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missindia26

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Originally posted by: siya..
haey mein marjawaan..they are married! 😍wow wow wow!! i know yippee! 😛
just loved the way how u had described the marriage rituals...so beautiful and devika...wat can i say to her! hehehe...she left me wit no words! awsome..glad that she bent down for her son's sake!glad you liked the description and devika's new positive avatar 😉
ahem....now cant wait for the next part☺️lol siya ahem ahem 😛
fabulus one TJ do continue soon🤗thanks will do 😊

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missindia26

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Posted: 16 years ago

#232

Originally posted by: reenbana
hi tj how r u?im reenbana aka sonia well thts my nick my real name is shireen?whatever u call me i like tht!😉im commenting on ur ff 1st time it was interesting great amazing vey good writer n story ofcourse keep it up great going good job!😊

Hi Sonia (I can call you that yh) 😉
Im fine 😊
Thanks for your lovely comment 😛
Continue reading 😊
Love TJ x

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shumshad parveen

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Posted: 16 years ago

#233

part-24

lol i loved the way kasturi is getting for marriage.

Devika escorted them to the mandap...that would have been so sweet to see.

in the serial RoKa kay shaadimai thee he nahee😡

thanks for the scene RoKa searching the ring in the water...they never showed in the serial😭

i love the saath katham explanation.many of us doesnot knoe that.

devika took arti to kasturi...again sweet of her.😃

in this part you started from RoKa getting ready for marriage and very well took to suwaag raath level.

good going.keep it up👍🏼

hu...hu...hu...(i am struggling to breath) fi...na..ly i catch up your ff.thank you for your beautiful ff😃

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missindia26

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Originally posted by: robbii
part-24

lol i loved the way kasturi is getting for marriage. good good 😉

Devika escorted them to the mandap...that would have been so sweet to see. aw yh i so wish i could direct this instead of just writing lol 😆

in the serial RoKa kay shaadimai thee he nahee😡 i know 😡

thanks for the scene RoKa searching the ring in the water...they never showed in the serial😭 lol im glad you liked it i think thats such a cute ritual 😛 so mean they missed out 😕

i love the saath katham explanation.many of us doesnot knoe that. um i have to admit i didnt know it properly had 2 use good old google 4 some prompting 😕

devika took arti to kasturi...again sweet of her.😃 yeah model saas 😛

in this part you started from RoKa getting ready for marriage and very well took to suwaag raath level. i know it went quite quick but i didnt want to delay lol 😉

good going.keep it up👍🏼 thanks shumi 😊

hu...hu...hu...(i am struggling to breath) fi...na..ly i catch up your ff.thank you for your beautiful ff😃 lol no thank you 4 reading it all must have taken ages now you can take a big long rest til i write the next part 😊

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366791

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Posted: 16 years ago

#235

Hey TJ will you be updating soon?

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missindia26

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Posted: 16 years ago

#236

Hi everyone 😊
Thanks for all you wonderful comments 😉
I hope you guys aren't let down by the "suhaag raat" 😳 its not very long or detailed cos tbh this is only my 2nd ff and i dont know who all reads it and i didnt want 2 write something overly voyeuristic and graphic
The other thing is that as much as I love everyhting being hunky-dory between RoKa 😃 im not sure if its interesting for you guys to read cute scene after cute scene and im running out of ideas - i dont want to create misunderstanding 😲 cos i want them to trust each other but i feel the story's getting a bit stale
Anyways the point of that whole ramble 😕 was do tell me what you think about this part and storyline in general cos i might have 2 end it 😭 but enjoy reading! 😃
Love TJ xx

Chapter 25 ' Suhaagan Ka Taaj

He seated himself on the bed opposite her. Slowly, gently, he lifted her "ghoonghat". Diffidently, she lowered her eyes. Softly, tenderly, he tilted her chin upwards so her passionate eyes stared into his. They watched each other, perfectly motionless, filled with desire for each other.
"Aakhir hamara sapna pura hua. Hamari shaadi hui hain. Hum dono saath hain. Aur mein vaada karta hoon ke mein hamesha tumhe khush rakhoonga."
"Mein jaanti hoon, Robbie sir. Aapko kehne ki zaroorat nahi. Mein aapki dhadkanon ko mehsoos karsakti hoon."
She placed his hand over her heart. "Jaise mere.."
Again they were lost in each other's eyes, mesmerized. Slowly, he unpinned her veil so her hair flowed loose. He loosened her jewelry, carefully removing it. They embraced passionately. In the sky above, night fell as they made love and celebrated their "suhaag raat".
***
Kasturi woke up, turning over to find Robbie sleeping beside her, a blissful smile on his face. She blushed a little, then got out of bed. She walked to the cupboard, smiling at her memories. She selected a light chiffon sari from her dowry suits; it was a pale sea green with a simple silver border. She wrapped it around herself, pulling the pallu across her chest to form a square neck and then piining the pleats over her left shoulder. She lay her mangalsutra over the sari and put on her Ganesh pendant. She arranged her red-and-white "suhaag ki choodiyaan" on her wrists and applied her "kaajal".
"Bahut hi khoobsoorat lagrahi ho," whispered Robbie in her ear. "Bas ek baat ki kamee hain.." He reached into the cupboard for a small gold container. He dipped his finger into the "sindoor" inside and filled her parting. She blushed.
"Shukriya, Robbie sir." He placed his finger on her lips.
"Nahi, Kasturi. Aisa mat kehna. Yeh hamara farz bhi hain aur hamara ichhaa bhi. Aur doosri baat, mein jaanta hoon, ke meine tumse kahaan tha, mujhe Robbie sir bolaane ke liye. Par ab..acchha nahi lagta. Is rishte mein hum dono baraabar hain. Mein jaanta hoon, ke tum sab ko politely "aap" kehti ho. Par..mere khushi ke liye, aaj se tum mujhe Robbie ya tum kehke bolao. No aap, no sir. Theek hain?"
"Jee, Robbie s-, jee Robbie." She giggled a little at her automatic tendency. There was a loud knock on the door.
"Robbie beta, tum dono uthgaye? Gyaara baj chuke hain, tayaar hoke niche aao. Meine aaj pehli baar puja raka hain."
"Theek hain, mom. Das minute."
Kasturi moved to unlock the door. Robbie caught her wrist and swung her towards him. "Sir..mujhe niche jaana hain.."
"Haan, haan, rukhiye toh, hum dono saath jaayenge.."
"Kyun? Mere bina reh nahi sakte?" teased Kasturi.
"Exactly."
"Ja, ja. Mujhe bata hain, shaadi ke baat humko bhooljaayenge.."
"Kasturi, aisa kabhi hosakta hain? Dekho mujhe." She slowly raised her eyes, looking into his.
"Mein jaanti hoon, aap aisa kabhi nahi karsakte."
They gazed at each other, perfectly still. Then she broke the spell, pushing him away.
"Par abhi humhe jaana hain. Jaldi kijye," she ordered.
***
Ten minutes later, they descended downstairs, Robbie casually dressed in a complimenting pistachio-coloured shirt and dark jeans. They were immediately greeted by the usual crowd.
"Haii haii dekho dono ko. Kaise khushi ke saath chalak rahe hain," observed Preet.
"Kyun nahi, kyun nahi?" maintained Milind. "Waise toh dono bahut zyaada acchhe lag rahe ho, m-"
"Chalo, chalo, tum log sirf baatein karenge ya kuch prathna bhi. Aaja Kasturi pehle tum dono aaja," decided Devika.
Robbie and Kasturi moved to the front of the queue. Kasturi covered her head with her pallu and they both circled the "puja ki thali" in front of the goddess. Subsequently, they clasped their hands together and bowed their heads to offer thanks and prayers fot their future. Robbie sneaked her look at Kasturi. Eyes closed, she looked perfectly virtuous and extremely alluring. She opened her eyes, then caught sight of him and narrowed them in exasperation. "Robbie," she admonished. "Aankhen band karo aur prathna kijye."
Guiltily, he obeyed her, thanking God for he genuinely was very grateful for the happiness he had acquired at last. Each couple took their turn with the "puja ki thali". Once everyone had had their turn, Devika summoned the press representatives.
"Acchha, ab hum tayaar hain aapke sawaal ke liye."
"Mrs Sabharwal, aapne pehle aisi puja rakhi nahi hain. Aaj, achanak kyun?"
"Kyun ki mujhe bhagwan se shukriya kehna tha. Mein bahut khush hoon. Aur aaj meri bahu Kasturi ka pehla din hain is ghar mein. Mein chahti thi ke iski nayi zindagi shubh kaam ke saath shuru ho," she answered readily, smiling at Kasturi, who returned the smile contentedly.
"Par aapki bahu pehle bhi shaadi karchuki hain. Phir bhi, aapne isse apnaaye hain? Aur yeh baat choddo, woh toh aapki haisiyat se bahut nichi hain. Aapko lagta hain ke yeh aapki parivaar ke laayak hain?"
Kasturi's smile faded. Besides her, Robbie stiffened. But it was Devika who furiously retorted: "Excuse me! Shayad aap apni tameez bhoolgaye. Aap log khabar chaapte ho, iska matlab nahi hain ke aap aise daawa karsakte hain. Meine Kasturi ko iski haisiyat dekhnar nahi pasand kiya, meine usse apnaaye kyun ki woh mann ki bahut sachi hain aur woh Robbie se bahut pyaar karti hain."
"Shukriya, mom." He laid his hand gently on her shoulder, then continued in a low but forceful tone: "Ab mein boloonga. Aap sab aakhri baar ke liye soonlijye. Koi mere patni ko beizzat karenge toh mein bardaasht nahi karoonga. Aaj theek hain, maaf kiya, agli baar tumhara haal karaab kardoonga. Aap sab ko koi haq nahi hain, hamare ghar aakar aisa bebunyat izaam lagaana. Kasturi ki adeeb hum sab ki aaj se koi lehne-dehna nahi hain. Samajgaye aap?" Chastised, the group of reporters left quietly. Robbie turned to Kasturi, his rage mounting as he noticed tears brimming in her eyes.

Edited by missindia26 - 16 years ago

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missindia26

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Posted: 16 years ago

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Chapter 25 ' Suhaagan Ka Taaj (english)

He seated himself on the bed opposite her. Slowly, gently, he lifted her "ghoonghat". Diffidently, she lowered her eyes. Softly, tenderly, he tilted her chin upwards so her passionate eyes stared into his. They watched each other, perfectly motionless, filled with desire for each other.
"Finally our dream has come true. Our wedding is complete. We are both together. And I promise I will always keep you happy."
"I know, Robbie sir. You don't need to say. I can feel your heartbeats."
She placed his hand over her heart, "In the same way as my heart beats just for you.."
Again they were lost in each other's eyes, mesmerized. Slowly, he unpinned her veil so her hair flowed loose. He loosened her jewelry, carefully removing it. They embraced passionately. In the sky above, night fell as they made love and celebrated their "suhaag raat".
***
Kasturi woke up, turning over to find Robbie sleeping beside her, a blissful smile on his face. She blushed a little, then got out of bed. She walked to the cupboard, smiling at her memories. She selected a light chiffon sari from her dowry suits; it was a pale sea green with a simple silver border. She wrapped it around herself, pulling the pallu across her chest to form a square neck and then piining the pleats over her left shoulder. She lay her mangalsutra over the sari and put on her Ganesh pendant. She arranged her red-and-white "suhaag ki choodiyaan" on her wrists and applied her eyeliner.
"You're looking very beautiful," whispered Robbie in her ear. "There's just one thing missing.." He reached into the cupboard for a small gold container. He dipped his finger into the "sindoor" inside and filled her parting. She blushed.
"Thank you, Robbie sir." He placed his finger on her lips.
"No, Kasturi. Don't say that. This is both my duty and my wish. And secondly, I know it was me who tod you to call me Robbie sir. But now..it doesn't seem nice. In this relationship we're both equal. I know you politely call everyone "aap". Butfor my happiness, from now on call me Robbie or "tum". No aap, no sir. OK?"
"Yes, Robbie s-, yes Robbie." She giggled a little at her automatic tendency. There was a loud knock on the door.
"Robbie beta, are you both up? It's gone 11 o'clock, get ready and come downstairs. Today I've organised a prayer ceremony for the first time."
"OK, mom. Ten minutes."
Kasturi moved to unlock the door. Robbie caught her wrist and swung her towards him.
"Sir..I have to go downstairs.."
"Yes, yes, but wait, we'll go together.."
"Why? Can't you stay without me?" teased Kasturi.
"Exactly."
"Go, go. I know, now we're married you'll forget all this love shove.."
"Kasturi, can that ever happen? Look at me."
She slowly raised her eyes, looking into his. "I know, you can't ever do that."
They gazed at each other, perfectly still. Then she broke the spell, pushing him away. "But now we have to go. Hurry up," she ordered.
***
Ten minutes later, they descended downstairs, Robbie casually dressed in a complimenting pistachio-coloured shirt and dark jeans. They were immediately greeted by the usual crowd.
"Whew look at both of them. How they're brimming with happiness," observed Preet.
"True, true," maintained Milind. "I have to agree they're both looking very nice i--"
"Come, come, will you just talk or actually pray. Come Kasturi you two go first," decided Devika.
Robbie and Kasturi moved to the front of the queue. Kasturi covered her head with her pallu and they both circled the "puja ki thali" in front of the goddess. Subsequently, they clasped their hands together and bowed their heads to offer thanks and prayers fot their future. Robbie sneaked her look at Kasturi. Eyes closed, she looked perfectly virtuous and extremely alluring. She opened her eyes, then caught sight of him and narrowed them in exasperation.
"Robbie," she admonished. "Close your eyes and pray."
Guiltily, he obeyed her, thanking God for he genuinely was very grateful for the happiness he had acquired at last. Each couple took their turn with the "puja ki thali". Once everyone had had their turn, Devika summoned the press representatives.
"OK, now we're ready for your questions."
"Mrs Sabharwal, you've never had a prayer ceremony before. Today, suddenly, why?" "Because I wanted to thank God. I'm very happy. And today it's my daughter-in-law Kasturi's first day in this house. I wanted her new life to begin with this auspicious deed," she answered readily, smiling at Kasturi, who returned the smile contentedly.
"But your daughter-in-law has been married once before. Even though, you've accepted her? And forget that, she is so far below your status. Do you think she's worthy of your family?"
Kasturi's smile faded. Besides her, Robbie stiffened. But it was Devika who furiously retorted: "Excuse me! Maybe you've forgotten your manners. You people publish news, this doesn't mean that you can make such claims. I didn't like Kasturi after looking at her status, I accepted her because she is pure at heart and loves Robbie very much."
"Thanks, mom." He laid his hand gently on her shoulder, then continued in a low but forceful tone: "Now I'll speak. All of you listen for the last time. I won't tolerate anyone abusing my wife. Today, OK, you're forgiven, next time you'll be ruined. You all don't have any right ot come to someone's house and make such baseless allegations. None of us have anything to do with Kasturi's past, and it will not affect our future or our family. Do you understand?"
Chastised, the group of reporters left quietly. Robbie turned to Kasturi, his rage mounting as he noticed tears brimming in her eyes.

Thanks for reading 😛
P.S. If you could read my note in the post above and tell me your thoughts it'd be greatly appreciated

Edited by missindia26 - 16 years ago

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nehaaa nawab

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Posted: 16 years ago

#238

superb part, robbi is soooo romantic...... excelent part..... is this ur 2nd fanfic, which was ur first? pls pls pls dont think of ending ur fanfic, u can create some misunderstanding between them in order to move ur story forward bcoz their love is so great that they will definately be united....... the story is going great...... pls dont end it, its just beautiful............. pls update soooon...

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missindia26

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Posted: 16 years ago

#239

Originally posted by: nehaaa nawab
superb part, robbi is soooo romantic......aw 😳
excelent part..... thanks 😊
is this ur 2nd fanfic, which was ur first? uh yeh ishq to nasha hain, a jai-bani 1
pls pls pls dont think of ending ur fanfic, u can create some misunderstanding between them in order to move ur story forward bcoz their love is so great that they will definately be united....... the story is going great...... pls dont end it, its just beautiful............lol ok i guess i could do half-misunderstandings... 😕
pls update soooon...lol i will asap thanks for telling me your thoughts 😃