PLZ COMMENT!

I would like to first start of by saying that, I posted a dream that I had before; called 'I had a dream! LOL'. some IF members wanted me to continue it, so that is why i posted this. Also, about the story it is really long but if you read it will take only maybe 10 mins of your time. Please comment on the story even if you like it or not, because this is the first story i have ever written and I'm not going to make writting my hobby. But i want to know if this story i wrote is good or not. you can also pm me.😊 this is the last thing i would like to add before the story. The story is taken place when Jassi came back and meets everyone. Everyone knows its Jassi, expect for Armaan and Raj.

Here is the story

(The setting is placed in front of Purab house. Purab is giving a party, everyone is there Jassi, Jassi's family including Nandu, the GM gang, and Armaan).

Everyone is enjoying, Jessica and Nandu are walking into the house and playing the clapping game their use to play. Armaan is watching them while their were walking into the house. It seems like he was going to follow them, but instead he goes into a bedroom to wash his face (some how there was a sink in the bedroom). When he looked up at the mirror, he had flashbacks of all the happy times he spent with Jassi (in between the flashback he takes out a razor from behind his belt buckle). The flashbacks stop and I saw the name JASSI imprinted on his arm.

Purab:

Armaan

As he hears his name, he hides the razor behind his belt buckle. When Bebe, Amrit, and Purab come close, they see Armaan bleeding. Armaan slowly starts to faint, (Amrit and Purab are on both sides of Armaan and Bebe is behind him) he is slowly be helped down by them. Armaan is lying on the floor with his head on Bebe's lap. Purab is cleaning the blood off Armaan's arm (Purab did not see Jaasi imprinted on his arm, the flow of blood covered it).

Armaan:

(With the little energy) "Bebe, I know where we can find Jassi; she will come to ------ Jeweler to get her jewelry set. (Sorry, I forgot the jewelry store's name).

Armaan eyes slowly start to closes. Purab takes out his cell and calls the doctor.

Purab:

Aunty ji plz call Nandu and Bebe can u plz get the first aid box in the bathroom.

Nandu and Bebe both come in

Nandu:

Purab wait let me help you

Nandu and Purab get Armaan to the bed

Purab:

Bebe first aid box

Bebe hands him the box. After Purab was done bandaging Armaan arm (Purab is still unable to see the imprints of Jassi name). The doctor arrives with Billu and Jassi.

Jassi:

Purab the doctor has come.

The doctor starts to check Armaan.

Doctor:

Maine injection de diya hai, he going to rest until morning, but give him these medicines after every 6 hours. I will come again to do a check up on him to see if he got better.

Jassi leaves with the Doctor. Everyone is wondering why Armaan did such a thing.

Billu:

When you saw him did he say anything.

Amrit:

Yes, he said that Jassi will come to this ----- Jeweler to get her jewelry set for her wedding.

Billu:

But, still that doesn't explain why he would do this. I do not get Jassi she should just go and tell Armaan that she is Jassi. He looking for her like crazy and he does not even have a clue that she is right in front of him.

Purab:

Uncle Ji, she is doing this for you, she wants to bring back your name in society, like you had before.

Billu:

But, still it not right.

Everyone leaves expect for Purab. He stays behind to clean the blood of the sink. Jassi comes in

Jassi:

Purab, where is everyone?

Purab:

There when to sleep.

Jassi:

Oh! Why would Armaan do this? You were with him did he say anything.

Purab:

(Sorrowfully) No, I do not know, he did not say about why he did this.

Jassi:

Well, I will talk to Armaan tomorrow and find out why he did this. Poor Armaan.

Purab:

Armaan, Armaan, Armaan, all that you talk about is Armaan. (Purab get mad and throws the towel in the sink and walks out).

Jassi:

Purab, Pu… (Thinking) What wrong with Purab? (Jassi walks towards Armaan). Armaan Sir, Why would you do this, you got what you wanted. You got Gulmohar, now what did you wanted that you had to this.

Jassi is about to leave, but, Armaan grabs her hand.

Armaan:

(with half of his eyes open) Jassi…

Jassi:

Jessica, it's me Jessica (getting his hand off of her)

Armaan:

Oh, I thought it was Jassi

Jassi:

You should go to sleep; the doctor said you need to rest.

Jassi leaves and Armaan goes to sleep.

The next morning everyone is running around preparing for the wedding. Armaan rises from bed and looks out the window and decided to go down and help. Billu see him.

Billu:

Armaan beta, the doctor told you to rest.

Armaan:

I know, but, I felt bored upstairs and thought I should help after what happen yesterday.

Then this girl comes to ask where she should put the flower. Nandu see this and comes to Billu and Armaan. The girl leaves.

Nandu:

Uncle Ji, in this age you're still flirting with girl, what will Aunty Ji think. (Yelling) Aunty ji come quick.

Armaan and Nandu are laughing at Billu expression. Amrit comes.

Amrit: Yes! Nandu what happen, why did you tell me to come so quick.

Nandu:

Aunty Ji, Uncle was flirting with a girl.

Billu starts to say something, but, Armaan doesn't listen, cause he spots Jessica. He excuses himself and goes to Jessica.

Armaan:

Jessica ji, sorry for yesterday, I hope it didn't ruin your mood.

Jassi:

No! But it just got us worried, why did you do that for.

Armaan:

My past (tries to continue but doesn't)

Jassi:

What do you mean by your past.

Armaan:

Nothing. Forget it, anyways congrats on your wedding. Hope you and Purab are happy together.

Jassi:

Thanks

Armaan:

You designed the mandup very well. Just like… never mind.

Jassi:

Like who! Tell me

Armaan:

Jassi, she was my secretary. But she design my wedding so perfectly, it was beautiful; just like this. You met her, you know how smart, caring, and giving she is. (Sign) I can go on for hours about her, but I don't want to disturb you from your work.

Jassi:

No! It's-

Bebe:

Armaan beta, come here plz

Armaan:

Coming Bebe, (to Jassi) excuse me.

Armaan leaves Jassi unspoken. Everyone continues to work.

After sunset, Billu, Armaan, and Nandu are in one room wondering what they should wear to Purab wedding. Purab is also in the room, he just looking at his engagement ring. Billu is talking about the day he got married to Amrit and as usual Nandu is making jokes. Armaan is listening to them. Purab is looking out the window, Armaan realize that something is wrong with Purab.

Armaan:

Purab, what's wrong? Why u look so depress, tomorrow is your wedding?

Purab:

I said something bad to Jassi - ca, Jessica.

Armaan:

You should go and talk to her.

Purab:

Yeah, I was thinking the same thing.

Purab leaves the room, as Amrit and Bebe come in.

Amrit:

Every thing is arrange for Jassi, I mean Jessica wedding. The name are so similar that you can't tell them apart. Armaan can you plz go and get Jassi.

Armaan:

ok (He leaves)

Billu:

Why can't we tell Armaan, He has changed and it doesn't seem like he tried to frame us. We have to make pretend like Jassi is not Jassi but Jessica.

Bebe:

But this is for us and Jassi. Jassi said it will only take a few more days till she finds out the truth.

Purab enter Jassi room. Jassi is hanging her dress for the wedding.

Purab:

Jassi, I have to ask you something

Jassi:

Sure

Purab:

Why did you decide to marry me? Did you decide to marry me cause someone told you or-

Jassi

: Purab! Why are you saying this? I decided to marry you because you're a good friend and you are the one who always was there when I need your help. You're the one who helped me turn from Jassi to Jessica; you're the one who gave me the confidence to get to where I am today.

Purab:

Jassi do you remember when we were in the airport and you said that if I want something from you in future you will give me

Jassi:

Yes I remember, but what are you trying to say

Purab:

Jassi, tomorrow is our wedding, promise me you will not leave me in the mandup alone

Jassi:

Why are you saying that? Why do you think I going to leave you?

Purab:

I don't know, but I have this bad feeling that something bad is going to happen.

Jassi:

Purab don't worry we will get married no matter what happens.

Jassi goes to hug Purab. Outside the door, Armaan was in tears, he had heard Purab and Jassi conversation.

Armaan:

(thinking) all this time Jassi was in front of me and I didn't even notice.

Purab:

I should go now. Uncle ji might be waiting for me.

Jassi:

Ok bye.

Armaan hear them and goes to hide. He see Purab leave and walks in to Jassi room.

Armaan:

Jassi

Jassi:

Yes! Armaan si-, my name is Jessica

Armaan:

Jassi, I know it's you. Why didn't you tell me that you are Jassi?

Jassi:

No Im Jessica, not Jassi, it seem you made a mistake. (She turns to avoid the pain in his eyes)

Armaan:

(In angry, he clear the table with a switch of his arm; breaking everything that fell. Jassi jumps, but doesn't turn around. Both Armaan arms on the table looking in the mirror at Jassi direction) I know you are Jassi, I heard you and Purab talking. Why did you lie to me?

Jassi:

Sorry, but Im Jessica, not Jassi. You made a mistake, sometime Purab calls me Jassi by accident.

Armaan:

(he goes to hold her and begins shaking her) Why didn't you tell me before that you were Jassi? Why are you trying to mislead me like that again? I love you Jassi, I love you.

He goes to hug Jassi, but Jassi push him away.

Jassi:

Shut up! Armaan sir, how many times are you going to play this game with me? You got what you wanted, you got Gulmohar and Kohinoor. What else do you want from me?

Armaan:

(Calmly) Jassi look into my eyes and tell me that you don't see the truth. Jassi I love you, but before, I agree that I was just playing. But in the game I never relized when I fell in love with you. Believe me after Valentine days my affection for you were true. Jassi, believe me I love you.

Something fall outside, making a noise which Jassi hear. But which Armaan ignore.

Jassi:

What was that noise, I go see what it was.

Jassi moves to leave. But Armaan grabs her arm and pulls her close; holding her with full passion

Armaan:

Jassi, I love you. I know you love me too. Tell me you love me. For my sake, just tell me that you love me.

Jassi:

(yelling and in tears) Yes! I love you. But -

Armaan:

(Holding her close) No! No buts please no buts.

Jassi:

(Moving away) Its too late now for this. I'm getting married to Purab tomorrow.

Armaan:

Purab will -

Jassi:

Sorry Armaan Sir. But I getting married to Purab no matter what happens.

Bebe:

(calling from the distance) Jassi where are you?

Jassi:

(yelling) Coming Bebe

Jassi is about to leave, but Armaan grabs her arm.

Armaan:

Jassi plz

Jassi pulls her arm away. Walking out the room, she run into Bebe. They leave together. Armaan punches the door while he leaves. Purab appears out of the shadow.

The next morning, every one was getting ready. Bebe notices that Armaan wasn't there.

Bebe:

Amrit, where is Armaan. I didn't see him after yesterday.

Amrit:

Your right, where can he be? (To Nandu) Nandu beta, do you know where Armaan is

Nandu:

Yeah! he told me that he had to go to Raj's house. He'll might come to the wedding late.

Amrit:

Oh! Ok hope he comes early.

Armaan is at the door of raj's house knocking, Raj's gets up to open the door.

Raj:

(drunk, but not so much) Hey Armaan

Armaan:

You're drinking. Why?

Raj:

People drink when there happy, sad, or (laughing) they just want to get drunk. But I'm drinking cause - cause the first person that I fell in love with is getting married. Armaan she getting married.

Armaan:

(shocked) Do you mean, Jassi

Raj:

Jassi (laughing) no Armaan I mean Jessica. What do you see Jassi in everyone, maybe you might see Jassi in me too. Maybe I should stay away (laughing more)

Armaan:

(mad but calm) Raj, I have something to tell you. Jessica is Jassi.

Raj:

You're crazy jhansi ke rani Jassi is world biggest supermodel Jessica.

Armaan:

(screaming) Raj Jessica is Jassi, My Jassi. I heard - (he tells Raj everything)

Raj:

(not intoxicated) Oh my god! So Jessica is Jassi. She still giving married to Purab, even after she found out you are truly in love with her. I still don't get how can you live with this.

Armaan:

That is why I came here. To ask you if you have any answer to my problem. But I guess you still can't get passed that Jassi can turn into Jessica.

Raj:

Are you sure it was Jassi. Maybe you're making a mistake, she did say that Purab sometime call her Jassi. Are you positive it was Jassi (hoping that Jessica isn't Jassi)

Armaan:

I have thought it through, Raj, she is my Jassi. But now you the only one that can help me. What should I do.

Raj:

What else break the wedding

Armaan:

Buthow

Raj:

Just tell everyone the truth. That you love Jassi and she loves you.

Armaan:

I was thinking the same thing. But is this right -

Raj:

Look if you really love Jassi, you should be there.

Armaan:

Thanks Raj (near the door)

Raj:

Wait! I'm coming. (jumping out of his seat)

Raj and Armaan go to the car and start to drive. Meanwhile, Purab goes up to Bebe, Billu, and Amrit.

Purab:

Bebe, Uncle ji, Aunty ji, I want to ask you something.

Billu:

Beta, you can ask us anything.

Purab:

Uncle ji, If you had to chose between me and Armaan to get married to Jassi, who would you chose?

Billu:

B -

Bebe:

(cutting of Billu) Beta, what type of question is this?

Purab:

Bebe, Lets say if instead of me, Jassi wanted to get married to Armaan. Would you expect Armaan as your son-in-law?

Amrit:

Beta, Why are yo -

Purab:

Aunty ji, Bebe, Uncle ji. Without asking question can you please answer my question.

Billu:

Beta, there is no reason for this question now. But if this mean so much to you. Armaan, is a good person too, like you. If before the proposal, Armaan had asked for Jassi hand then we would surely given Jassi hand in marriage, if Jassi didn't have any objection. (laughing) Even if Nandu asked us.

Purab:

(smiling to sad) Thanks, Uncle ji. You don't know how much you have helped me. Please don't tell Jassi, Armaan or Nandu about what we talked about, please.

Everyone is outside the mandup. Everyone is happy. Jassi and Purab are getting ready.

Jassi:

(thinking) Babaji, give me the strength to forget Armaan sir, so I can live a happy life with Purab.

Purab:

(thinking) I hope what I'm going to do is right. (Purab leaves his room)

Jassi is still in her room alone. Armaan comes storming in the room with Raj.

Armaan:

(yelling) JASSI, (Jassi turns around, shocked. Armaan grabs her) you are still going to get married. Even after knowing the truth. Why Jassi why? Why are you doing this?

Jassi:

(calmly) I'm doing this cause I promised someone that I won't leave him.

Armaan:

You're not going to break this wedding cause you promised someone. (Pulling her towards him) What about my promise? You promised me that you will never leave my side. (holding her more tighter then before) What about that promise?

Jassi:

(Crying) Armaan sir, you're hurting me. Let me go

Raj:

(Pulling his arm off of Jassi) Armaan, leave her. Calm yourself.

Armaan:

(Moving away) Fine, I let her go, but. (Moving closer to Jassi) what you're about to do is wrong; you will never be happy. (Armaan leaves)

Raj:

Jassi, he is right. You're just breaking yours and his heart. You'll never be happy.

Jassi:

Raj sir, it will be better, if you don't talk about love. Love for you is a one-night stand.

Raj:

(really mad) Jassi! Out of everyone in the world, I always thought that you would never judge me like this. (near the door) Oh yeah Jassi! I am in love with someone, but she is about to make the worst mistake of her life.

Jassi:

(unconvinced) Oh really, who is she?

Raj:

That is not why I'm here. But Jassi, Armaan has cried for you ever since you left; now you're going to make him cry for the rest of his life. Not only him but you're going to cry as well. (thinking) As for me, you won't have to worry cause you don't know the girl I'm in love with, is you.

Amrit:

(walkes in with Bebe, when Raj left) Who was that Jassi? Also, are you ready? Are you crying? You're not scared are you, cause I felt the same way when I got married.

Jassi:

That was Armaan friend Raj. Its nothing like that. (crying) But I don't want to leave you.

Bebe:

(Crying) You had to leave us one day.

Amrit:

(wiping her tears) Ok lets go. Its time for you to get married.

Bebe, Amrit, and Jassi are leaving the room. The song 'Dil deta hai from the movie Phir Teri Kahani Yaad Aayii'. They begin to walk down the stairs. Jassi spots Armaan next to Raj and begins to cry. Bebe and Amrit let Jassi go to the mandup. Purab is waiting for her outside the mandup.

Armaan:

(to Raj) I can't take this anymore. I have to stop the wedding. (walking towards Purab)

Purab:

Jassi, wait. (grabbing her Jassi hand before she went into the mandup. Armaan stops half way. Everyone is surprised.) Are you happy with this wedding.

Jassi:

(wiping her tears) Yes Purab.

Purab:

oh really then why are your eyes telling me something else.

Jassi:

(looking down) What are you saying?

Purab:

Are you marrying me cause you promised me that you won't leave me.

Jassi:

(still looking down) No

Purab:

Then look into my eyes and tell me that. (Jassi is still looking at the floor, but moves her head to the side) I knew it Jassi. What were you thinking? Just to make me happy and keep my promise; you were going to ruin three people lives. Jassi Do you think any of us would have been happy. You and Armaan would have lost your first love forever and for me, the thought of you getting married to me but loving someone else would have haunted me for life if I didn't do this. I so lucky that I heard you and Armaan talking that night or I would have made the worst mistake in my life. Look at Armaan, he loves you so much, even more then me. (pushing Jassi towards Armaan. Purab is laughing while tears fall out of his eyes) Go to your Armaan Sir. (Jassi turns around and hugs purab).

Raj:

(goes behind Armaan, talking out loud; so everyone can hear him) And you go to your jhansi ke rani. Why you looking at me, go or else she'll try to fly away again.

Armaan was about to slap Raj lightly. But Raj moves back and falls on a girl. While they get up. Raj starts to flirt with the girl.

Raj:

Hey, beautiful! What's your name. What say you and me after the wedding go to dinner. (the girl slaps Raj. Holding his cheek, talking is a sad tone) You're married.

The girl:

yes (walking away)

Raj:

(still holding his cheek) Armaan, is it my bad luck or is every pretty girl married.

Everyone starts to laugh.

Armaan:

(putting his hand on Armaan) Its ok Raj. (Jassi runs to Armaan and hugs him tight) Uff, Jassi (trying to breath) Jassi.

Raj:

(tapping on Jassi) there is your whole life to hug Armaan. Now lets go of him or the more you hug him the more it will be difficult for him to breath. (Jassi lets go of him embarrassed) Now can you guys get married.

Armaan:

We can't, Mom and Dad aren't here.

Purab:

Armaan, turn around

Armaan and Raj turn around and see Armaan mom and dad.

Armaan Dad:

Purab called us and told us you were getting married to Jassi. So we came on the next flight here.

Armaan hugs his parents. Then Jassi and Armaan walk to Purab to thank him. Then Bebe, Amrit, and Billu come to Purab.

Bebe, Amrit, and Billu:

You really are a good son. If we said anything bad to you, please forgive us.

Purab:

Don't say that you always treated me as a son!

Amrit and Billu take Armaan and Jassi to the mandup. Purab walks towards Raj

Purab:

hey

Raj:

hey, that was a really good thing you did. If I was you I wouldn't be able to lose her.

Purab:

yeah, I know but I had to do this or else three lives were going to be ruin. You really liked Jessica.

Raj:

yeah (shocked) Wait! How did you know.

Purab:

since you came here you had a different look on your face; like you were going to lose something. Except for that thing there (pointing to where Raj fell on the girl)

Raj:

That was to make everyone laugh.

Purab:

Also, the way you were looking at Jassi, was the same way Armaan was looking at her.

Raj:

(smiling) So you're a expert on face expression.

Purab:

(also smiling) yeah you can say that.

Everyone is watching the wedding. After the wedding Jassi and Armaan take the blessing of each other parents. Nandu and the GM gang breakup and start to make everyone dance. Purab, Nandu and Raj start to dance to the song 'Mere yaar ki shadi hai from Mere yaar ki shadi hai'

The End

PLEASE COMMENT

its great pls continue we would love to read more

oh wowwwwwwwww u r a superb writer preeti. i really liked it though i was not able to read the whole thing but i am gonna finish it. once again itz wonderful preeti.👏👏👏

That was very, very nice and sweeeeeettt👏

Your efforts are commendable dear

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Great work....... 😊

That was superb!!!! I love it !!!....especially the ending😳😳

Just one suggestion....

I like your writing skills. As a reader, I would like you to further decribe all the characters emotions in expressions. You were already doing that, but the more the marrier.

The more you do that, the more people can picutre the character in their head. It's all about getting the reader to visualize the whole thing. Thus keeping the reader's attention and modivation up.

Dont' get me wrong ....this was great. I understnad you want to continue to write, so I figure i would mention this his. I hope you don't mind my suggestion.😊

Peaches!