SS: Lost Ones-Ending part pg 4

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Its my first attempt to write anything. Plz forgive my mistakes. Specially with grammer & Hindi.

Warning: its kinda boring

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She was sitting there. In front of her two angels' grave. Watching Ganga rearranging her KC thali for her. Her mind went back to the day 11 years ago.

It was also KC when her two angels were snatched from her. Her life was snatched from her. Her love turned his face from her. But she survived. To bring up her Ganga. The last remaining sign of their love.

G: Maa , maa…

B: (coming back in present) haan beta? What happened? Are you alright??

G: uff maa. I m alright . Doc uncle ne kaha na ki ab koi problem nehi.

Bani smiles. Yes. Her daugher is absolutely OK now , after 5 years of treatment.

G: Itz getting dark. Lets go home now. Everyone must be waiting for us.

B: Lets go.

They got into the white Mercedes waiting for them.

G: Driver uncle gaana lagana plz.

The driver put the CD on. He knows the family's favourite song. The rhythmic melody of 'Jiya dharak dharak' floated in the car. Her mind again went back to past.

5 years ago

Hospital

Doc: You are not the one who has cancer.

B: Then who has?

Doc: Your daughter.

Her world shattered at that moment. She went to her daughter's sleeping figure lying on the hospital bed. She cried her heart out. The hurt of losing her two angels came back to her.

Unknown to her, one person witnessed all these.

Daksh: Maasi

Maasi: Daksh you?? What are you doing here?? I told you to follow Bani. Is she OK??

Daksh: Yes maasi. Bani is alright. In fact she doesn't have cancer. There was a mistake in that report.

Maasi: hey Bhagwan apka lakh lakh shukar hai. Par kya hua? Tera chehra kiyu utra hua hai??

Daksh: Maasi wo…

Maasi: Kya hai bol na

Daksh: Maasi wo report actually Ganga ki hai. Ganga ko cancer hai..

Massi: Kya???

Maasi: Bani kaha hai?

Daksh: Hospital mein. Ganga ki paas. Aap bhi jaldi chaliye. She needs you now.

Maasi: Nehi waha nehi. Mujhe kahin aur jana hai. Because she doesn't need me now. She needs someone else.

Daksh: Who??

That night Maasi went to WM. She told JW everything with the help of others. Right in front of Jigs & Karuna. His world went upside down.

He threw his two so-called sisters out. Not taking a word from them. No one stopped him from doing so.

When the whole family went to the hospital, Bani was still crying her heart out., clutching her daughter's hand. JW went upto her. He put her hand on Ganga's forhead ' my daughter..'

Hearing his voice Bani raised her head. Surprised. He looked in Bani's eyes.

JW: Bani…….

But Bani didn't let him finish his sentence. She threw herself on him. He wrapped his hands around her. They cried together. They didn't need words.

Meera saw this from the glass window of the cabin. She decided that she will set JW free. She will give Bani her aamanat back.

Present

'Mamma hum ghar aagaye'

Bani came back to present. She stepped into WM. Hearing excited squeals she looked up. JW was sitting there with two 5 year old kids. Seeing Bani they ran upto her.

'mamma mamma mamma mamma'

The same voices. The same faces. Krishna junior & Atharva junior ran upto her. She bent down. Hugged them both & kissed them.

'No one notices me,' said Ganga with mocked anger. The twins rushed to their elder sister. Knocking her off balance. Three of them stared playing.

Jai & Bani sat together. Her head on his chest. Walking through their memory lane.

5 years ago JB came out from the Doc's cabin. They need another child, their child, to save Ganga. JW went to Ganga's ward. She is awake now. Bani was watching father daughter interaction when Meera came upto her. Told her about their unsuccessful marriage. Bani was shocked hearing all those. But she was happy. JW is her. Still he is only her. Meera divorced JW. Bani came back to WM with Ganga.

2 months later Bani's pregnancy report came. All were happy. But the biggest surprise was still to come. Later doctor declared Bani was carrying twins. Tears of happiness flowed from their eye's endlessly. Their angels are coming back. Their lost angels were coming back.

When the twins born they named them as Atharva & Krishna. Ganga's operation was done. But doctor wanted to keep her under observation for next 5 years.

Yes. Their angels came back to them. When they turned 1 year JW told Bani in amazement that they look exactly same as their lost angels. Bani couldn't believe him. How could she?? She didn't saw them till they turned 5. They grew up with their father.

But as they grew up Bani realised that JW was indeed right. The whole family was amazed. It's a miracle. Yes. They look exactly the same as Late Krishna & Atharva. They came back.

'Sir, Mam, Maasine kaha app dono ko ready hokar chhad par janeke liye' said Tony. He came back to WM after Bani returned.

'OK. Tum jao. Hum aarahe hai' JW told Tony.

'Chale?' he asked Bani. She nodded.

Everything she lost, came back to her. Her love, JW & her angels Krishna, Atharva & Ganga.

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I know its too much imaginary. But I just wanted them back. It doesn't hurt to imagine, does it?

Plz leave comment good or bad.

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divan thumbnail
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Wonderful Tropa...wish KS would be like that but that's another story...really nice for your first try....hope you will right some more.👏



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Posted: 17 years ago
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Moonlight dear it was an wonderful ss to read.

I wish the kreatives copy the idea of your ss, and use this script for ks.


Aww Krishna and atharva came back 😭 😭 😭 and i loved the roles of each one of your characters, i can't believe i am saying this i even loved meera

kaash aisa hota ks par.


you should write more ss like this 😛
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Wonderful SS.
loved it.
nope it never hurts anyone to think positive...really hope that KS creatives also understand that simple logic
beautifully written 👏 👏 👏
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Tell me u didnt end it. First, thanks Mamta Beta. This ss was amazin. Thanked her cause she told me about this. The kids r back n really cute. Loved each part of it. Meera left, like wish she does in the show also. Ganga kk. Jai found out n kicks them 2 thins out. KW n AW r back. Loved it.
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Posted: 17 years ago
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great work Tropa....it was not boring at all.....I won't be suprised if KS follows this track too.....
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Are tropu shona 🤗 ...Tu toh kamal kar gayi 👏 👏 👏 👏...Tussi toh great ho yaar...👍🏼👍🏼

I almost cried..😭 😭 😭 😭 My cutie pies..Krishna & Atharva came back awwwww that was soo touching 😭 😭 😭 😭

I'm totally speechless, yaar☺️ ☺️ ☺️ ☺️...Wat boring?

It was awwwsome..I'm dreaming the whole story infornt my eyes...😍

Like i said i'll write true comment & you really did a very good job😳 😳

A great weekend treat...😳

Ab tujhe nahin choorungi mein😈 😈 ..tu toh chupa rustam nikli..Ab mushe aur chahiye..chahiye chahiye...😆 😆

Waitng for more....😉 😉

Luv

Raisa

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Posted: 17 years ago
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It was a great SS moonlitnight...

I just wished those Kreatives would copy that...i really loved it. it was great and i love it how you have described it and how the twins were back...
well imaginary is better than nothing right? 😆

great SS yaar

rooj
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Tropa, such a sweet story, very optimistic and heart warming. Hope we get AK back...and I hope Ganga gets better like you said and Meera moves away on her own.

Good imagination!! 👏

Great start to your first fan fiction! 😃 😃
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Posted: 17 years ago
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wonderful story its a beautiful imagination

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