TS: MY FIRST SHIVER (Hot+Romantic) *COMPLETE* *THE END* - Page 3

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Awsm story...so manik b nandu se pyar karta hai...dats gr8...plzzz yar nandu ki shadi manik se hi karna us jerk se nai...how can he say dat he only luvs her body basterd...grls kya usi k liye hoti hai...bluddy jerk moron...
plzzz plzzz nxt part PM me plzzz

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First story
Great try
Nice story
Excited for next part
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Amazing part, plz dear continue soon
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It's simply amazing
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hello guys thank you so much for so many likes and comments, as i promise here is the 2nd part i hope you like it also


Note: guys i am new here thats why i can't reply everyone because only 10 post i can do in a day, sorry for that, when my limit increase then i will reply u all


Warning :so you guys like my story. as i said its contains some adult contains if u don't feel like then don't read it okay


Part 2 (MY FIRST SHIVER)



Morning 8 AM


Nandini Home


Ting Tong


Ting Tong


Nandinis Mom Open gate and saw that a tall boy is standing on gate


Mom: Ji Kisse Milna hai?


Person: Ji aapse hi milna hai and smiles


Mom: what? Tumhe sharam nhi aati bado se eshe bat krne me and shows angry eyes


Person: APNI BABY DOLL SE MILNE AANE ME KAISI SARAM AND GIVE A KISS ON HER CHICK.


Mom: she got shocked by his sudden act and only one word come out from her mouth.


MOM: MANIK

Person: yes Baby Doll


Mom: Manik and hug him tightly and then after breaking the hug she checks him completely and after that she kisses all over his face


Manik got tears seen her this act he remember his mother at this time


Nandinis mom saw these tears and asks worriedly


Mom: y r u crying manik?


Manik: wo mom ki yaad aa gayi wo bhi mujhe eshe hi chuma krti thi jb me ghar wapis aata the 2 3 din se( she also kisses me like this when I return home after 2 3 days)


Mom: thi matlab


Manik: she is no more, she died 3 months ago and hug her and start crying like a child


Mom: she also starts crying and hugs him tight, because he likes maniks mom like her sister.


Suddenly nandins dad come there and saw that her wife is hugging a person and crying.


Dad: what is happening here in cold tone?


They broke hug and saw him


Mom: dekhiye kitna BADA ho gaya APNA MANIK


Dad: MANIK, frist he got happy but then suddenly in cold tone


DAD: YOU SHOULD NOT COME HERE MANIK, GO BACK TO YOUR DAD.


Manik: y r u saying CHAMP LIKE THIS


(manik in childhood calls nandini=My NANDU, MOM=BABY DOLL, DAD=CHAMP)


Dad: he also got tears in his eyes but controls his tears and said


Dad: if your dad will see you here then he will again take you away from us, so you go away, we are middle class family person.


Mom: what r u saying to her husband? How many days after he came and you her saying this, it is our nandins marriage week, so don't make it a sad week remember old days


Manik: I know you alright, my dad is like this that's y I don't live with him, he always cares about money, my mom also died because of him and he again start crying


Dad: when he hear this can't hold himself more and hug him tight and doth cries heart out.


Suddenly door bell ring


All looks towards gate and saw a girl is standing on gate


Girl: andar nhi bulaogi chachi? (Will you not invite me inside chachi?)


Chachi: nandins mom NAVYA TUM, yeah come in na beta its your home like nandinis


Navya: she came inside he hugs both uncle aunty and she looks towards manik and ask aunty


Navya: who is this person aunty?


Aunty: you forgot he is the one who pulls your tail when you are child and you cry.


Navya: MANIK, why you come back manik? Everything is not same as before. In angry tone


Manik: what??


Aunty: what r u saying navya? Stop this and Go to nandins room she is waiting for you since morning.


Navya: ji aunty and she leave from there.


Manik: baby doll what she is saying? Nothing same as before


Mom: nothing bachha, you come and sit with your champ I will make tea for both of you.


Manik: he want to say but she leave to kitchen before manik ask.


Then both manik and nandis dad sit and they talk a lot


Aunty comes back with tea and they do many talks


Manik continuously searching nandini in home but he is afraid asking about her to his baby doll


Both uncle aunty notice this and ask


Mom: r u searching someone beta?


Manik: no baby doll, I to watching this home after long time na, so looking it only


Mom: okay


Suddenly navya and nandini come down from nandins room


Navya already told nandini about manik, and navya also knows about nandini loves manik


Nandini is wearing white top and black jeans and she is wearing star shape earrings


Maniks back is facing them so he can't she them, nandins mom she them and said


Arre nandini navya where are u going both at this early morning?


Manik suddenly looks back and saw nandini; she is the same girl terrace girl, she is looking so beautiful in that white top, het hair is open and she is looking downwards


Navya: arre aunty we are going for shopping


Mom: but we already shopped everything na


Navya: yeah but nandins blouse fitting is not good so we are going their only.


Mom: what? Why didn't u tell me early nandini?


Nandini: she looks first time and sa that manik is looking towards her, she said


Nandini: wo mom, I today itself check them so


Navya: yeah aunty if I do not come na today then she will directly wear it on her marriage and laugh


Bu hearing both hurt manik and nandini


Manik saw pain in nandins eyes but he can't talk in front of all so he want alone time,


Mom: how can you be so care less nandini in engry tone, now who will take you both to tailor , driver also not come till


Manik also waiting for this he said


Manik: chill baby doll I will take them


Aunty: no beta u come today itself you take rest dad will take them


Manik: y baby doll now to I am strong and big also, and y r u sending champ, u can't see he wants rest. And I am good; I have taken rest all night.


When manik said this nandini looks towards him, she remember alyas word


"Baby you wake up so early, you know na I can't sleep without you"


She again got hurt and tears are on the verge of coming out, manik notice this and said


Manik: now it is final I am taking them


Mom: but we don't have our car also, I send it to bring flowers


Manik: its okey I have, I will take mine


Mom: okay,then she turns towards girls and said


Come early, we have to do many things more


When they come out they saw that the weather is cloudy and it is look like in anytime rain is start


They come out and manik calls cabir


Cabir: so everything fine? Did you meet her? Did you confess her? What she said? Did you talk her family


Manik: ho gaya tera, now listen come at nandins house with OPEN GIPSY car we have to go some where


Cabir: we means, you and nandini, iska matlab everything is settle congress buddy, I said na everthing will be fine you go and talk, no thank me


Manik: what?? Stop your nonsense, nothing happen such like that, now no more question and come fast we are waiting


Cabir: okay boss and cut the phone


After some time cabir come


He came out from car he saw two girls with manik, his eyes are fix on navya


He came near manik and ask


Cabir: teri wali konsi hai? (Which one is yours?)


Manik: what??


Cabir: arre teri love lady in high tone


Both navya and nandini looks towards him, but they can't hear properly


Manik: left wali which is in white top


Cabir: THANK GOD and take a breath of relief and goes towards navya and said


Cabir: hey beautiful, myself cabir and aap? Extending his hand in front of her


Navya: navya with a smile or we can say blush.


Cabir: Madhubala in low tone


Navya: kya??


Cabir: noting, you looks like fairy


Navya: thank you ji and got red


Manik saw this and said to himself, I came here to set my story but look this cabirs luck is good, aate hi ladki mil gayi


Manik: cabir navya bate gadi me kar lena, we should leave, and rain also come anytime.


Cabir and navya both: yeah lets go and take seat behind the driver


Now only 2 seat left which is driver and one is left in driver


Now nandini have only one option so manik goes near front door and open for nandini , she came silently and sit in front sit


Manik lock the door and come and sit on driver seat now he start car they start the journey.


Car is open and weather also cloudy so no sun rays, and cool cool breeze air is blowing.


Nandinis hair is flying and they again and again coming on her face and she trying hard to stop them.


Manik again and again looking towards her he wants to stop these hair to disturb her he want to hold them but he can't


She is looking outside and enjoying the weather


She also time to time taking glances of manik when he look forward and both enjoying this moment


Back side cabir and navya is observe both of them and also doing their chit chat


Suddenly nandini and manik saw each other a one time and their eyes meet


They both lost in each other, manik pass a smile unknowingly and nandini also smiles.


Their Trans is broke by cabir navya


Both: if you both want to play this game of looking in each other eyes then come back side because we don't want to die today itself


Manik nandini come out from their lala land and looks opposite side, manik said


Cabirrr loudly


Cabir: what??


Manik showa his eyes and cabir said


Cabir: I afraid dude


Manik look towards nandini smiling he also start smiling and then they all again enjoying ride and soon reach tailor shop


Both girls went inside manik and cabir stop outside and waiting for them near the car.


Cabir: so??


Manik: so??


Cabir: so u talked?


Manik: no, I want alone time but can't find anyway


Cabir: then y r u waiting now, go and talk to her


Manik: no I can't, that navya, she will not leave her alone.


Cabir: problem solved and smirked towards manik


Manik: now what r u upto?


Cabir: trying to help u.


He goes inside the shop and manik is waiting outside


After some time cabir and navya come outside smiling and went near manik


Cabir: go for her. She is alone. Make her my bhabhi


Navya: cabirrr


Cabir: sorry sorry


Manik go she is alone she need you


Navya: we are leaving when you guys talk finish call us we will meet you before going home, and finish your talk early and both goes


Navya turns and said


Navya: manik


Manik looks towards her.


Navya: please bring MY NANDU back. And went with cabir


Manik smiles because he understands what her mean.


He went inside to check on nandini

...


FLACEBACK START:


Cabir went inside tailors shop and saw that navya is going inside a room and nandini is nowhere to be seen.


He directly went to navya and said


Cabir: I think we should leave both of them alone for some time.


Navya: she also thinking something and said in her trans yeah you are right we should leave them alone.


Cabir: wow you are smart I think you don't have that much brain and all and laugh.


When navya hear this she came out from her dream and said: You?? What r u doing here?


Cabir: I am coming here to help my buddy and I know u also want to help your friend


Navya: she didn't said anything and get sad


Cabir: what will happen by this, if u will sad then this is not solution we have to help them na


Navya: yeah I know? But how


Cabir: you know manik loves nandini very much from his childhood?


Navya: what? How do you about him


Cabir: like you know about nandini and saw towards her in a questioning way


Navya: yeah she is to mad after him, but he went away leaving her alone in sad tone


Cabir: but now he came na only for her. He loves her very much if he will not get her, he will lost himself


Navya: yeah nandini, she to already mad. She didn't care himself, you know she dreaming about manik that's why her family doing her marriage and now there is no way get out of this mess, I think you and manik leave us alone


Cabir: y u mad? Y don't u want to help them?


Navya: yeah I want to but it not possible now, it's very late


Cabir: no its not late she is single yet. So we can help them.


Navya: but how


Cabir: first for now we have to leave both of them alone so that they can talk with each other and short out their matter and if they are agree with each other then we will find out a way to out of this mess


Navya: if nandini get more hurt then, she already in very much pain, I don't think this is a good plan


Cabir: yes indeed this is good plan, plz listen 1st time, I want my buddy back who lost when his mom died


Navya: what?? Aunty died in shocked


Cabir: yeah that y manik hurt this much, and his mom only want to him come here and meet nandini so plz don't deny help na


Navya: they both are in so much pain and cry


Cabir: he side hugs her and said, this is not time for getting weak, we have to help them


Navya: yeah I want my nandini back I hope manik bring her back


Cabir: of course he will, I also want my buddy back.


Navya: yeah only they both can bring each other back


Cabir: look how smart you become with me


Navya: like what??


Cabir: nothing, shall we??


Navya: Yeah, one min


Navya go near tailor and said something then they both come out and went near manik laughingly, and after warning manik navya leave with cabir.


She turns and said to manik


Navya: manik plz bring your nandu back, I want my nandini back


Manik understand and laugh he knows what she is saying.


He also went inside in search if nandini


FLACEBACK END


PRESENT


Navya and cabir reach in a caf they order coffee for both of them, suddenly navya saw the person whom nandins marriage is fixed. He is sitting with a girl in a corner of that cafe and notices that they both holding hands and laughing.


Navya found this fishy and she saw that that person stand up and leaves , after 5 min she saw that that girl also leaves,


Navya hold cabirs hand and said, come cabir fast


Cabir: arre what? We didn't even finish our coffee


Navya: come or I will leave alone


Cabir: what yar? Coffee bhi nhi pine deti cholo


Where u want me to go


Navya and cabir went outside and saw that that girl is sitting in a car. When they went near saw that the person which is inside the car is nandinis future husband


That girl sits inside and hugs him, and suddenly they both start kissing each other


Navya: shocked, how he can do this?


Cabir: he notice that navya is looking on a couple who is kissing in a car he said


Cabir: how naughty u, so u like these look couples kissing each other


Navya: what??


Cabir: y r u seeing inside? If u want kiss then tell me na I will give It to u


Navya: what and then blush and smiles and suddenly saw that car is start and leave


Navya: stop your nonsense and saw I lost him


Cabir: who?


Nayya: nandinis future husband


Cabir: what??


Navya: yes that person I kissing that girl is nandinis future husband


Cabir: what?? R u serious


Navya: nhi hum joke mar rahe hai pasand nhi aaya


Cabir: yeah nhi, mai sunao


Navya:cabirrr


Cabir: okay okay so on serious note u r saying that he is nandinis future husband


Navya: did I say in different language


Cabir: no, and he looks upwards and said


Cabir: thank god you make it very simple, now I understand that you also with us in making together manan.


Navya: what??


Cabir: nothing we have to follow them, come fast


They took auto


and went behind that car



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Manik reached inside and saw that nandini is not their he ask tailor


Manik: where is nandini, she came here for fitting


Tailor: she is their she is checking now her blouse is fit or not


Manik saw in a direction there is a room; he saw that door is small open


He went their he saw that nandini is opens her top and trying to wear her blouse but her blouse is stick in her hair pin which is on top of her head


She is trying to remove it but can't make it


Manik notice that nandini is trying to wear it but not possible, manik notice that no one is their so he went inside and lock the door


Nandini didn't notice who came inside she thought navya came inside


Nandini: arre navya look na this blouse is not coming down it stick in my hair


Help me na


Manik goes near but didn't said anything his eyes are fix on her bare back he can saw the strip of her bra because she already opened her top and that blouse also stick in her head.


Nandini when didn't get any response again said


Navya y r u not listening my neck is hurting plz help me na


Manik went very close to her and hold her waist from behind


And A SHIVER RUNS DOWN COMPLETELY HER BODY when his finger touches her waist


Nandini feels a current pass through her body, and suddenly she turns and saw that manik is standing behind her which now comes in front of her.


She saw in maniks eyes and saw the same desire for which she is carving after fantasies about him in her dreaming nights.


Maniks eyes travel down below the neck and saw that her skin is so white and only yello bra she is wearing, he holds her waist tight and pulls her closer,


By this act nandins chest collide with maniks chest and same current pass through maniks body. He feels like claiming her here itself but he have to control his desires because he wants to talk first and this is not right place.


He then holds her both solder and then took both hands and put them on his heart


Nandini now can feel the heart beats rate, that how much speed they are running


She is only looking in maniks eyes and manik take his hands behind her head and push her head towards himself so that he can watch her behind where that blouse stick


When manik push her head her lips touches his heart and again a shiver runs down towards his body.


Now he is getting out of controls and he come back from behind from where he is removing her blouse from her hairs, now he removed it already and it came in her neck


Manik holds her face in his hands and by his thumb he cares her lips and his eyes looking only her lips, they're both lips are shivering and burning in fire, suddenly nandini feels that below between her thigh some things is tickling her so she looks downwards manik also saw that nandini is looking downwards he notice that and what he saw make both of them embraced. Because manik is already out of control after watching nandini in this state but he is controlling his desires


Both turns opposite direction and feels shy, nandini got completely red


Manik claim himself and also his desires because this is not right before talking


After some time he composes himself and turns and saw that nandini is looking hot in her blouse


He again got lost in her body and said


YOU ARE LOOKING HOT


Nandini didn't said anything and looks downwards blushing


Manik notice her bluse and it make him also happy and he again went near her, nandini saw this so she also going backwards


Then after some time nandini is between wall and maniks body


Manik is holding her by his one hand her waist and other hand is playing with her face. He caressing her chick's lips and then he pull her face upwards


Manik saw that nandins eyes are close he blows air on them and said open your eyes, she nodes in no


Manik left her waist and put his hand on her stomach because due to blouse his belly part is shown


He is making round round shape on her belly and she is shivering badly due to his torches she is moaning his names


Manik, plz manik


Manik is enjoying her this state and this moans of her again wake up his desires


Now he again said


Open your eyes and and he opens her blouse bottom button and take his hand on 2nd button from below.


He takes her hair from one solder to 2nd and he goes near her nack and give a love bite directly


Nandini feels pain and pleasure and hold his shirt tightly her hands touch his heart and he got out of controls


He start opens the buttons of her blouse and his lips are gives kisses on neck and solders. His come to that love bite and start sucking it


Nandini also come out of controls she moaning his name loudly and also start opening his shirt buttons


She open his above 3 buttons and pushes her hand inside his shirt place her hand on his heart directly on his bare chest and a current pass through maniks body and clutches nandins waits suddenly and push towards himself by which nandini collides with him


And this collide is so high that nandins hand reach till his back and now manik can't control so he pulls her in his embers arms tightly and hug her very tightly


Both are hugging tightly


Nandinis blouse buttons are complete open only barrier coming between their bodies from upper part is only nandins bra


Both are crashing each other's backs


Suddenly they hear a knock from outside


Tailor: nandini did you check it, is it fit now


By this voice they come out from each other's hugs and saw their state, they quickly do their cloths right and suddenly the door opens and saw that tailor is standing at the gate smiling


Tailor: so you both inside, that y I thinking y r u taking time with naughty smile


Both: what?? Together


Tailor: I am saying that before marriage every boy girl meets with each other cori cori chupke chupke but gou guys so start here only


They both looks towards each other and said: marriage and kiski?


Tailor: arre tum dono ki


Arre abhi some time before a boy came and said something to navya and then navya come near me and said that she got emergency, so she have to leave, and said that nandinis future husband will come to pick her up, and when she left he came inside asking about you.


Your future husband and smiles at both of them.


They both looks towards each other and nandini trying to say something but before manik said


Yeah I am her future husband so nandini come outside I am waiting for you and leaves from there.


After some time nandini checking her dress and paying money she also come outside and saw that manik is standing near car and smiling and navya and cabir is nowhere to be seen.


She went near manik and asks


Nandini: where is navya cabir?


Manik: she left with cabir


Nandini: she left without me, I hope everything is fine.


Manik: yeah everything is fine. Come we have to talk something important so they left us alone.


Nandini: about what??


Manik: come I will tell you


Nandini: where?? Tell here na. No one is here


Manik: why? Didn't you trust me? He ask casually so that she agree with him


Nandini: khud se bhi jyada and stops and saw that manik is looking shockingly towards her.


Then she notice what she said and feel embraces and said stammering


Nandini: wo...i...me...an...


Manik come out of shock and saw her face, he put his finger on her lips and said


Shhh.. Come and sit we have to leave, look upwards weather also not good I think rain will happen any time.


A shiver runs down when manik touches her lips


She sit in the car obediently child


Manik also come and sit on driver seat and saw that nandini is looking nervous so he holds her hand and make a tight grief


Nandini also hold it back but didn't look towards him, manik notice this hold and pass a smile but didn't said anything and start the car by other hand and went for his next destination for which he is waiting for a very long time.


NEXT Part 3: Page 9 (LAST PART)




guys i am writing this part from very long time, i know i said i will complete in 2 part but now i want 1 more part 2 make it complete

i know i didn't complete my promise plz forgive me

i will give you 3rd and last part today evening itself


so till tell me how is it
did you like 2nd part

plz like and comment




with lots of hugs
MyGuitarVina
(Rahul)

Edited by MyGuitarVina - 9 years ago
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Hey just read ur story
Its amazing
Luvd it
Plz pm me next part
I would live to read it
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Beautiful update..
it wassizzling..
Cavya love story is also taking step..
Finally they r together...i mean they didn't confess yet they know each other feeling...
Oho thank you navy...at right time u saw the right thing..
i hope everything will be OK now...

Keep smiling...
Request PM me...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awesome update...
Actually very hot... N glad that Manik likes nandini too..

ReLly awesome story liking it alot
Will be waiting for the final update

Conti soon

Keep smiling
Stay blessed
😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#29
Nice
Loved it.
Continue soon
Take care
:)
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi that was awesome update want to see how they propose eachother and handle everything pls update next one soon and pls pm me

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