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julie

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Posted: 18 years ago

#101

I love you so much Aditee.God bless you.The way you described each part is very romantic. Waiting for the next part eagerly.

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Nabila

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Posted: 18 years ago

#102

Wow Aditee........Fabulous description!👏👏

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Neena

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Posted: 18 years ago

#103

Originally posted by: vickosh
Hi Aditee,
Loved everything so far.

Just one request. You are writing the FF from Bani's POV. Would be nice to see what Mr. Walia is thinking today as he is about to get married. Is he just infatuated with her as she is different from other women he meets in his life or is he truely in love with her. Just wondering......

Would like to know his thoughts.

My thoughts exactly...I was also wondering...are we gonna get glimpse of JW's feelings at all ? ....well...I know he is in love...but does he accept that he is in love ? or is he gonna remain soooo egoistic even to himself ?

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Ritika Sinha

@ritikas

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Posted: 18 years ago

#104

Absolutely fell in love with ur description of the festivity associated with DIWALI…. "Happy to be alive, happy to have survived the blasts, crave to see the child grow up, want to buy that cell phone for Aai, borrowed to pay for the color TV for chhoti.." these glimpses into the minds of everyday people were just brilliant!…..this clearly shows the distinction between a good writer and a phenomenal one like u….take a bow Aditi!!!….I know it is an infinitesimal part of the story but for me it just stood out!!!… loved it all!!!…will be waiting eagerly for the engagement! 😉
Love
Ritika.

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saniya9919

@saniya9919

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Posted: 18 years ago

#105

Originally posted by: aditee
Firecrackers lighting up the Mumbai night sky, laughing chattering people, singing, dancing, music, revelery, toothy smiles.........toothless grins...................... dressed up

chawls, decked up mansions..........................................earthen lamps to Swarovski crystal chandeliers......... from the nariyal paani waala at Nariman to the VP of

Verizon all wanting to head home to their families, Hands folded,............... heads bowed, in prayer.....Happy to be alive, happy to have survived the blasts, crave to see the

child grow up, want to buy that cell phone for Aai, borrowed to pay for the color TV for chhoti..................the entire year's toil all worth it, just for today.....................
paying obeisance to the Goddess of Wealth "Hope the next year is even better than this one" many men.........one prayer, .................smell of incense, color of marigold,

taste of mithai.................temple bells, arti from loudspeakers, chanting of hymns .............

Busy roads, honking cars, the street people hoping for a big nite and in most cases getting it too, painted finger nails and manicured hands actually dipping into their

purses/wallets to "give" paper money...............the stained smudged coins lying in their coffee mug holder homes for now......... .....
Tomorrow............ tomorrow will be an ordinary day.

😭😭😭Adi, yeh mere khushi ke aansoo hain.🤗
Each time I read this part ( u know na, I read again & again😳) my heart starts beating fast.Amazing yaar.In few words .... u have described everything....so effortless & simple piece of writing.

Plz post the next part soon.How long u will keep JW waiting to talk with his fiancee?😳
I m waiting for him.😛

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Pooja

@pooja.walia

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Posted: 18 years ago

#106

Part 48 had one of the best descriptions I have ever read....simple words putting across a magic...which only few can manage....
Excellent piece of work... 👏

Poo

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soapaddict

@soapaddict

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Posted: 18 years ago

#107

Most def Aditee... I think with the above quoted paras (as the others indicated), you have really achieved something with this FF. Its a stand alone section, that so beautifully describes what Diwali is and could mean to so many..... somehow, it stands even above the FF and this story. I think it speaks more of you as a writer.... you really have an eye for detail. Here, you've captured an understanding of the urgency that surrounds everyday life, while also hinting at the secret desires and hopes that make life worth living.... perhaps, if i might be so bold as to say, an apt comparison to the relationship of JW and Bani.

Bravo!
Soapaddict

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Aditi S

@aditee

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Posted: 18 years ago

#108

Thanks a million all of you. I didnt think it was that great! Was it? I am totally honored, I rewound and went back to my single Delhi Diwali days, returning home from work (at my first ever job we were expected to work on Diwali day 😡 ), either in the bus or in an "auto" 😉 got to see the exact same things I have listed. Some sights, sounds and smells shall stay with me for as long as I live.

They dont call India the most amazing country on earth just for nothing!

I was just sharing memories.

Thanks for loving it so
Neena, and Soap I realize I owe you a JW part, either the enggment one or the one after I PROMISE
Engment will be tonite on my PC 😉 Hubby's packing can wait........ I' ve got a wedding to arrange 😆

Deeply touched by the wonderful feedback. I am glad many are able to relate to the everyday things in India

Its been a life's lesson for me: Simple everyday events often turn out to be the most cherished memories, so do not scoff or forget to appreciate routine things!

Happy Holidays to you and yours......... Eid and Bhai Dooj

Love
A

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shafaq

@$h@£aq...

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Posted: 18 years ago

#109

awww Aditee hun !!
will be waiting eagerlii fro ur updatee !!!!
updatee onee nicee longg part !!
i shall be waiting eagerly or shall i say greedily !! 😃

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mou

@moudeb2005

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Posted: 18 years ago

#110

Aditee,

this is such a treat. I am going nuts writing cover letters and kissing I banker a----. Coming online and finding such an escape makes all the days frustration go away. I loved the fact that bani was so into her engagement outfit. I can really imagine a stunning pink and mauve number. Also you so vividly described an enchanted JW who is completely mesmerized by this child woman. Loved B's possesiveness of JW being hers.

One part that made me sad was the part that she was crying and he called. Can you somehow show a convo where he sets her free and says that she does not have to marry him in duress, but she says she will marry him because she does not want to be obligated to him in anyway, while in her heart the thought of not marrying him terrifies her. It would be great to see JW being sensitive to her feeling coerced to a marriage. Just a humble suggestion to your FF genuis. Hope you and your family had a fantastic diwali. As always brilliant, and I cannot wait for the next part. 👏 👏 👏

cheers,
mou

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