Akdha: OS- meet me in paradise.

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Cattywrites

@sharmacatty

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+ 4

Posted: 9 years ago

#21

Originally posted by: ketaki1
Thanks alot dear...
It means a lot to me..😳
I will try to write more..😊

😃

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swetiii

@swetiii

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+ 5

Posted: 9 years ago

#22

amazing os
beautifully described
Jalal changed himself for Jodha
Hehe

JJ lived for each other..
with each other
last para was very emotional
he went to meet her in paradise
to unite again...
this time to never separate again

sorry for late comment

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ketaki1

@ketaki1

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Posted: 9 years ago

#23

Originally posted by: swetiii
amazing os
beautifully described
Jalal changed himself for Jodha
Hehe

JJ lived for each other..
with each other
last para was very emotional
he went to meet her in paradise
to unite again...
this time to never separate again

sorry for late comment

Thank god you liked it...
😊

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IshqHaiWoEhsaas

@IshqHaiWoEhsaas

Stunner

+ 3

Posted: 9 years ago

#24

RES.

Congrats for your first OS, Keta...🤗

Will read and comment soon dear. 😃

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melovesja

@melovesja

Rocker

Posted: 9 years ago

#25

lovely and well written os. like the concept.😊 wrote his life changing , important and memorable moments. from their first meeting, how he change him self,understand her feelings confession and many more. I like that part most in their old age their love for each other and how he feel her near him last part was touchy. finally both soul meet in paradise.👏

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Titus

@Akdhalover6

Inactive

+ 2

Posted: 9 years ago

#26

Originally posted by: Akdhalover6898
RES

UNRES

AMAZING OS K2

LOVED IT❤️

JALAL GOT MESMARIZED BY JODHA'S BEAUTY😃 AND CHANGE HIS DECITION FOR ATTENDING JO'S INTERVIEW😉

JODHA STARTED TO FEEL FOR JALAL AND SHE GET JEALOUS WHEN HE TRY TO GET COUSY WITH OTHER GIRLS😆 BUT UNWARE OF HER FEELINGS

HE GOT FURIOUS TO SEE JODHA WITH SURYA 😛

JALAL BOUGHT DRESS FOR JODHA

JODHA CONFESS HER FEELINGS IN DREEMY TONE

OMG JODHA DIED😲

I JUST LOVE THE ENDING SPECIALLY THIS LINE " Remembering all those memories which they made and lived together he took her fragrance one last time before closing his eyes to meet his angel in paradise. "❤️

TITLE IS AMAZING⭐️

WELL DONE BUDDY👏👏

DO WRITE MORE DEAR...I LOVE TO READ MORE FROM YOU🤗

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Anjali Jha

@ANJIJHA

Voyager

Posted: 9 years ago

#27

Sry for late reply ketaki dear...
Awesome chappy buddy n i loved it...
Each n every line written so nicely..
Office scene describes beautifully..
Ja ka first sight n first love..
Lift scene is awesome...
Ja is jealous to see surya..
Thank god in this u made Surya is brother of jo..
Jo is jealouq to see Ruk..
Finally unknowingly jo confess her felling n ja accepted her...
Wow.. Jo is dead..
Ja is in flashback..

Pls write other story ya os..
U r writing awesome.. Keep it up..