Special Mentions, Reviews, Messages
Seems like the judges had a wonderful time reading your stories too... Let's see what they have to say about their judging experience:
DeviatedTesoro.
" This was definitely a new experience for me. I've judged various contests before but none of them has been so different yet so alike before. Every writer was so amazing at what they did and yet they were all different from one another yet they all shined in their own way. I really enjoyed reading them.
Like I said above, the entries were all different. Every writer has their own way of writing and that I could see while reading. I don't think anyone repeated what the other writer had written which rarely happens! Also, I really enjoyed reading even the cliched entries because they had something unique to them."
Mistyrains
" It was an interesting experience. Had a chance to read some wonderful pieces. Give yourselves a big round of applause. All the best for the future 😳 "
Lazyleaves
"I have always been a reader and this is the first time that I got an opportunity to judge a contest and be a part of the judgement process. It was a little difficult for me to judge as I have always read stories for fun and entertainment. But this time I had to critically look at the stories, so I am as nervous as the participants.
As I read all the OSes, I realized that because of time, words, theme, genre and quote constraints the OSes didn't come out as well as they could have. At few places I expected certain loopholes to be closed but they weren't. A line or two more at the end would have made a few pieces even better. This probably just shows that creativity can't be explored completely if bound at so many levels. (My opinion, no offence!) "
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Thank you so much judges for all your cooperation and being a part of this contest. I really hope you had a great time judging this contest.
Before announcing the results there are some comments by a few judges for the participants, so let's go through them first!
mistyrains has some specially mentioned some of the entries she liked the most, so find out if you are one of them :
" Entry 2 : Firstly I'd like to start with the banner - so beautiful! In fact right from the very first line of this piece, the writing is extremely descriptive, the emotions written about - have been brought to text with a tender sensitivity. Be it Anjali's deeply entrenched sorrow or Manorama's distance from the riot of colours and her usual quirks - I could feel myself visualizing each character with every passing word.
Then the prop you've spun the whole story around - bubbles, the concept in itself is refreshing and a sheer delight to read. I've always been beguiled by the sight of bubbles, but to write about the sunshine filtering through the bubbles and make it sound poetic is difficult. Marvellous job!
Entry 7 : An intriguing title. The severity of an army man and the plainness of the civilian girl were written like a dream. There was subtle sensuality to the story, and somewhat a dreary undertone. Well written!
Entry 8: A mother's love, I believe is one of the purest forms of love. This story was in ways heart-breaking, yet not failing to leave behind a small gratified, happy smile.
Entry 24: I love the fact that this piece was narrated from the point of view of a daughter who has never known her mother. A very touching read.
Entry 1: Very strong characterization. The concept epitomizes the quote given perfectly. Khushi stole the limelight in this story. Her inane need to help distressed people, regardless of her own troubles is heart rending.
Entry 10: This story was a beautiful rendition of forced - marriage sequence. Arnav trying to undo his transgressions was touching. I loved the little props the author has used - the pool/ the recliner etc. Had me remembering our beloved show all over again!
Entry 5: This was one crazy piece. It's not every day one gets to see Arnav write/read poetry, even if this one's for his wife. But I laughed whilst reading the hilarious version of Arnav's Aaj Mausam Hai Suhaana!
Entry 17: This one was bang-on entertaining! The family members reciting poems was comical - thanks to the author for bringing out the crazy side we always knew existed in the Raizada clan. And then giving root to nostalgia were our show's infamous duo - Banke Lal & Kamlesh Kabri!"
A Big round of applause for our judge who made such a great effort! 👏🤗
Lazyleaves, has been very kind to leave some feedback for ALL entries. She hopes it will be a learning experience for every writer who participated and I hope everyone will read them and take note 😉 Thank you so much for making the effort to review each and every entry 👏 🤗
"Although most One Shots did pretty well on the grammar and vocabulary aspects, most stories scored low because of the interpretation of the quote or the genre. Like one or two romantic OSes seemed that they could be in Tragedy and vice versa. I understand that Comedy can overlap with Romance but mixing it with poetry was done pretty well.
Review for each of the entries:-
Entry 1. Although the concept was good, I wanted the story to give me more details about the background. There was something vital lacking. If turned in to an SS, it can turn out to be good :)
Entry 2. This one was too philosophical for me, sorry. But the idea of bubbles was very good and I wished that I could have understood what the story was trying to convey and savour it better :)
Entry 3. This is another concept which requires more words and more updates. Or may be if it could be written in a way that didn't leave me with several questions :) But the concept was good :)
Entry 4. A story in Hindi and thankfully I am well versed in the language. But just a tip - if you are writing in Hindi make sure that its written in Hindi completely. Take care of the grammar please :) The concept was good and it could have been presented in a better way :)
Entry 5. This was a cute one and whoever it is, you are good in poetry. Frankly, I can't understand the likes of P.B.Shelly and Shakespeare and thankfully these were the poems which I could understand. Pretty good :)
Entry 6. I missed Khushi here. It was mostly monologue and Arnav's thoughts and pretty short too. I wanted more :( But otherwise well written :)
Entry 7. Very different and interesting. I enjoyed the entire narration. Whoever you are, can you write a short story on this one and give me a happy end please?
Entry 8. I liked Arnav's sincerity and his belief and confidence in Khushi and their adopted son whom Khushi will grow to love. A little more focus on the language and this one would have reached a different level altogether :)
Entry 9. Again, this was a good one but...but I didn't understand why was she forced to marry him? She loved him, didn't she? Apart from this, I enjoyed reading this one :)
Entry 10. Okay, this one turned romantic only in the last few lines of the story. The entire narration gave me a very sad feeling. I loved the OS, no doubt. I love Arnav's redemption and a continuation of IPK from any point. Bas, I missed the romance :)
Entry 11. A good one. A little more attention to details and grammar could have made it even better :) There were a few things which I didn't approve of based on my thinking but if that's what the story needed :)
Entry 12. A simple and good one but something which again lacked details. I was left with too many questions at the end and I wished I had answers to those :)
Entry 13. A nice one :) I especially liked how at the end without realizing he actually said his feelings in the form of a poem. But I wished it had more of the comic element :)
Entry 14. When I was reading this one and Khushi answered during Rakhsha Bandhan, I mentally screamed a 'NO!!!!' But of course, Khushi was wrong :) It was after the guest house one. A mistake undone and I loved it :)
Entry 15. I wish there was more build up and more focus on the emotions. But overall a good one :)
Entry 16. There were a few points in this one which I think were not factually right, I wish I am wrong. A good attempt to capture the pain of a man who has lost a lot and a woman who wished to fill the void for the man she loves :)
Entry 17. Funny, very funny :) I loved how all the family members started speaking in rhymes and how Arnav got all jealous and Khushi riled him up further. There was Bankelal, there was Kamlesh Khabri and there was paan? Now who doesn't like a nice funny paan? Very IPK-ish
Entry 18. I missed Arnav here. He came and he died. A little attention over the pain and loss that Khushi felt and the clearance as to how Payal (her sister) doesn't know about this incident, this OS could have been very good :) Nice :)
Entry 19. Another very nice concept which I would like to see in the form of a short story. Because I would like to know how did Khushi's divorce take place?
Entry 20. I really loved this one. Our ArHi having a childhood connection. She coming back to his life after some time, he completely mesmerized. Me likey! I also loved how this one was a complete story in itself. Mast hai :)
Entry 21. A nice school teenage romance. Arnav being a quiet and mysterious guy, Khushi the chirpy and shy one, their staring sessions. I just have one question, they kissed like that in school?
Entry 22. Although the concept was very nice, I wished it had a rebellious streak to it. It did have a kind of a compromising touch to it - them meeting without the knowledge of Khushi's family. There should have been a stronger reason for them to be separated :)
Entry 23. Where was the poem? I missed that! I wanted that! Again, this one required more parts than one. Give it a try and turn it into an SS and it will be very good :) A little more attention on the grammar and you will gain many more readers for this one :)
Entry 24. Nice story, but it is difficult for me to imagine an alcoholic Arnav who doesn't fulfill his duty towards his daughter, even initially. My bad! But otherwise, a good concept :)
Entry 25. I loved the title and the idea as well. Quite romantic and I hope my partner will do something like this for me as well :) -Please, focus a little on the grammar and this would be a very good one, seriously :)
Entry 26. This was too short. I wanted to know the pain of Arnav and Khushi in greater detail. I wanted to cry with them. But I am happy that they got a chance at happiness again :)
I am sorry if my comments have hurt any one! My aim is not to cause pain or belittle any of the authors here. I just had to be a little critical and I am sorry if you found me very critical."
I guess, that's about it, now with all that out of the way we can finally move on to the final results!
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Edited by DoNotDisturb - 11 years ago
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