OS || Maand: A calling from the countryside; Akbar's POV on pg 5

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divyavm

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Posted: 8 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: Annie15
Beautiful and lovely story...

Thanks so much!

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divyavm

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Posted: 8 years ago

#22

Originally posted by: ngayou
Hey Divs,
I never read any FFs or Oses. But today I thought let me give this a try & what do I see, like woww, it was short & so sweet & yet it managed to convey the whole story with the underlying emotions so poignantly👏.

Wonderful, Divs , good luck for ur future endeavours if any😳.

Seems u r a sagalakala valli😉...ur take 5s , ur love of music & u r a very good singer too & now this, storytelling too, way to go👍🏼

Thanks so much Gayathri! It means a lot that you read mine when you usually don't. 🤗

Appreciate the best wishes - means a lot 😳

Music and stories are really the common thread across everything I do ... that's why I am so obsessed with medleys as each song brings its own story

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swetiii

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+ 5

Posted: 8 years ago

#23

amazing os didu
loved it
both wanted other to succeed
they loved each other so much
beautifully written

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IshqHaiWoEhsaas

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+ 3

Posted: 8 years ago

#24

Originally posted by: divyavm

I'll be waiting for more such pleasant surprises. 😃 And very true, AkDha indeed are just one form of felicity! 😳

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Shinning_Stuti

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+ 2

Posted: 8 years ago

#25

Such a beautiful and refreshing OS on a brilliant concept and wonderful presentation!👏👏

Jodha's journey through the broken, rough road symbolized her emotional plight, the song floating in the air welcoming her in her 'own' home, her first encounter with Akbar, the yearning which is hidden by a cloud of formality after the long separation... and the line- It was unfinished matters indeed. Unfinished for two years. His voice finished my thought for me, "You have brought the divorce papers?" And, it was my turn to nod. 😭 😭

So many things are spoken in these simple words...

Their happy old days, impulsive decision of marriage, dreams together, clash with reality, loneliness, yearning... all are so beautifully portrayed. The way they reunited was so touchy...😳

The unique concept of ARMAAN is just brilliant and perfectly put in the story... Brilliant! Wonderfully written.

I wish I could express myself better, but don't know what happened to me. 😆

Congratulations once again and thank you so much for this story!😳

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divyavm

@divyavm

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Posted: 8 years ago

#26

Originally posted by: swetiii
amazing os didu
loved it
both wanted other to succeed
they loved each other so much
beautifully written

Thanks so much- I am glad you liked the different ways they showed their love for each other 😳

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divyavm

@divyavm

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Posted: 8 years ago

#27

Originally posted by: -Felicity-

I'll be waiting for more such pleasant surprises. 😃 And very true, AkDha indeed are just one form of felicity! 😳

Thanks again so so much! Let's see when the next story idea comes to me 😊

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divyavm

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Posted: 8 years ago

#28

Originally posted by: Shinning_Stuti
Such a beautiful and refreshing OS on a brilliant concept and wonderful presentation!👏👏
Jodha's journey through the broken, rough road symbolized her emotional plight, the song floating in the air welcoming her in her 'own' home, her first encounter with Akbar, the yearning which is hidden by a cloud of formality after the long separation... and the line- It was unfinished matters indeed. Unfinished for two years. His voice finished my thought for me, "You have brought the divorce papers?" And, it was my turn to nod. 😭 😭

So many things are spoken in these simple words...

Thanks so much! It means a lot to see how you have noticed every detail , particularly I loved the "cloud of formality" observation ... Yes, it was a formality that slowly melted into familiarity

Their happy old days, impulsive decision of marriage, dreams together, clash with reality, loneliness, yearning... all are so beautifully portrayed. The way they reunited was so touchy...😳

The unique concept of ARMAAN is just brilliant and perfectly put in the story... Brilliant! Wonderfully written.

I am so glad you liked it 😳

I wish I could express myself better, but don't know what happened to me. 😆

Your words were fantastic, why do you say that?

Congratulations once again and thank you so much for this story!😳

My pleasure- thank you for all the support 😳

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dellaakdha

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Dazzler

Posted: 8 years ago

#29

1st congrats for the title u got due to this os..this is just awesome story..a very diffrent concept with the touch of culture..i really liked tat concept..and ur writing,the way of expressing the thoughts are really beautiful..they added extra fragnance..tat song when jo landed in village indicates her destiny..the dress of jalal s nice..the way both love each other is the same for their goal,vision but in a diffrent manner..they acheivd in tat also..infact tat brings them together again..both knw what each other doing and their activities..akbar knws about jo's donation..he waited for her arrival in the form of divorce paper..assistant of akbar s the most wantd character..i lyk the way how u connectd their love story with the organic farming technique..a emotional os..well written..