NOVEL~*Hiding behind a Stranger*~Thread 11 - Chapter 16 - UPD 22nd SEP - Page 39

Originally posted by: Kalgi22

How simply you create a perfect situation for romantic scan within the boundary of social acceptance in that era. ⭐️ Like Durga bai's horse riding with her would be. Akheera's encounter you always use the way like she went to see Bahadur and provide the space to know each other, grew their feelings not only suitable for her states but keep customs also. With ease you find a way to saw their feelings to each other. It was so pure and divine. You wrote each detail with perfection to suit 17 century.👏 Bring symbolic cupid danger as a red scorpion and Write this romantic scan to unveil their feelings to other and other way round its symbolic to upcoming danger. It was so pure and divine.😊 It's a splendid work.

Poem is awesome and soothing

Mix bag of emotion

Beautifully wrote their status of mind when saw each other at this place.. Her alertness, fear, calm as it was Him. His pause and worry as she was alone and it's come out as question. Happiness and wonders at his quarry instead of greeting and his protectiveness. Annoyed by her people and decide to take care of her from far but entry of cupid and he rush to save her. She feels hesitation when he came towards her but follows his instruction with trust to keep her safe and when her veil fall too. She noted him as second person to follow instruction

Beauty of feelings

You manage with excellence to show their feelings mentally and physically how they feel in others proximity while handling the danger. Her teasingly inquire about enemy , smile giggle, closely look at his features, fight to control racing heart beats, quarrying lips, flattering at his whisper, try to divert her mind not to get lost in his eyes.

Keep eye on attacker but closeness to her create over powering desire and he try to hold his moral . Very well explain his inner self. Her baiting and his smirk, whisper, her remark and his retort ,his teasing and her silence . alas 😳 At last he lost the battle and drowns into her beauty; admire her features, Havoc with in the self with touch of her silk. He felt their convo refreshing. Without fail and caring for himself he saves her. All in all it was so adorable.

It was bit painful as she cannot step down in hurry. I like in between he make aware of her enemy about whom she partially know that too without panic.

I again like her people's behavior.😃

She was worried and caring about his heath but as usual he determined to stay away from her in that process he indicates about his past or other side to know.

Magical word

In three words he said everything to her. His worry and care, about danger and her safety, warning to stay safe for him, his protectiveness. If he was not there in any case or she leave from there.

Symbolic

red scorpion was apt and clever choice. Shows how silent, stealthy, poisonous, cunning and deadly enemies she had but he will save her and danger bring them close and feel her with unshaken trust. mandir staircase we can see as God's will that he will be her protector. Pain of bite is like he feels pain for Heera.

Heera got suspicious about his identity ,he know more than her but same time she wants to know about his health and feel sad but go on with her duty.

Bhagy ne apna yoddha chun liya hai

This part is marvellous . Take a pat on your back deari . How flawlessly you wrote his self talk.

He is in situation like mahabharat stands at the point where two path for him. Where ever and whatever you are doing if your roots and thoughts are fair and follow principal they lead you to right path.

she was not in pain it was like soothing for him. He was not sure of how long and from how many he will save her. Finally accepted that he fall for her charm. Again he felt pain when thought of to stay away forever from her.

He felt sad and concern when he looks at scroll. He doesn't want to betray Shahzade whatever his dilemma. He was surprised on hiding scroll. He felt pride to work for him but now his conscious bit him. 10 years of gratitude and loyalty but 10 days for awakens his conscious. I want to give you a tight hug for this.🤗

His fairness push him to thought logically. She is not enemy and harmful to shahzade. Her war against khalil was justified as he told to shahzade at last meeting k's act is not accepted by religion also. Her fight for land is also selfless but his master will not accept it and he doesn't want to be a reason of her punishment.

He pray to God and his as like it answered the scroll got burn. He didn't try to save it and feel relax as he stands for truth.⭐️

He will not leave shahzade but doesn't want to help anything wrong against shahiba.⭐️

Originally posted by: karkuzhali

Chapter 16.

He sees her..

"Why are you sitting here alone?"

He sees the scorpion...

Moves carefully forward..."Don't move!..." Got it!

Later..." How is his health? Did he get a doctor to treat the scorpion's poison?..."

"What happened to me? Why am I thinking about him?"

"The love sting gives me more pain than the scorpion's..."

"How can I betray my Shezaadi...? "

"Ya Kudha.. give me a solution..."

Karkuzhali.

Originally posted by: karkuzhali

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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">He sees her..</font>

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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Later..." How is his health? Did he get a doctor to treat the scorpion's poison?..."</font>

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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">"What happened to me? Why am I thinking about him?"</font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">"The love sting gives me more pain than the scorpion's..."</font>

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<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">"How can I betray my Shezaadi...? "</font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">"Ya Kudha.. give me a solution..."</font>

<font face="Times New Roman, Times, serif" size="3">Karkuzhali</font>.