PreRish One-Shot: Deluded Insecurities - Page 4

It's totally amazing 😍😍😍please do write more on them

finally, read it.

awesome title!

it's short! but I get that u had to end it in that hug....any further dialogues would have killed the charm of the starting dream sequence.

Surprisingly loved P's reflection of thoughts more in this OS than RB.

the start was good with the use of words to bring out the essence of what you intended to say. comes out very strongly if read between the lines. u have perfectly put words to RB's thought process and the heavy knocking of doors of his heart. His confusion, his bewilderment, his uneasiness to face his emotions etc have been brought out so well.

my fav lines,

lost in twin mists…one clouding his vision and the other one haunting his psyche.

That chaste union cast a spell upon his consciousness,

“You know where our future is, I’m still waiting” The same voice caressed his ears.

Your writing is clear, precise and crisp. I like that. will definitely wait for the next one.

Originally posted by: Breezi11197

It's totally amazing 😍😍😍please do write more on them

Originally posted by: saps.156

finally, read it.

awesome title!

it's short! but I get that u had to end it in that hug....any further dialogues would have killed the charm of the starting dream sequence.

Surprisingly loved P's reflection of thoughts more in this OS than RB.

the start was good with the use of words to bring out the essence of what you intended to say. comes out very strongly if read between the lines. u have perfectly put words to RB's thought process and the heavy knocking of doors of his heart. His confusion, his bewilderment, his uneasiness to face his emotions etc have been brought out so well.

my fav lines,

lost in twin mists…one clouding his vision and the other one haunting his psyche.

That chaste union cast a spell upon his consciousness,

“You know where our future is, I’m still waiting” The same voice caressed his ears.

Your writing is clear, precise and crisp. I like that. will definitely wait for the next one.

Originally posted by: MisHumptyDumpty

Res

Zara dekho kaun agaya hai 😎

First things First Dekho ji dekho hamari super talented Shruti ne OS likha True to her words she even posted it on the day promised

Coming to the story

Oye Hoyee. It starts with the beautiful dream that tells Bajju ki he should take the step forward before its too late. I loved how you included the mandir where they got married in his dream. Deffo his favourite memory of theirs.

And then we come to know he is hurt and has super high fever

Udhar biwi is super angry but when she comes to know she cant control herself and behold! there's our collective pyaar standing and waiting for her at the door and then no one can separate them.

True, Those three words, said too much, lose their importance, actions always speak louder than words and that is what Bajju advocates and so does me, and so do you. Lovely OS till now i have read it for 15 times maybe more.

love Ankie.

also recovered my old gif accounts ab toh sabko milenge bhar bhar ke gifs 🤣

Originally posted by: MisHumptyDumpty

yea raha mera unres

Zara dekho kaun agaya hai

First things First Dekho ji dekho hamari super talented Shruti ne OS likha True to her words she even posted it on the day promised

Coming to the story

Oye Hoyee. It starts with the beautiful dream that tells Bajju ki he should take the step forward before its too late. I loved how you included the mandir where they got married in his dream. Deffo his favourite memory of theirs.

And then we come to know he is hurt and has super high fever

Udhar biwi is super angry but when she comes to know she cant control herself and behold! there's our collective pyaar standing and waiting for her at the door and then no one can separate them.

True, Those three words, said too much, lose their importance, actions always speak louder than words and that is what Bajju advocates and so does me, and so do you. Lovely OS till now i have read it for 15 times maybe more.

love Ankie.

Originally posted by: MisHumptyDumpty

there's our collective pyaar

😆 another good phrase

Originally posted by: saps.156

😆 another good phrase