I was thinking and re-thinking that should I post this or not, will she get hurt?? But finally I did!
I can understand the apprehension you went through when writing an intimate scene...it was very difficult for me too when I wrote the first time!! And it was between Ra-Ka....so much water had flown between them that bringing them to that point was hard and then the final commitment had to be beautiful, sensual, desperate, not-desperate, complete, real, passionate, sizzling, hot, neat and clean 😆 😆 😆!! I had a hell of a time 😆 😆

In this context, one person I wanted to thank for encouraging me to take risk is Krishi!!!

And then again, the site is visited by people of all ages and gender. So we have to keep in mind that it does not get too much out of control....its a real tightrope walk 😆 But with the fantastic style of writing that you possess and the amazing vocabulary you have, you will be able to do it easily.....I am quite confident!!! 🤗

Originally posted by: pragalbha

JC....do you know what I love the most about you??? 😊 You are so open to suggestions and do not take offence. You know, after writing my comments....I did not post it for 10 minutes! 😊 I was thinking and re-thinking that should I post this or not, will she get hurt?? But finally I did! Thankyou for not thinking too much.😆 I enjoy criticism that helps me improve. i don't take offense to anyone else's criticism because i am my own biggest critique. I am the harshest on my own work and when i know that i could have done better yet i settle for something less that perfect (because i am lazy or whatever) ...i know what will come my way so i don't take offense...i expect it. ITs when people don't criticize that i get even lazier than think that the efforts i put in were enough. I loose that drive to do better. So never think more than twice for writing what you truly felt.
I can understand the apprehension you went through when writing an intimate scene...it was very difficult for me too when I wrote the first time!! And it was between Ra-Ka....so much water had flown between them that bringing them to that point was hard and then the final commitment had to be beautiful, sensual, desperate, not-desperate, complete, real, passionate, sizzling, hot, neat and clean 😆 😆 😆!! I had a hell of a time 😆 😆

In this context, one person I wanted to thank for encouraging me to take risk is Krishi!!! So u are suggesting i take the risk too..😆*musing*...risk...you are asking a scorpio to take risk...good luck with that...lolz. I'll pray that when i write the next intimate scn i'll be in a mood to take risk..

And then again, the site is visited by people of all ages and gender. So we have to keep in mind that it does not get too much out of control....its a real tightrope walk 😆 But with the fantastic style of writing that you possess and the amazing vocabulary you have, you will be able to do it easily.....I am quite confident!!! 🤗lolz...why is that other people are more confident about my abilities...lolz...hahaha...ok no need to praise me. I am inspired enough. Thanx Pragu. Luv you.🤗