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Posted: 10 years ago
#21
Another beautiful update, though the surname Malhotra turned me a bit 😈 Sorry, can't help it.
Nice introduction between Ranbir and Nachiket, and that too in a toy store. The best place to bring out the elements in the little guy. His longing for the helicopter and Nachiket's realisation that he didn't have a Dad, from all those innocent beautiful words, was so great.

The big question is - whether N and R will meet in that store? Or whether destiny has some other plan?

Looking forward to the next part.
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Posted: 10 years ago
#22
Beautiful written live this neil and live little ranbir hope he gets what he wants soon
Can't wait for next part
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Posted: 10 years ago
#23
Oh my my ... Ragini with a surname of Malhotra 😲 but never mind as long as he is dead or has left her for good 😆 but this little Ranbir and his innocence 😳 Ragini and her beautiful bonding with her son is adorable ... and then this Nachiket Khanna a business tycoon and an eligible bachelor still... I so wanna read this whole story in one go now now now... but then that is your style Curious to leave everybody curious 😆 What a beautiful way of expressing child's emotions and longing for his dad or be it a toy and that of a grown up well established man on knowing what this kid is deprived of at this young age... simple yet beautiful ...
Waiting for the next part abhi se 😃
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Posted: 10 years ago
#24
How do you do this every time?
Your writing is so effortless.. and it has such great flow..
that I finish reading it so fast and then I have to go back and read it again and again :)

This was lovely!
Thanks so much for starting a new story.. I can feel that this story is close to your heart.. the treatment is lovely !! <3

THANK YOU!
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Posted: 10 years ago
#25
@Curious

Wowww this isss Superb yaaa... Suuupeeerrrbbb

Clapss Clapss

Awww the story is awesome and such beautifully written yaaa...

In love with each word, sentence, paragraph... Whole thing.
Each word selected carefully. wonderful 😊

Brilliant yaaa ^_^

Would say Best FF 😊


Ragini Malhotra ? Lil weird but thatz ok ;) Hope he is dead :p sacchi waala dead :p

Loved the convo between Nachi n Ranbir 😳

Pleasee Pleasee Updateee Super Super Sooon ...

WAITING WAITING
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Posted: 10 years ago
#26
You're truly a very talented Writer .. I'm still in Awe after reading this .. I can read this a hundred times .. and still not get tired of it ..

Keep it Up 👏

How did I miss this .. for so long ..

The Author's Thoughts Section was so beautiful .. How do you get such beautiful lines ..

Each and every line .. is so beautiful .. It's evident from this .. How much efforts you must have put into this ..

Well .. I noticed this in all your writings .. Every line reflect the love and care with whcih you've written them .. Perfect choice of words .. the right emotions .. Everything is just perfect ..

I'm really enjoying your writings .. A big fan by now .. ⭐️

Here ..

Ranbir and Ragini's relationship is so beautifully etched .. Ranbir and Nachiket's meeting at the toy store .. too was so lovely .. The emotions which you described .. are a killer !

Only odd thing I find .. is why you decided to change Nachiket's profession .. You could have continued with the same .. Any ways that's the freedom of the writer .. So not an issue ..

I'm 'curious' .. about the next update ..

Keep Writing ..
Edited by BlueMoon8 - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#27
Vidya
I was in Bangalore for 18 years...brought up there 😳

Narges

And I love you for loving them all 😆...as for considering professional writing, too much ho jayega...yahan tum log padhlo khush hu mein.. 😆
I can give you the soft copy of this with a nice cover I've already made once the whole FF is updated. I promise you that! 😃 Thank you for reading!

Rachna,
I very well agree with you not liking the Malhotra surname. Thats the part of story...sorry but please bear with it for a while😛...am afraid one more revelation will disappoint you further 😲 but I promise to make up. The answer to your big question in the next update, posting in a bit to cheer you up! :)

Shabz50,
All in good time. Thanks for reading. Posting soon.😊

Jia,
Ragini is Mrs Malhotra thanks to Nachiket. What has happened to Mr.Malhotra you will know soon. Am sure you will be very happy 😆
Glad you like it...thanks for reading always! :)

Sukhiii
Thank you dear for reading. Yes, the story is close very close to me, tried my best to make it look good...lets hope it seems so by the end. 😊

Zainabb
Thank you Zainab, you are kind :)
Ragini Malhotra is weird, will correct it 😉 Stay tuned!

BM
Hahaha fan!! I am 😳...that is too sweet of you to say so...and yes...I do write with lots of love which am sure all who write here do so...That is the only way to convey through your characters.

As for Nachiket having a different profession, two reasons - a) There is a particular reason to it, a twist if you say...which you will know eventually...b) Cardiologist already in the other story so different and as you said taking freedom here...I hope this will not deter you from reading further 😊

A big thank you to all silent readers too 😳


Edited by iamcurious - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#28
As promised, updating the next part. I assure you more questions in the updates to follow and then the answers... 😆

Sorry and thank you! 😛

Rachna, this one for you, least I can do to cheer you up :)



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Part 2

'Oops! Mamma', Ranbir bit his tongue as he forgot that his mother must be worried for him after his sudden disappearance.

'Where have you been? How many times have I told you not to run away like this without telling me?', a worried Ragini walked past Nachiket without noticing him and squatted a little to reach up to Ranbir's height and hugged him. She seemed visibly upset to notice anyone apart from Ranbir.

When she'd calmed a little she realized someone's presence around. She immediately got up and turned around to see a man she knew, in a split second he looked at Ragini and immediately recognized her. She blinked twice to clear the tears blurring her vision, to see someone she had never ever expected to see in her life again.

'Nachiket!?' Ragini murmured and stood rooted to the spot. She was shocked to see him in front of her. A small pleasant smile played on Nachiket's lips while their eyes arrested. Everything came to a standstill and there was a prolonged silence between the two. Millions of questions could be read in one each others' eyes but there were no words to kill the prevalent silence. The time froze at that moment as after years Nachiket and Ragini met once again.

'Hi!' Nachiket spoke up excitedly. His eyes sparkled to see her in front of him. He could feel this sudden rush of blood in his veins, his heart beat like never before. It felt like someone just breathed life into him. Strange as it seemed to him but he was diverted when she finally spoke up.

'ummm...Hi', Ragini responded in a small voice. She searched for some distraction unable to look into his eyes. Her mind still refused to register and believe the sight in front of her. She'd long forgotten that Nachiket too existed on the same planet as she did and this accidental meeting of theirs is quite a possibility.

'Is it him?', she thought again 'or am I just assuming it to be him?' She closely watched his left hand scratch his left temple before he spoke, a very old habit of Nachiket when he was confused or hesitant. 'Yes,' it was him she believed, after all it was she who had noticed Nachiket's minutest habits closely which were often unnoticed by many but not her. Nothing has changed over the years she thought, he had just gained some weight which suited his Punjabi Businessman persona quite well. His day old stubble made him look rather more handsome than he already is. But there was one thing that disturbed Ragini; he looked pale, uneasy and restless. His eyes looked as if they were searching for something or someone miserably and yes he'd aged and aged for good she sighed.

'So...so good to see you after so many years.' Nachiket finally spoke.

Ragini smiled to acknowledge his excitement and asked formally, 'How is everyone? Your parents?'

Nachiket sensed some difference in Ragini, not physically for she was still the same delicate and pretty looking girl he'd last seen. Dressed in a pale yellow kurti and beige trousers standing 5 feet 3 inches tall nothing really seemed different in Ragini. Even today her beautiful eyes now hidden behind a pair of spectacles were still the same. 'What is it that's different?', he thought to himself.

'Nachiket! What happened?' Ragini's voice broke his chain of thoughts.

'Oh! Nothing...nothing...They all are...all are fine.' He answered still in confusion.

When she smiled yet again, 'The twinkle! yes...the twinkle in her eyes is gone.' Nachiket noticed. He'd told her once that her eyes were the mirror to her personality; calm, pure and dazzling!! But today he could read emptiness and pain in her eyes. With a heavy heart he concluded the reason to be the absence of Ranbir's father.

'I last heard you were in US and now not surprised at all to see you have such a wonderful son!' Nachiket said with a hint of sadness in his voice.

Ragini looked sideways at Ranbir, who stood there quietly watching the two, and laughed sarcastically as if she laughed at her fate and replied without looking up. 'Yes! We shifted just a year back', she said and patted Ranbir's head.

Shrugging away some unwanted thoughts she turned to Ranbir and said,'Say Hello to uncle!'

'Uncle?' Ranbir questioned looking at Nachiket with both his hands on his hips. Dressed in a white T-shirt with "I am a Rockstar" scribbled on it and smart blue jeans he looked petite and cute. His confused frown coupled with the dimpled chin made him look like a cute little monster. His sudden question puzzled both Nachiket and Ragini.

Ranbir had taken spontaneous liking for Nachiket and instantly felt some attachment to the gentleman. He looked at his mother's confused looks and then back to Nachiket's puzzled expressions. After about a minute's analysis of their confused faces Ranbir declared, 'I thought we were friends! Mom, don't you always say it's only friends who care and share?'

'Yes, I do...But...'

'This new friend of mine did both, he apologized when he accidentally bumped into me that means he cared and he offered to buy me that helicopter which he could buy for himself that means he wanted to share...'

Nachiket was so fascinated with the boy now that he quietly watched the mother-son conversation uninterrupted until he realized Ranbir tugging his suit to call for his attention and answer his genuine question.

'Of course! He is right, we are friends. Right buddy?' Nachiket said chirpily and extended his hand to shake that of Ranbir's.


'But beta, he is elder to you, how can he...'

Nachiket cut her in between, 'Ragini let it be...am fine. He is a kid after all and I'd love to be friends with him than be a boring uncle. Right Ranbir?'

'Right on', Ranbir quipped and highfived with Nachiket.

Ragini looked on at the sight. How simple and uncomplicated life was for Ranbir? And how even now Nachiket could connect so quickly with anyone irrespective of their age?

Looking at Ragini admiring her little hero, Nachiket complimented, 'Really Ragini you are blessed to have such an adorable boy'.

'Thanks', she said and smiled.

Suddenly there was an awkward silence between the two and both were avoiding the very obvious questions about their respective spouses. Nachiket had quite guessed by now about Ragini's husband, he avoided to ask for it would only hurt her and that was the last thing Nachiket wanted to do. Somehow he was very curious to know as he'd never met or seen Ragini's husband and Ranbir's optimism to meet him someday which of course was Ragini's belief made him want to know about him all the more.

Ragini too contemplated to talk anything off topic but about his wife as there was a need to break the silence prevailing between them. Without realizing, something within her overpowered her mind and she blurted out, 'How is Rupali?'

Nachiket looked a little uncomfortable which Ragini noticed and she cursed herself under breath for having asked this to Nachiket who was expecting this question from her but was definitely not prepared to answer it.


Almost after one full minute when Nachiket began to answer, Ragini's phone rang. She excused herself and went ahead to attend the call. Nachiket sighed with relief.

'Yes mummyji, I remember I have to drop Ranbir at Ronit's place for his birthday, Dimpy had called in some time back.' Ragini spoke to her mother-in-law, who was truly a mother to Ragini.

Nachiket watched her patiently answer the call. 'Life had instilled a lot of patience and endurance in her', he thought. There was a time when she was so skeptical of simplest things she did and today she seemed to be more confident and organized. Life must have been tough for her he thought and a child definitely brought in a lot of responsibility.

Ragini finished her call and quickly checked her watch which showed it was quarter to six and she rushed towards Ranbir.


'I think we shall take your leave Nachiket, we need to rush somewhere and we are getting late. Nice meeting you.' Ragini said and clutched Ranbir's wrist and turned around towards the exit to leave when she heard Nachiket ask her, 'When do we meet next?'

She turned around hesitantly to face him and smiled before she said, 'Soon...if we are destined to meet!' and walked away.

Nachiket watched her retreating figure from behind till she was gone and muttered, 'Destined to meet'...he sighed and looked up skywards where he thought god resides.

If nothing else he definitely felt positive about this accidental meet.


To be Contd...


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Posted: 10 years ago
#29
Curious!

I am so so sorry for being late with my comments 😲 I just re-read this and seriously and it feels even better than the first time! I loved the way they met again, after years, in the toy store. Loving little Ranbir... I have many questions but maybe I will get some answers in the next part 😉

The flow of this story is just perfect and the way you describe each emotion and feeling makes it so real. Thank God, the other parts are up so I won't have to wait for it 😆

*runs to the next chapter*
Edited by metoyou - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
#30
And what do I say?
I feel blessed. Such a chance meeting, but beautiful.

Thank God, that the Meeting happened in the Toy Store itself... that's what real life is all about.

I love the way how both of their thoughts are given importance, it's just so lyrical.

No, the wait is gonna be endless ...

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