AKDHA FF: 'No Name To My Desire' THRD 4 - Chap 17(11 Oct) - Page 83

Originally posted by: lashy

Ruq ke ache din gaye?😆

Mujhe Ruqaiyya ke ache din kabhi bhi nahin dikhe

mere baas chale..main uske ache din layun hi na😡

see...am gonna be fully biased here😉

What a cute shopping episode between dad and son! You are a lovely story teller PP

😲...the writer of NJAPA praising me...😲😲PP faints...

I have two doubts though

1) For Jodha being such a fighter and Rico being her life, why didn't she fight tougher to hold on to her son? I mean ek kidnapping incident ke baad she was ready to give him up to Jalal? 😭 I know she feared for his safety, but it was only one incident and that too by HER ex-lover na... I wish she held onto her resolve for longer...

See...though I have no practical exp of this but I think...its really tough for a mother to think beyond her kid's safety

and on a not so serious note...are jodha Rico ko nehi deti toh main use jalal ke paas kaise leke jata😆

2) Mujhe tumhaaraa italics/bolded/plain waala dialogues ka intention explain karo na please 😳

italics: hindi words

bold: want to emphasis

pian: which you must read to get the story.

(these are all tentative...because I keep breaking the norms)

I've picked out some of my favourite bits from the past couple of chapters - either for the way you've worded them or for the scenario/scenes! But I just loved those lines/paras/scenes whatever!

'Don't cry mom...I don't like this. Mujhe bhi rona ata hai.' 😭

It was his dream to see these two together in front of his eyes. These were two hemispheres that make his world perfect. He felt contended...for the first time.

Jalal put a picture on view and placed the phone on counter...pushed it to Jodha. She was a bit surprised at this act of him. Jodha hesitantly picked up the phone and looked at the picture. She was dumbfounded.😎

Impossible!!! I knew him for years. Woh aisa kar hi nehi sakta hai...there must be some mistake.' Jodha's words pinched Jalal hard. It made his troubled state even more troubled. How can he digest...Jodha taking her lover's side in front of him...that too on such an issue!!! Jalal couldn't hold himself anymore and blasted off, 'Oh! Why am I shocked! Why would you believe me over Sanjay! Right? Fine...go and ask your son...he may not lie to you.'
'Magar woh aisa karega kyun? woh toh mujhse...' Jodha checked herself at the last moment from uttering the word 'PYAAR'. She knew Jalal was certainly not the right person to talk about such a thing. 👏

'Waise...fault's not all his...kambakht ishq chees hi aisi hai...It can make hell out of a human.' uttered Jalal with a pained laugh.👏

But Jalaluddin Mohammad is nothing if he is not a winner.😆😉

'I have the power to possess anything I wish to...be it my son or his mother. But this time I don't want to force for anything.' *PHEWWW*

'Jodha Singh Rajput'.

This was a name that gave her everything...from her identity to her pride. This was a name that told her, what her parents couldn't.👏

A few scratches on the paper...👏

She witnessed the transformation of a playing Jalal into a player Jalal. 👏

With this he turned his gaze towards Rico, who was literally hugging Jalal's leg with his tiny arms. Lil soul was a bit nervous at so many new things happening in his life. Hence he clung to the one, he felt old enough.

Staring at these midnight stars...means many thing for Jalal. These blinking dots in the unseen darkness...reflect the hidden self of Jalaluddin Mohammad. It was more like a mirror to his soul. In other words...Jalal's life was just like this starry sky. Few glittering dots visible to all...the rest...too dark to see through. If you go by the dots...you miss the truth...and if you try to decipher the darkness, it swallows you within its riddle.👏

mere ansuu ruk nehi rahe...

koyee roko inhe

Originally posted by: spvd

part 17
awesome dear...
excellent...

thanku dear

sigh Rico has no idea about his mom and dad...
though Jodha advised him again...
Jalal has his way of doing things...
Rico bought the things according to Jalal's logic...
Jodha wont be liking this...

yep...koyee doubt mat rakhna😉

the nosy reporter...
how long Jodha is gonna stay away and hide from others?
wont her colleagues ask her about Rico?

hmm...sochne wali baat hai

Jalal is furious reading the article...
and Maham is shocked to see his reaction...
cont soon dear...

will try to re😃

Originally posted by: SHINYSHREYA

Nyc

Originally posted by: ppluvkuch

1) See...though I have no practical exp of this but I think...its really tough for a mother to think beyond her kid's safety

and on a not so serious note...are jodha Rico ko nehi deti toh main use jalal ke paas kaise leke jata😆

2) italics: hindi words

bold: want to emphasis

pian: which you must read to get the story.

(these are all tentative...because I keep breaking the norms)

Samajh gayee boss!

mere ansuu ruk nehi rahe...😭😭😭

koyee roko inhe😭😭

Zyaadaa overacting mat kar 😆

Originally posted by: lashy

Originally posted by: varshaakulkarni

Mein ab kya bolu PP ... as & how the story is proceeding ... I am at loss of words ... u are such an amazing & talented writer ... & dammit u wanted to stop this FF in the middle 😡 ... this grief would be too much to take ... thanks to pals & other readers u r continuing ... warna I would have deffo tortured u ...

agar fir bolun I will stop it...kya karegi tu😡

ab update ke baare mein kya bolu ... I am speechless , dumbstruck yaar ...

woh tah tu hai hi😆...with or without update😉

Jalal shopping for his son ... his exclusivity obsession 😆 for his clothes thik hai ... but his son also ... waaahhh !! abhi ye haal hai ... he is spoiling his son rotten ... just cannot wait for the day when he spoils jodha ... he would want her also to wear all exclusive clothes & stay exclusively well dressed for HIM & HIM alone

haan yaar...yeh bhi hai...even I have the same feeling that he will try to spoil her...i repeat TRY😳

PP ... yaawwwrrr ... kab aayega ye din ?? ...

😡

now feel like strangling this journalist ... (dont worry , tujhe nahi 😆) usne jisne faltu bakwaas likha jalal , rico aur jodha ke baare mein 😡

the Journo wrote what he felt would sell...samjhi????😡

without knowing the truth ... how can somebody write any s**t about anybody ...just like this 😡 ...

toh Jalal bole sabko jodha ke bare me😡...am with Maham here

hope jalal gives a good ans for this insult ... btw kitna gussa hua ek line padhke ☺️ ... ufff my gussewala passionate jalal ☺️ ...

varsh😲

PP ... maham ko accha sabak sikhao 😡 ... kameeni aurat 😡

that toh pakka hai😎

btw loved loved loved the update yaaawwwrrr🤗

chal ja love you😳

Lub u too 😳

Originally posted by: rishbala3018

Salim/Rico is so cute!!

Father son shopping spree was cute!!

thanku re

Loved how Jalaal made Salim buy what all he wanted but didn't make Jodha look bad or wrong in the process!

Hmm...samajhdar banda😆

When will Jo come to mumbai??

very soon😉