FF: Ek Paal... (MP) Prt15 pg28 8/15 - Page 4

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Posted: 18 years ago
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hey jaz
gr8 part 👏
cont.sooon
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Posted: 18 years ago
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that was realy amazing jaz...wel done 👏
plz cont soon...
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Posted: 18 years ago
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I must admit tht ur a brilliant writer... I read both the parts todai and its AWSOME.. i dunno how else to describe ur writing.. its marvellous.. cont. coon
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Posted: 18 years ago
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hey jaz ur too good...awesome work..plz continue..n pm me when u update..thanx! 😉
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: srk_preity

wow....tat was really goood, please continue...... 👏


Thank You yaar...gald u liked it 😃!

Originally posted by: vishid

hi
thank u 4 ek oal
tis so nice
well i just wanted to thnak u
an dhope to see more soon
keep up the good writing


thanks yaar...so happy u liked it...and why the thanks...i write the ff's as a guilty pleasure 😳😳😳...thanks so much for the compliment 😃

Originally posted by: wande

wow wow 🤗thank u soo very much I love it pls do continue very soon 😳😳wow very nice 👏may GOD bless u 😃😃😉


haila...itne saare jaadu ki jaapis 😆😆😆...thank u...i take them all 😳😳😳...glad you love it...and will be posting soon 😃


Thanks 😃

Originally posted by: alveera

hey, jaz that's awesome.
written it beautifully, both of them are so lonely without each other 😭 i can feel their pain.
and these songs are so perfect.
btw waiting for the next part.


aww...thanks hun...lekin...don't cry...😕😕😕...the songs were so hard to chose...i couldn't think of them...but then the just 'came' to me 😉😉😉...😆😆😆...sorry for delay...but part 3 will be up soon....😃😃

Originally posted by: sneha_17

Make them meet each other, support and live for each other 😊


wow hun...great thought huh...but then...that wouldnt be a ff would it...maybe a little later 😉😉😉...

JAZ

Edited by jnawaz - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: blind horizon

Oh this was more than beautiful or wonderful so well written... 👏I just love love and love Milsi's appearance felt like I stood there watching him, rove my eyes from his coat to his tie to his hair his unbuttoned shirt and from his face to the starless sky above. 👏I think if a writer can bring a scene alive he or she has nailed it and for me you have. Oh n a wonderful part I can see both linger on in each other's memory as a treasured moment....precious really. 😊


thanks so much hun...glad that it gave you the intended effect...but then again...who wouldnt want to be staring at milind 😳...😉...there would be a line out the door 😆😆😆...yep...it was a special moment...that forever lives in their hearts and minds...really glad u liked it...thanks...😃

Originally posted by: YOOUSHA

Gr8 part
cont sooon


Thank you 😃

Originally posted by: arsh1910

awww...cute part....w8ing for the next(hopefully M and P meet 😉 post soon...hehehe
luv,
Arshia


MP meeting...so fast 😉...we will see...sorry for delay but will be posting soon...thanks yaar 😃

Originally posted by: lvsgm

Wow Jaz ..Definitely a beautiful part...Well written..Poor Prachi and both of them still thinking about each other when they think about happiness..

Cant wait to read the next part


thank you...😊😊😊...i know...poor souls....still miss each other...lets see if there is something we...i mean 'I'...can do about that 😉😉😉...😛...😃

Originally posted by: prem_fan

i loved reading "Ek paal" its amazing! cant wait to read the next part!!


Glad you liked it...Thanks 😃


Originally posted by: shali

jaz hunny ...
thank you for your pm 😃😛... so sorry 😳...
but the chapters were amazing 👏👏👏...
I got drifted away in your story 😍
bheatifull written 👍🏼

will be waiting for the next update 😃....


yaar...no sorry business...u take your time...no prob 😃😃😃...thanks for the comment/compliment...😳😳😳...haila...drifted away...😕😕...dont get lost now 😆😆😆...bad joke...sorry 😕😕...but thanks 😃

JAZ
Edited by jnawaz - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Thanks 😃


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Originally posted by: janu_2006

hey jaz
gr8 part 👏
cont.sooon


hi yaar...u on kayamath too...😃😃...thank u...and will be posting soon 😊😊

Originally posted by: hopeful

Simply wonderful 👏


Thank You 😃

Originally posted by: angel_sintu

that was realy amazing jaz...wel done 👏plz cont soon...


thanks yaar...will post next part in a few 😃

Originally posted by: pori

I must admit tht ur a brilliant writer... I read both the parts todai and its AWSOME.. i dunno how else to describe ur writing.. its marvellous.. cont. coon


thanks for the admission 😆😆😆...glad that u liked it...i try my best...as long as the audience likes it...im happy 😃😃😃...thank u 😊


Originally posted by: *lucku_karen*

hey jaz ur too good...awesome work..plz continue..n pm me when u update..thanx! 😉


thanks...glad u enjoyed it...will pm when i update...hope u like 😃

JAZ

Edited by jnawaz - 18 years ago
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** Hi all my wonderful readers 😃...i am so sorry for the delay in updating...but i had midterms and work...and on top of all that...my didi is throwing a reception and we are practicing our performance when ever we have time...but i finally had tome to update...hope u all like it...**

NOTE: Please keep an open mind...no matter what is happeing with MP now...in the end all will be well...i am a sucker for happy endings...so just read the update with a bit of an open mind...if anything offends anyone...i am sorry...it is truly just in the spirit of the ff...😊😊😊

Part 3

Main jahaan rahoon
Main kahin bhi hoon
Teri yaad saaath hai
Kisi se kahoon
Ke nahi kahoon
Yeh jo dil ki baat hai
Kehne ko saath apane ek duniya chalti hai
Per chhupke is dil mein tanhaayi palti hai
Bas yaad saath hai
Teri yaad saaath hai
Main jahaan rahoon
Main kahin bhi hoon
Teri yaad saaath hai

London England:

Milind sat in his chair staring off into space, nervous about his presentation in a few hours. He had given countless presentations in his career as a Hotelier; presentations were what made the business. You needed hotels to grow, you needed contracts to make hotels, and you needed presentations to get you those contracts. Without presentations, you would be at a stand-still. He couldn't remember how many presentations he had given from when he had jumped into the business. It seemed like he gave one everyday at least, sometimes it was more then one, especially at conferences and conventions. However, this presentation was important to him, it was special; he had only given a handful of presentations that meant this much to him. This presentation could help him snag the prime spot for a hotel in the current economy. If Milind got this contract then that would mean great new revenue for the company, a great deal of publicity and fame. He would be building a hotel in one of the most prime spots in the world. All of that, however, held zero to little importance as to why he was fighting to get this contract. Getting this contract meant building a hotel that took months if not years, that meant going to Hollywood (Sunset Blvd.), which meant going to California, which mean meant going home…home was where his Pari was.

Ever since that unforgettable night, Milind had only been home a few times. After that meeting Milind couldn't get her out of his mind. He thought about her at home, at work, at the gym, on the billboards…every where. In the few hours that they were together she had managed to get into his mind, heart and soul. In the past years there was rarely a day that passed without her crossing his mind.

The three months following their meeting had passed with great difficulty. Each and everyday he had thought about her. He had wondered how her life was going, did she get married, and did she still remember him? However his biggest question and concern was whether or not she was happy; that is all that mattered to him. In the few hours they had spent one night, she had seemed to affect him like no one else ever had; it was like she has seeped into his soul and refused to move, not that he had wanted her to.

He had eventually made the decision of leaving the country because of her. The main office of his operations was based right in the heart of downtown Lost Angeles, a few miles from the memorable pier. If he had kept his office there, the chances of running into her were too great. Not only running into her, but running into his Pari, his Pari happy with another man. So he had decided to move his home base of operations to London. He had been planning to expand his business abroad, and there wasn't going to be a better opportunity. So that was it…he left his home of over 20 years and moved to a foreign country, all to get away from a girl and her memories.

The move didn't help the way he would have liked it to have. His mind still managed to wander off into her thought a few times a day, but especially at night when he was alone. The only time he didn't think about her was when he was overloaded with work and handling the business. That is why he had devoted the past years of his life to taking his company to the top. Sure it was to advance in his career, but the bigger reason was to keep his mind off of things that would never amount to anything.

Becoming an international hotelier was not easy, but it had its perks; travel. He had gotten to visit exotic countries and locations all over the world. However, it had also taken him home a few times. Every time he was back he took a few minutes to go to Santa Monica Pier; no matter how busy he was, how late it was, or how tired he was. He would go to reminisce about the one night he would never forget. He would find the same wooden column, sit there and let all the memories come flooding back. With his eyes closed he could see her face, her smile, the blush that tinted her smooth cheeks; he could hear her voice, her laugh, the tinkling of her bangles; he could feel her soft skin, and the feel of her body against his own…everything.

After he had moved away to London, Milind had only been back home a handful of times, most for business purposes or to see his father. He never stayed more then a few days, except on one visit the previous year, when his father had died. His father was an ailing man in the last stages of Alzheimer's. Milind had spent about three weeks with his father, but most of that was either at his father's nursing home or in the end, at the hospital. Losing his father had been very hard on him, and he needed support. His friends and colleagues had tried to be supportive and help but he didn't want them. He was able to find some solace from his sister, but he felt like he needed more. He felt like the only person that could give him what he needed, had no idea what was going on.

Getting this contract meant that he would be going back to California, his home. He would be able to see the house he grew up in, the places he hung out with friends, he would get to see his sister and new nephew; most of all he would have an excuse to go to Santa Monica and think about his Pari. Although Milind would never admit it out loud, his main purpose of wanting this contract was for Santa Monica. He could never just come to Santa Monica to revisit old times, he would never let himself. Instead, he would use the contract as an excuse to give his heat what it desired the most. He would never admit to himself that even after nearly four years a special Pari still held power over him.

Later that day when is company had been officially awarded the contract, his heart did a summersault in his chest. His ticket to California was booked for the next night and all the other arrangements had been made. A small smile played on his lips…he was going home…was going to meet his Pari.

Panorama City:

Metro bus, route 265 was making its way across the San Fernando Valley. Less then a handful of passengers occupied the large bus. The people on the bus were either sleeping or staring off into space, after all it was nearly one o' clock in the morning. They were returning home after a hard and long days work in various parts of the city, some even outside the city. At the back of the bus sat a young woman clearly lost in her thoughts.

She looked tired to the bone; the toll of the day was clearly visible on her face. Her once tight and neat bun had strands of hair escaping from it, her uniform a wrinkled mess, her hands dry and rough, and her feet we aching. The surprising factor was that there was no tiredness in her eyes; her dark eyes were gloomy, distant and lost; the sadness apparent in its depths. Everyone on these busses had a story, each different from the previous…she had a story too.

She was the frail, sad, and lonely girl that stood on the side lines of life, watching everyone pass her by. She was the girl that stood behind the large pillar at the back of a room, hidden behind the darkness it provided. She was the girl that blended into life, the one that no one noticed.

She was the girl had held the burden of supporting her parents, financing her younger sisters education, and providing for her own family. She was the girl that worked not one, not two but three full time jobs. She was the girl who was on her feet from five o' clock in the morning until about two or three o' clock in the morning; nearly 24 hours. She was the one that had to make sure her bus didn't leave her or else her boss would fire her for being late…again. She was the girl who had no manage her home; the one who cooked but had no time to eat, the one who cleaned but with no one to help her.

She was once someone's Pari, but now…now she was Prachi Shah. No, she wasn't Prachi Shah; she was Mrs. Prachi Shah Shergill.

*~*~*~*~*~*~*

The bus had finally reached her stop, Wilshire Blvd. Prachi quickly gathered her things, and pushed out all the unnecessary thoughts out of her mind. Once she had stepped off the bus, she glanced at her watch…2:30am. Her eyes widened in shock as she broke into a full fledged run towards her apartment complex. She ran like a mad woman and made it to her apartment in three minutes flat. Fishing inside her purse she retrieved her keys into the lock and opened the door. She silently crept in, making sure to make almost no sound, only what couldn't be avoided. Prachi put her things down on the sofa corner, took off her shoes and coat. She tiptoed into the kitchen to grab a glass of cold water before she headed off to bed. She was hungry, she was starving, but she decided against eating. By the time she took the food out, warmed it up, ate and cleaned up, she wouldn't have anytime to sleep before she had to be up for her first job. She thanked the Lord that she was doing the late shift and was required to go in at nine o' clock and not five o' clock. She savored the water, quietly put down the glass and began tiptoeing towards her room.

"So madam finally decided to come home?" came a voice in front of her. In the dark she couldn't see his face but she knew who it was; it was none other then her husband, Neev Shergill.

"I'm so sorry if I disturbed you." Prachi said in a hushed voice, her eyes on the floor, not daring to look at him. He had startled her when he called out to her. "Why don't your head back to bed, I'll be there in a few minutes after I change."

She watched as the shaded figure wobbled towards her unstably. Her fears were confirmed, he was drunk, not that there was any doubt in her mind. There was rarely a night that Neev wasn't drunk. If Prachi was lucky, then he was so drunk that he was passed out on the bed in the master bed room. If he was still awake, then only God knew what was going to happen.

"Going to take a shower?" Neev continued, "Trying to wash off all scents of our lover before your husband can tell."

"No, of course not." she replied to him, in a some-what stern voice.

"Really? Then do you care to explain why you are thirty minutes late?" he pressed.

"I had a late table, so I left late and had to catch the last bus."

"Oh really?" he mocked.

Prachi was hoping that he would let it go and not erupt in a rage, but her hopes were shattered.

"What do you think that I am an idiot?! That I don't know my wife is screwing every Tom, Dick and Harry?" he yelled.

"It's not like that, and you know it?" Neev came and was standing in front of her, his breath reeking of alcohol. Prachi tried to step back, but he grabbed the bare part of her arms with his strong arms and squeezed them hard. "So no you are going to tell me what I know?"

"N…no of course not." Prachi said, as she tried to get out of his grip, knowing all to well what was ahead for her if she didn't get away.

"I'll show you, you two timing, lying little b*tch!" he growled.

"No, please Neev let me go. I…I promise, it wont happen again. Please let me go."

"Shut up!"

"No, please…please…"

"Come on baby, I'm your husband. You can't stop me."

"Please…please…please…"

Her cries of help drowned out as Neev placed his lips on top of hers and began to brutally assault her, biting and hurting her. All the while he began pulling her towards their room, his hand still strongly on her arms.

Once in the room, she pushed her down on the bed and held her down with one hand, while the other worked to remove her clothes. The tears rolling down her face as Neev's hands roamed across her body.

A while later, muffled sobs could be heard. Prachi lay with a sheet covering her and her husband, who had finally passed out next to her. Gathering the sheet close to her body, she inched out of the bed, making as little movement as possible. She managed to rummage around her small closet for a t-shirt and track pants. Slipping on a pair of flip-flops she grabbed her keys and left the house.

Neev was passed out, and would be for the next eight hours or so. Night like this have happened in the past, and would probably continue to happen in the future. Prachi headed to the one place that she could find some solace, the one place she felt safe; the pier.

At 3:30am she reached the desolate beach/pier she ran to the place that meant the most to her. She found the large wooden pillar where she had met him, where her life and begun and ended in one night. She threw her sandals into the sand a few feet in front of her. She stared at the night sky, glittering with stars, tears forming in her eyes. "Where are you?! Why aren't you here?!" she yelled, "I need you! Where are you?!" Saying this she crumbled onto the sand, the tears now flowing freely.

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(Same night)

Milind's flight had gotten in a few hours ago and he was exhausted to the breaking point. He figured he would get in as much sleep as he could this night before all the work on the project began. However, that hadn't worked out.

He had been sitting in his room, attempting to eat the dinner he had the kitchen deliver, but his appetite was shot. Leaving the food he took a warm shower and headed to bed, hoping that he would fall asleep; no such luck. He lay awake for over two hours, tossing and turning. His mind was on his Pari, not shocking, but it was bothering him. Something inside him was telling him that something was wrong, and he needed to be somewhere else. His mind and heart were pulling him to thoughts of the night with Pari at Santa Monica.

Glancing at the clock he saw that it read three o' clock in the morning. Letting out a frustrated groan her got out of bed and headed to change. He pulled on a pair of jeans and his old USC letterman's jacket, grabbed his keys and headed out, just forty-five minutes or so and he would be there.

Parking his car in the lot he stepped out. Looking around he failed to see a small car parked in the shadows by the pier. Milind made his way to the place that was calling to him. As he walked, a smile played on his face as he thought about the fateful night. He came to a stop at the beginning of the pier and just took in a breath of the salt air.

For some odd reason his body and heart were racing with emotions. On one side he felt a sense of worry and anticipation that something was amiss, but on the other hand his heart felt content and at peace. Is body was tense and stiff, yet oddly calm and relaxed. He was feeling a bit of every emotion, sad yet happy, tired yet wide awake, worried yet serene. It was like the wind, the moon, the stars and the waves were all calling out to him.

As the smile played on his lips, he put his hands in his pockets, face the direction of the spot where he had met Pari and closed his eyes; he could picture that night. He could her sniffles, her bangles, and her laughter. He could see the red outfit he had found her in, the bindi on her head, the blush on her cheeks. He could see her small body curled into a ball, just asking to be held.

As Milind opened his eyes, his gaze fell on a small figure curled up and leaning against the wooden pillar. As his eyes traced the petite figure, his heart gave a jump and it felt like his soul was brought back to life……

Kyun hawa, aaj yun gaa rahi hai
Kyun fiza, rang chhalka rahi hai
Mere dil bata aaj hona hai kya
Chaandni, din mein kyun, chhaa rahi hai
Zindagi, kis taraf jaa rahi hai
Mere dil bata kya hai ye silsila
Kyun hawa, aaj yun gaa rahi hai
Gaa rahi hai, gaa rahi hai



*Looking forward to your comments 😃*
JAZ
Edited by jnawaz - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Ah so they are gonna meet finally. Never really knew Neev could physically assault too , important twist. Poor woman has no happiness I felt sorry for her, wish Milind will envelope her in his arms and not let go till she has cried all her misery .To think that pier column could hold so many memories and be a silent witness to so many moments happy and sad.Really loved it update soon. 😊
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👏 Again what can I say but that it is just brilliant.So beautifully written dear.Eagerly waiting for the next part.

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