Awarded ArshiOS: A Little Ways down the Road (Note on Pg 8) - Page 3

BEAUTIFUL

Res

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You had me spellbound from the first word to the last.

I am anyways a sucker for ArHi stories that span several years of their lives, especially the one that has childhood involved. 😳 And you gave me such a perfect story at that. ⭐️

Arnav claimed Khushi as his as soon as he saw her. And as fate would have it, they were the only two left for each other with any claims whatsoever.

Their bond, friendship, kinship all strengthened with time, especially during the tough times.

He made the promise he made to her, about giving her everything she wanted, his goal in life. When all Khushi wanted from him was his love only.

He lived his life then to make hers better. And she lived her life knowing he has a Sheetal with him, he doesnt reciprocate her love, she was nothing more than a friend. She let him go, she set him free.

And when Arnav actually didnt have Khushi, when he felt how Khushi was emotionally distancing herself from him did he realise how much he loves and wants her. At times, till you dont lose something you dont realise its importance.

Arnav came back to Khushi. After 5 years he came back for her, not just because of his sense of responsibility but for the love he felt for her. Of course, Khushi still loves him. Pyar hain, mausam thodi jo pal pal badle.

And they lived happily ever after, always and forever.

BEAUTIFUL.

I loved the way you blended the poem 'The Brook' with the story. I dunno what your intentions were but to me it felt I was both hearing about ArHi's life from the brook and was comparing the twists and turns of the brook with the ups and downs in ArHi's life.

AND YOU HAVE A WAY WITH WORDS. BAS!

PS: I am sorry if my comment looks more of a summary. I just wanted to list down everything I enjoyed in the story.

PPS: You should contact the FF forum DT and get this thread moved to the IPK forum. This story deserves readers and you will find them there.

This is beyond beautiful. Its very difficult to write a complete story in one shot AND with a poem interspersed so naturally that it makes it look made for each other just like Arnav and Khushi :-)


*bows*

A very nicely written OS!!

loved it.
a beautiful journey of Arshi in finding love in each other. loved the concept and the poem which inspired it.
Arnav and Khushi's love story over the year--- since the birth of Khushi and Arnav claiming her as his and finally at the age of 27 claiming her for the lifetime was wonderful.
the young promise of Always And Forever to the promise of eternity with all the ups and downs in the os was beautifully described.👏⭐️

PS--- Rasgulla_sp thanks for the scrap and reference for this OS.

Read it again today, as Rasgulla_sp recommended it.

WOW...this is beautiful...and heart touching...loved it...

This was really good ... :)

Wow this was a beautiful and amazing one shot,

Saiyu! Thanks again dear! Another lovely os recommendation!

Hey writer!

Such a sweet and cute lovely os! Wonderfully penned down! The emotions were intact! We could feel each and every emotion that these two went through!


Sweet man! I'm a commerce student so men may come men may go but I go on forever is always a company for me for the first time I didn't associate it with a company! Such wonderful choice of words!


Lovel man!



Cheers

This was emotional. To have everything change in a day and to find you don't have your family is heart-breaking.
She always looked up to him, loved him. And he always thought of her as his best friend but things change. May be distance was what they needed, he needed to know that his life is incomplete without her and there is no happiness or peace if she is not there with him.
Loved how the Brook became a witness of their friendship and love.
Thanks rasgulla_sp for recommending it.