An OS: The Broken Nest - Page 7

Originally posted by: Senapatichandri

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Tujhe main kya boli, ek Aisi topic tune choose ki Jo dil k date emotions bahar laakar khada kar de...ufff tujhe Pata v nhi ki kis trha se apne mom k saamne padhte waqt Maine apne tears ko control kie...

Awww maine aapko rula dia? Cholly.😭😆 and thank u.😳

Kaise kar leti h ye sab

Huh huh😎😆
BI really like jalal's charector in youth a regrating father in his 50's...lovly

I too enjoyed so much while writing.thank u so much.😳
But i really confused abt jodha's behave
If she can feel jalal's rgrate i fee she can give another chance to him...after all [I][/I] har zulm har date de fir bhi baap baap hota hai...har zakhm de har judayi de per pyar to oust hi hota hai...

She can't come back to him only as she has moved away too far and their path has been divided long back, they can't be together now if even they want.
But the feel of this storywas too muchtouching yaar...

O thank u.😳
But ek request h
Agli bar kisi story me itna mat rulana...sandy as gaye yar padhte padhte

Originally posted by: RamSiyaRam

Originally posted by: sr0560982

Superb story di..!This is really a heart touching one..!

Originally posted by: sau1234mya

Iwas really crying stuti

Really very sad story

Originally posted by: lashy

I read the story dear.. and like others have said you have done a brilliant job at portraying emotions..

🤗Thank you so so so much.

Human emotions are rarely purely evil or purely angelic.. they always lie somewhere in between... which is what I am seeing here, in this story too..

I too believe this, so try my best to describe that in my stories. 😳

Now I know that Jalal is the portrayed 'antagonist' in your story and that Jodha is the quintessential protective mother... but even if nowhere close to how much Jalal failed as a father/husband, of what I read, I feel Jodha has somewhat failed as a wife too...

Though while writing I was wishing to state Jodha as a great mother; somehow after reading again after writing I can't deny this.😆 She may look like obsessed with her child sometimes...😛

Since Jalal's faults have already been portrayed in detail, there's no point laying them out again... he definitely shoulders most of the blame for the crumbled home... but if Jalal was the ONLY negative, I should have felt sorrier for Jodha than I do now, which I somehow don't seem to feel...

maybe because at most points of the story, she sounded like a nanny/teacher/care-taker of child - but, rarely ever a wife...

Yes she could have been a bit sensible towards Jalal, perhaps the story would have been different.🤔 But yeah, if the same story I would write from Jodha's view, the perspective of Jodha as a wife and a mother would have been clearer which I was somehow unable to portray much in this short scope.🤓

I sense problems in their relationship even before the arrival of Salim (like Jalal's career obsession) Salim was the last straw!

Hmm...🤔 😔

There is a popular saying... if you treat your spouse well... if you build a happy home, the children will be happy too... there's no family where the kids are happy by themselves, while the parents remain quarelling/unhappy...

So, spend time with your spouse, listen, talk, share and make them happy! Children learn from what they see...

That's very true and sweet.😳It's very tough for the children when they cannot have a healthy family environment with happy parents; others can hardly feel the turmoil of their heart. And this may increase the violent instinct inside them 😭

Beautiful effort, Stuti... very thought provoking stuff you come up with!

😳

Thank you so much for reading and sharing your thoughts di.😳