My dream: A strong Jodha AND Jalal - Page 4

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Originally posted by: Sandhya.A

Divi

Nice little alterations that would change the flavor of the whole proceeds. Throughout the show since Mohan I have always felt that a littke changes would have worked wonders.

Where is the equation of the first 80 episodes that has adoring fans who still cling on due to the memories of those episodes, the charming, balanced ones...that had a rakish smart sauve strong Jalal and an equally strong principled never-say-die attitude filled Jodha?

The smartness has been replaced by utter dumbness and he has been made to bend so low in the name of humility.

The never-say-die attitude has been replaced by I-am-never-wrong attitude.

Why not a little apology for the tiger fiasco and the nursing scenes that was promised in the promos but never came. Instead we now have leppings at all unwarranted places.

Why not a little underplayed attitude for Jo at Amer. 'Go-die-anywhere' edited, 'cheenna jaante hain' edited, 'we need more warriors like him to fight off the mughals' edited. A little reminiscence and confused softening of feelings at Kaali Mandir Bow?

We will even swallow the body heat stuff as the precursor of the blue vomit track. There too why not a little more 'shararat' before Jo walks off outside the tent? And more importantly, why was the 'zubaan' not clarified? Jalal could have given his word after saving her from the suicide attempt.

Why not some tedapan from Jalal to solve the issues at the end of Tasneem track?

Why not as a little more smartness from Jalal in the Ben track and editing of Ben scenes?

Why not some better handling of the affairs post Sujamal track? Better worded letter? Jo shown depressed hence to Amer...instead of Kshama shesh hai...Jalal goint to Amer to drop her rather than carried to Ganghour...a little more romantic Ganghour there... and when he gets back to Agra, BOTH of them missing each other badly, both in tears, and Jo coming back due to missing him rather than Thirth Kar abolition of Shivaani forgivance.

Why not editing of Jodha bhaashans, and make the content of her words hitting the nail rather than starry and over-virtuous? Her speech to Jalal in the Ruqs MC track and to Jalal in Ruqs Fake Pregnancy track were fabulous. Though long they didn't impress you as a boring bhaashan. They were rich in content and beautifully worded.

Why not Todarmal just imprisoned and Tafteesh pending when Shehnaaz is caught? Why not Jalal equally insistent that TM can't be wrong and ordering enquiry? Why not Jalal/Atga/Salima trap Shehnaaz acting? Why not editing of explicit Mahaan dialogues?

Why not continuation of war after the chilli war...if budget doesn't permit, women could discuss it and messengers could drop in and convey the updates...Why not total edit of vote of thanks and salaam? Why not personal appreciation instead?

More than anything, why not better romance??????? Physical closeness is not the only criteria. What intensity we had in the aarti scene? Why not more of such scenes? Why not ban lap,lep,lories and pointless bachcha talks? Even the other day when Babu's mom praised Jo and Jalal the look Jalal gave Jo was electrifying.

Originally posted by: Donjas

What a fantastic post. How difficult would it have been to do all that? You have implemented minor but essential changes to the scenes and the result is a still strong Jodha as the CV's want but Akbar too has not been obliterated in the process.

From this little exercise, it is obvious that the problem in this serial is uninspired thinking by the CV's and in many cases lazy thinking. It is our misfortune that a bunch of talentless hacks make all the decisions and everyone else has to suffer as a result, the hard work of Rajat, Paridhi, the other actors and maybe the Director all gone to waste.

Oh! How I wish, you or I or somebody else from this forum could be CV for some time. We would get this serial on track while still showing an uber strong Jodha as Ekta wants.

By the way, does anyone have emails of any person from the show. I am going to bombard them with Divya's post.

Originally posted by: Rashmi81

My suggestions -

1) The paigam sending for talks should be done first ,when the first news of Nigar declaring war arrives in DEK.Then he can consult all the important people on how to approach her.If she was ready to meet,he would have definitely asked her to prove herself she is CB s daughter and even verified that the Farman with her was original and then further talks.He won't give her throne in the first place as a chocolate until he is satisfied.Because finally it's Sar-Zameen-e-Hindustan.

See taking the army to encampment and then going for talks for me is not right move.Come on, those days traveling with such a big group was a huge thing.What will soldiers think, that first they are motivated for war in Agra and when they reach, now the King wants peace talk.This will create confusion,So peace talk trying in Agra only.

That makes sense ... I tried to keep a little too much with the CV's plot I guess 😆

2) Now we all know paigam not reaching to Nigar,thanks to MA and war is inevitable.The motivation and pep talks ,crying,consoling are done for two to three days.But while leaving for war ,at that time we will see Jalal confident to take on the enemy though he won't harm Nigar.😡Now no looking back.

Yes, I want to see stronger expressions during the tilak scene ... Like the awesome one after Ruq's MC ... That determination in his face

3)War strategy planning is very good.But why so much footage for Todarmal and only one dailogue to Atgah.Todarmal looked after finance and Atgah was military general and Atgah has been working for many years with Jalal.

Atgah does come up with the ropes and traps ... 😆 I should have taken my Todarmal Fan Club hat off 😉

4) In real war ,When Abulmali sees his army being beaten up badly, .He goes for plan B .He brings handcuffed Nigar infront of Jalal in the battlefield and he tells him if he wants to see her alive then he has to put down his sword and then Jalal is arrested and taken to unknown place.While going also, Abulmali warns others that if they see anybody following them ,then Jalal will be dead.I don't want Jalal to fall in the trap.He was fighting bravely but had to put down the sword because of Nigar being brought in the battlefield handcuffed.This Nigar being brought handcuffed is just a chaal of AM and Nigar.When he goes to that unknown place ,he comes to know the reality.

Ok fine ... I let the CVs have the suspense of Jalal falling in the trap but getting out of it or they may claim it is too easy ... And not dramatic enough ... After all we have seen Jalal and Jodha caught in a trap before

And rest of the story is very fine from Mirchi war to harem freed and Jalal freed

I am sorry Divya ,I tried to make some changes.

No need to apologize. Maybe they should consider having a crowdsourcing model for writing serial scripts ... We would have a killer story by then

Originally posted by: ashpat

superb post! divya. It would be awesome to c strong JODHA and JALAL at same time. Hope CVS read ur post. Your post is straightforward and without bring sarcastic at any character or even CVS.

Originally posted by: SindhuMenon

nice Divya..agree u kept everything close to what we saw a..U should start writing up and sending it to the CVS in JA. may be they are running out of ideas.

Thanks. While their ideas are ridiculous .. Right now we need a basic improvement in script

How come u forgot to mention about CB..here i am waiting since 2 months for CB to be found.. The whole thing started 3 months back still no end to it.

Look CVs drag tracks for a reason ... They need to reach 1,000 episodes ... So I let them drag 😊

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Originally posted by: anisha222

plzzz send it to cvs of JA,, they must learn a lesson... wht a amezing post... it is the height what I want to see in JA,, all r in thr perfect role... u must send this wrinting to karjat