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Originally posted by: Sabdabhala

SO I AM BACK WITH DETAILED COMMENTS, AFTER A COUPLE OF THOROUGH READINGS, AND HERE THEY ARE -

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THERE ARE ACTUALLY TWO SETS OF COMMENTS, FIRST ONES ABOUT YOUR WRITING STYLE, AND THE SECOND ONES ABOUT THE STORY, THE PLOT AND THE CHARACTERS

Oh my God... I am flattered, Lavanya😳

REGARDING THE FORMER, I MUST SAY THAT I AM TOTALLY BLOWN WITH THIS CHAPTER... EACH WORD IS USED PERFECTLY, AND IS SCENE IS EXPLAINED SO VIVIDLY AND BEAUTIFULLY THAT I CAN IMAGINE EACH ONE IN MY MIND CLEARLY - RIGHT FROM THE 'DISTURBED' AAYAT THAT THE SHEHZAADE RECITES TILL HEERA RUNS TO THE WINDOW WITH HER PRAYERS AND WISHES FOR THE SAHIB. 👏

Thank you so so so much...☺️

And the underlined...

THIS IS AN EMOTIONALLY CHARGED CHAPTER, TO PUT IT MILDLY 😉 BUT THE FINESSE WITH WHICH YOU HAVE HANDLED THE MYRIAD EMOTIONS IS ABSOLUTELY ASTOUNDING 👏 FROM SHEHZAADE'S VEILED AND CONTROLLED ANGER, TO FAROOQ SAHIB'S HIDDEN DECEIT AND TWO FACEDNESS, TO KHALIL'S MANIC EUPHORIA, TO KHAN SAHIB'S OPTIMISM REGARDING THE CANAL, HIS SHOCK AT THE DEATH OF HIS MEN, HIS SILENT LAMENT FOR NOT APPRECIATING THEM ENOUGH WHILE THEY WERE ALIVE, HIS GENTLE HANDLING OF SAYYID, HIS GRATITUDE ON SEEING HIM ALIVE, HIS DEJECTION AT THE NEWS RECEIVED FROM THE SPY, HIS EMBARASSMENT FOR HIS MOMENTARY LOSS OF CONTROL, HIS TENDER TETE A TETE WITH HIS WIFE, HIS VULNERABILITY WHEN HE MAKES HER SEE REALITY, HIS INDECISION REGARDING WHAT TO DIVULGE TO HIS HUZOOR, HIS STEADFASTNESS TOWARDS HIS GOAL, HEERA'S BATTLE WITH HER EMOTIONS, HER RESOLVE TO NOT TEAR UP, HER SENSITIVE UNDERSTANDING OF WHAT THE SAHIB WANTS...EACH AND EVERY EMOTION IS BEAUTIFULLY EXPRESSED...WITH NOT A SINGLE SYLLABLE OUT OF PLACE

Lavanya... was it easy to write this paragraph? I ask because I marvel at the choice of desrciptives you've used to describe each person.. and you've taken us through the entire chapter 'emotionally' in this para...

I can only say I'm glad that you found the chapter beautifully expressed and I hope to keep up the tempo for the remainder of the chapters too...

ANOTHER SUPERB ASPECT OF YOUR WRITING SKILLS, AND I HAVE MENTIONED THIS POINT SEVERAL TIMES, IS HOW WELL YOUR STORY FLOWS THROUGH THE CHAPTERS...MUCH LIKE THE JOURNEY OF THE CANAL THAT SAHIB IS ENVISAGING...

Awww😳

I LOVE THE WAY YOU HAVE CHARACTERIZED THE NEW MAN, FAROOQ SAHIB - SUPERBLY DETAILING HIS PHYSICAL APPEARANCE, AND JUST A BIT LATER, HIS CHARACTER...👏

It was important for me to get him right... amd even as an antagonist.. he seems to have captured the viewers' imagination.. 😊

NOW TO THE STORY AND CHARACTERS

I THINK THE SHEHZAADE IS RIGHT IN HIS PLACE TO BE SO DISTURBED, TO A LARGE EXTENT. IF SUCH NEWS ABOUT THE PERSON WHOM HE RESPECTS THE MOST REACHES HIM, HE WOULD CERTAINLY BE WISE TO HAVE IT INVESTIGATED. AND THE KIND OF ERA THAT IT WAS, TRUST WAS THE ONE THING THAT WAS DIFFICULT TO FIND...

Of course... no doubt about it.. he'd be a deadbeat heir if he did not do so...

FAROOQ SAHIB TURNED OUT TO BE QUITE A TWO FACED MONSTER, I MUST SAY. IT WAS A SHOCK FOR ME TO SEE HIM RUSH WITH THE NEWS TO KHALIL, OF ALL PEOPLE. BUT AGAIN WITH BROTHERS KILLING EACH OTHER, THIS WAS OK TO DIGEST, I GUESS...HIS SPIES HAVE CERTAINLY GIVEN HIM ACCURATE INFORMATION. AND HE SERIOUSLY IS QUITE SHARP AND THE SHROUD OF CONFIDENTIALITY IS SERVING HIM WELL...

As soon as FS learnt of AMK's wedding to Heera and becoming the Mansabdar of Hindus (on his return into India) he's been hoping to get rid of this disease called AMK (as how HE sees the man) straightaway - before he AMK can start influencing his Shehzaade. After all, Shehzaade is the only hope for his vision of an all-Islamic empire!!!

So, once he came to know that AMK is indeed under investigation (a pure stroke of luck), he rushes to Khalil to solidify the case...

Because he knows Khalil has both - the means and the want to get onto this case with as much vigour (after all, that monster has his own vendetta against AMK!)

KHALIL, OF COURSE, IS CONSISTENTLY EVIL...NO CHANGE THERE... AND I AM QUITE HOPEFUL THAT, UNLESS KHALIL HAS AQUIRED SOME EXCEPTIONAL CEREBRAL PROWESS 😆 THAT HE WILL CERTAINLY DIG HIS OWN GRAVE IN THE FRENZY OF BRNGING THE SAHIB DOWN...

Omg... 😆

THE WHOLE SCENE AT SAYYID'S HOUSE WAS EXTREMELY POIGNANT...SAHIB'S THOUGHTS AND ACTIONS ARE SO SUBTLE, SO SUITABLE...AND JUST PERFECT...

😳 Awww

ALL OF SAHIB'S MEN ARE HEROES...AZEEZ, SAYYID...😳 AND THE SNIPPET ABOUT SAYYID'S PAST LIFE IS ENDEARING TO READ...HOW, WITH A LITTLE TENDER NURTURING, A MAN UNDERGOES A SEA CHANGE IN HIS THOUGHTS AND DEEDS...👏

That IS AMK's belief😳... of course there are those that'd never change and fall back into bad ways easily... but those are the kinds that AMK' never takes on.. (the likes of Gafhoor that stable boy who stole the 60 coins in Aidabad)

AND IT WAS AWWW MOMENT FOR ME TO SEE HIM FEEL SORRY...WHEN, IN REALITY, ALLOF US AND HIS SAHIB KNOW THAT HE DID THE VERY BEST...SHOWING SO MUCH GRIT AFTER HAVING BEEN SO GRAVELY INJURED...

True😳

THE RUSH OF ACTIVITY IN THE HAVELI IS WONDERFULLY DESCRIBED... LIKE ALL SCENES WHIRRRING PAST AND HEERA AT THE CENTRE OF IT ALL, WONDERING WHAT SHE MUST DO... AND THE CRASH OF THE LANTERN...SYMBOLIC AT SO MANY LEVELS...SUPERB!!!

Thank you da😊 It took me a very very long time to get that scene right..

AZEEZ AGAIN 😆 HAVE TO REALLY HAND IT TO THE GUY...THE WAY HE SENDS HEERA INSIDE SPEAKS VOLUMES ABOUT HIS FINE SENSIBILITIES...

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AND THE SCENE INSIDE HIS CHAMBER... GOD, I DONT HAVE WORDS TO DESCRIBE IT... BUT THE ONE NOTICEABLE THING FOR ME WAS THAT THE SAHIB TELLS HEERA EVERYTHING POINT BLANK... HIS TRUST IN HER AS HIS COMPANION HAS GROWN MANIFOLD, AND WHY NOT? HEERA TOO IS BECOMING HIS TRUE SAATHI AT BREAKNECK SPEED...SHE DOES NOT SHED EVEN A SINGLE TEAR...AND REMAINS A HUGE SUPPORT TO HIM BY UNDERSTANDING HIM PERFECTLY...AND REMINDS HIM OF HIS PROMISE IN THE MOST SUBTLE WAY...

He has to tell her everything na... a well-prepared person can adapt better to change... and every single decision or action of his is to benefit Heera's future!

THE FLASHBACK ABOUT THE MOONLIT NIGHT WAS ETHREAL, LASHY!!!

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AND THE FOCUS ON THE TAAVEEZ POUCH WAS...UFFF...THEIR BRIEF TOUCH SEEMED HEAVENLY AND THEIR PARTING...WAS JUST TENDER AND SAD...MOSTLY SAD!!!

It was...

THE WHOLE CHAPTER WAS A MASTERPIECE, MY DEAR...BUT FOR ME, THE MASTERSTROKE WAS THE POEM AT THE END...THAT SUITABLY CONVEYED WHAT THE SAHIB MEANT TO HER, AND HER PEOPLE; AND THE DANGERS THAT THEY WERE NOW EXPOSED TO, IN HIS ABSENCE...

I am glad you loved the poem so much... I truly never thought it'd be effective... I just couldn't think of a better way to end Part 3, so I used the means of a poem... but it seems to have grabbed the most attention... why don't you post here what you sent me on WA... as to why the poem struck you so much.. 😊 I thought the analogy was beautiful...

AND WHAT DO WE HAVE TO LOOK FORWARD TO... SAHIB'S HOPE...

'THIS COULD BE THE BEGINNING'

Awww yes... 😳

Thank you for this beautiful review, Lavanya... I was blown away when I read it then and now!!!

Originally posted by: karkuzhali

Just returned after watching "Mahanadi"...

Originally posted by: lashy

How did you like it, Periyamma? 😃

Originally posted by: Kalgi22

Yeah we're waiting to hear from you.. And do you like the 'Reel Kathal Mannan' as well? 😉

Originally posted by: binduprasad41

It's raining here ...in my place 😆

Quotation...

It's just for fun...don't take it for seriously .😆