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Posted: 10 years ago
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Chapter 1: Beautiful girls & New Enemies

Abhi and Mukti fight each other in rehab.

"Hey Mukti, wait up yaar!" Abhi said, running after Mukti as she headed out of the rehab facility.

"What?! What else could you possibly have to say to me?" Mukti lashed out, whirling around to face him. Abhi smiled softly, she was the most beautiful girl he'd ever met. "This is what you do to every girl who doesn't respond to you, right? Lash out, embarrass her in public?" Mukti accused him, her voice laced with venom.

"No, but this is something I do to the more difficult rehab patients I meet. I just need a reaction so that I can judge how they actually feel about themselves, and I'm sorry if I embarrassed you." Abhi explained, reaching out to touch her. Mukti flinched backwards, glaring at him angrily.

"Whatever... And if you want me to come back to rehab then make sure you aren't in my sessions any more, got that?" Mukti said, turning around and stalking off to her car without waiting for a response.

"Got it beautiful!" Abhi called out, heading back into the building. "See you later..." He murmured.

Next day at S.P.A.C.E. Academy

"Yaar aaj hamari nayi manager ke saath first day hona wala hai na?" Cabir asked Manik teasingly as they waited for the rest of Fab 5 on the college steps. Manik frowned, an annoyed look on his face at the mention of the girl he couldn't get out of her head. "Whoa, speak of the devil!" Cabir murmured, causing Manik to turn his head immediately. He immediately wished he hadn't, because she looked absolutely breathtaking. And no matter how hard he tried, he couldn't take his eyes off. "Waise, hot hai na woh?" Cabir asked slyly.

"Hot nahi, beautiful..." Manik murmured, spellbound by the magic that only Nandini Murthy could weave. Suddenly, the spell broke, and he realized what he'd said.

"Agar itna hi lo... like karta hai toh akad chod na Manik! Dhruv has moved on too na, just take my advice. Cabir said wisely, realizing the painful depth of what Manik felt.

"She doesn't want this, us... And I won't push her Cabir, not anymore." Manik said sadly, a haunted look in his eyes as he remembered something. "She cried so much, at the farmhouse, and every tear... Felt like death man. I can't put her through that again, hell, I can't go through it either." Manik mumbled, and Cabir was stunned when he saw the unshed tears in Manik's eyes.

"Chal, senti baatein chod! Aaj ka plan kya hai woh bata... After all, we only have 4.33 days to finish our first song, remember?" Cabir joked, bringing a smile back onto Manik's face.

"What Cabir, tu bhi uss behnji ki tarah baat kar rahe ho?" Mukti said, as she ran up the stairs, Dhruv and Alya close behind her.

"She does have a point though guys... Humhe Khurana ki deal kisi bhi tarah puri karni hai!" Alya said worriedly, her face creasing into a frown.

"Alya, don't worry, sab ho jaayega!" Dhruv piped up, giving Alya a meaningful look.

"Yeah and anyways, here comes our manager to make sure that happens!" Mukti joked, seeing Nandini walking back out of the building with books and files in hand. "Oh my god, yeh yahan bhi paunch gaya!" She growled, seeing a familiar LIDS hat wearing guy at the bottom of the stairs when she turned around. But before she could confront him, she heard books falling to the ground, and Nandini Murthy ran past them, into the arms of Mukti's newest enemy!

"Abhimanyu!!! Kaise ho tum, what are you doing here?" Nandini cried out pulling back to look her best friend in the eye.

And all of a sudden, Manik found himself a new enemy too.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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awsm chap
loved it
very nicely written
continue soon
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cont. soon..it was really good😃
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awesome start continue soon 😊
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great start! 👏 continue soon!
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😊great start...
awsome update...👏
continue soon...😊
thanks a lot for the pm...
😊

wishing u & ur family a very happy and prosperous new year...

with love & prayers
aavani

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Wonderful Kavi...👏
First let me comment on the writing. You write well and I loved the they way you have written. The flow was nice.

Second on the characters, I loved the twist you bought to the characters of Nandini and Abhi, and their friendship. That works very well, especially to bring out the possessive side of Manik. And nice conversation between Abhi and Mukhti.

Loved the beginning of the story and looking forward to more.
and thanks for the PM. Please so send me PM's for future parts. 😃

Love
MD
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Chapter 2: Friendship, Love and Indifference

"What can I say Midget? I just missed you so much I decided to move here..." Abhi replied, an easy joking tone in his voice.

"Don't call me Midget anymore Dumbo!" Nandini groaned, still not detaching herself from Abhimanyu, completely oblivious to all the stares.

"Okay Doll, but then you can't call me Dumbo... And by the way, I think your boyfriend is trying to kill me with his eyes, so please let go now!" Abhi said, lowering his voice at the end so that others wouldn't hear.

"What do you mean?" Nandini asked, surprised. Then she let Abhi go and turned to see her Monster glaring at her. "Oh... He's probably trying to kill me, not you." She murmured humorlessly.

"Has he been bothering you? Do I need to..." Abhi started rambling protectively, making Nandini laugh as she disentangled herself from her overprotective best friend.

"It's okay HERO... This is normal with him!" Nandini said, emphasizing hero when she saw Manik approaching her. Abhi watched her carefully as her demeanor changed completely and she quickly went stiff.

"Let's go..." Manik growled at Nandini, anger coloring his voice.

"Hey dude, what's your problem? How can you speak to her like that?" Abhi said, stepping forward so he was shielding Nandini. Seeing this, Mukti's eyes widened, this was the opposite of the calm, patient Abhimanyu that she'd met. It was like he had a split personality or something.

"Well dude, she happens to be running late and wasting our time... And either way, how I speak to Nandini none of your business, got that?" Manik said, taking on a dangerous and challenging stance.

"And you... You are the manager of Fab 5, you might want to focus on that, rather than flirting with random strangers." Manik growled at Nandini. Abhi stepped forward, his patience running thin but was stopped by Nandini's hand on his shoulder.

"I'm sorry that I was running late Mr. Malhotra... But that gives you no right to comment on what I choose to do in my personal life or behave in this way with the people I care about. Now, if that's all, why don't we head into the jam room and get to work so that no more of your precious time is wasted." Nandini said, her voice calm but cold enough send shivers of pain down Manik's spine. Then, she turned to face Abhi "Pick me up at six?" She murmured peacefully.

"Of course doll!" Abhi replied, a smirk on his face when he saw Nandini's confident demeanor, heading back to his bike and driving off as Nandini stalked ahead of the Fab 5.

"He didn't even look at me?" Mukti murmured, puzzled at Abhimanyu's indifference towards her. Then she stopped in her tracks, even more surprised that it affected her.

That evening in the jam room - Fab 5 is wrapping up

"God... Why is it so hard to make this song work?" Mukti groaned, tilting her head back in her chair.

"We'll figure it out Mukti..." Alya encouraged half-heartedly, running her fingers through her hair as she thought through the song one more time.

"When though... We only have two more days to finish this song if we want to stay on track with the deadline." Cabir said, exhaustion making him uncharacteristically gloomy. The room fell quiet as everyone turned to thinking about their own lives and problems. Seeing the dejection of Fab 5, Nandini turned to Manik, expecting him to speak, but even he was quiet. The sad, tired look on his face made him seem 10 years older, and Nandini felt a pang of regret for what she'd said to him that morning.

"Aiyappa what do I do? I can't forgive him, but I can't see his pain either..." Nandini murmured quietly, feeling unshed tears burning the surface of her eyes, the tears of his pain.

Still evening - with Nandini and Abhi

"So... What's the deal with you and that guy? Manik, I think?" Abhi asked Nandini as they sat down in the cafe across from SPACE.

"He was my first kiss..." Nandini murmurs after a pause, knowing that would be enough for him to understand.

"But you always said you wouldn't do that until you felt like it was love! Oh god... You fell for him didn't you?" Abhi said, stunned.

"Yes, but he walked out, pushed me away... And I, like the romantic fool that I am, still love him." Nandini whispered, a heartbroken look on her face.

Edited by ..Kavi.. - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Okay, so I FINALLY updated!
I'm really sorry for the delay, I had this project worth 30 percent of my English mark assigned and then I had semester finals, which ended yesterday.
From now on I will try to make my updates more regular, since the craziness has pretty much come to an end.
Expect an update (or 2) between now and Sunday!
Thanks,
..Kavi.. ❤️
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Posted: 10 years ago
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awsm chap
loved it
very nicely written
continue soon

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