ArShi 4th Anniversary OS Contest *|VOTING ROUND|* CLOSED - Page 5

Originally posted by: Preet.Kc

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Okay I loved all the OSs, in one way or in another, I have comment on each of it. Please don't take it personally. They are just a reader's views.

Entry 1: It was cute. Love the twist in the main event of the show. Something like this could have happened, but then there wouldn't have been IPKKND. Even though I loved the fact that Arnav didn't judged her without hearing her part of story. I loved the writer's way of interpreting the theme, but honesty I don't think it was something new.

Entry 2: Had a very lovely time reading it. Superb. Beautifully written. This Oss is perfect! But! It doesn't fit the theme. No doubts on the fact that I loved it from the bottom of my heart, but I felt like I was not reading about their first meet, it was more like what they felt during those episodes in the show, in which their feelings and inner turmoil was not voiced, but just displayed. There is no doubt that the writer did an awesome job. Feelings described perfectly. Really a good piece of work.

Entry 3: Beautifully written. Something different. Khushi as a singer, yeah it will go. She is a chatterbox so singing can suit on her. Are the lyrics of the songs written by the writer? Okay now coming to what I felt as a reader: while reading it I had a grin on my face, which by the end faded away. I felt like there should be more, there should be a second meeting, a proper one.

To the writer of OS please, please it's a humble request, tries to continue it, because I think, it doesn't end here. It needs a proper end. And yeah if you do so, please send me the link.

Entry 4: Something new! Loved it. It was a one shot. It has everything, first meeting, growing feelings and then the confession. Great work.

Entry 5: Cute. I felt like reading a story to my nephew. Indeed the story is lovely in its own way. But not suiting the concept given. It was more like the epilogue of an FF, where at the end of the story everything ends well.

Entry 6: My heart goes for this OS. Perfect! I have no words for this. The kiss was like the cherry on the top of the cake. And what a Cake!! Simply adorable.

Request: please make a part two for this, I would love to read another part, maybe even more than one.

Entry 7: Yellow winter! Yellow the color of warmth, isn't it. And at the end Arnav was really warmed out. What to say about this so hot winter. Simply fabulous. Loved it too much. The "I am not at all... sorry." Makes you nod continuously, as instead of a neck with bones you have a spring and the face appears a wide grin that makes other think that you have probably lost it.

Entry 8: At the start I felt uneasy while reading it, my eyes narrowed and that frown that I hate appeared on my face, it makes me look bad, dammit!! And thoughts like "this is supposed to be an OS on their first meet, not on a sex encounter" started running in my mind, but then I got it. Different way of seeing things. The story is beautifully written, everything is perfect. But for me it was more concentrated on their present, instead of their first meeting.

Entry 9: It was really funny! hilarious and Lovely. Different and Interesting. Suiting the theme. Thank God it has many dialogues so it compensated all those stories that had really less. I really don't understand why people describe the scenes so much, when dialogues are the way of communication. Simple, direct and easy to comprehend.

Entry 10: Oh God! This was superb! Completely unexpected and different. I loved it! And there is no other words to say. And plus I have a soft corner for police officers. I want my husband to be one of them. Let's see what fate as stored for me.

To the writer of this OS: thanks for writing this. It was simply awesome. The right amount of emotions of any kind and voila the magic. Thanks for not stretching on the Rape part, normally writers tend to do so. Sometimes forgetting the importance and the sensitiveness of the matter. Can I hope for a part 2?

Entry 11: I had a tough time to write a comment for this story. I loved it! No doubts on it. In fact if someone asks me which story describe their first meet in each detail, then I would surely suggest this OS. The story is beautifully written, but I think it was not their first meet, it was more like Arnav sees Khushi and falls in love with her. Love at first sight from ASR's point of view. If there was something that I wanted from this OS were some more dialogues, yeah they were really minimal.

Entry 12: while reading this entry I was thinking did entry n. 1 and 12 belong to the same author? Just a thought. Both of them tend to write the word "&" attached to the next word. It's just curiosity.

I have read many stories with this concept. It was well written with pleasant narration. But nothing new that makes you say "wow".

Entry 13: this has the wow factor!!! This story is simply the Best One. They are right when they say: last but not the least. I could say many things on this story and all will be positive, this story was cute and adorable from the start till the end. Many dialogues and short, just where required, descriptions. That's how a story should be. Because in real life we talk a lot and we describe less. Am I right? This story seemed real. I could see everything happening before my eyes. It is outstanding.

To the writer of the OS: please, please with a puppy dog face, write a part two! I would really love to read it. Truly. You just hold me in another world. Thanks.

Now coming to my votes:

Taking in my mind that the theme is "Their First Meet" there are only few stories in which, accordingly to me, the theme was respected. Because for me "Their First Meet" means capture the exact moment when they meet. Just that! And narrate it to the reader.

So my vote goes to:

Entry n. 13 Kaagaz ki Kashti

Entry n. 10 All Of The Stars

After this I think organizers should take me as a judge for the OS contests 🤣

I wanted to give a detailed reply for this...because am stuck here...

Entry 3: my dear writer of enrty 3 should I file a case against you for this cliffhanger...am dying...literally dying to read it as a complete story...what's gonna happen next...OMG...ASR that too music lover !!! big fan of khushi...still without introducing himself...without being haughty, boosting about himself or showing arrogance...he simply sang with her and left from there contended...am I dreaming or what...if you wish for my wellbeing please complete it marvelous piece.

Entry 4: I agree with khushi...she should tease arnav to death throughout his life for being so so foolish...simply wonderful

Entry 7: like why why whyyy...the end or rather epilogue is obvious but for me it's a cliffhanger. It's hard to find yellow winters and when finally arnav found writer wished to stop it there. I can die for such a sweet and chatterbox khushi...please my dear writer...write few more chapters and give an ending...it's better you do it rather making me run my never ending imagination...and I feel even arnav's gonna agree with me that if incidents like this happen every time after an accident he's more than happy to experience few more...hehehehe

Entry 8: another good romantic tale with a sweet ending...nicely crafted...thankfully reminding arnav of his only companion from childhood who is now his better half...proving how lucky he can get...and their ever so sweet reconciliation in airport.

Entry 11: well it's just a thought from arnav's POV still it touches my heart because of the innocent way khushi stirs those unknown emotions in arnav and by the time he realizes he's filled with colours looking nothing but a clown himself...however he's least bothered now. As a reader I would request the writer to carry forward this beautiful piece and give a lovely ending...if possible.

Entry 13: I am always a fan of childhood love stories when presented well...and in this case it's done very sweetly yet crisp...a warm and sweet romantic tale with happy ending...showing not only love pure also pure and unadulterated friendship.

Now you see...these were a few of the entries I wished or rather forced to comment in detail because they someway or the other touched the strings of my heart...compelling me to read and re-read them again and again. And it's really difficult for me to choose two...since I have to

So my vote will go to

ENTRY 3...and...ENTRY 13

NOTE: once again am requesting writers of entry 3 and entry 7 to make it a small story. Am sure there must be more readers who will agree with me.

And all other entries were also very very good. Goodluck my friends .