FF- aaoge jab tum PART 3 PAGE 5 UPD8D!

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hey gyz! lately i think da forum isnt as much active as it used to be and so ive been thinkin to active the forum even if its a bit if i can through my this ff
i hope you gyz will appreciate n read it n guid me on how to improve since this is my very first ff
if you dont want me t o rite it / u don lik it (or wotever) den plzzz let me know
thx
so ill first strt wid da charector sketch
MAIN:
GAURI- a 19 year old sweet caring religous girl] left school aftr hr dad died wen she ws 14] best frend Ipshita(aka Ippy) who cares for her] lives her dadi who is very craing and loving towards and hersep mom who is ovrprotective o f gauri bt gauri dosnt know why
OR (which ever u prfr)
SHIV- a rich smart sweet and spoilt 20 year old] Best friend is Anupam who is gettin engagd to Ippy so is also pretty close to her aswell]
IPPSHITA- a 19 year old loving girl] Best friend Gauri and is aware of hr situation] gettinn engagd to Anupan (aka Anu)] helps gauri wenevr she cn]
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Contents:
part 1 --- page 1
part 2 --- page 3
part 3 --- page 5
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komal hashim thumbnail
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Posted: 15 years ago
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interesting ..................plz post the intro too.....................................waiting
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Posted: 15 years ago
#3
interesting...plz continue...eager to read ur ff...
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Posted: 15 years ago
#4

nice...now post a part plzzz

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Posted: 15 years ago
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wowww aroo$a.. =) post the frst part asap =)
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hey! thx u gyz 4 all da supprt n all! ill upd8 ASAP! wont make u gyz wait toooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo long aftr da 1st upd8 lemme no how it is?? thxxx soooooooooooo much hope ull like it!

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hey! All gd? Well herz da first upd8 and I hope u gys like it!😃

Ps: my full stops and commas arnt workin😭 so square brakets ] are full stops and ' are commas] also ''' means elipses] srry 4 dis n srry if u gt confusd bcus of it]

Part 1

A beautiful garden filled with enchanting flowrs] A girl is running towards the house] her beautiful long thick black hair dancing with the wind and her kholed eyes blinkd as her scarf sways behind hr] she smiles a sweet smile as she enters the house and capturing the person in front of her with a big hug she announces

"IPSHITA"!

I: hello jaan' (separating) kaisi ho tum?

"haha very funny"

I : I now dat hny' main janti hoon mujhe '''

" haan' teen din ho gain hai aur ab tujhe meri yaad ain kyu?

I (in a joky wy):oh ho' gauri jaan to gusa ho rahy hai'aur ho bhi bhi kyu nahi?

G : right' best friend kehti ho aur 3 din se gayab!

Jus den dadi entrs

D : kya huwa' arey' Ipshita beta' kaisi ho tum?

I : main teek ho dadi

D : acha gauri se milnai ay ho' jao gauri beta' Ipshita ko apne kamre main legao aur khoob mast karo

Gauri's angry face cracks into a smile as she 4gvs Ippy and leads hr to hr room]

G : ab batao' madam aj kya kabar lekar ain hai

I (sad): main sirf kabar denai ati ho kya?

G : arey' jokin yaar' but still kya baat hai] tumhara chehra keh raha hain ke kuch to baat hain

I : correct! Isse keh tai hain best frend! Pata hain kya gauri tum suno gi to pagal ho jao gi

G : buri kabar hai kya?

I : nahi baba' mera matlab khushi kai marai pagal ho jaon ji

G ; acha batao

I : 2 hafte ke baad meri sagai tayy hai!!!!!

Both girls shriek in delight and hug each other!

G : itna sab kuch ho gaya aur tu mujhe ab kabar de rahi hain

I : srry' per tu aie gi na?

G : o''o''ofcorse''ofcrse main aongi] meri best frend ki sagai aur mai hi na aon' aisa ho sakta hai kya? Bus thoori si''' um'''

I : jaanti hoo' iski bhi maine tiyari kar li] chal]

Both girls share a little laugh and go downstairs]

Downstairs' the atmosphere is tensed as every 1 awaits the answer]

D : Parvati' dono bachpan se saheliyan hai to jaane dena isse

I : aunty' main vaadakarti hoon'I promise' main gauri ka kyal rakhoo gi aur us jo apne se alag nahi karoongi] isseliya' please aunty] jaane digiay

After deep consideration

P: acha teek hai

Evry 1 gts happy'''

I : aunty app bhi ainyeh ga zarroor]

P : nahi' mai nahi aasakti' dadi chali gaingi gauri ke saath

I :acha teek hai' thank u aunty

P :bus meri gauri ka khyal rakhna (she walks towards gauri n placing a hand to lift her chin) pari ki tarha paala hain' kabhi kisi gher se milnai nahi diya

Wiping away hr tears she walks away leaving the two girls in wondr]

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welll' hope u gyz like it!please comment]
komal hashim thumbnail
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Posted: 15 years ago
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nice start ............. waiting for next update...........
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Posted: 15 years ago
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lovely update👍🏼!!!Hey ur story also has Parvati (actually i luv both Gauri n Parvati, so double whammy for me)....luved Ippy-Gauri's friendship....specially when Gauri say,'kya khabar layi ho"😆...Ippy ki shagaai...hmm kiske saath? ...guess next update mein hero ki entry ho jayengi....plzzz update soon!!!!
Pria
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Posted: 15 years ago
#10
Happy 2 c a Shiv Gauri ff.Plz don't stop in midle like d other SG ffs.
Gauri's intro sscene was lovely.G-ip friendship is so sweet.Happy 2 c Parvathi here

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