There shud be a competition for this kinda thing like Sa Re ga ma pa, where ppl can present their story, scene ideas to actual script writers, paise to milenge.........
Awesome Foursome and all the 15 others who loved my first part, here is the next one....
Pata nahi Anu, Raaga etc roz itna kaise likh lete hain, gosh..................
AD, wanted an elevator scene and one when he rescues her from baddies............
I thought about this last nite (ab show ke baare mein sochna chhod diya hai:-) Girls, maaf karna if there is indeed no writer inside of me waiting to "crawl out of my mouth" (my son believes he crawled out of my food pipe and mouth and thats how he was born)
Oh Gosh I am too old for this stuff, but hey what the heck!, its a as good a time pass as eating tube lights Right?
Plus it doesnt even hurt my insides, except my heart which races..............
OK thats enuf warning...........
The elevator scene
Bani at Jai's office, done with work, and more importantly a huge confrontation with Sanjana Dayal is still fuming when she gets on the elevator, Mr W's private, elevator hops in and waits for it to descend.
Bani had been working at Mr W's the past week and had been noticing Sanjana come in to work with Mr W each morning at 7, she has not been the happiest Bani..................
Bani and Sanjana going over the Darjeeling resort plan, Mr Agarwal wants JW to buy DJ outright just like the Nainital, JW, is not so sure, he wants to laese a part of it first,............
Sanjana has been working with JW lawyers drafting papers for the buyout, and has the lawyers say that its a complete two resort by out, Bani goes over everything with her, and realizes the DJ is also a total buy, checks with JW, he blasts her off, saying "You put on paper what ever suits ur boss"
That enrages Bani some more, she meets with sanju and starts politely as to how she cud have overlooked the details
S: maine socha Mr W is buying it afterall
B: Mr A wud like for him to but Mr W is not very excited
S: lekin kal shaam ko jab hum ghar ja rahe the Mr W ne kaha khareedna itna bura idea nahi hai
B:(oh boy! Oh Boy! assumes the worst) Mr W ne tumhara dil rakhne ke liye khareedna chaha hoga
S: Kya matlab hai aapka
B: Mera matlab hai, Mr. W obviously aapki decisions ko bahut value karte hai tabhi aapse kuch aur mujhse kuch kehte hain
Bani is not aware that JW had just stepped into that room and caught most of S & B conv
B: Aapko unhe bataana chahiye tha ki aapne papers draft karwaye
S: I am sorry Mr W ne aapko daant diya, main unki taraf se maafi maangti hoon
B: Why shud u apologize on his behalf? (Bani si even more jealous and angry)
B: Maybe jab aap dono shaam ko saath saath ghar jaate hain aur .................. (pauses deliberately to refer to the fact that they may be spending the night together) ya phir jab subah kaam par saath saath aate hain, to aap unse kaam ki baaten zyaada kar sakti hai
S: Main samjhi nahi Ms Dixit
B: Aap Mr W se kyon nahi poochti woh zyaada acxhha samjhayenge aapko (sarcasm dripping from her voice walks out of the room in a huff, encounters hubby at the door, gives him a hell has frozen over kinda look and goes off towards the elevator)
She waits for a few minutes, JW's elevator si the first to appear, she enters.................. and Mr JW forces himself into it in the last second, sending shock waves thru her. She reaches for the stop button, wanting to get out
B: I am sorry didnt realize yeh aapka elevator hai
J: too upset to even react just gives a nasty look and hits the door close button..........
B: Mr W I want to get off
The lift starts to descend
JW: What the hell was THAT Bani?
B: Main ek hafte ki chutthi le rahi hoon Mr W, I will ask Tarun to fill in
JW: Bani's whats going on? Why were so so nasty to Sanjana back there?
The elevator just stops and starts beeping
JW: (swears) bijli chali gayi
B: Oh No!
JW walks over to the panel and hits some battery operated interior light
A dull light comes on
JW:Tum Sanjana se itni nafrat kyon karti ho Bani
B: I dont hate her, I dont care for her, Mr W
JW (not amused) Bani main tumse pooch raha hoon wahan office mein kya hua......
JW: And oh BTW(nastily) I want u to be incharge of the merger, not Tarun, if u are going to recommend him then I am going to pull out of thsi whole deal
Bani whips herself into this jealous rage, it was as if JW's irrational burst of jealousy had given permission for hers to exist and finally she was free to allow the corrosive envy that she had been trying hard to to hide to bubble to the surface
B: Sanjana perfect woman hai na aapke liye, usko incharge bana dete hai......
JW: What the hell is that supposed to mean?
B: Apki perfect partner hai na woh HAR TAREEKE SE, office ke kaam mein perfect hai, woh to koi galti kar nahi sakti, na hi kuch galat keh sakti hai kabhi, Bani hamesha galat hai.......... you are so hung up on her, aap hamesha uske baare mein mujhse kyon poochte hain?
JW: Hamesha? Aaj sirf maine yeh poocha ki tymne Sanjana se is tarah se baat kyon ki, uski kya galti hai................
B: OMG! Uski kya galti hai? Mr W usi ne error mein lawyers se galat terms likhwaye agreement mein NOT ME
JW: You cud have told her calmly, itna naraaz hone ki kya zaroorat thi?
Bani's eyes well up with tears, she feels JW cares more for S and not her.......
B: Aaj raat ko jab aap dono ghar jaayenge to usko mana lena aap
JW: Bani kya ho gaya hai tumhe? What the hell is wrong with you?
B: Roz sabah aap uske saath 7 baje kaam par aa rahe hain ek hi car mein Mr Walia (she cannot hide her grief any more), main bachi nahi hoon, shaam ko saath jaate hain subah saath aate hain iska kya matlab hai
JW: OMG! Tum kehna chahti ho ki main aur Sanjana..............
B: (looks away in hurt and pain)
JW: (his anger was like the flick of a velvet whip) For goodness sake, tum yeh sochti ho ki main uske saath jaata hoon aur office 7 baje aata hoon so there is something?
B refuses to respond
JW: Bani if it was you instead of her with me, we wud STILL be IN BED at 7 in the morning, .................. (pausing to let theimplication of his words to sink into her)
aur main hospitals ke chakkar nahi kaat raha hota sanjana ki mummy ko dekhne ke liye...
Bani's color rushes back to her face at that remark (well u see they have this uncanny ability to understand the unsaid things.... right? yahan to phir bhi JW made an oblique reference and how can she miss that 😉 )
When she realizes what he has just said, she is shocked
B: Kyon? Sanjana ki mummy beemar hai?
JW (bitterly) haan, yahan itna kaam hai main bhi jaldi aa raha hoon, woh bhi, so maine socha why not do her a favor........................
B is sorry, but wont say it..........
The elevator is still stuck
JW, in front of her.............
B: Gosh! I feel like a fool, Sanjana kya sochti hogi mere baare mein
JW: You dont look like a fool, you are just a jealous wife (with that twinkle)..........
They stare and and stare...... JW closes his eyes and calmly exhales........
B slowly reaches out and touches his cheek. JW with eyes closed there was a disturbing vulnerability to his face, she cudnt resist the urge to smooth the silky dark hair back from his forehead. He doesnt move............. his lashes form a dusky arc above his cheekbones. It makes B reckless, it makes her want to touch him in other places..........her fingers slide daringly over his ear to the heavy collar of his jacket
JW,(catches her wrist and huskily warns.....) Bani, agar tum koi cheez khatam nahi kar paaogi to shuru bhi mat karna
B: I Dont
JW: Dont what?
B: (softly........)to stop, she laces her hands into his hair behind his ears and draws him closer
JW: (hoarsely trying to avoid her eager hands.......)Bani be sensible
B: Mr W aapke paas hum dono ke hisse ha sense hai..
She had never felt so free and independent........... as she brought his head down to hers and the dark bloom on his jaw rasped like fine sand paper against her tender cheek as JW angled his head lower and with a satisfied groan covers her lips with his....................
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