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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: iamcurious

Oh noo...noo...noo this is so sad...no wonder its beautifully written in fact too precise and perfect that am not ready to accept this end. Maybe its denial but nooo...they deserve one more chance.

Please make this right..please... this has not left me happy :(

PS: Happy Birthday Sam :)

PPS: Do I stand a chance to request a belated birthday gift? Its my birthday month too :P


There is a sadness in their relationship that is just not being highlighted correctly in the Show, much to our irritation,

Nachiket and Ragini are portrayed as mad people which is frsutrating. I hope something is done at the earliest .

Ok, will make it right in some other story. Let this be.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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I agree...even that one thing is not done properly.

I am sau takka sure you will make it perfect in some other update...Please do.

I really hope something could be done to change your sad sad mood. A big hug from moi :)
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: iamcurious

I agree...even that one thing is not done properly.

I am sau takka sure you will make it perfect in some other update...Please do.

I really hope something could be done to change your sad sad mood. A big hug from moi :)


Hpw about you update the other story? I am really 🥺
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Posted: 10 years ago
#24
This was so emotional..and a sad story
Rachna, you have written it so beautifully that one could feel their pain and emotions yaar..

I wonder why we never get to see such scenes in the show. I could imagine Ronit and Pallavi performing it, just perfectly!
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Posted: 10 years ago
#25
This is so so sad. really very nice. So much pain, can almost feel it. Even this is angst but love is evident.
The characters in the show have been made to appear emotionless. Cant see the love there.

how i wish we had intense scenes similar to this beautiful piece of writing so as to be able to relate to the characters and feel for them.

I love this sober Nachiket, much much better than the one in the show degrading himself with cheap taunts these days.

I love this Ragini, her love, concern and realisations.
I cannot even recognise the Ragini the show anymore.




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Posted: 10 years ago
#26
The best writer of this forum is up with one more OS.
its very painful to go through it Rachana,and really the situation for both of them is not bad but worse.The present situataion in which they are espicially the ring on her fingure,he is dying million deaths inside,its same how she used to feel seeing him with N,the only difference is now its her turn and she is with A.

Frankly this is how,i want Nachiket to behave because the moment he will ignore Ragini,she will automatically come back to chedofoy him.Remember in bus when he was not even talking to her,it was she who started the topic of discussion.But insted of showing this someone,whom i refuse to name anymore is showing what we already saw in FEB/March this year and she thinks and believes this is how it should be shown.

Though its a gift for Samz,but im happy that you came up with one more OS.
Thanks for posting and the emotions you described,we will never going to get that even 1% in the show because of S...e.

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Filza.

This is so so sad. really very nice. So much pain, can almost feel it. Even this is angst but love is evident.

The characters in the show have been made to appear emotionless. Cant see the love there.

how i wish we had intense scenes similar to this beautiful piece of writing so as to be able to relate to the characters and feel for them.

I love this sober Nachiket, much much better than the one in the show degrading himself with cheap taunts these days.

I love this Ragini, her love, concern and realisations.
I cannot even recognise the Ragini the show anymore.





Thank you so much. But I am sorry for such a sad OS.
I really don't know about the writing or anything, but I want to see more emotions in the Show, in Nachiket and Ragini. How can they be so emotionless when their lives are on the verge of falling apart?😲😕
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Posted: 10 years ago
#28

Originally posted by: goldstar678

The best writer of this forum is up with one more OS.
its very painful to go through it Rachana,and really the situation for both of them is not bad but worse.The present situataion in which they are espicially the ring on her fingure,he is dying million deaths inside,its same how she used to feel seeing him with N,the only difference is now its her turn and she is with A.

Frankly this is how,i want Nachiket to behave because the moment he will ignore Ragini,she will automatically come back to chedofoy him.Remember in bus when he was not even talking to her,it was she who started the topic of discussion.But insted of showing this someone,whom i refuse to name anymore is showing what we already saw in FEB/March this year and she thinks and believes this is how it should be shown.

Though its a gift for Samz,but im happy that you came up with one more OS.
Thanks for posting and the emotions you described,we will never going to get that even 1% in the show because of S...e.


Thanks Pavan for reading and liking this OS. 😛

In this Show, I wanted to see the ecstasy and agony of love both, I know that for sure. But I don't really think that's gonna happen anymore.

Given that both RR and PK are such good actors, we may get a few good scenes here and there. And that's how I look at the Show now. I have stopped wondering what's gonna happen next. 😕
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Posted: 10 years ago
#29
This is killing. Only because the way you write, the way you literally pour emtions in each and every scene. That's not your fault. The story itself is going this way. You tried to show what's actually happening, rather than imagining what should happen. They are made for each other but are not destined to be together, that's what is reflected from the show.
Him standing alone at the balcony, listening to the song.. Must be imagining their moments of togetherness. What else does he have?

That song is beautiful as well. Raat ye qaraar ki beqaraar hai Tumhara intezar hai...Really. A perfect song!


What do I say more? This hurts. Their pain, that longing, their love..them...Everything!


A request. This was written from Ragini's POV. Could you please give us his POV for the same scene? What was he doing in the balcony? What were his thoughts? He must have felt her when she came there, but didn't respond. Just a request Rachna di. My birthday is too far so cannot demand a part 2 as a gift 😆


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Posted: 10 years ago
#30

Hello Rachna and Excellent work

& Greetings, fellow fiction writers ...

Hi! I'm Pavan Malhotra from Delhi and I love to Read and write fiction stories! This group looks really cool! I'm going to see if i can get a copy of all your FF and OS .



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