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SanzBarbie

@SanzBarbie

Rocker

+ 3

Posted: 13 years ago

#11

Nisha on a roll.
very well-written..

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FairyLiquidSoap

@FairyLiquidSoap

Sparkler

+ 5

Posted: 13 years ago

#12

Shyam is making sense here at last 😊I was quite disappointed when he switched allegiance from his honey to his money there but here really wicked love it

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Japonica

@Japonica

Dazzler

Posted: 13 years ago

#13

That is really good stuff, N. You have managed to get into the creep's head and show us his convoluted thoughts. Hope you carry on with it.

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Hiruni

@CDlove

Rocker

+ 8

Posted: 13 years ago

#14

Shyam is an evil ass-hole 😡 wicked twisted pig!!! uuurgghh! I hate him to the core and after reading this I think I'll hate him even more 🤢

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Maddy1270

@Maddy1270

Inactive

Posted: 13 years ago

#15

you really got into that perv's mind... in fact, he seems to be more villainous here than he ever is in the show because there his plans fall apart! shyam's obsession with khushi is so repulsive that one wants to take 'ganga snaan'!

but a very good writing style, each word so appropriate that one can almost see and feel shyam's twisted love for khushi and his hatred of arnav... detailing what he plans to do to arnav was a nice touch -- disgusting to read but necessary in this context! keep up the good work

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---Nisha---

@---Nisha---

Voyager

+ 7

Posted: 13 years ago

#16

Originally posted by: Maddy1270
you really got into that perv's mind... in fact, he seems to be more villainous here than he ever is in the show because there his plans fall apart! shyam's obsession with khushi is so repulsive that one wants to take 'ganga snaan'!

but a very good writing style, each word so appropriate that one can almost see and feel shyam's twisted love for khushi and his hatred of arnav... detailing what he plans to do to arnav was a nice touch -- disgusting to read but necessary in this context! keep up the good work

thank you 🤗

I wanted something really challenging to write and my FF or the other OS really just wasnt challenging...it was just simple writing. So I ventured into new territory, dark territory, and looks like I did well.