kasturi part-1 FanFic. pls read it

hey guys..m realy missing kasturi a lot so i decided to write fanfic..and hope u wil like it..
kasturi is a middle class girl and robbie is a bery rich guy and he works wit his dad in bussiness and he has one sister name ananya and raunak(robbie's best friend)raunak lives with robbie as his parents r nt in this world..robbie does nt care abt money..he is interested only in girls..robbie apni car mai office jata hai to bichme kasturi aa jati hai..vo jor se break lagata hai..vo apni car se utarta hai..
r-hey pagal ladki..dekhkar nahi chal sakti..
k-tamiz se baat kijiye..galti apki thi meri nahi
r-acha meri galti..kya galti thi meri..bechme tum ayi..
k-ap bohot speed mai chala rahe the..
r-tum man kyu nahi leti ki tumhari galti thi..
k-mai kyu manu jabki galti aap ki thi..
r-tum janti nahi ho mujhe..
k-aur janna bhi nahi hai mujhe..
r-oh wow thats great..u know tum middle class logo ki problem kya hai..tumlog janmujkar ye sab harkat karti ho...aur..
k-bas kijiye ap..
r-kyu..sach sunne ki himmat nahi hai..
k-mujhe jana hai...
kasturi jaati hai to robbie use jaane nahi deta hai aur use bohot kuch sunata hai..
r-tum janti nahi ho tum kisse panga le rahi hu..
k-dekhiye mujhe jana hai..mujhe jane dijiye.
r-to mai kaha rok raha hu
fir kasturi chale jati hai..aur robbie bhi chale jata hai..kasturi job ke liye jati hai..kasturi vahi office mai jati hai jaha par robbie boss hota hai..jab vo dono ek dusre ko dekhte hai to shock ho jate hai..
r-tum..
k-aap..
r-tum yaha kya kar rahi ho..
k-mai yaha job ke liye ayi hu..
r-to tumhe job chahiye..
k-ha..
r-tum to janti hi hogi ki mai yaha ka boss hu..
k-ap yaha ke boss hai?
r-yes...
ab raunak ata hai..
rau-kya hua robbie..
r-kuch nahi raunak..ye middle class ladki ko hamare office mai job chahiye...
k-dekhiye sir mai apse izzat se baat kar rahi hu to ap bhi mujse ache se baat kijiye na..
r-tum jaisi ladki ko mai izzat du...pagal nahi hu mai..
rau-bas karo robbie.....so apka naam kya hai?
k-kasturi..kasturi chawla..
rau-ok to ap mere office mai ayiye..
k-ok sir..
kasturi raunak ke office mai jati hai..aur use job mil jati hai..
k-thank u sir..thank u very much..
rau-isme thank u ki kya baat hai kasturi..
k-to sir mai kabse join karu..
rau-tum kal se join kar sakti ho.
k-ok sir to mai kal se join kar rahi hu..(she is very happy)
rau-but kasturi..
k-jee sir..
rau-mai kal india se bahar jaa raha hu kuch kam ki wajah se aur mai ek hafte ke baad lotuga so tum robbie ki secretary bankar rahogi..ok?
k-(vo kuch bolti nahi hai..uske chehre par udasi aa jati hai)
rau-kya hua kasturi...
k-.......kuch nahi sir..mai kal aa jaogi..
rau-ok..
guys...i m writing it first time so pls do tel me how is it..and pls be frank..i should also know that how is it..ans should i continue writing?plz comment and plz be frank..ok..

hazra...