arshi ff: without you... #2, chapters 14 - 27 **completed**

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Maryam Hassan

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Posted: 11 years ago

#121

Arshi's intimacy was well defined in a classy way,you proved that they complete each other
Anjali n Dr Verma were really getting along
Khushi n her mum scene was so cute

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Dreamy24

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Posted: 11 years ago

#122

Lovely! We have so much work and responsibilities to fulfill in this lifetime so, take your time to update.

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#123

Originally posted by: bs_deeps
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hello dips, nice smile. you happy happy?

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#124

Originally posted by: nishu_shorna
WOW...the great Arnav Singh Raizada now leaves whatever his work at sharp 7 to reach home to his wife...fabulous...loved how he immediately understood her distress...why she's crying...and the silent support he provided her...and Khushi...doesn't shy away from her desire anymore...why would she...haq hain uski, unn par...also loved their cute moment at the end...
Anjali's instinct telling her that something band's gonna happen...and went to meet Dr. Verma to share her stress...loved this improvement...
The flashback of ArShi...gosh...i laughed so hard that tears came out...superb...
And the one of Khushi's childhood...wanna know more...with Arnav deciding to find out the whole truth, cant wait enough to read the next chapter...

nishu_shorna 🤗

can't tell you how happy i feel when i realise there are people out there who actually read stuff i write.

it's a very special kind of pleasure.

money can't buy it. really.

i do feel that khushi will explore sex with an open mind and much enthusiasm given her nature... she is not a shy wilting lily, her social set up asks for a certain circumspection... that is quite attractive actually to me. but with asr she will experience, experiment, and go places neither she nor he had imagined... part of her growing with him. my belief.

you like the doc and anj thing? i am moving cautiously. still not sure how it will turn out.

thanks for laughing. best news ever. 😃

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Crazy4IPK

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Posted: 11 years ago

#125

he looked at her face and in a shining sliver of a single moment he saw clearly what he had to do.

he had to bring spring to the collection... that abandon of khushi's, that fullness and spark of hers.

it was autumn and winter in this hemisphere, but in most of brazil it was spring in october, november, december. a bright lush single piece, in oranges, green, maybe just a bit of pink, in feathery chinon or his favourite chiffon, or perhaps organza... among all the heavier darker drapes of silk, velvet, lycra, pashmina. yes, a touch of the season of birth and freshness.

that's what ar's autumn/winter needed.

the above lines just touched me so much. It's reprimanded that how much Arnav loves Khushi. She is not only his love, but his inspiration, his motivation.

your next stanza sounded like a costume designer. amazing perception Indi.

Thank you so much for the anecdote of Khushi's childhood. Sure a prelude to their upcoming visit to sheesh mahal.

And muahh for showing Khushi as a bold sexy wife of ASR. Khushi's coyness in the show sometimes seemed illogical to me. I loved how she initiated to make love with her hot husband. your description was sensuous, but aesthetic.

Amazing chapter!

Edited by sohara - 11 years ago

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#126

Originally posted by: ranogill
Awesome

ranogill 😃

many thanks.

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#127

Originally posted by: ...SaRun...
Another very beautiful update.I really like the way you give importance to all the characters and not let anything untold.Khushi and her mother scene was sweet.Anjali and Dr Verma are going great.
ASR and AR fashion show scene was superb.
And my favorite one was ArHi on the lounger ☺️.Loved every tiny detail of it.You really describes their intimacy in a passionate,classy way 👏.How they complete each other and they are the true soul mates.
Thanks for the pm.

lizzie, 🤗

thank you so much.

passionate but classy that intimacy... oh i so like those words you use. i want to remain in their realm, that sexuality which was explored without too much obvious anything, just looks, breaths, little touches, and ignited the screen with just that. how does one do that in writing... me looking for the way.

i loved writing that fashion scene too... and that girl looking at asr, exciting.

thanks always for reading and commenting with such enthusiasm.

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#128

Originally posted by: sohara
he looked at her face and in a shining sliver of a single moment he saw clearly what he had to do.

he had to bring spring to the collection... that abandon of khushi's, that fullness and spark of hers.

it was autumn and winter in this hemisphere, but in most of brazil it was spring in october, november, december. a bright lush single piece, in oranges, green, maybe just a bit of pink, in feathery chinon or his favourite chiffon, or perhaps organza... among all the heavier darker drapes of silk, velvet, lycra, pashmina. yes, a touch of the season of birth and freshness.

that's what ar's autumn/winter needed.

the above lines just touched me so much. It's reprimanded that how much Arnav loves Khushi. She is not only his love, but his inspiration, his motivation.
your next stanza sounded like a costume designer. amazing perception Indi.

Thank you so much for the anecdote of Khushi's childhood. Sure a prelude to their upcoming visit to sheesh mahal.

And muahh for showing Khushi as a bold sexy wife of ASR. Khushi's coyness in the show sometimes seemed illogical to me. I loved how she initiated to make love with her hot husband. your description was sensuous, but aesthetic.

Amazing chapter!

sohara, my sweet, 😃

that part on the lounger with khushi turning from terribly sad to calmer and then into a mood for something else, somewhere when writing that, you and your love for this jodi was in my head too. sensuous but aesthetic. ooo i love those words. in the bid to get more explicit in sexual details, i really don't want to lose my jodi. they can set fire to us by just looks and little touches, breaths... remmember "ar... nav.. ji," and "hmmm"? ( i am hyperventilating just writing this).

it's the easiest thing to write very obvious physical stuff. but somehow that doesn't feel kkg and asr. they were all about suggestion and making our imagination go nuts... how i loved that.

thanks so much for reading. you liked the fashion bit? awww me no expert, but i know i guess what i like... asr would possibly have a much better idea.

when two people really connect, they change each others lives in unpredictable and breath taking ways. even at 53 with 28 years of marriage, i do believe that. this jodi made me exult in that belief. they brought love back into cooldom... not sex, not romance, not money, not me me, but fabulous love. these stories are really only salaams to that.

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#129

Originally posted by: salooni
lovely
thanks

soni ji,

dhanyavaad many times.

and a very very happy birthday to you. 😃 🤗🥳

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indi52

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Posted: 11 years ago

#130

Originally posted by: RizArshi
It was a beautiful chapter. Arnav was missing from his work and AR was missing ASR's touch. He didn't need more than a second to tell that something was missing but what, he had no idea. As always he found his solution in Khushi. Loved the way you have connected the beginning of this chapter to its end. Khushi's absence made him restless and Khushi's condition made him feel worse. He needed to do something, anything that will make Khushi feel better. What can be a better way to sooth Khushi other than his comforting words and his arms around her? Having his arms around her, Khushi forgot everything and all she could remember was him and her together. Nothing else mattered. Their intimacy was passionate and yet it spread tranquillity. It was beautiful. On the other hand Anjali found a person who could offer her the much needed solace. The past incidents were very interesting. I hope Arnav's visit to Sheesh Mahal will not make Anjali's fears come true.
Thanks for the PM Di :)

rizarshi, 🤗

so good to see you. as i wrote to nishu_shorna, i can never explain the joy one feels to know someone reads stuff you write. no money or obligation here... just a shared pleasure... and that inexplicable thrill of writing and being read.

i can't imagine ar running without asr. so yes, he was sorely needed. and this time he did find his solution in a moment with khushi. glad you enjoyed that.

in chapter 13 it was the gun, here it was their moments on the lounger... khushi makes first move. i wanted to see how the reader reacted. both things i felt were true to the tale... but i really wanted to know how tis worked out... passionate and spread tranquility... if you felt that, me thrilled.

i am feeling the terrain with anjali and doc verma, not sure yet... but their is a connection building... it excites me.

thanks you again for reading and your lovely comments. please also do let me know if something feels off or not right or just plain boring... it helps me think, and write.