FF: Sirf Tum Chapter 1 pg 1

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Sirf Tum: Chapter 1

Today is a beautiful night, as the stars were shying bright in the midnight blue skies. Holding the shopping bags in her hand, she made herself to the door, her keys dangled, making some noise, as she opened the large square door frame, she noticed her house was quite and all dark, coming into an dark house was spooky.

Where is everyone? She said to her self.

Chotu, Sonu, Ramu kaka, where is everyone? As she entered further insider her house, placing the shopping bags on the sofa. The sound of approaching footsteps were head, hello whoses there? Koun hai? She stood still, as her someone's strong muscular hands crawled on her waist, she immediately recognized who it belong to.

Choro na, please, as he continued to nuzzling on her neck, make her melt in arms

Someone will come? Chotu and Sonu will come what will he think?

Hmm, no one will come, and Chotu and Sonu will think that their parents love each other a lot, he said in deep voice.

Her cheeks turned red, as her husband said this to her, in his embrace she always felt like a new bride.

She turned around in his arms, and meeting his chocolate brown eyes, and looking into him, even thought it was dark, she could see his face as the lights were reflecting form the windows.

Someone is in a romantic mood today! What's the occasion, what did you, Sonu, Chtou do? She raised her eyebrows frowned, and looked at her husband suspiciously

Prachi, why do you think that our kids and I did something? Whispering low

Acha why is there no lights on? Why is so quiet and dark in this house?

I don't know, he shrugged his shoulder. Itna satna kyu hai bhai, humare ghar mein to ithna shanty kyu hai bhai.

Miland Mishra, if you don't tell me what's going on, you're sleeping on the couch tonight, getting little angry.

Before he could, reply, the lights turned on, Surprise. The room was filled with pink, red, and white balloons.

Both of them looked up, and saw Sukrit and her hubby Saket, with her mom, dad, and their five year old sons Sonu and Chotu.

Her hazel eyes moist, when she saw that everyone she loved was there, and looked at her husband she was smiling, and at him with tears of happiness.

As he moved closer, her heart beated faster, and she just embraced him.
Thank you, letting go of her, he wiped her tears.

Happy Birthday Sweetheart, many many happy returns of the day. As he kissed her forehead.

Uff, papa, mama, no romanish (romance), their 5year old identical twin sons Kishan and Kapil came running, making their parents let go of each other.

Happy Birthday mama both of them said in reunion, as both of them kissed her on her cheek.

Lets cut the cake, I am hungry said Kishan.

Kishan, you are always hungry, complained his older brother by 4minutes.

Kapil and Kishan were four minutes apart, but both of them reflected their father. Kishan known as Chotu was the mischievous one always trying to play prank on everyone while Kapil was the responsible of the twin, known as Sonu. He was his mom's boy, quiet, mature and sensible, but always backed his younger brother and Papa out.

Bhabi, lets cut the cake, I am starving, Sukrit said, as she patted her round belly, as she was expecting.

Sukrit, you are worse then my sons, Miland jokly said to his sister.

Bhaiya, you can't blame me, I am eating for two. Sukrit complained back/

Prachi beta, come and cut the cake, said her mother.

She moved toward the table, looked at three layered chocolate cake.

She closed her eyes and made a wish and blew out her candles.

First piece, she fed to her husband, who fed her, and smeared a little chocolate frosting on her lips, and when no one was looking, he kissed it away.

And then she fed to her two apples of the eyes, and her parents.

After that they, Miliand and Prachi was led to the dance floor, as the music dimmed they bought were lost into each others eyes.

The title song of Sirf Tum played
https://dishant.com/jukebox.php?songid=1521

The song came to and end and both of them were returned to the world when they heard the round of applause.

The End

Please tell me what you guys think? This is my first ff on Kaymath forum.Do leave your wonderful comments, whether its negative ya positive.
Take Care
Piku

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Piku my dearest u made it

I simply loved it, you have 2 kids errm not u but Michi has 2 kids, thats so cute and the whole bday think so imaginable Looking forward for ur next part

Ram Ram

Basanthi šŸ˜‰

Edited by basanthi - 18 years ago
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Perfect start Piku…I loved it šŸ‘

Awww……Michi has two cute kids 😳 😳 …so sweet… šŸ˜› a perfect happy family.

I wish we could see such kind of scenes in Kayamath soon 😃
Looking forward to the next part, hun šŸ˜‰
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Marvellous starting Piku... This seems to be different and very interesting indeed... cont. soon
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Awesome begining! Very different! Waiting for you update more..I am going to add your's to the FF list. Keep going dearie..Waiting to read the next part!

Ahaha..My Millu and Prachi have two kids and that two twins... šŸ˜† šŸ˜†

Great!Start honey! Waiting to read more!
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Posted: 18 years ago
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buddy...tu yahaan bhi...haila...i had no idea...i will be back and read this one and the ks ff too...busy with house cleaning for eid...shh...mom doesnt know im online now...lol
JAZ
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Piku darling.. great start dear..

Aww.. they have twins..soo cute.. I can imagine Milind organising the bday party for Prachi and standing with a smug face 😳 aww.. my bhaiyya 😳 😳

Loved it completely..
Looking forward to read the next part.. Btw make sure my bhaiyya gets more footage in ur ff. šŸ˜‰ 😊
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Waaah Piku, it's soo nice! Thank you!! šŸ‘ 😊 šŸ‘

Even when it's the first part, I actually got the vibe of a 'one shot' in this. I think this is a very good one shot, you don't have to make it any longer and it already feels complete.

I know it might be your style of writing, but I think it will be more interesting if some dialogues are changed into ["Blah blah blah," She said.] (dialogue style) instead of all in narrative style like this:)

Seriously, please feel free to ignore, as writers rule! I'm waiting for the next part or a new FF from you!:)

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Hi Mamta, I saw your name and had to read it. Very good dear. So you have Milind and Prachi together. A good start. šŸ‘ šŸ‘
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Posted: 18 years ago
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buddy...maine pad liya... 😳 ...it was great...MP together from the beginning...woo hoo...that is just great šŸ‘ ...and the boys are just too cute šŸ˜‰ ...cant wait for part 2
JAZ

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